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Winter Wolf
post Mar 28 2010, 12:55 AM
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Hi folks!!

I have finally gotten around to posting here at Chorrol. This story first appeared at the unnameable forum but I only managed to post the first chapter before the site fell head first off the cliff.

Hope you enjoy and dont forget to shout out any nitpicks you see.


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CHAPTER 1 –


A Bravil watchman moved along the rampart in the gathering dark, his footsteps sounding on the wooden landing. Flickering light from the wall sconce danced across his heavy armor and surcoat, outlining a face that was crowded under lines of tiredness. Leaning over the railing he glanced downwards.

The dilapidated shacks of the town below pushed upwards through the dark like a set of broken teeth, the jagged eaves clashing against each other in the impoverished silence. The watchman’s eyes scanned the backdrop for any sign of alarm, but few signs of movement could be found.

A moment later a shadow detached from the left hand wall and another guard appeared beside the rail.

“Well met, my friend, how goes it?” he asked.

“Four bells and all is well,” the first man replied and stifled a yawn.

The replacement guard nodded. “Yes, it does seem as quiet as a church mouse out there. But as we know, that always the most dangerous time of all. The town may look like a slumbering animal, but the heartbeat is still ticking.”

“Yes, do keep a sharp eye out,” he noted, glad to be moving away slowly.

“Sleep tight, darling.”


**

The night was warm and humid. Tucked within their beds most of the citizens tossed fitfully in their sleep. It was the moment just before dawn when dark dreams gave way to the memories of youth, sweet impressions that spoke of a former time. Outside the mullioned casement footsteps could be heard, the sound mingling with the faint, snatched cries of the stall sellers that drifted across from the other side of town. The air was heavy with expectation, panting like a giant hound.

A figure headed down a quiet lane. Soft light teased across his pointed ears and dark outfit. It framed a neatly folded letter that poked surreptitiously out of one tiny pocket.

In part it read:

QUOTE
Oh beloved assassin of the Dark Brotherhood, let us, the ruling council, grant you this most important mission. We have word that the old fool, Adamus Phillida, has finally taken up his residence at the City Watch barracks in the southern town of Leyawiin.

The pest of the Brotherhood has made the one fatal mistake of thinking that we would ever forget his past. Fate has now delivered him into our dark loving embrace, an opportunity that we cannot let slip by.

Dear brother, we need you to pay him a visit and make sure that his new home also becomes his permanent place of retirement.

Your loving benefactor-
The ruling council of the Black Hand.


Aradroth smiled to himself. It felt good to be wanted again. Clutched like a greedy piglet to the teat he could feel the warm milk of the Night Mother running down his lips and throat, a gluttonous thrill that was paramount to death in its intensity. Her loving bulk provided all the sustenance that he needed, a clan love that would forever define who he was and leave the cretin world around him living in a bland, colorless land of emptiness.

Opening the front gate he stepped outside.

A member of the Bravil watch stood at the far end of the front bridge. Clad in sooty armor turned dark by the cloaking shadows of morning, he reminded Aradroth of that futile blockade that sheltered upon the edge of Kvatch.

As a man accustomed to studying the fortification and defence of people he was paid to kill, the small assassin was always mystified by the false assumption that the cutting of the bridge ropes would protect and seal off the town from the waiting horde of Mehrunes Dagon. Just how many people did the foolish Count of Bravil think would be able to slip unannounced through the secret tunnel to the tower of Fathis Aren? And how many would die under the harsh conditions of a siege?

The Bravil guardsman did not notice the assassin until it was too late. Spinning around his gloved hand came to a belated rest on the pommel of his steel long sword.

“Oh Aradroth, it’s you,” the guard said in shock, his heart beating rapidly inside his steel chest. “I didn’t realize that you were there.”

The Bosmer assassin stood silent and cold, a contrast to the humidity around him. Small and slight; his gray eyes shone with a feverish light from the shadows of his black hood.

“Sorry Gladius,” he replied, his voice soft and raspy, “I didn’t mean to scare you.”

