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Posted by: Black Hand Feb 3 2008, 08:56 PM

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Posted by: jack cloudy Feb 3 2008, 10:05 PM

Oh, now there are three assassins on the scene. (If Al is still around, that is.)

Hmm, three assassins, two that have proven to be way off the scale on badassedness and one with potential and the opportunity to learn from one of the two. You know, both the temple and the palace had better watch their backs. biggrin.gif

Although, I wonder what it means now that Rayne has 'defeated' Sethyas. Didn't she have a writ on him? Is that still in effect? Or.......geez I dunno.

Posted by: The Metal Mallet Feb 4 2008, 08:37 AM

So Rayne makes a long overdue arrival. Nice to see those two playing "nice" I guess you could say wink.gif

Posted by: minque Feb 5 2008, 12:12 AM

Ahhhhahhaaa....Rayne's back? Great, now we're talking! As always she make's sort of a big entrance. I like that girl and I have a feeling Seth does as well. Can't wait to see where this is going, I foresee a lot.....mind you...

Then I naturally wonder.....but nope I'll be patient and wait..oh yessir I will.... wink.gif

Posted by: Black Hand Jun 7 2008, 09:46 PM

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Posted by: canis216 Jun 7 2008, 10:37 PM

Ah, a most enjoyable quest (and update). Nice to see Sethyas back in action.


Posted by: minque Jun 8 2008, 11:57 PM

Ohhhh...wonderful! My dear dear Seth is back again, I'm so glad I logged in here tonight. It's always a sheer pleasure to read about him.

I guess they're in trouble now..hmmm, they will of course sort it out, I have no doubts about that. What I also hope is that Rayne and Seth will get some more quality-time together.... wink.gif

Posted by: Black Hand Jun 10 2008, 11:21 PM

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Posted by: minque Jun 11 2008, 09:28 PM

O-o....now then? The sewers of Mournhold have always scared me, let them be safe....this Golena doesn't seem to be a nice person at all.

I want more Sethyas and Rayne!

Oh do you have pictures of Rayne? And more pics of darling Seth?

Posted by: Black Hand Jun 12 2008, 09:53 PM

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Posted by: minque Jun 12 2008, 10:26 PM

I'm glad they made it! But tell me how did Rayne get OK so fast? Does she have some kind of self-healing skills? Lovely update Blackie!

Now where do they go from here? Good question huh? wink.gif

Posted by: Black Hand Jun 12 2008, 11:46 PM

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Posted by: minque Jun 14 2008, 08:07 PM

Ehhh nope...I do not remember Golena at all because I never played Tribunal very far. But it's more than thrilling to read about it, especially about how Seth and Rayne will manage.
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Posted by: Black Hand Jun 14 2008, 10:11 PM

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Posted by: minque Jun 14 2008, 10:45 PM

Ahhh, of course he didn't! I like the way this is proceeding....They are good for each other, Raynie and Seth...they bring out the good and decent manners...

For me I do not have a clue what will come next since I haven't played Tribunal....Therefore I'm eagerly awaiting the continuation!

Posted by: mplantinga Jun 18 2008, 09:59 PM

It's very nice to see the return of Sethyas. The encounter with Golena is always a bit strange, mostly because she's totally bonkers. But the arrows are really nice; I usually find it impossible to resist the temptation to load up on them (even though I rarely, if ever, actually use them - I usually play a pure mage). The interaction between Rayne and Sethyas adds a new level of intrigue to this story, and makes it even more appealing. It seems to me, however, that it may eventually be necessary to deal with the realities of entanglement with an underling; I'm sure you'll create a suitably satisfying way to deal with that.

Posted by: Black Hand Jun 20 2008, 07:29 PM

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Posted by: minque Jun 21 2008, 03:23 PM

Ohhh an Adamantium Scimitar huh? Now that's something very special. Seth should have it, no doubt.

Hah I liked your description of Mournhold's virtues. Very nice! Now of course I'm curious of what happens next. And how Raynie and Seth will develop their relationship.

So even if I go on a trip on monday I'll really do my best to go online to read....there!!!

