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Lord Veneficus
post Jul 7 2008, 05:52 AM
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Hey you guys. This is my new fan-fic. Comments and critiques would be the most welcome. smile.gif Oh, and don't tell me this is cliche', as I already know that. Just give me some pointers and advice, please.
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“Praise be to Lord Vile and the blood patron, Molag,” Acerbus whispered in the darkness as he stood from the obsidian pedestal in the chapel. The glass windows were stained with the color of blood. The moonlight poured through them, casting the crimson rays all across the room, bathing him in the light. He turned and headed for the hidden trap door into his home below the chapel.

Acerbus Occisor was born an Imperial. His hair was as black as the Void itself and it fell to his wide shoulders. His eyes were of the deepest and darkest crimson, seduction and cunning flowed from them. His face was pale and very gaunt due to the lack of blood he drunk. A long, crooked scar ran diagonally down his back. Acerbus wore a tight black leather suit and a dark sapphire blue hooded cape.

He climbed down the ancient oak ladder and into the cave that surrounded him. The walls of the old place had fresh pickaxe cuts into them for more room and walking space. The amount of recruits who had joined the Esoteric Fangs had stretched the cavern to several levels below the chapel. It was an astonishing amount of vampires in one location. Over three thousand had joined the guild over a one hundred year span. But a thousand are there under the chapel, as it is the place where the guild was founded.

The guild of assassins has prospered over the span of one hundred years and now rivals the power and fear of the Dark Brotherhood presence in Cyrodiil. The Fangs have been taking most contracts from the Dark Brotherhood, almost crippling the ancient guild from under its foundations.

Acerbus nodded at the vampiric children roaming about the halls of the expansive cavern. The uppermost level of the cave was the market, with several other sections ranging from fletchers to bladesmiths and general goods to large bottles filled to the brim with human blood, ever so sweet blood. He moved towards the back wall of the top level and to the vendor sandwiched in between two larger stalls.

“Hi, Peter. What do you have with you today?” Acerbus asked with questioning eyes. The vendor, a gray headed Nord taller than his stall, stood there swaying to some music that no one but he could hear.

“I have just come back from High Rock. It seems that they have been performing illegal experiments and doing research there. I was lucky enough to steal a few books from their alchemy labs. Here have a look,” he answered politely. Acerbus could tell from the tone of Peter’s voice that he had just recently fed, as he is usually irritable after a missed feeding. Acerbus grabbed the red leather bound book and began to flip through the pages. The script it was written in was a beautiful one, curvy letters and the perfect slant of them. Acerbus immediately recognized it as a woman’s; no man could write like that.

He finished flipping through the first one and put it down. He picked another up, this one was bound in a blue cotton cover and was embedded with blood red rubies. Acerbus opened it up to the first page.

Porphyric Hemophilia: The Vampires

He began to read it. It told of the many different clans of vampires of Tamriel and their abilities and weaknesses. This was the perfect book to further increase his studies of his kin. He looked up from the book and queried, “I’ll take this one. How does twenty septims sound?”

Peter nodded and Acerbus placed the gold on the table and walked away. He moved downstairs to his room and began to drink a bottle of blood, all the while reading his newly acquired book.

EDIT: Changed seductive to seduction smile.gif

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post Aug 10 2008, 10:31 PM
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Chapter Nine

Acerbus had finished telling Jena his dream. It wasn’t until then that he had noticed her figure. She was slender with a bit of muscle. Her face was another thing he noticed in the Welkynd stone light. It was angular, almost like an elf’s. Her lips were Her eyes were the same color of many of the vampires from Cyrodiil, but they were a lighter color. Her hair was a silky dark brown and it was in a ponytail that reached her bottom. Acerbus’ eyes were then again brought down on her shapely body.

But Acerbus quickly blinked his eyes, bringing him back to reality. He waited on a reply from Jena before he stood up.

Jena could feel immense pity for Acerbus, knowing what he has had to go through and all. “That’s terrible, Acerbus. Ralas is a power hungry honoured user, wanting nothing but blood spilled and tears shed just for his own benefit,” She consoled.

By that time, Octavian had been awakened due to the angry barks shooting from Fidelis. He sat up, rubbing his eyes and then he asked, “Wh-what’s goin’ on?”

“Nothing, it’s just Fidelis,” Acerbus answered. He looked at the door, examining the cracks in it and noticing the darkness outside. “The night is here. We need to go, now. Gather our things.” He stood from his bedroll and began roll it back up. He placed it in his pack and went into one of the cavern’s hallways to change into his black leather armor.

Everything was packed and ready to go rather quickly as they didn’t have much to start with. As they headed out the door, Acerbus nearly forgot about Fidelis. “Wait! I need to get the wolf,” He said as he walked towards the rickety cage. Acerbus said a calm spell while tying a sturdy knot in a lengthy bit of rope. He took the top from the cage and put the rope around the wolf’s neck and then he picked him up and placed him on the ground. “C’mon, Fidelis.” The dog obeyed and began to trot in front of him.

They left the cave, not bothering close the door, and began their trek to the city of Cheydinhal.

Octavian had been a good way away from the group, scouting ahead for bandits and other things. Jena had not been joking or anything as of late, which worried Acerbus but not enough for him to be fretting over it. She had become a lot more serious due to the recent happenings.

“Are you alright, Jena?” Acerbus asked, slightly tugging at Fidelis’ leash. The wolf’s pure white coat was beautiful in the moonlight.

