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Posted by: Black Hand Sep 10 2008, 09:35 PM

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Posted by: bbqplatypus Sep 10 2008, 09:39 PM

Dude...the post machine is back!

Posted by: Black Hand Sep 10 2008, 09:41 PM

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Posted by: minque Sep 10 2008, 11:15 PM

O-o....Now it begins....In her Majesty's secret Service!

Sethyas Velas! You watch out, women are devious normally, but this one.....is faaaar more.

Very very nice to see ch 3 up already.... It's already driving shivers down my spine, so live up to your "name" post-machine please!

S.G.M

Posted by: Black Hand Sep 11 2008, 12:06 AM

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Posted by: minque Sep 11 2008, 12:56 AM

Ok so they're waiting now...all of them. I wonder how Seth feels standing face to face with Helseth? The man who wants him dead?

Those fabricants, I never have seen them, wonder what they look like? I will keep my fingers crossed that the meeting will be of no threat to Sethyas' life. You never know with Kings, they are so unpredictable.

Ok Mr Post-machine, keep them coming. I'm sure I will have a great need for more Sethyas when I come home from work in about 16 hours!

Posted by: Lord Revan Sep 11 2008, 02:51 AM

I find it amusing that Sethyas has problems with the Tribunal (which Rayne respects like many Dunmer), and Rayne is bored by history and investigating ancient objects. Keep this up, Black Hand.

Posted by: Black Hand Sep 11 2008, 06:10 PM

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Posted by: minque Sep 11 2008, 07:46 PM

Wonderful....Seth's conversation with Helseth was very enjoyable, and well written, so well written!

A humorous quote, which made me giggle, so typically Sethyas!:

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I did as he bade, and fell to one knee as was expected. The move was apparently as unexpected by him, as me. It seemed to please him, yet also sent him off-center. Which in turn pleased me.

Now the plot thickens, since I haven't played Tribunal I have no idea what's coming up next! I really can't wait to find out.

Now here's another quote I really appreciate:

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�My dear Sethyas. Your words and your actions follow different paths. On the one hand, you claim you wish nothing to do with politics, and the aftermath of the Nerevarine Prophecies would seem to confirm that. However, in your ascension to your current place in politics, you slayed those Councilors whom opposed you, and assisted those whom supported you, in not one, but three houses. You killed the head of your house in an Honorable duel, you killed the Archmagister of House Telvanni, you even killed Orvas Dren. Am I leaving anything out?�

�You missed a few Ashkhans, the Temple Ordinators at Ald Daedroth, Sixteen Morag Tong writs, two of whom were Telvanni Councilors, one a Hlaalu, and an Imperial Legion General, all three were allies. And three Hlaalu members whom you ordered killed to consolidate your power, who died at my hand.�

An evening with a new Sethyas is a good evening!

Posted by: bbqplatypus Sep 11 2008, 08:46 PM

Awesome conversation. It progressed logically and entirely in character for both of them. Two great minds meet at last. Bravo!

Posted by: Black Hand Sep 12 2008, 07:06 PM

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Posted by: minque Sep 12 2008, 08:23 PM

Interesting intrigues are coming up. Who's plotting against who? It's developing into complexity(?) now...

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Was he afraid of me? I don�t know. Perhaps he knew that he had already crossed the line with me. If he crossed it again�nothing would save him. Not the Queen, not Almalexia, not Delitian. I would keep coming until one of us was dead.

Well Seth..ever heard of modesty?

No..I didn't think so

I want more.....

Posted by: treydog Sep 14 2008, 04:28 AM

Major continuations here, with loads of undercurrents. Fun reading how Seth's personality and background color his dealings with Helseth.

Posted by: Black Hand Sep 16 2008, 04:54 PM

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Posted by: bbqplatypus Sep 16 2008, 09:17 PM

Hehehehehehehehehehehe....*devious laugh*

Posted by: minque Sep 17 2008, 10:05 PM

Ok...so now we're talking! This izzz getting deep into mystery now. I'm very anxious to see where this is going...
I hope you will continue really soon!
I'm going away on friday and I would like to....know more really I would...

Pretty pleeeeease Blackie! You know how much I like this story...

Posted by: Black Hand Sep 18 2008, 03:49 AM

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Posted by: bbqplatypus Sep 18 2008, 05:51 AM

I'm afraid I entirely missed the whole "you're the real target" part of that quest. I was honestly paying too much attention to coming out from behind the screen and killing them than what they were actually saying (which is actually quite atypical of me). D'oh! In any case, you handled it very well.

