 Meera's Dream, One girl's dream... |
| seerauna |
 Jul 2 2008, 12:06 PM
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Hey all,
I've been reading the stories here for awhile and finally decided to post my own. Please I want feedback and critcism. Even a "hey, good work" is good, but it doesn't help me write better stories. It is a short story, but I am working on my series now. Yes, I am another writer who has been inspired by treydog.  -------------------- The arrow flies to kill
From the string it races It’s only moments until, It strikes. Shadow in Darkness- My first ongoing FanFic! |
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| redsrock |
Jul 2 2008, 08:52 PM
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Nice use of irony at the end, I like that. Because this a "short" story I won't say much in terms of plot and whatever, because you wrote it short on purpose. There were a few awkward sentences, so if you'd like me to point them out just tell me.
Also, this new series, is it already finished or something? -------------------- *Hey everyone, TES Fiction is looking to revamp its very talented group of writers. So, if you love to write (TES or non-TES), come on over! Whether its stories, poems, song lyrics, etc, it doesn't matter!*
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seerauna Meera's Dream Jul 2 2008, 12:06 PM
seerauna Meera’s Dream
Meera stared at the sky and sighed.... Jul 2 2008, 12:08 PM
seerauna
Nice use of irony at the end, I like that. Becau... Jul 4 2008, 04:40 AM Lord Revan I can't say anything that Reds hasn't stat... Jul 2 2008, 10:13 PM seerauna Yea reds, please point them out to me. I might be ... Jul 3 2008, 01:42 AM redsrock
Does this mean that in order to fly she would ha... Jul 3 2008, 02:16 AM treydog Nicely done. In a very short space, we learn enou... Jul 3 2008, 02:35 PM |
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