Meera's Dream, One girl's dream... Options

[seerauna]

Hey all,
I've been reading the stories here for awhile and finally decided to post my own. Please I want feedback and critcism. Even a "hey, good work" is good, but it doesn't help me write better stories. It is a short story, but I am working on my series now. Yes, I am another writer who has been inspired by treydog.

[redsrock]

Nice use of irony at the end, I like that. Because this a "short" story I won't say much in terms of plot and whatever, because you wrote it short on purpose. There were a few awkward sentences, so if you'd like me to point them out just tell me.

Also, this new series, is it already finished or something?

[seerauna]

Nice use of irony at the end, I like that. Because this a "short" story I won't say much in terms of plot and whatever, because you wrote it short on purpose. There were a few awkward sentences, so if you'd like me to point them out just tell me.

Also, this new series, is it already finished or something?

In answer to that question, no it's not finished. I'm finishing up the second chapter. Just was dealing with writer's block. This was a nice distraction. I'm writing it again, so expect it in a couple days, or after the weekend's over.