The meandering eyes of the guardsman looked the assassin up and down.

“Are you out on a morning hunt, sir?” he asked, putting his hand out.

Aradroth shook his head. “No, not this time,” he answered, slipping two septims into the guard’s hand. “I am taking a little trip to Skingrad.”

“Are you there on business or do you have family or friends?” he asked curiously, pocketing the coins.

“I have enrolled myself into therapy,” came back the simple reply.

The guard’s eyes blinked. “Sorry?”

“I am hooking up with Else-Godhater and a few others. We are doing a seminar on ‘Righting past wrongs.’ I have decided that it is important to open up on those deep and personal issues. It revitalizes the spirit when you learn to love again.”

Confusion spread across the guardsman’s face. His mouth opened and closed like a fish. “Are you having trouble, sir?”

The assassin smiled. “I don’t know. I feel isolated and disconnected. Like something is not quite right.”

“Well that is great that you are doing something about it. I have always felt that the step to join the Bravil watch was the most important one I ever took.”

Aradroth paused. “Yeah, I suppose you are right. I envy that sense of connection you seem to have around you with every little thing. Especially the way someone has committed a crime on the other side of Cyrodiil, yet you still are able to pinpoint them exactly. It must be some form of clairvoyance.”

The guard seemed taken aback. “Have you noticed that? I have always thought that it was our commitment to duty that made us rise above the call of duty.”

The assassin headed away. “Yeah, maybe you are right. That is the reason I am joining therapy. I am hoping to regain my balance with the world again.” With a smirk he added, “Who knows? When I am finished I might end up looking just like you.”

“Well, good luck with that endeavour, my friend,” Gladius called out in blissful ignorance at the retreating figure.

Aradroth turned. “Care to place a wager on that?”


**


The road that headed to Leyawiin stretched out of sight as it weaved through the southern forests like a muddy snake.

His mind was still thinking cynically pleasing thoughts about the mediocrity in the world when he realized that something was wrong. Cursing bitterly for allowing himself to become sidetracked, his slate gray eyes quickly swept the sides of the grubby track.

The green foliage and tall swampy reeds around him looked normal enough, but something teased at the tattered edge of his senses, something indescribable. From his neck a salty bead of sweat slowly trickled downwards, running its meandering way over the lined folds of skin. As it hit his leather collar he realized what it was.

The landscape was quiet. Not a bird or insect could be heard.

The tall reeds on the left hand side suddenly exploded with movement and a large shape charged into the clearing. Brown and very large, the creature swiped at the Dark Brotherhood member with a fearsome claw.

Scampering backwards the assassin fell onto his rump, pain lancing his left hip where he struck a rock. His bow disappeared off to the side.

Towering over him the creature was massive, standing over seven feet tall, with a dark snout and coarse, bristling fur.

Fear spurred the prone elf to action at the next moment and the Bosmer opened his palm. Magic light coursed down the inside of his forearm, the magicka flowing like a river of light. The blue veins rippled down his fingers.

“Guulosh Torr,” he cried, and a purplish-black shape materialized to his right hand side.

The bear’s caramel eyes blinked in confusion and it paused in its attack. The coin of fate that spun with a decreasing speed finally caught a reflection of two opponents that hung suspended in time. Slowly, beyond thought, control or even reason, the creature’s eyes turned and focused on the skeletal guardian.

The relieved assassin watched as the bear charged forward with a speed that defied its tremendous bulk and a vicious paw smacked into the undead. Taking the impact on its steel shield, the skeleton was thrown backward through the air, bits of bone from his shied arm flying in all directions. He landed far off to the side.

“Damn it,” muttered Aradroth as he rose quickly to his feet. Tiny spatters of mud were kicked up as he moved.

Reaching under his cloak he withdrew Cat’s Eye from its scabbard. Glowing runes danced up and down the hilt of the sword as it emerged into the morning air. The weight of the weapon felt reassuring in his grasp, a pull of energy that went deep down into his core.