Jena turned her head towards him and said, “Yes, I’m okay.” She couldn’t bring herself to say what she had wanted to for so long, as she knew not whether Acerbus felt the same way. Jena cursed at herself for postponing her announcement. I am such a procrastinator. She thought to herself.

Acerbus saw Octavian jogging back to the group: “There’s nothing up ahead except a small village. It has an inn that we could stay at,” He panted. Acerbus nodded and began to hurry his pace down the Red Ring Road.

They arrived at the Red Ring Tavern, a small inn that could hold no more than twenty people at one time. There was hardly any noise coming from inside the place, just the way Acerbus liked it.

He led Fidelis behind the inn and tied him to a wood chopping stump near the southwestern window. “You keep quiet, understood?” He asked, petting the wolf on the head before turning and heading towards Octavian and Jena.

“I’ll go and pay for one room. We need to save as much money as we can, which is why we will be sharing a room for the day,” Acerbus said, waiting on a reply from the both of them.

They nodded and Acerbus entered the room, closing the door quietly as to not wake anyone who had fallen asleep up. He strode down the short flight of stairs and up to the dingy bar at the back of the room. Acerbus saw the innkeeper and said, “I’d like one room, please.” He handed the man ten septims and the man nodded and handed him a key. Acerbus went outside, gesturing Jena and Octavian to enter behind him.

They entered the tavern silently, opened the door into their room, and closed the door. It creaked loudly and when it shut, the lock clicked noisily.

The room wasn’t terrible for ten drakes. It had a modest bed for one with a thick cloth bedspread dyed an ugly grey, a small pine dresser with several of the knobs missing, and a cracked and dented table with ancient looking chairs. Acerbus looked over the room, indifferent towards it. It was better than what he had at the guild, that’s for sure. He glanced over at Jena and stated, “You can sleep on the bed. Octavian and I will lay on the floor.”

Octavian shot a glare at Acerbus: “What?! I’ve been doing all the work and she gets to sleep on the bed?” He asked wildly. Acerbus met the glare with a penetrating stare that could stop even the most violent creatures in their tracks.

“You and I will sleep on the floor. She’s a lady, Octavian, not a wench,” Acerbus replied, disgusted with the lack of manners coming from Octavian’s mouth.

Octavian huffed, saying, “Alright, whatever you say.” He laid down on his bedroll. Acerbus looked over at Jena, gave her a polite smile and winked. She let off a giggle and laid down on the bed. Acerbus was the last to bed; he was checking all of his gear to make sure he had everything.


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Lord Veneficus   The Vampire Prince   Jul 7 2008, 05:52 AM
Steve   This story definetally has me interested. I like y...   Jul 7 2008, 05:09 PM
Lord Veneficus   I'll have it in the next chapter, don't yo...   Jul 7 2008, 05:56 PM
Lord Veneficus   Chapter Two It was around dawn and Acerbus began ...   Jul 7 2008, 08:12 PM
Lord Veneficus   Chapter Three In the dark dining hall, the chatte...   Jul 8 2008, 07:27 PM
Lord Veneficus   Chapter Four “Yes, I do. What exactly is in that ...   Jul 10 2008, 03:43 PM
Lord Veneficus   Chapter Five “But Ralas, you must understand. I c...   Jul 11 2008, 11:10 PM
minque   hah you made the vamps sympathetic! That's...   Jul 11 2008, 11:16 PM
Lord Veneficus   Man... I mean woman, I never thought I'd see y...   Jul 12 2008, 04:33 PM
minque   Man... I mean woman, I never thought I'd see ...   Jul 12 2008, 11:28 PM
Lord Veneficus   Oh, I see now.   Jul 13 2008, 01:14 AM
Lord Veneficus   Oh and about the poem, I know it might not be very...   Jul 17 2008, 11:22 PM
minque   Yup...I do like this one and I like Acerbus...hehe...   Jul 18 2008, 07:22 PM
Lord Veneficus   Please, please. Call me V.   Jul 18 2008, 10:55 PM
Lord Veneficus   Chapter Seven Acerbus was heading towards the tra...   Jul 19 2008, 05:49 PM
The Bean   I like this Mr Veneficus. I like this a lot. You...   Jul 19 2008, 05:58 PM
Lord Veneficus   Thanks, Mr. Bean. Wow, awesome name, by the way. :...   Jul 19 2008, 07:49 PM
Lord Veneficus   Chapter Eight “Menyandasil? That is mighty far fr...   Aug 3 2008, 04:56 AM
minque   Yup....still like this vampie! Good work here ...   Aug 22 2008, 05:49 PM
Lord Veneficus   Chapter Ten Acerbus woke from his sleep, feeling ...   Sep 14 2008, 09:26 PM
Lord Veneficus   Chapter Eleven Acerbus had been very quiet since ...   Sep 29 2008, 03:21 AM
redsrock   I don't think the "which was only a few...   Sep 30 2008, 01:08 AM
Lord Veneficus   Chapter Twelve Acerbus and Jena sat at the back ...   Nov 5 2008, 01:56 AM
Lord Veneficus   Chapter Thirteen Inside the warm castle of Cheyd...   Dec 15 2008, 04:22 PM
redsrock   Very nice, V. I don't have a whole lot say, ot...   Dec 15 2008, 04:35 PM
minque   Yes....this is getting better and better! I li...   Dec 20 2008, 12:30 AM
Lord Veneficus   Yes, mam! :P   Dec 20 2008, 09:06 PM


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