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Illydoor
post Mar 21 2009, 07:12 PM
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This is my first story that I've posted on the forums, it's not finished, so I'll probably be posting updates a bit sporadically throughout the year. It entails the story of young apprentice mage at the Arcane University, thrown into a world of mystery, murder and threat as the past returns and he is plunged headlong into it. I hope you like it...

~DAWNCASTER~

Prologue

Have you ever considered taking the dark and thorny path?

The voice was so sultry and alluring it made Magnus retch. Mysteriously dark, ominously sinister, like liquid poison running through his ears. The rich sound echoed off the thin walls of his house and filled the room with a soft, reverberating boom. Magnus shuddered.

It chuckled.

I know your type, boy, I know it well, but in a thousand years of painful existence I've never seen someone with so much…potential, as you.

Magnus did not dignify the compliment with a response. He was way past speaking, or even breathing for that matter. Abject fear had rendered him beyond speech or any comprehension at all of what was happening. He was utterly paralysed.

The thing chuckled malevolently again, a deep, sonorous rumble. It sensed his fear.

Speak! Only the foolish would summon me to their whim and not have the bravery to command me!

The voice rose suddenly and thunderously in volume, shaking the floor as if each syllable had the power to crush worlds at mere expression. The words echoed inside Magnus' head long after the monster had finished speaking, chilling him to the very core as icy trepidation laced the pit of stomach and his blood ran hot under his veins.

A low chuckling sounded once again.

I can feel your fear boy, your anxiety. It warms my essence, feeds my soul. Yet I can feel your power. I foresee great things for you, boy, great things.

Magnus remained silent, staring hard at the wooden floor beneath him and sweating feverishly.

Hmph. You have summoned me, and in return for the sacrifice of your soul, I shall see your ascension to greatness and immortality, if you should so accept my divine guidance. What say you, boy?

Finally, Magnus, roused from his terrified stupor, managed to stammer a few words out.

"Th-thank you, m-my master..." Magnus winced slightly as he noticed with great discomfort how weak his voice sounded, how insignificant it was compared to that of the monster.

The thing grunted, as if sizing him up. For a moment silence gripped the room, choking and stifling.

Hmm. Yes, indeed, you will do well. Come, young Magnus Dawncaster, I have much to teach you…

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She was miles away, but the flames were still there. The pain still lingered like a terrible after-image, haunting and chilling, flashing every time on the backs of her eyelids whenever she closed them. She wished them away in frantic desperation, but the insatiable blood-thirst of the red flames couldn't be quenched, couldn't be stopped.

They burned brightly, burnishing the night-sky a tarnished red.

No matter how hard she tried, she could not shut them out. Their fiery gaze burned through anything, destroying, ruining, killing.

And still they burned. Never to cease, visions of fire and destruction, of vivid redness and anger. Elsa watched her world burn in her eyes over and over again. An eternal nightmare she could not wake from.

Hot tears stung her eyes as she ran, the dancing embers hot on her heels, their heat prickling and their roar terrifying, cackling and howling with malicious glee.

Pain engulfed her, clouding her mind with agony. She had no strength to scream, every iota of her energy spent entirely on just keeping awake. Yet she couldn't stop running. The flames chased her.

Branches and leaves whipped her face, but she ignored their sting. Roots and stray logs threatened to trip her, but she persevered, scrabbling quickly to her feet when she fell, a new, fresh gash on her person whenever she got up again.

All the while, the incessant burning continued in her ears. If only she could get away, escape, just anywhere where the flames could not reach her and her precious, precious cargo. In her heart she knew there was nowhere, the illusory flames that cursed her mind would stay with her to the abyss and back. They would burn in the darkness, in her dreams and sleep, they would smoulder on until death took her, and even then they would follow in her the afterlife, haunting her spirit.

She kept running, and fatigue dragged at her like an iron weight strapped to her soul, though she had lost the feeling in her wearisome legs a long time ago. She knew she couldn't keep it up forever, and already she felt her pace slowing, her feet falling heavily and stumbling amongst the dark undergrowth. She could tell she was at the end of her limits, her strength drained and her willpower spent. She knew soon she would fall, and the flames would catch up with her, devouring her in a swirling inferno of suffering and agony.