Posted by: Black Hand Jun 22 2008, 04:45 AM

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Posted by: mplantinga Jun 23 2008, 04:24 PM

This "confrontation" between Sethyas and Fedris is quite tense, and I'm enjoying it immensely. I'm looking forward to seeing how it is resolved.

I was a little disappointed to see the matter of the adamantium scimitar more or less unresolved. It felt, to me, like we weren't quite finished with that at the end of the previous installment, but there was no mention of it in this one. Regardless, I'm hoping for a suitably amazing description of its first battle encounter.

Posted by: minque Jun 23 2008, 08:40 PM

Brilliant Blackie! As Dr Planty said, Seth's conversation with Lexie's watchdog was a masterpiece! I wonder what it will lead to....

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Remember, fellow Assassin, I have faced gods.”

“Remember, fellow Assassin, that I serve one.” Hler said, not backing down.

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Posted by: Black Hand Jun 26 2008, 12:42 AM

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Posted by: minque Jun 26 2008, 10:35 PM

okay...so now they're off chasing goblins huh? I would be careful if I was Seth...or Rayne! yayy Blackie, more Seth please!


Btw, yes do take advantage of your own sub forum! I will! biggrin.gif

Posted by: Black Hand Jul 1 2008, 09:11 AM

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Posted by: minque Jul 1 2008, 07:39 PM

You're a poet Blackie! Or at least you write almost poetical. I loved this update, I love how you describe the goblins, heh in fact I didn't know anything about them and I enjoyed to learn from you here.

Then I like that Rayne and Seth are having discussions and that they do not always believe in the same things. It makes them both very sympathetic to me.


yeah yeah.....I'm in love with Seth.....say no more! tongue.gif

Posted by: Black Hand Jul 10 2008, 05:11 PM

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Posted by: minque Jul 10 2008, 08:06 PM

Sethy...tsk tsk...are you impressed by a large vicious army! tongue.gif Well yeah you would I suppose.

Now what I'm thinking is if Rayne will be partaking in the fight against Helseth. I mean ok she's a skilled assassin but she also is Seth's weakness, and the evil king could use that ...and he will!

I wonder.... wink.gif

Posted by: The Metal Mallet Jul 13 2008, 01:27 AM

I'm caught up! And I have to say I'm quite impressed about what has happened since I've last visited. Excellent work my friend.

Posted by: bbqplatypus Jul 13 2008, 05:33 AM

I stumbled upon this story (and this forum, by contrast) about two days ago, and I spent pretty much all of my free time reading the entire story up to this point. Hell, I even registered for the express purpose of following this story and commenting about it (though I might stick around).

Anycrap, I'd just like to say that this is one of the best MW walkthrough/fanfics I've ever read. I've always felt that a "traditional" narrative based on the story of Morrowind requires a good sense of the shrewdness and ritualism of Dunmer society, and the alien-ness of said society as viewed by outsiders. Y'know, a stranger alone in a strange and harsh land. Sort of a cross between Dune and Lawrence of Arabia. But I never really thought of the whole assassin angle, which I think is really what makes your story unique.

The quality of this story is making me want to actually FINISH the fanfic I started about four freakin' months ago...

Geez, I'm rambling, aren't I? Well, just consider this my roundabout way of saying "Keep up the good work, Blackie!"

Posted by: Black Hand Jul 13 2008, 06:23 AM

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Posted by: minque Jul 13 2008, 07:20 PM

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AH! A new fan! Thank you for your comments! The ego-feed does help motivate the story.


So true! And you're well worth it...

Posted by: Black Hand Jul 20 2008, 05:56 PM

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Posted by: minque Jul 20 2008, 06:08 PM

Uhhhh..so you're just stopping after taking just two down, half of the bunch?

Evil, thy name is Blackie!

Oh I am quite sure Seth and Rayne will do a good job with the others, but but....

Knowing you there might be some, shall we say, extra spice to it.