It's attention to detail like this that I'm going to have to adopt if I ever want to do that ultra-ambitious 2920-style second project I've been vaguely dreaming of making. 'Course, I'll have to finish The Interim first.

But enough about me. My point is that this is starting to get really awesome. Keep it up!

Posted by: mplantinga Sep 18 2008, 07:38 PM

The level of intrigue in this story keeps skyrocketing, and I'm finding it quite riveting. Sethyas certainly has great insight into what is going on; much more than I think the king would like him to have. I'm looking forward to a uniquely "Black Hand" take on the fight with Karrod, especially what kind of thoughts you put into his mind as he duels this mighty champion.

Posted by: minque Sep 18 2008, 08:41 PM

Thanks Blackie, another Sethyas was just what I needed this..uhhh very odd day.

I can feel the tension building up here. Makes me wonder...but I'm sure Seth sees through the wicked King. Otherwise he wouldn't be Sethyas.

The only problem I have now is that I probably won't see Sethyas until tuesday night... Because I'm going away tomorrow after work...

On the other hand I might have some miiiiiiiiighty good reading when I return!

Love it.....

Posted by: Black Hand Sep 18 2008, 08:46 PM

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Posted by: minque Sep 18 2008, 09:20 PM

Yes...what is his true purpose? I must admit I haven't a clue, so I guess I'll have to wait and see, (til tuesday?)

Aaaaanyway so he's going out with Rayne? A decent thing to do, the poor girl must have been sick with worry.

A Seth-ish quote:

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So our little friend was a bit of a drinker. They wanted me to do what to him exactly? Try to drink him under the table? Poison his drink? Get into a barfight? No. Helseth would be watching me ever closer then usual. None of these things warranted killing a man outside of honorable combat. Assassin I may be, but something about eliminating Karrod prior to the duel just left a bad taste in my mouth. Perhaps it was the Redoran in me.

Awesome..just awesome

Posted by: Black Hand Sep 19 2008, 01:51 AM

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Posted by: mplantinga Sep 22 2008, 07:18 PM

�This buys you my service, and a bit of loyalty too.�

If only true loyalty could be bought. I do hope his new companion doesn't cause him any trouble.

Posted by: minque Sep 22 2008, 10:14 PM

I didn't think Seth was suicidal, but now I don't know...If I was Raynie I'd be terrified for him or at least I'd try to talk him out of it.

But of course you can't talk Sethyas out of something he's in for, so let's hope he and his "loyal" companion really makes it.

Honestly I think they do.

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�If I stick you with a pointy object enough times, you�ll still die.�

I hope nobody will do just that to him....

So I'll be patiently waiting....for what?

You know what Blackie....you know!

Posted by: Black Hand Sep 23 2008, 04:25 AM

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Posted by: canis216 Sep 23 2008, 06:01 AM

Damn good work here, Black Hand. I mean, I go off on this little canoe trip of mine, and come back with about 8.23 billion updates to read, and every one is bloody wonderful.

Posted by: The Bean Sep 23 2008, 11:33 PM

I read this over the last couple of days and what can I say? Bloody brilliant, that's what!

You have managed to craft words with the skill of a truly gifted author, making the plot of both games into something truly special. You have moments of humour, romance, action, tension and philosophy throughout, whilst Sethyas is a brilliantly developed character. Ruthless enough to be an assassin, yet human enough to be likeable, Sethyas seems to be a loveable rogue and one of my favourite characters.

Good show!

Posted by: Black Hand Sep 24 2008, 12:20 AM

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Posted by: minque Sep 24 2008, 12:22 AM

QUOTE(The Bean @ Sep 24 2008, 12:33 AM)

Ok Mr Bean! You just said all what I was thinking of saying, I do second every word of it, since Sethyas really IS my favourite charachter, and Serene' as well..

Your poetic, yet intriguing writing style appeals to me very much. I'm so eager to see where this is going, the tension build-up make me shiver from anticipation

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And my date with death was still a few hours off.

Oh Sethyas....

Posted by: Black Hand Sep 24 2008, 05:44 AM

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Posted by: mplantinga Sep 24 2008, 04:56 PM

That was an excellent update. The interplay between Sethyas and Helseth at the end is truly superb. I'm really looking forward to seeing how they handle things from here, and what the nature of their relationship becomes.