She ignored the icy pain that clawed at her consciousness and pressed on, finally breaking through the shadowy woods, forcing herself onwards on sheer determination alone.

She was nearly there. So close to being liberated from her haunted life, freedom from the ravenous flames at last. She only had to make it.

Through the writhing and hissing flames that consumed her mind's eye, the Arch-Mage's Tower loomed in to view. Its steep grey walls promised salvation and release from the pain.

Deep within the dark fire that raged inside her, a shadow of hope flickered, and with renewed vigour she fought away the flames for one last time, stumbling through the giant iron gates and scrabbling helplessly at the door.

Blackness began to seep into the corners of her eyes, and the flames began to deaden. Her breath slowed, and everything went into a time lapse, her movements sluggish and her vision blurred like a misty window.

She fought it, struggling to keep the flicker of hope in sight. She knew she was living on borrowed time. Any second now, death would take her, siezing her in it's inescapable grasp.

Through bleary eyes she saw the heavy wooden door creep open, and the Arch-Mage stood there, silhouetted in the yellow light that spilled from the open gap. Not able to keep herself up any longer, she slumped to the floor with a cry of supressed relief. The Arch-Mage ran to her immediately, holding her head in his hands and uttering inaudible words.

Darkness. It was beginning to consume her, her gaze narrowing as death prepared to embrace her, to finally make the flames stop. She beckoned the release.

With her last dying breath, she pushed something into the Arch-Mage's arms and whispered a final word before her world was plunged into blackness.

"Nathaniel..."

As he watched the life seep out of Elsa's eyes and her motionless body settle against the cold stone floor, Arch-Mage Honorius Greymane stood frozen in shock and grief, and in his hands a newborn baby began to cry.

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post Apr 25 2009, 11:08 PM
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Chapter III up, sorry for the delay again wink.gif.