Stepping forward the morning light ran along the elven designed hilt as it swung downwards. The sword bit hard and chunks of fur and blood disappeared past the edge of his vision. The next moment the shock enchantment of the weapon mauled just as hard, the assassin struggling to hold on as the sword coveted the gore and death of his adversary.

Roaring in horror the creature flung its broad head around and droplets of blood coated the assassin in a ghastly, decadent wine. A moment later a retaliatory claw smashed into the assassin’s leather shield. The impact threw Aradroth bouncing onto the road.

Spinning around him the world turned in crazy circles, a hundred stars dancing back and forth before his eyes.

Not again! he thought haphazardly as he looked down at the mud. Gritting against the pain Aradroth charged back to his feet and renewed the attack. From the other side of the road the Skeleton Guardian clanked over to aid him from the rear.

A minute later the booming sound of Azura’s Star resounded in his ears as the mountain of fur crashed to the ground.

Aradroth collapsed onto one knee beside it.

Breathing in ragged gasps he glanced across at the bear and then down at the abject state of his dark travelling cloak in disgust.

“Oh bull dust.....” he muttered.

On the other side of the road the skeletal axeman brought its remaining arm wide apart and hissed loudly. Aradroth could not tell if it made a victorious or mocking sound.

“Don’t you start,” he warned, pulling himself slowly to his feet.

The skeleton hissed at him again.

This post has been edited by Winter Wolf: Mar 29 2010, 04:52 PM


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Winter Wolf
post Apr 1 2010, 06:37 PM
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- Treydog.
Thanks for the kind support oh son of Trey! I am glad you enjoyed the therapy conversation. I didn't quite flow the way I was hoping but it did do the job of conveying the 'us against them' that will be the driving force behind the story. This is only the second fiction story I have ever tried to write so thanks with the help with my grammar. There is bound to be more!

-SubRosa.
The critique that you gave me at Beth gave me plenty of food for thought. smile.gif I really appreciate the time and effort you went to there. The start of the chapter had plenty of run on, so it did need to be fixed. Thanks! Favourite assassin??!!? Wow, thanks.

- Fiach.
Very kind of you to drop in and leave some kind words. Cheers!!
I would never dream of starting to write the main quest. If I did everybody would see how horrible my writing is when compared to SubRosa and Haute, lol. tongue.gif It is better to hide in the shadows like Aradroth.

-mALX.
Thanks for the awesome support mALX!! Both here and at Beth. You are the best. smile.gif
Chewing the heads off nails!!?? Wow, I think I've just realized why you have the warped sense of humor you do. It's the lead poisoning!! laugh.gif
I am glad you liked the 'greedy piglet to the teat' part. Thanks!! That was a lot of fun to write.

-Destri Melarg.
I really appreciate the pushing you have done to make me start my own thread. Although subtle, it is exactly what a lazy person like me needs. I am willing to bet that mALX and Haute would write more over breakfast on one morning than I would do in six months, lol. laugh.gif
The greedy piglet part was heaps of fun. It was actually the last part I completed on the chapter, the way it originally read was terrible and I kept coming back to it. I am glad that it finally hit the spot. Thanks!! smile.gif

-Haute ecole rider.
Cheers Haute and thanks for dropping in. Writing at the speed I do I feel like I am limping along like Julian!!

-Jackie Dice.
Awesome to have you here at Chorrol. Thanks for the support. Aradroth loves to poke fun at the 'establishment'. Cheers!!

-Olen.
Thanks for the help there with 7 / seven. Your eagle eyes miss nothing!! I have lost count of the number of times that I have read that advice over at Beth and yet I still go and make that same mistake myself. Hopeless I am!!

-Remko.
So nice of you to drop by and leave a comment!! Awesome.

-D.Foxy.
Thanks for the combat advice oh master swordsman. Unfortunately living in Australia we have no idea what a North American bear would really look like close up. The largest animal that I see slinking outside is a 5kg possum. laugh.gif How do you guys live with bears, mountain lions, wolves and coyotes prowling the countryside? No wonder your Constitution allows every American the right of self defense. Now I know why!!