So when's the next update coming up? tongue.gif tongue.gif

Posted by: Black Hand Jul 21 2008, 06:47 PM

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Posted by: minque Jul 21 2008, 10:50 PM

Ahh, nice to see Raynie do so well! To see that the female part of the two to be the one who really did the hard job! Ohhh of course Seth did too but ....mmmm Rayne really showed herself to be an assassiness(?!) to be counted on...


Sweeet!

Posted by: Black Hand Jul 25 2008, 02:04 AM

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Posted by: Kiln Jul 25 2008, 03:20 AM

Great work mate the only thing I can really say is that I wish you'd do longer updates but I understand completely about time constraints and priorities.

Waiting4Updates.

Posted by: Black Hand Jul 25 2008, 05:51 AM

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Posted by: minque Jul 26 2008, 06:57 AM

QUOTE(Black Hand @ Jul 25 2008, 03:04 AM) *

“Well. If we aren’t two very well-paid mercenaries!” Rayne exclaimed; running her fingers through the coins in the chest.

I stood in a corner, leaning against the wall, arms crossed. “Keep the gold, Rayne.”

She looked over with a perplexed look. “Don’t make offers that I’m not stupid enough to turn down. Fifty-fifty, come on. We’re partners!”

I shook my head. “It’s yours. I don’t need it, and you deserve no less for your assistance down there.”

She walked over slowly. “If that’s your way of saying thanks, let me say my thanks too.” Her walk towards me ending in an embrace and attempted kiss.

“What’s wrong?” she asked, pulling back as I moved my face to the side.

I faked a smile. “Nothing. Just a lot on my mind. You understand.”

“I do. I have 15,000 things on my mind!” she quipped.

“Then you go, and buy something nice for the place, for yourself, whatever, and I’ll use that time to clear my head.”

“Deal.” She said with a quick peck on the lips.

The pattern of being used was repeating itself. I did not take being used lightly, but I had seen with my own eyes was Helseth was willing to do, how far he was willing to go. The temple needed me, if at the very least my legend. The great Nerevarine who cast down Dagoth Ur with a terrible gaze, and an awesome cry. The great Nerevarine who could punch through Dwemer walls, and fell entire legions of Ash Ghouls with a stroke of his blade.

Both the Temple and the Monarchy wanted to exploit me. I wanted to be left alone. Perhaps such a thing was not possible, I was in to deep. Prophecy wove my path ahead of me, the aftermath of my choices were never far behind. If there was a light at the end of the tunnel, there would be bloodshed before I got to it.


The temple would keep me alive, so long as I proved useful. Helseth would seek to destroy me by any means. Of these options, I chose the one most beneficial to myself.

So within the passing of the moons, we were summoned to the Temple once more. This time, the Archcanon, Gavas Drin himself sought us out; as he had a matter that he felt we could assist with. That was getting a bit old.

I couldn't decide which lines to quote so I took it all! I really love this part, the conversation between them is so ....so gah, I can't find the proper words for it, but I have a feeling you sort of know what I mean. (You are a mind reader right?)

QUOTE(Black Hand @ Jul 25 2008, 06:51 AM) *

I end up leving for about four months in the very near future.


Oh, so there's no internet there, wherever you end up? sad.gif

Posted by: Black Hand Jul 26 2008, 06:36 PM

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Posted by: canis216 Jul 27 2008, 01:10 AM

Ha! I usually just leave Dulni in the Archcanon's office while I dive down into the sewers and kill everything in my way. Much easier that way.

Nice update, as usual.

Posted by: Apophis2412 Jul 27 2008, 08:03 AM

I just found this fan fiction yesterday. Nice work. smile.gif

Posted by: Black Hand Jul 28 2008, 03:13 AM

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Posted by: minque Jul 28 2008, 08:41 PM

QUOTE(Black Hand @ Jul 28 2008, 04:13 AM) *

And the fans continue to grow! Thank you very much for taking the time to comment, I appreciate it more then you know, and I hope I will continue to deserve good comments.

You will Blackie! You will! I promise

Posted by: mplantinga Jul 28 2008, 10:26 PM

I was amused by your writer's note on this last installment. I'm too much of a stereotypical "good guy" (read: boring) to actually consider killing Urvel just to move on, but it is a rather intriguing idea.