Posted by: canis216 Sep 24 2008, 05:17 PM

Wow!

Posted by: The Bean Sep 24 2008, 10:25 PM

That was an awesome duel there. Not quite as awesome as the one between Sethyas and Venim, but awesome nonetheless.

And whls we're a bit in the vein of picking favourite characters, mine has got to be Rayne.

Posted by: canis216 Sep 24 2008, 10:55 PM

To clarify my earlier response (Wow!), I'd like to say that I direct it (Wow!) to the transformation of Sethyas and Helseth's dispositions towards one another. It is a radical shift, and yet you make it fit, taking total ownership of the Tribunal storyline. The duel was nice too, though I think you've done better. So I guess I'm saying...

Wow!

Posted by: minque Sep 24 2008, 11:29 PM

Yes....oh yes you've done it again! An excellent read after a hard day's work. And as have been pointed out by the rest of your fan-club, the interaction between Helseth and Sethyas was really very well described.

But..can the King be trusted?

In my opinion Seth will have to be alert, he must watch his back, because if I was him...I wouldn't trust His Royal Highness for one lousy bit!

Hmmm waiting very patiently....again

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I still wondered why warriors would want to attract attention in these things, you couldn�t sneak up on a deaf and blind guar.

Posted by: Black Hand Sep 25 2008, 12:20 AM

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Posted by: minque Sep 25 2008, 12:47 AM

You're not the only one! My battles are normally written by experts ..like Mallie..

But leave it as is! No actual need to change it...

Posted by: Apophis2412 Sep 26 2008, 06:19 PM

Nice dialog between Helseth and Sethyas.

What will happen now? Will he begin to actually like Helseth?

Posted by: seerauna Oct 10 2008, 01:37 AM

This took awhile to read through including Volume One, but it was well worth it!

The Tale of Sethyas Velas is masterfully written with romance, comedy, and action...usually all within one update. I thought I was going to cry when Ilmeni died. Anyways, loved it! Keep all the updates coming and as many say, postmachine!

Posted by: Black Hand Oct 11 2008, 09:52 PM

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Posted by: jack cloudy Oct 11 2008, 10:26 PM

Finally got the guts to read and catch up with it.

First of all, it's good. Really good. As for the latest developments, I add my voice to everyone else. It will be interesting to see how Sethyas' new outlook on things will continue to affect him.

Posted by: minque Oct 12 2008, 05:36 PM

This was a beautiful installment , Blackie! So thoughtful and calm if you know what I mean (yes you do! ) I read it for the first time very early this morning at the hotel-computer, then I read it again...now, being at home again. I love it, its balm for my mind to read your work....

Posted by: The Bean Nov 2 2008, 01:52 PM

*Pokes Black Hand*

What happened to this so called post machine?

C'mon, I love this guy and I want an update!

Don't make me whine more!

Posted by: minque Nov 4 2008, 12:12 AM

QUOTE(The Bean @ Nov 2 2008, 01:52 PM)

*Pokes Black Hand*

What happened to this so called post machine?

C'mon, I love this guy and I want an update!

Don't make me whine more!

*sigh* I, too, miss Sethyas, but like any other "machine" even this one might need some time off. I dont't know but I think we'll just have to sit patient and wait.

Posted by: bbqplatypus Nov 13 2008, 04:46 AM

I hope he isn't dead.

Posted by: canis216 Nov 13 2008, 08:22 AM

It's only been one month since the last update, folks. Let's just chill a bit. Heck, I think just in the 2008 calendar year I've had two stretches where I took at least 2 months off. It happens. Just makes the next installment all the sweeter.

Posted by: Black Hand Nov 23 2008, 02:11 AM

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Posted by: canis216 Nov 23 2008, 06:26 AM

Ah, I enjoy this quest, if only because a couple (at least) years back in the Lore Forum we had this crazy speculation thread suggesting that Eno Romari was an avatar of Seht. I loved that thread. Almost as good as my joke-post about Charles the Plant being an heir to the Septim Empire. Ah, the Lore Forum.

Posted by: bbqplatypus Nov 23 2008, 06:52 AM

It's great to see another update. I ended up reading through the entirety of Volume II before I got to this, just so I could remember and appreciate the context of the rest of the story.

Terrific work, as usual. Hopefully the next update will come a bit sooner!

