Elisabeth Hollow:
Thanks Honestly, lately Ive only been updating when I have free time. I'm having more free-time than I thought I would, so I might be able to keep up with my normal updating schedule, but for now, whenever i'm free, i'll post.

mALX: The fight was funny because Vokun couldn't fight back. That and he's not really a person who enjoys heights, so being flung up into the air made him act a bit....strange to say the least.

Acadian: After Westley spent the initial part of his fight with Vokun beating himself up against trees and rocks, it was wonderful to finally see Vokun get that punch in the mouth!

Westley isn't the best fighter. He has horrible fighting tactics, and was so mad at Vokun, he could't think straight, so he ended up crashing into trees instead of hitting his target. Vokun was able to move out of the way of Westley's attacks in time, though in the end, Vokun got the beating he deserved.

This is awful

This post has been edited by King Of Beasts: Jun 30 2018, 08:33 AM

SPEW !!! This whole entire fight scene had me in hysterics, but that line nearly choked me to death! I am LOVING this story!

This quote sums up everything needed to know about Hastrel right now, lmfao!

The wonderful arguments among Westley’s party continue, even in the thick of fighting. I wonder who the rogue werewolf was? And darn that Vokun - he got away again with nary a punch in the mouth nor errant arrow to the knee this time.

I had to chuckle at the image of our intrepid band given pause to enter an Ayleid ruin. Who knows what nightmares might lay below? Could be vampires, werewolves or other such horrors in there!

You did a great job of quickly establishing a fearful atmosphere inside the dungeon. Ah yes, dancing through blade traps. . . .

One notable distraction throughout this delightfully fun episode was that, although you correctly labeled the werewolf as rogue in the title, you then referred to it as ‘rouge’ (a reddish color) throughout the episode.

mALX: I'm glad you're enjoying the story  in my own opinion I'm not the best writer though. Im not doing so good in Language Arts, especially with essays, and I remember a particular story called "The Carrot" I wrote in class in first grade or kindergarten. I can't remember when I wrote it. The story went like this:

"There once was a carrot, and then a rabbit ate it, and it died." Everything was spelled wrong though, and and I wrote "THE END" when i finished in big red letters and drew a horrible picture to go along with it.   

Now that nothing of it, compared to "The Carrot", this story isn't half bad  

Anyway, thanks for reading mALX, I appreciate it.

Elisabeth Hollow:

You're not that far from the truth He's quite oblivious of everything around him, and is pretty self-centered.
He'll eventually learn not to be like that though, though it will most likely be the hard way.

Thanks for reading! 

Acadian:

If there's an argument, it's best to assume that Hastrel started it  



Hmmm....that arrow wouldn't have gone near his knee. He'd be walking around with an arrow through his face if he hadn't been so lucky  



I'll tell you this much:

He's/she's an important character, so pay close attention to him/her  

And thanks for reading.


Everyone: Thanks for reading, even though there are only three(on rare occasions four). It means a lot that you're taking the time to read my story   

This is longer than I remember

This post has been edited by King Of Beasts: Jun 30 2018, 08:34 AM

I love the way you divided this chapter up into segments so we could see what was happening with each. Well now I feel sorry for Vokun, you've really brought a new perspective of him with this chapter! Awesome Write!

Hastrel is a jerk, lol

And even dungeon clearing doesn't focus this group on the task at hand. Great fun!

So, Vokun has his own problems and we learn a bit more about the rogue werewolf.

mALX:I love the way you divided this chapter up into segments so we could see what was happening with each. Well now I feel sorry for Vokun, you've really brought a new perspective of him with this chapter! Awesome Write!

Don't feel sorry for Vokun. Yes, he's depressed, but he doesn't think before he acts. He's actually killing other people, just so he feels better. That's just one of his bad habits though.

Like I just said, he acts before thinking. Someone could look at him wrong, and if he gets upset....well let's just say that that person goes missing.....  

He also pretends he doesn't care when something bad happens to him. He did care about his family....but when they died he sort of just tried to shake it off and act like he doesn't care so he wouldn't look weak. If there's one thing you should know about Vokun, it's that he can't stand looking weak.

 If he were to die in a way that he considered cowardly, he'd be turning in his grave  

Elisabeth Hollow:

He's very self-centered(even more that Vokun, if that's possible.) If he's in danger, and using someone as a human shield could save him, he'd do it. He doesn't care about the consequences as long as they don't kill him or harm him. So....yea. In other words he's a self-centered a******.


EVERYONE: Ignore the crappiness of this post. I had writers block

This post has been edited by King Of Beasts: Feb 2 2013, 06:27 PM

Pls no ban mods I'm sorry

This post has been edited by King Of Beasts: Jun 30 2018, 08:34 AM

I love your explanation of Vokun in your comment thanks. That does tell a lot about him that I hadn’t picked up yet, thank you!

I love how they gawked at Janus for breezing past the buttons they were unable to activate, lol. Still, this one passage had me rolling, especially after all their trouble escaping the ruin and worrying about Hastrel throughout:



Awesome Write!

This post has been edited by mALX: Feb 2 2013, 07:38 PM

I was giggling this whole chapter! I hated when the buttons didn't work. Good job for someone who has writer's block!

Oh, those traps sure sound familiar! Damn confusing buttons. Something tells me that for Westley, ‘patience’ is simply two four letter words glued together.

What a loot score! An ancient Ayleid carrot!

A real chuckle at the end to realize Hastrel was safely outside.

mALX: 



The funny thing about it is Hastrel knows how to use all of thise buttons too. He fled the ruin shortly after everyone split up(he pulled himself out of the water when nobody was lokking and waited for everyone to go away from the entrance. Thanks for reading, I appreciate it   

Elisabeth Hollow: I still haeve wriers block. It's annoying  

The butons in the ruin  Westley was exploring got stuck, and he lost his patience with it. He doest have much experiece with Aylied ruins either. The only other Aylied ruin he's been in was Miscarcand, and he wasnt very happy about going there. If you've done the main quest, you'll know why    Thanks for reading   

Acadian:  

That actually happened to me in game. I walked into an Aylied ruin(I forget the name) with about....100 lockpicks. I found a big Aylied cask, and thought "well there must be something good in here!" the lock was very hard. I only had one lockpick left when I managed to finally open the damn thing. And guess what was in it.

A GODDAMN CARROT!

I was so pissed off that I turned off the Xbox and went to watch TV

Thanks for reading my story   

Everyone: Ive decided it would be interesting if I played my villain for this story on skyrim. I also think its a good way to get into Vokun's head to see what he's thinking, explore his personality more, and see what everything is like from his PoV. If you'd like to see a screen, just ask.

Also, I'm still cursed with writer's block, so I'm sorry if this chapter is confusing and terrible

Thanks for reading this when it was active guys

This post has been edited by King Of Beasts: Jun 30 2018, 08:34 AM

The above two quotes nearly killed me laughing, but the section from Vokun’s point of view was heartbreaking. That is twice you’ve made me feel bad for Vokun, regardless of knowing what he’s done. Awesome Write!


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So Vokun is just insane Wow.

He's a bit more than just insane. He belongs in sheogoraths realm .

To top they he's extremely bitter and vengeful, so that doesn't help his insanity situation, and he's very violent.

Bad combo

He also suffers from Post-Traumatic stress disorder.

This post has been edited by King Of Beasts: Feb 15 2013, 06:33 AM