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CHAPTER 2 –


For sixty-six days and nights, he sailed, over crashing waves of dire intent,
past whirlpools, through mist that burned like fire.
-Father of the Niben.


The clouds rolled across the sky like a tumble of kittens. Ushered in from the south-west on the vast trade winds the cumulus towered over the patchwork landscape below. Bruised and pregnant, with a swollen underbelly, it trailed a sooty veil of rain in its wake.

Cresting the hill at the foot of the Valus Mountains the old man moved forward with tired and worn steps. A simple hide flapped around him like a bird of prey. Raising a skeletal hand up to his bony brow he glanced along the edge of the ridge line and down into the dark land below.

“You had better tell Mathis that a storm is coming,” he said to the boy beside him.

A small head turned and young brown eyes stared up at him with determination. The boy’s jaw was set with the same will and fierceness as the worn boulders around him. “I want to stay, Poppa,” he replied in a thin voice.

“No. You must go. Your first concern must always be for the sheep. With the storm about to hit it is very easy for a stray to be lost in the dark.”

Reaching down he ruffled the wispy hair of the small boy. “Go, Winston, now,” he insisted with a gentle push of his hand.

Setting off and running the tiny waif disappeared down the hill with fast and nimble steps, his voice lost within the shrill wind as he called out for his brother.

Turning around the old man followed the boy at a much slower pace.


**

Standing on the edge of a large, deep puddle, Aradroth lifted himself up on tippy toes and glanced over the rear of a tall Argonian woman. He shook his head in disgust.

The crowd before him stretched in a long, snaking line back from the western gate of Leyawiin. It was common knowledge that most of the citizens of this region came and went with the winds, hiding when darkness obscured everything and reappearing when the brief snatches of daylight shook the last rain lashed drops from their eyes. They stood there in annoying robes of linen, a motley assortment of farmers, peasants, fish workers and merchants.

Wet and drenched to the bone the assassin’s hair hung in dark rat-tails around his limp clothing. He had been waiting in the cue for half an hour already and his patience was completely spent. Voices from a hundred different dialects shouted around him and the people jostled back and forth in the throbbing rhythm of a large, sleeping dragon that seemed to be going nowhere. The gate that rose up before him was like the open mouth of the beast, the rain water dripping from the raised portcullis like venom from its jaws.

“Alright, move along,” called out a member of the Leyawiin watch; a tall man of noble bearing, clad in shining steel armor. The green Leyawiin standard of a prancing white horse stood out like a beacon in the dreary surroundings.

The people moved ahead slowly, the grumblings from the cluster around Aradroth ceasing as the group closed upon the outside gate.

“No, no, to the side,” the watchman commanded. “Over here now.”

The Argonian woman stepped out of the line as instructed. Her slim reptilian shoulders slumped forward in defeat.

Moving forward the watchman’s trim moustache bristled in annoyance. Reaching out he struck the woman on the back of her dawdling legs with a thick cane. The loud smack reverberated in the hushed air.

“You know the rules. Now move.”

Rushing forward two nearby guards quickly grabbed the woman by the arms, dragging her off to the side. Her scaly claws left two sets of drag marks in the soft, clay soil. Pushing open the heavy, wooden door to the watchtower they disappeared inside.

“Okay, move!” the Imperial cried out at the group around him. “Stop gawking. There is nothing left to see.”

The humanoid tide surged from behind, pushing Aradroth towards the mighty gate.


**

The air inside Leyawiin hung like a funeral pall over everything, dark and foreboding.

Clustered together in a tight circle, a large collection of wooden stalls were set up in the town square. Swirling around the people like the pleading fingers of ghosts; the dry, raspy voices of the merchants cut knife edge through the murk. On the side young men carted water with buckets on yokes; little girls carried baskets with eggs, goats bleated; roosters crowed; dogs barked. A number of chickens flopped up and down in small, wire cages.

Dominating the landscape beside the western gate the Great Chapel of Zenithar rose up from its bed like a grizzled father. A black hulk against the steel of the sky, it stared down on the people with silent eyes of reproach.