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Illydoor   The Dawncaster Chronicles [Mages, Arcane University]   Mar 21 2009, 07:12 PM
The Bean   As with all your work I've read, excellent...   Mar 21 2009, 09:04 PM
Illydoor   Thanks Bean :D Part 2 is on its way! I really...   Mar 24 2009, 08:56 PM
The Bean   18th rule of writing, my friend. Never, ever say t...   Mar 24 2009, 09:24 PM
Illydoor   Here's the next part, sorry it's so late. ...   Apr 12 2009, 08:44 PM
Illydoor   Chapter I: A Decision to Make “Nathaniel! Pay...   Apr 12 2009, 08:45 PM
Illydoor   Edited. Does anyone think the first paragraph is t...   Apr 14 2009, 04:10 PM
Colonel Mustard   First paragraph seemed fine to me, not to wordy at...   Apr 14 2009, 10:50 PM
Illydoor   Ah the real reason Nathaniel hates the Arch-Mage i...   Apr 15 2009, 09:37 PM
Olen   This is shaping up well. I don't have any par...   Apr 17 2009, 12:19 PM
Illydoor   Thanks Olen, comments greatly appreciated :D. Here...   Apr 18 2009, 10:40 PM
Illydoor   Chapter II: A New Arrival By the time Nathaniel h...   Apr 18 2009, 10:56 PM
Olen   Well developed, you're getting this where its ...   Apr 19 2009, 01:28 PM
Illydoor   Thanks very much for the crit, Olen, when I wrote ...   Apr 19 2009, 05:03 PM
Illydoor   I've got to revise for a french exam that...   Apr 22 2009, 04:32 PM
Illydoor   Chapter III: The Exam Begins It was dark by the t...   Apr 25 2009, 11:05 PM
Silver   Chapter III up, sorry for the delay again ;). F...   Apr 26 2009, 12:43 AM
seerauna   Have to agree with Silver, a little delay won...   Apr 26 2009, 02:56 AM
Colonel Mustard   I can wait if it's this good, don't worry ...   Apr 26 2009, 07:47 AM
Illydoor   Many thanks to all for your comments, they're ...   Apr 26 2009, 07:21 PM
Colonel Mustard   I should hope it is Illy. I'm enjoying this.   Apr 26 2009, 09:18 PM
Illydoor   Parts have been edited; the next section where Nat...   May 2 2009, 07:58 PM
Illydoor   Chapter IV: Pass or Fail? The sun shone hotly on ...   May 2 2009, 10:58 PM
Illydoor   Sorry, it's a bit of a long one this time. Hop...   May 2 2009, 11:02 PM
Olen   A fine update, enjoyable to read and I'm left ...   May 3 2009, 09:34 PM
Illydoor   Thanks Olen. I do agree with your point about cond...   May 4 2009, 12:14 AM
Illydoor   Okay, a large portion of this text has been edited...   May 4 2009, 01:46 AM
Illydoor   The next chapter will hopefully be up tonight :D...   May 9 2009, 06:48 PM
Illydoor   Well, I've finally got it up, after much delet...   May 16 2009, 12:26 AM
Colonel Mustard   Oh dear... That was really well done, you know, a...   May 16 2009, 07:59 AM
seerauna   Have to echo Colonel Mustard there, oh dear... I h...   May 17 2009, 11:06 PM
Illydoor   Thanks Bean and Seerauna :D.   May 19 2009, 08:20 PM
Illydoor   I'm going to France for a week, so in my absen...   May 22 2009, 04:47 PM
Olen   Good update, I like the extra time you're taki...   May 22 2009, 05:26 PM
Illydoor   Hellooo people, I'm back and well which means ...   May 28 2009, 07:04 PM
Colonel Mustard   Aha, you're back. *Rubs hands together* Eeex...   May 29 2009, 11:38 AM
seerauna   Can't wait for an update...   May 29 2009, 05:16 PM
Colonel Mustard   I am in concurance.   May 29 2009, 05:47 PM
Illydoor   Hehe, guess I need to start writing more then. Her...   May 30 2009, 11:23 PM
seerauna   *gasp* You can't leave us with this cliffie...   May 31 2009, 12:33 AM
Illydoor   Ok then seerauna, I won't leave you waiting mu...   Jun 2 2009, 09:53 PM
Illydoor   Okay, the next part will be up tomorrow I promise,...   Jun 7 2009, 11:26 PM
Illydoor   Okay then, here it is, the last part is unedited, ...   Jun 9 2009, 12:20 AM
Olen   Good couple of updates, his revenge is certainly a...   Jun 9 2009, 10:35 AM
Illydoor   Thanks Olen, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I agree ...   Jun 10 2009, 08:08 PM
Illydoor   Okay, sorry about the wait guys, exams and crap ha...   Jun 21 2009, 09:46 AM
Illydoor   I'm sorry about the wait guys, with all the en...   Jul 7 2009, 05:58 PM
Illydoor   It has been edited :D.   Jul 9 2009, 10:38 PM
Olen   I remain fascinated to discover what this plot for...   Jul 10 2009, 10:43 AM
LadyTaurucis   Ooh. I just read through this whole thing, and it...   Jul 11 2009, 08:07 PM
Colonel Mustard   Another very enjoyable, and very tense part, Illy....   Jul 11 2009, 09:11 PM
seerauna   Agreed Colonel. I'm sure getting caught is pro...   Jul 12 2009, 05:31 PM
Illydoor   Oops. Always thought 'noisome' meant noi...   Aug 5 2009, 08:19 PM
Illydoor   Here's Chapter 10: Chapter X: A Locked Door ...   Aug 6 2009, 12:01 AM
Colonel Mustard   Well about time! :P Another enjoyable part he...   Aug 9 2009, 12:09 PM
Illydoor   Yes sorry bout' the wait. You'd think I wo...   Aug 13 2009, 01:24 PM
Olen   Good update, do we get any more soon? hadn’t been...   Aug 29 2009, 10:04 AM
Illydoor   Has been a long time, but I've had renewed ins...   Oct 27 2009, 11:03 PM
Olen   Good to see this is one the go again. A good upda...   Oct 29 2009, 11:32 AM
Colonel Mustard   Ah, an update. Hurrah! Good job here, Illy, ...   Oct 29 2009, 12:08 PM
Illydoor   Wow. Been a while since I've been to these for...   Mar 27 2010, 10:12 PM
mALX   It will take me a while to catch up, this past wee...   Mar 28 2010, 02:38 PM


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