 Gorgoth, The beginning, The starting of Gorgoth's story |
| Protoss2007 |
 Apr 24 2006, 04:41 PM
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I was walking into a village all the people around me were avoiding me because I'm part of the Comonna Tong. I could see the fear in there eyes they were just whighhting for which person i would take or which place i would seal from frist, I just kept on walking then out of no where this guy appers and says to me "HI, nice armor what kind is that?" I said to him "it is glass armor" then he said "so why is everyone scard of you i dont see what is so scary about you" then I said " because I am part of Comonna Tong." then the man just kept on going I felt like I had a freind for once becuase noone has talk to me ever sence I joined the damn Comonna Tong. At the end of the day I made it to the hills where I stayed for the night.
The next day I left my camp and started heading north to Ghost gate. *Posting finish later* This post has been edited by Protoss2007: May 1 2006, 04:27 PM -------------------- Gorgoth , raids villages and kills people for fun. Rob's stores for spare time. ;)
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| DarkHunter |
Apr 24 2006, 04:42 PM
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 Mouth  Joined: 10-April 06 From: Balmora, what was the Council Club... |
Cool, finish it then I'll enjoy reading it!
-------------------- A skull, some blood, and a flying mace. Not much to work with. ~Imperial Legion Captian.
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| Protoss2007 |
Apr 24 2006, 04:46 PM
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i'll finish it soon thanks for the tip.
 -------------------- Gorgoth , raids villages and kills people for fun. Rob's stores for spare time. ;)
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| treydog |
Apr 26 2006, 04:58 PM
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 Master  Joined: 13-February 05 From: The Smoky Mountains |
A good start. Might want to run it through a spell check and do a little proof-reading. Overall, it has an interesting feel. Might also give us a hint of the narrator's mission, motivation, etc. Even if you don't directly say- "I was here to do X," you can still foreshadow with- "I didn't really care for towns; they reminded me that I was an outcast. But I wouldn't be staying long- just long enough to take care of some business."
-------------------- The dreams down here aren't broken, nah, they're walkin' with a limp...
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| Protoss2007 |
May 1 2006, 04:28 PM
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Retainer Joined: 19-April 06 |
thanks it will be done soon i just dont get around to this that much lol it should be done with in the nexted two weeks.
  -------------------- Gorgoth , raids villages and kills people for fun. Rob's stores for spare time. ;)
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| Protoss2007 |
May 8 2006, 07:25 PM
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sorry guys dont think i will finish this soon sorry just too busy to type the rest!!
 ttyl i am hardly ever on this any more  -------------------- Gorgoth , raids villages and kills people for fun. Rob's stores for spare time. ;)
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