Hmm...... *wonders if he could help with that setting*

Sorry, I should note that I did read your latest little "Wings of Light" sampler. Definitely some good stuff ya got there, jack. That ending really drives in the emotion that this emotionless creature finally exudes. Looks like you're going to have lots of interesting angles to work with on this major project of yours.

Ok, I've decided what setting to use for this next fan-fic. I'll use the setting of the Mandalorian Wars and that of the Jedi Civil War featured in KOTOR itself. It won't have too many spoilers regarding the storyline of KOTOR since the two won't have much connections with each other.

God damn Black Hand, it's [censored]-ing brilliant. Gorgeous. Like... walking in a great forest of pines with rays of bright sunshine illuminating the darkness.

That good, eh? Well, i was trying to sound Kirkbride-ian, and it does borrow a lot from the sermons.

Nice letter there, Canis! Far more passionate than my latest submission. Does not passion, desire, and longing, have a way of masking the world?

That is some excellent work, Canis. You just have this...voice...that goes beyond style. Pure poetic genius. I tip my doggie ears to you.

Black Hand, that does indeed sound a lot like the sermons. Same strange expressions and all. Really neat. That assassin must have put a lot of thought into his words. Odd phrases like that don't just come from nowhere.

Canis, I don't really know what was going on, but I liked it all the same. As Treydog said, it was poetic.
So um, is the woman our guy speaks of dead or something? It sounds like he's lost in memories and all.

No, definitely not dead. It's really about jumping from memory and reverie to action. Memory is wonderful, but hollow if it becomes only a memory. I struggle with this.

And thanks for the praise, gents. "Pure poetic genius," is high praise indeed, as I feel like I've always struggled while trying to write poems. Poetic prose... I guess I can do.

Okay, I just found this when I was searching the forums for something to read. I would definitly be interested in joining. I think I'd just be an apprentice for now, but anyways Black this was a really good idea.

Hmm. Most of the Members Submissions have waned quite a bit over the last couple of years. But if you want to see it revived, I'll match you entry for entry.

Canis, sounds like quite an experience you had there~! If one truly loves the outdoors. I guess you have to love everything about it!

Canis, you again please and amaze with your gift for description. The thing is, you show rather than tell. As I lost myself in the narrative, I was on that mountain with you, feeling the bite and pull of the saw, the hard splat of the cold rain.... A beautiful moment, beautifully revealed.

Thank you very much, treydog. A high compliment from a gifted writer.

Lo, but I love those mountains. All desert mountains really, but especially those. A different world.

Nature lover describes,
Story lover listens,
Loving descriptions of nature.

Maybe not quite a haiku....

Pre-emptive explication for my Temple post today:

The Zia have nothing to do with established TES lore on Yokuda. Rather, they are a Pueblo community in the American Southwest. The little poem is an actual Zia lament, which I have quoted word-for-word from Edward Abbey's fine book, Desert Solitaire. Another of my big influences.

Hm, is it okay for me to post here, as I am not technically a member of this fine Order? Only I do want to comment on canis' little ditty.

Anyways, that was quite the teaser, wasn't it? Without doubt it piqued my interest in this trapped fellow, accomplishing its intended objective with much gusto. If I could suggest anything (which is rather difficult, since this is already a more than competent bit) it might be to emphasize the window even further as a symbol for this trapped soul's salvation. It is an apt icon, and I think you could get even more use out of it, if you wanted to. My thoughts only, however, I don't want to impinge on your creation.

One thing further, the penultimate line:


I hesitate to call that crass - because it really isn't - but to my mind it detracts somewhat from the otherwise poetic prose feel that you seem to be striving for. :Shrugs:

Penny for your thoughts?

That line is a bit tricky. Probably try to find a way to rephrase it. But the finished piece is going to be, after all, a love story.

There will almost certainly be more on the window in the end game. This character's stint in the tower is going to be more than a single short letter, I think. Actually, I have little idea how long the whole work is going to be, aside from pretty long. Maybe not Trey long, but considering that I don't have a game plot to riff off of, I think this will go a long ways.

And you are absolutely welcome to post here. And in the Temple of Lore, too, if you have any little bits that don't fit elsewhere. I think I've posted the last 5 in a row there. I think the Temple of Lore is great and should have more action. One more thing: join the Order! Just give yourself a title! It's great. In fact, I think I'll change my rank to "Bard" right now.

I'm somewhat confused. Is this for TES stuff only? I ask because I've been working on magic concept for Avlarians, a race in my world of Teir.

For exactitude, I didn't mean you shouldn't include the content of the phrase, just rephrase it like you said you will. I think the attitude of that bit fits perfectly, just the delivery needed some work - which you clearly saw.

And I shall join, actually, thanks for the invitation! I bequeath unto myself the rank of Storyteller!