 The Tale Of Jerrick, Prologue |
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| Shinnok |
 Apr 7 2007, 12:40 AM
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This is my first Fan Fic so be brutally honest please.
________________________________________________________________________________ ____________ The cold rain wiped the blood off my face. I felt stained by the death of others, for death should not be feared all things die but it is the one that causes death who should feared. I've faced death before, and im lucky i've come out with nothing worse than a few scars. I start to remember how it all started. The Drama that is my life. |
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| jack cloudy |
Apr 7 2007, 09:33 AM
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 Master  Joined: 11-February 06 From: In a cold place. |
Well, right now there is storywise not much to comment on because it is a short prologue. I'll keep from commenting till you've posted the next update. So far, it appears we're dealing with someone who has issues over his own killing. Those characters are always very interesting to read about if they're done right. There are a few small grammar mistakes here and there, but nothing serious enough to get angry about. Why, I bet I've made a few mistakes in this post already.
Anyway, continue whenever you want.  -------------------- Fabulous hairneedle attack! I'm gonna be bald before I hit twenty.
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| Shinnok |
Apr 7 2007, 03:55 PM
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Thank you Jack for the positive reinforcement. Im just waiting till midday to see how people comment. Then I'll start writing the real story.
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| minque |
Apr 7 2007, 04:39 PM
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 Wise Woman  Joined: 11-February 05 From: Where I can watch you!! |
Ah! A new writer! Welcome to the fan-fic-forum, and after what I´ve read so far you have a nice start...I would like you to continue with your story....
Go for it Shinnok! -------------------- Chomh fada agus a bhionn daoine ah creiduint in aif�iseach, leanfaidh said na n-aingniomhi a choireamh (Voltaire)
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| The Metal Mallet |
Apr 7 2007, 05:01 PM
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 Master Joined: 18-June 06 From: Kitchener, ON, Canada |
Well, since it seems like you're seeking comments, I guess I'll give you one. I need to see more than one paragraph to give you a fair comment on your writing or story or content, etc. I read every single fan fic that's one this forum (well I guess I don't read the a lot of the stuff that came out before I arrived here) and I often comment on them, so don't worry about me not commenting on your story. I was just holding out for more substance.
So, continue, then I'll give you a "real" comment!  Welcome to the forums! -------------------- I am currently a Writer in The Order of Schola.
Official Fan Fiction Forum "Commentasaurus" "This body, holding me makes me feel eternal. All this pain is an illusion" - Parabola (Tool) "This here ain't called boasting, it's called truthin' " - Mango Kid (Danko Jones) |
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| Shinnok |
Apr 7 2007, 05:20 PM
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Thank you all. Im going to take Metal Mallets advice and write the real story as soon as possible.
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| minque |
Apr 7 2007, 05:22 PM
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Wise Woman Joined: 11-February 05 From: Where I can watch you!! |
QUOTE(Shinnok @ Apr 7 2007, 06:20 PM)  Thank you all. Im going to take Metal Mallets advice and write the real story as soon as possible. Yup! Do so....Mallie is always right, so you will be wise to follow his advice! You´ll do just fine! -------------------- Chomh fada agus a bhionn daoine ah creiduint in aif�iseach, leanfaidh said na n-aingniomhi a choireamh (Voltaire)
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