Passing through the jostling crowd Aradroth’s quick eyes scanned his immediate surroundings. The dreary landscape felt horribly ugly compared to the majestic spire cities of the Valenwood. The people, the smell, it was all overwhelming. Leyawiin seemed more like a melting pot of disease, as if the worst parts of both Cyrodiil and Black Marsh came together at a single point.

Stepping over the rubbish and the horse manure Aradroth ignored the raucous banter and screeching merchants and disappeared into the background of the gloomy town.


**

A wooden door opened wide and two men appeared on the steps. Dressed in shining steel armor, embossed by regal motifs and insignia, they both headed forward through the parting crowd like a proud ship, leaving the startled citizens in their wake.

The man at the front, a young, haughty Imperial with dashing brown eyes, never let his gaze stray from the crowd nearby. The man at the rear was older, but perhaps even more self-assured. He wore a full set of Imperial Watch armor, and silver long sword rested next to his gloved hand. The famed weapon, known as Bellerophon, held a collection of deadly enchantments and was spoken about in hushed tones throughout most of Cyrodiil.

“Feels good to stretch the legs, does it not, sir?” the young male asked.

“Indeed,” replied Adamus Phillida, recently retired Commander of the Imperial Legion. “I only wish that I had more time to really enjoy my retirement, and not spend it cooped up like some damn barn owl.”

Claudius Avellan smiled but chose to remain silent. Stepping forward he pushed a small Bosmer out of the way.

“I never did like paperwork from the start,” continued the Commander, “but that shadow of the Dark Brotherhood just never seems to go away. I hope I hear back from the spies soon, as you never know where those blasted critters might be.”

“Yes,” said the bodyguard and nodded fiercely. “It is a shame that you still have to tie up those loose ends. The word around town is that the Leyawiin chapter here has moved on, of course we managed to shut that down several months back. But sometimes I wonder if we did the right thing there?”

“Damn right, son. We kept those peasants under the thumb down on the Waterfront because we always knew where they were. You guys made the mistake of hounding the Dark Brotherhood underground, and now who knows which hole they have slunk to.”

“A few of us spoke up about it at the time, sir, but the chain of command is very different to the way things are down up north.”

The ex-Commander nodded. “Yes, well, we shall see about that.”


**


The building was cracked and fading. Surrounded by a tired garden of wiry bauera it had definitely seen its better days. Weakened by a few decades of salt water it leaned sideways at the point of falling, almost as if it was asking for shelter itself. On the front porch a man reclined against the wooden railing in the fading light, chewing a leaf of tobacco.

“Good afternoon, my fine man,” Adamus Phillida said, his foot resting upon the worn, timber decking.

Quickly spitting out his tobacco, the Imperial snapped to attention with a perfect salute. “Commander, I didn’t expect you back so soon.”

The old man smiled sadly, his face cracking like a worn scroll. “I am not in the mood for stalling tactics, lieutenant. You know why I am here.”

Settling himself against the railing of the Coast Guard shack, Decentius Opsius considered his words carefully. The man standing before him may be retired, but he still commanded a lot of respect and had very high contacts at both Leyawiin and the Imperial City.

“I did as instructed, but I have yet to hear back from the spies. Word should be back the day after tomorrow, I hope.”

The old man glanced up at him with glassy eyes. “Well, I certainly hope so. The reason I am not wasting my time going through the official channels here at the castle is because your name was brought to me with the highest recommendation.”

Decentius licked his lips. They had suddenly become dry.

“Commander, I am sure they will not let me down. They have never done so in the past.” He gave a nervous laugh. “But you know how it is with the locals. Sometimes they do things a bit slower than us Imperials.”

Adamus looked around, his eyes glancing over at a group of fishermen bickering amongst themselves. They stood in a small group beside the smelly lake. “Yes, well I suppose you are right. The beast folk here do tend to be good for nothing,” he mused.


**

A dark clad figure rose from the coil of rope that sat on the small, wooden dock. Having seen enough; he slowly straightened to his feet.