Posted by: minque Nov 23 2008, 03:31 PM

This was indeed most welcome! Gah, reading this made me realise just how much I've missed Sethyas, in fact I had to read through most of volume II just like BBQ!

Anyway I'm glad you found time to make this update, even though I do understand how work affects one's creativity...trust me, I know far too well...

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I thought it strange, but a natural feeling as she disrobed me. Not completely, I was not nude in her presence, nor did I think that a 4000 year old beauty such as herself would not have seen anything I had before, but my mind wasn�t in such a low place. It was more like shedding an old skin, and dropping an unnecessary burden.

Now this.....made me think..hmm

Lovely Blackie, just lovely

Posted by: The Bean Nov 24 2008, 12:04 AM

He lives!

Nice update Handy, and it's good to have Sethyas rocking around again. However I thought that the attack happened only a few days ago-how could the cult form so quickly?

Posted by: Black Hand Nov 26 2008, 04:20 AM

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Posted by: minque Nov 27 2008, 10:24 PM

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I didn�t know what to make of the situation. My head was telling me that his faith was shaken in his Goddess, but in my heart I knew the appearance of a rejected lover when I saw one.

Hah! Of course he would!

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Eno Romari teaches his followers that our time in Tamriel is at an end, and the gates of Oblivion will soon open and the daedra will walk the land. Only the ancestors who have already left this world will remain once the daedric scourge covers the earth. And so he promotes what he calls "the Cleansing.""

O_o....fateful I'd say, but probably there's a bit of truth in it. Anyway we'll have to wait and see, right?

The tense in this installment is nicely building up...you can almost feel it. Lexie dwells in her quarters, making plans, sending Seth out on a mission, but first she dressed him up in a new armor, I wonder..hehe

Now Seth is very calm and thoughtful these days....I like his approach, and I have the greatest faith in him. He'll be fine, I hope!

My favourite Assassin of all times..

Posted by: Black Hand Mar 12 2009, 04:44 AM

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Posted by: canis216 Mar 12 2009, 05:22 AM

Nicely done, good sir. I like Sethyas' reaction to Eno Romari's speechifying--off in a huff, taking a moment to collect himself... well-played.

Posted by: minque Mar 12 2009, 08:29 PM

This was a very nice surprise! I've missed Sethyas immensely you know.

As usual you have created an intriguing continuation....it's so nice to see this story up and running again, it made my day!

Oh I especially enjoyed the last part...

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she said with a caress of her hand down the side of my face, a tingling sensation lingering from the touch. I cant say that I did not enjoy it, nor could I say that the look on her face was wholly unreadable.

My my, Sethyas....watch out!

Now then, I'll be waiting for the next part, not that I want to rush you ......but ...

Posted by: bbqplatypus Mar 12 2009, 09:04 PM

Yeah! Blackie's back! Awesome!

Posted by: The Bean Mar 12 2009, 09:49 PM

SETHYAS LIVES! WOOT!

Good to have you back Handy. I've been missing this assassin.

Posted by: Black Hand Mar 16 2009, 08:45 AM

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Posted by: minque Mar 16 2009, 09:30 PM

What can I say? I'm stunned, truly I am. You'e a poet, Blackie, oh yes I've know that for a very long time, but you're just "doing it" all the time.

His dream is very suggestive, is it the power of the Goddess? or is it just Sethyas being influenced by her, for that is what he is...

Then again it makes me wonder how an anciend goddess can get into his head like she's obviously is beginning to do. can't he resist her? Is Sethyas so vulnerable or is he just desperately seeking ratification??

thank you for a good read, I needed that after yesteday's sorrow...

Posted by: The Bean Mar 17 2009, 11:52 PM

Aha. More musings from the Morag Tong's number one muser.

Seth is very musey, isn't he?

Posted by: Black Hand Apr 29 2009, 07:43 AM

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Posted by: seerauna Apr 29 2009, 12:34 PM

Sethyas is back!! I've been missing him for awhile.... Great update Black Hand can't wait for the next!

Posted by: Colonel Mustard Apr 29 2009, 10:49 PM

Is that gunpowder Seth has found?

Posted by: minque May 1 2009, 09:53 AM

And the plot tightens, tension is built up. This whole post is a cliff hanger, at least I feel it that way. As usual brilliant writing, Blackie you are incredible!

Keeps my fingers crossed for my favourite assassin...

