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~Jalnos~
post Apr 13 2008, 08:46 PM
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Hey guys, I completely forgot about this place! Seen as my first fan-fic is pretty much dead, I feel it appropriate to start a new one. Plus, reading over it I'm not so happy with it. But I'm glad I found this place again, because I love reading fan-fics about such a great game. Anywho, onto the story:


The orange, setting sun hits my face, a smile playing on my lips, the green trees swaying in the gentle wind. The water beside me trickles gently, my fingers slightly dipped in the stream, the current giving a tiny push that just relaxes me. I look around, my eyes just opening and adjusting to the glare of the setting sun. Sitting on the nearby beach, a book open by her face, is my wife. She smiles, as my chair sits just by the stream, ever so slowly sliding down the river bank. Then, I slip, and fall into the river, my face splashing against the cold water, and back into reality.

My head is brought out of the freezing water, to meet no breeze, or setting sun. Just a cold, dirty interragation cell. The imperial guard holds the back of my head, and slams my face back in the water, that chills my face, and soaks my long hair into rat-tails.

"Who was working with you!" he shouts angrily, my head now above the water again. He pulls me up to the point where I am standing, and stares me in the eye. He glares at me with hatred, as I get my breath back. "Well? Who!" he shouts again.

"I swear! It was just me! Nobody else!" I tell him, water still in my throat. I look straight at him, in the eye. I see him frown, then throw me to the ground again.

"He's telling the truth. Bring him to the judge." The imperial guard says to the younger imperial standing by the edge of the cell with a long sigh. The guard takes his helmet off, and throws it to the ground.
"How do you know?" the other asks, whilst walking slowly away from the cell with the guard.
"His eyes. He had honest eyes. Get the jailor to take him up to the judge." The guard replied to the young imperial. He nods, and hurries off. The guard looks back at me, and walks out of the room.

I walk up to the locked cell door, and put my hand on the cold metal, wondering what my fate before the judge will be.

Soon, I hear the reinforced door at the end of the corridor creek open, and a patter of gentle footsteps down the corridor. I expect to be met by the jailor, but instead an all too farmiliar Khajiit. He looks at me, a smile on his furry face. He jiggles a lockpick in the lock, and withing about two seconds the lock clicks open.

"Come on. You haven't much time" he told me, hurrying me out of the cell. He runs to the window at the end of the corridor, and knocks in out in one swift punch. We climb out, just as the door clicks open, the jailor coming to pick me up, only to be met with an empty cell. We run, and hide by a tree.

"Nice to see you" he says with a chuckle, as we hug to celebrate our escape.




As always, C&C welcome.


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post Apr 22 2008, 10:24 PM
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absorbing - you have learned to break the stories up into readable sections rather than pages of uninterupted splurge goodjob.gif
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~Jalnos~   Escaper   Apr 13 2008, 08:46 PM
Olen   Good start. Certainly pleanty of potential for th...   Apr 14 2008, 09:57 AM
~Jalnos~   Thanks. Next bit: "Thanks for not ratting me...   Apr 14 2008, 09:29 PM
~Jalnos~   Part 3: We jump down from the trees, quietly land...   Apr 16 2008, 08:04 PM
~Jalnos~   No more comments/criticism? Part 4: I silently c...   Apr 17 2008, 08:13 PM
jack cloudy   I like the tricks those two keep pulling. They...   Apr 17 2008, 08:31 PM
~Jalnos~   True, but also in Oblivion if you summon something...   Apr 17 2008, 09:00 PM
jack cloudy   So all the guards are forced to swallow a 'con...   Apr 17 2008, 09:06 PM
~Jalnos~   Heh, you never know! Anyway, Part 5: "C...   Apr 18 2008, 11:10 AM
~Jalnos~   I woke up first, as usual. I look at the clock on ...   Apr 20 2008, 04:15 PM
treydog   Good descriptions and creative action. As for are...   Apr 23 2008, 09:01 PM
~Jalnos~   Thanks Treydog, recently I did notice that, but I ...   Apr 24 2008, 08:33 AM
jack cloudy   One thing I noticed, the encounter with the bandit...   Apr 25 2008, 09:19 PM
~Jalnos~   My eyes bolted open once I realised what time it w...   Apr 26 2008, 09:44 PM
paragenic   "All I'm trying to say, is that.. is tha...   Apr 27 2008, 03:18 PM
jack cloudy   Mini Oblivion gates? This actually...makes sense. ...   Apr 26 2008, 10:50 PM
~Jalnos~   Thanks for the replies. Part 9: "I think I ...   Apr 27 2008, 05:43 PM
The Metal Mallet   Your troop of thieves are quite the lively bunch. ...   Apr 28 2008, 09:26 PM
~Jalnos~   Thanks. You'll see why the Dark Elf is useful ...   Apr 29 2008, 09:09 PM
jack cloudy   Lessee, I see multiple styles of thief here. The m...   Apr 30 2008, 08:50 PM
~Jalnos~   Hey guys, sorry I haven't updated. Been pretty...   May 24 2008, 10:30 PM


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