“Thanks for your help,” he whispered, a flash of gold showing in the gloom as a septim exchanged hands.

“Anytime, my friend.”

The assassin grinned. “And do give my praise to Torval. It does look like the statue could do with some upkeep.”

“Shall do,” the fisherman replied with a gap-toothed smile.

Aradroth headed back towards the northern gate of Leyawiin. The gentle swish of delicate, black cloth stirred around his ankles as he moved. The assassin’s face was a mask of thought that played softly across his drawn features.




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Winter Wolf   Darkness Calls   Mar 28 2010, 12:55 AM
treydog   Loved it. The discussion of "therapy" h...   Mar 28 2010, 01:48 AM
SubRosa   Ah, our favorite Bosmer assassin takes us to my fa...   Mar 28 2010, 05:36 AM
Fiach   “Oh bull dust.....” he muttered. that's reall...   Mar 28 2010, 12:41 PM
mALX   You did it!!!!!! Oh Thank...   Mar 28 2010, 02:46 PM
Destri Melarg   Hooray! Aradroth makes his meandering way to C...   Mar 28 2010, 07:04 PM
haute ecole rider   Ditto to all of the above!   Mar 28 2010, 07:24 PM
Jacki Dice   I also love the little poke at the psychic guards ...   Mar 28 2010, 08:09 PM
Olen   Nice piece, look forward to seeing more. Just a ...   Mar 29 2010, 01:40 PM
Remko   I really liked that!   Mar 30 2010, 01:36 PM
D.Foxy   Just a nit... I have had the good fortune to stud...   Mar 31 2010, 11:42 AM
haute ecole rider   This is a really good chapter. Even better than th...   Apr 1 2010, 08:01 PM
mALX   Oh Wolf, there are so many places I want to quote...   Apr 1 2010, 08:02 PM
SubRosa   Once more your use of metaphor is particularly out...   Apr 2 2010, 06:33 PM
Destri Melarg   The opening paragraph takes the breath away; it is...   Apr 2 2010, 09:38 PM
Winter Wolf   haute ecole rider - Thanks for the support, it mea...   Apr 5 2010, 02:05 AM
Olen   Good piece, I like this. The characterisation of ...   Apr 5 2010, 12:02 PM
mALX   Oh Wolf, I love this chapter! Your detail on ...   Apr 5 2010, 01:03 PM
minque   Ahhh another piece of great writing! oh my hav...   Apr 5 2010, 03:40 PM
SubRosa   More strong metaphors, as we have come to expect f...   Apr 5 2010, 05:16 PM
haute ecole rider   I think you have improved greatly since the first ...   Apr 5 2010, 08:21 PM
Destri Melarg   The others have already commented on how well you ...   Apr 6 2010, 08:39 AM
treydog   You really do a wonderful job of moving the story ...   Apr 10 2010, 08:16 PM
Acadian   Wolf, you have done a wonderful job of bringing Ar...   Apr 11 2010, 04:18 PM
Winter Wolf   Olen - Thanks for stopping in. The hard part about...   Apr 24 2010, 09:44 AM
mALX   This is the absolute best depiction I have ever re...   Apr 24 2010, 03:35 PM
SubRosa   I find a good way to tell if you need a comma or n...   Apr 24 2010, 09:16 PM
haute ecole rider   This is great! I loved that you wrote this fro...   Apr 24 2010, 11:29 PM
Acadian   1. Thank you for your kind words regarding Buffy....   Apr 27 2010, 04:05 PM
Zalphon   Nice description :)   May 1 2010, 06:49 PM
Destri Melarg   I am stunned at how well put together this chapter...   May 8 2010, 12:21 AM
Remko   I envy your usage of clear, powerful metaphors. An...   Jun 17 2010, 10:34 AM
Winter Wolf   mALX - I am very glad that you enjoyed my take on ...   Jun 27 2010, 12:36 AM
