Sorry if this is late, I have been here before, but it was looking fairly dead, so I didnt post anything. I have a short poem here, about a ruthless killer. Criticism please.
The Death-Wife
Swiftly she ran
Silently she killed
Softly she kissed
Her deeds fulfilled.
Bringer of death
Taker of life
A kiss her gift
Beware the wife.
She that walks the shadows
She that kills for bliss
She shall end your life
With but a kiss.
Hark, be weary
A warning given
The death-wife lurks
True intentions hidden.
Edit: changed "with only a kiss" to with but a kiss, better flow?
PS: thanks brgenerator!
good work, i enjoyed that!
very nice.
I love the "death-wife" title. It's just so true! Well done!
Thanks!
Very Good, Great work.
This was a very good composed poem
Kudos FOXO Kudos
I like it too. I hope it didn't mean all wives are death wife's though - if s0, I must be the small amount of cyinide in yer oatmeal every morning type ... 29 year marriage, that's a slow kill
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