Posted by: Black Hand May 6 2009, 07:23 AM

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Posted by: Colonel Mustard May 6 2009, 10:59 AM

Boom baby! BOOM!

Yeah, I liked the part.

Posted by: seerauna May 7 2009, 12:24 AM

QUOTE(Colonel Mustard @ May 6 2009, 04:59 AM)

Boom baby! BOOM!

Yeah, I liked the part.

Yeah, me too. I like things that go BOOM!

Posted by: minque May 10 2009, 12:43 AM

Intelligent as usual, Sethyas encounter with the techniques of ancient dwemerii...brilliant! He took some heavy risk though! I mean apparently he knew about those chemicals, how they would react and even then he fired at them.

Bold and courageous, but but.....gruesome things could have happened if he hadn' managed to run off.

Calculation or sheer luck?

What dwells in the black hole?

Some questions were answered but even more were raised..makes me anxious to learn more.

Oh and Seth...please....be careful!

Posted by: Black Hand Jun 15 2009, 09:48 PM

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Posted by: minque Jun 15 2009, 10:07 PM

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�You say this, even when it is obvious that you attempt to stir my passions, and have done so since we have met.�

�You are bold, mortal.�

�And you are subtly dangerous.�

Our lips met, even as the Hands watched.

I left with the taste of Almalexia on my lips.

OK Seth....now you really jumped right into something I hope you can handle without too much pain. A tryst with a goddess is a serious matter. I will certainly keep my fingers crossed, that everything will be ok...phew!

A wonderful update, much appreciated! But also it makes me urge for more...

Thank you Blackie for continuing this story about my favourite assassin....

Posted by: Black Hand Jun 19 2009, 10:12 PM

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Posted by: seerauna Jun 19 2009, 11:23 PM

Perhaps Sethyas needs to be more careful, that could have killed our favorite assassin!

Good update, I especially like the bit about the Nine's virtues. Keep up the good work Black Hand!

Posted by: minque Jun 20 2009, 12:32 AM

Ok so Seth really has a knack for elder women? Or is it the divineness of Lexie that appeals to him? Anyway this whole thing could easily have led to end of story for him, but as you stated he still is alive to tell!

The wandering priestess' s prophecy could have come true...hrmm

You keep impressing me with your wonderful writing, Blackie, you really do! Now I will wait patiently for the continuation.....

(Eh who am I fooling, I'm not a patient person, not when it's about Sethyas.. )

Oh and I beg you Seth....be careful huh!

Posted by: canis216 Jun 29 2009, 05:40 PM

I think Sethya's friend Al would disapprove of this combat technique, even though he sports a dagger with similar qualities. When I played through Tribunal with him as a character I believe he resorted to the "climb on rooftop and cut down target in a hail of viper-bolts" method. But then Al doesn't let goddesses mess with his head and make him think he's some kind of warrior-hero. Sethyas needs to mind his mind.

Well done, as ever. I think you try to get a little over-verbose in spots, but you compensate well with images like this: "But I [...] had drank her love like a man drinks wine to forget the pain."

Posted by: Black Hand Jul 12 2009, 06:19 AM

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Posted by: minque Jul 13 2009, 09:21 PM

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"Hunter loves the Goddess, no?"

"Hunter loves Rayne." I replied sardonically.

Why do I and also don't I believe him? Maybe because he's Sethyas Velas and not an ordinary man...

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"And yet, you lead me on, kiss me, even when you know it to be dishonorable. A woman's emotions are not a thing to be played with, much less a Godesses. As you are mortal and young, I can forgive you. But you must very shortly make a choice. And you know what I can offer you, and you, a mortal who will not age, who will live as long his will and fate allows it, this a true blessing to me. Think on it Good Sethyas, but we will not pursue anything until you have chosen."

This last paragraph summarize it all, he must choose, that is obvious, but how can he? It must be very very hard for him, since I believe he has still some feelings for Rayne, yet how can he resist a Goddess? How can he resist the divine powers of Almalexia?

I....only hope he choose the right thing...for his sake!

Posted by: Black Hand Jul 17 2009, 10:24 PM

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Posted by: minque Jul 19 2009, 08:09 PM

AAAAAAAHHHHHRRR!

This is just cruel! You couldn't resist, right? A cliffie...hrmmm

Okidoki, just have to wait for chapter four then, I guess

A suitable ending though....oh aye

*sitting patiently.....or?*