haute ecole rider   Changing the POV would ordinarily irritate me, but...   Jun 27 2010, 01:04 AM
SubRosa   Very exciting chase! I loved Dar Jee's cra...   Jun 27 2010, 01:38 AM
Acadian   Loads of action here and well-painted. Aradroth i...   Jun 27 2010, 01:49 AM
Olen   An update, bravo! I like this piece it has a ...   Jun 27 2010, 09:48 PM
Destri Melarg   The details made this chapter for me. The thump t...   Jun 30 2010, 01:22 AM
Winter Wolf   Haute ecole rider- Thanks for the support of the P...   Jul 4 2010, 12:59 AM
haute ecole rider   Funny. You have almost the same perception of Cael...   Jul 4 2010, 02:02 AM
SubRosa   Poor Dar Jee! They have a secret torture room ...   Jul 4 2010, 03:22 AM
Acadian   Very neat! Captivatingly immersive, in fact. ...   Jul 4 2010, 03:30 AM
Remko   Aaargh, you make me want to play Oblivion and star...   Jul 5 2010, 12:07 PM
Olen   Nicely written part. It worked well keeping the r...   Jul 5 2010, 02:44 PM
Destri Melarg   Positively chilling! I don’t know what’s wors...   Jul 14 2010, 12:29 AM
Winter Wolf   Haute Ecole Rider- Thanks for your comment. Caelia...   Jul 18 2010, 01:28 AM
haute ecole rider   ooh, a manhunt! This Pashan sounds like a for...   Jul 18 2010, 02:16 AM
SubRosa   I agree with haute, this Pashan seems like an inte...   Jul 18 2010, 03:06 AM
Acadian   Wolf, I really liked everything about this! Y...   Jul 18 2010, 04:15 AM
Olen   Nice part, there were some great little details th...   Jul 18 2010, 05:02 PM
Destri Melarg   Everything Acadian said goes for me too! In Pa...   Jul 23 2010, 11:37 PM
mALX   I thought this paragraph described an assassin...   Aug 7 2010, 10:58 PM
Winter Wolf   haute ecole rider -Thanks! My goal when I star...   Aug 15 2010, 08:45 AM
Olen   Good to see a continuation to this, certainly I th...   Aug 15 2010, 10:58 AM
haute ecole rider   I liked the slower pacing here - a nice interlude ...   Aug 15 2010, 02:04 PM
Acadian   Oooh, I love this, Wolf! In the first par...   Aug 15 2010, 05:41 PM
SubRosa   Vance is another interesting character. I loved hi...   Aug 15 2010, 06:47 PM
mALX   Woo Hoo !!!! A Buffy Tribute...   Aug 17 2010, 12:40 AM
Destri Melarg   I am curious to se what role Vance plays amongst t...   Aug 17 2010, 07:55 AM
treydog   Bad doggie for somehow forgetting to comment! ...   Aug 19 2010, 09:25 PM
mALX   After killing the badly misguided bandit, you h...   Aug 20 2010, 05:20 PM
Winter Wolf   Olen-Thanks for the kind words. The head-hunters s...   Dec 21 2010, 02:48 AM
Acadian   This is full of mysteries! The hunt for Aradr...   Dec 21 2010, 03:19 AM
SubRosa   Yay, Darkness called once more. Thank goodness I p...   Dec 21 2010, 03:26 AM
mALX   I have so missed your ability to weave words into ...   Dec 21 2010, 05:46 AM
Olen   Oooh I missed this update. Great stuff again, the...   Dec 29 2010, 04:45 PM
Winter Wolf   Acadian-Thanks for your kind words on the feeling ...   Jan 6 2011, 11:39 PM
SubRosa   A pulse-pounding fight in the bandit camp! One...   Jan 7 2011, 03:05 AM
Acadian   Such a warm welcome back to you! I am so deli...   Jan 7 2011, 03:32 AM
Olen   A pulse rising part indeed, good stuff. It worked...   Jan 7 2011, 02:56 PM
mALX   GAAAH! Pashan is a paradox that can ponder t...   Jan 7 2011, 08:18 PM


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