I must be having a dense moment, because I completely failed to understand the last sentence. It is not at all clear to me, as it obviously is to Sethyas, why the archcanon chose Urvel for this job.

Posted by: Black Hand Jul 29 2008, 07:15 AM

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Posted by: bbqplatypus Jul 30 2008, 11:54 PM

Nice. The archaic grammar is painfully bad, though. It should be "Dost thou know" not "Does thee knowst." winkgrin.gif

Posted by: minque Jul 30 2008, 11:58 PM

Uhhhh...creepy. I am scared of un-dead things and them bein un-life! brrrrrr! You described "it" very well, which in fact did not scare me less, hihi

I wonder ...will I find out how they manage this situation before I leave for Germany on friday morning????

hint hint! wink.gif

Posted by: Black Hand Jul 31 2008, 12:07 AM

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Posted by: bbqplatypus Jul 31 2008, 12:19 AM

Hooray! Extra post-y goodness! Awesome as usual!

I may yet contribute another post of my own this fair evening...

Posted by: minque Jul 31 2008, 12:24 AM

This I liked, so Seth-ish... biggrin.gif

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“Dost thou know what mine profession in life was?” The ethereal voice asked, the jawbone with its several missing teeth did not move.


and then..
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“Do you know what MY profession is?” I asked quietly before releasing a silver arrow to the undead targets.


Hilarious!

Now what worries me is that the couple are having disagreements...I can understand Rayne finally finding something she believes in..on the other hand I can understand Seth as well, not wanting anything to do with the Temple! Let's hope it doesn't develop into something bad that make them unhappy...

Seth deserves some happiness....and so does Raynie

But!!!! another cliffie! Sweet, now I still have to wonder don't I? tongue.gif



Posted by: Apophis2412 Jul 31 2008, 09:08 AM

QUOTE(Black Hand @ Jul 31 2008, 01:09 AM) *


“Drin speaks to Almalexia Herself!” Rayne pleaded.

“And I’ve spoken to Vivec! And forgiven him for treachery at Red Mountain 4000 years ago! Does that make me better than everyone else?”

“It makes you more important then most.”


Rayne seems to forget that Almalexia also took part in that treachery.

She also forgets that, in a way, Sethyas is Almalexia's ex-husband. biggrin.gif

Posted by: minque Jul 31 2008, 12:12 PM

QUOTE(Apophis2412 @ Jul 31 2008, 10:08 AM) *

QUOTE(Black Hand @ Jul 31 2008, 01:09 AM) *


“Drin speaks to Almalexia Herself!” Rayne pleaded.

“And I’ve spoken to Vivec! And forgiven him for treachery at Red Mountain 4000 years ago! Does that make me better than everyone else?”

“It makes you more important then most.”


Rayne seems to forget that Almalexia also took part in that treachery.

She also forgets that, in a way, Sethyas is Almalexia's ex-husband. biggrin.gif


EWWWW! poor Raynie, but..yup in a way it's true!
Now I wonder....

Posted by: Black Hand Jul 31 2008, 05:44 PM

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Posted by: minque Jul 31 2008, 06:46 PM

QUOTE(Black Hand @ Jul 31 2008, 06:44 PM) *

**Somewhere, a dude called Black Hand is sipping a cup of coffee, and one corner of his lips just turned up**

Oh yeah? tongue.gif How about if that dude would be so kind and post another update? It would be most appreciated, since I have about 11 hourse before I'm on my way south...In between I do need some sleep also..

Posted by: Black Hand Aug 1 2008, 12:50 AM

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Posted by: minque Aug 1 2008, 10:39 PM

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The purpose of the artifact is unknown to me, Faern Sargtlin.
Que???? Faern sargtlin???

Anyway...thrilling, So they met Barenziah? Now that is something...And thar Mazed band.....hmmm I never retrieved it..no no

Another thing, Apparently Renzie knew about the so called problems Seth and Raynie may have. Isn't that odd? Gosh...I don't know when I can get online again...and read more of this....It's unfair! I want to read more about Seth!


Sorry guys..just had a bottle of red wine....a very nice wine indeed! *hiccup*

Posted by: Black Hand Aug 1 2008, 10:50 PM

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Posted by: minque Aug 1 2008, 10:53 PM

QUOTE(Black Hand @ Aug 1 2008, 11:50 PM) *

whoopsies! I use TIL for direct dialogue from the game, and the PC for the text is Faern Sargtlin.

i know dear! I justthought I'd point it out...maybe you don't want Faern in your story? Faern is Sinder Velvin's creation

But you know I love it anyway... tongue.gif

Posted by: mplantinga Aug 6 2008, 04:27 PM

My favorite part of the last few updates was the glint in Rayne's eye after talking with Barenziah, and the conversation that Seth and Rayne have when she gets back. Something about that just felt truly great.

Posted by: Black Hand Aug 24 2008, 06:58 AM

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Posted by: canis216 Aug 24 2008, 04:45 PM

An excellent update. I like that little reflection back to the training of Master Indarys. Most excellent.

Posted by: minque Aug 24 2008, 09:32 PM

Aaaaalrighty then....Lexie the great next! I wonder..mmmm I wonder, that lady is known for her devious manners. What if she eats Seth alive? I never played the part with the Band, Serene never met Barilzar, and she probably never will!

Oh a humorous quote:

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Don’t rely on your eyes, especially when you can’t see. Especially when we work at night.”


More:
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“When we first met, you were pretty good at it. Remember? You were blindfolded kicking the training dummy.”

“That was training. This is real life.”

“We were being trained for real life.” I said with a smirk.


The words of wisdom from my favourite Assassin!

Thank you Blackie, for the dedication, I'm touched, really I am!

Posted by: mplantinga Aug 25 2008, 05:39 AM

I especially enjoyed the fight between Sethyas and Barilzar; you described fighting blind in a very compelling way. I'm looking forward to seeing how you describe Sethyas' thoughts when he finally meets Almalexia.

Posted by: Black Hand Sep 10 2008, 01:38 AM

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Posted by: bbqplatypus Sep 10 2008, 03:06 AM

Yes! Another update! I'd love to see more, but I know you're busy. I know exactly what that's like. I'm still glad for every new bit of this story I see. This one was really good. The quote at the end summed it up nicely.

Posted by: Black Hand Sep 10 2008, 05:02 AM

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Posted by: bbqplatypus Sep 10 2008, 06:26 AM

This update was a really thoughtful and reflective one. I actually tend to like those sorts of updates because it allows for deeper and more poetic prose. Again, it's good to see more from you.

Posted by: mplantinga Sep 10 2008, 06:11 PM

Hooray for introspection. It was satisfying to see how deeply Sethyas understands the socio-political motivations of the power-hungry Mournhold elites and his centrality to the furtherance of their schemes. His past has certainly taught him how to be careful, a lesson I hope he doesn't forget in the coming days.

Posted by: Black Hand Sep 10 2008, 06:17 PM

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Posted by: Black Hand Sep 10 2008, 06:19 PM

Here ends Chapter 2

Posted by: bbqplatypus Sep 10 2008, 06:26 PM

Awesome! Now we're getting to the juicy part! All these posts in a row...just like old times, eh? happy.gif

Posted by: minque Sep 10 2008, 10:40 PM

I'm stunned....four updates in a row....then a darn CLIFFIE!!!!

A couple of quotes:

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the clash of rodent versus mer was over quite quickly.


Made me nearly spit out my wine.... biggrin.gif (you know what I came to think of, right?)

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Almalexia, our lady of grace, bride of Nerevar, and one of the most beautiful creatures I had ever laid eyes upon.


Seth! What are you getting at? Don't you know that Lady is a Maneater?

Anyway these four updates are as classy as usual! Your work really is very impressive.

I've just loved reading about Sethyas' life and I'm looking forward to chapter 3....

Thank you soo much dear Blackie for a most entertaining eve....just the thing I needed after a very loooong day




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