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SubRosa
post Mar 19 2010, 10:56 PM
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Hi all, welcome to Teresa 2.0. Some of you may recognize the stringy wood elf this fan fic is about from another forum. I am going to start reposting her adventures here. However, I have taken this opportunity
for a fresh start to go back over the story and do some work on it. Starting with an entirely new scene, which you see below.

I have decided to give up the idea of breaking things up into separate Acts like I did with Not A Hero and Moving Through Darkness. It was probably a little confusing. Instead I am just going to go with a single title and let it go on as long as it needs to, hence the new name.

You will also find that the first half of what used to be called Not A Hero has been heavily edited. Hopefully an improvement! The rest of the story will also receive a facelift, although generally not as great. There will probably be a few more entirely new chapters turning up between some of the old ones as well. So this is not the same story you might have seen on the other forum.


For people new to the TF, you might find it easier to catch up with the cliff notes version in the spoiler tags below:




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Chapter 1 –Warning

12th Second Seed, 3E433

The harsh croaking of a raven prompted Teresa to raise her green eyes from the only slightly bruised apple that she was eating. The alley behind the Tiber Septim Hotel was narrow, a thin gouge cut between massive stone buildings that loomed high to either side and cast its depths into dim shadow. Sacks filled with trash dotted the length of the lane, clustered in small islands near the back doors of every business and home.

The pale wood elf stood at one such mound of garbage, filled with slops and other castoffs. Rich people threw away the best food, she knew, making the back streets here in the Talos Plaza district a practical gold mine for street urchins like herself.

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Her scavenged lunch fell from suddenly nerveless fingers however, as she gazed down the alley and saw the figure of a man running in the shadows. He was clad in plain linens, the clothing of an ordinary plebeian. But there was nothing ordinary about the way he held a drawn sword in his hand, nor the blood that stained it.

Before the elf could bolt and run herself, the interloper was upon her. Now she could see he was an Imperial by his olive skin and dark hair. He reached out to her with his free hand, and as Teresa backed away she realized that it was not only his sword that was washed in blood, but the front of his tunic as well.

"You must warn them!" the Imperial croaked through the blood that flowed from his mouth. As she stared with wide eyes, Teresa was certain she could see tiny bubbles of air bursting up from the red flow. She had seen that before, from deep knife wounds to the chest. He was a dead man, she thought, he just did not know it yet.

His hand clutched at the shabby tunic of worn sack cloth that Teresa wore, grabbing a handful of the rough material. Teresa nearly jumped as his fingers pressed against one of her breasts. The sword fell from his other hand with a clatter of steel on stone, and the Imperial dropped to his knees, collapsing into her.

Teresa stared with wide eyes at the dying man, whose head was now buried in the valley between her small breasts. Her heart raced like a wild horse, and she felt her skin grow cold as Skyrim. Try as she might to flee, her feet seemed rooted to the spot however. All she could do was gape in growing horror as the man clutched at her willowy frame and spat blood over her already bedraggled clothing.

The sound of footsteps caused her to lift her eyes and gaze back down the way the Imperial had come. There stood a handful of figures wearing dark red robes, nearly black in the dim light. Hoods of the same material covered their heads, shrouding their faces in darkness. She saw blades in their hands as well. Not mortal steel, but rather monstrous, wavy knives, like the jagged teeth of some fearsome Daedra.

"They're going to kill the-" with that the Imperial's voice gave out, and she heard a rattling noise issue from his throat. It was like a dry breeze through an abandoned tenement. Then he fell limp at her feet, open eyes staring blankly back up at her from the pavement.

"Hey, what's going on back there!" came an iron growl from the other end of the alley. The clash of armored boots rang out between the high buildings, reverberating in the Bosmer's ears. Wrenching her gaze from the dead man, Teresa turned to see an Imperial Watchman charging down the alley toward her, dark eyes glittering like polished ebony within the 'T'-shaped slit in his full-faced helmet.

"You there! Put down your weapons and surrender." The legionary had his arming sword out now, and before the wood elf knew it, he was standing before her. He took a moment to first glance down at the dead man at Teresa's feet, and then the blood that washed her tunic.

"I didn't-" Teresa gasped, feeling her blood turn to ice with the understanding of how things must look to the watchman. Then the steel gauntlet of his left hand was reaching out for her, and the words slipped from her throat.

"You'll hang for this street meat!" the legionary growled.

With that Teresa finally felt her body come back under her control. Twisting away from watchman's grasp, she sprang for the other end of the alley. Her eyes saw that the red-robed figures were gone now. Then her view swam as her foot caught upon the corpse of the Imperial. She felt herself falling, and her head slammed against something hard as she came to a stop.

Her vision narrowed, as if she were within a tunnel. She was vaguely aware of the thin, blue slit of the sky above her, flanked by the grey stone of buildings to either side. She thought she saw a dark bird spread its wings in that sliver of light. But then the shape dissolved, and turned into the steel helmet of the legionary, looming closer and closer. Finally, darkness consumed her.

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post Apr 6 2010, 09:05 PM
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minque: Oblivion can be quite the resource hog. I do find it to be more fun than Morrowind though. My fiction is mostly true to the game, except in a few places. The most glaring one is that in the game Cyrodiil is tiny, just 20 miles or so across. In my fiction I have dramatically expanded the size of the province, making it take weeks to travel across, rather than just one day.

More coming. smile.gif


Olen: Thank you O. Lots more character development coming as well. The first six chapters were originally written by me just to establish a baseline of who Teresa was before the real development began. But when I wrote them, I discovered that she was also changing quite a bit just in them. It is nice when that happens without real planning.

This chapter will be the last of the Main Quest for Teresa however. The events in the MQ will continue, but without her being directly involved. Teresa will learn of some of the events as she goes about her adventures, and she will experience some of the fallout however.


Zalphon: Thank you Z.


Winter Wolf: Thanks Wolf. Yep, she is finally red again. It was strange seeing her with brown hair. This of course means her temper cannot be too far behind though...


Destri Melarg: It is indeed the first time Teresa has ever looked in the mirror and actually liked what she saw. It is the first chance she has had to pause and really start taking in how much the Emperor has changed her.


All: This post will finish out Chapter 4, and include a guest appearance by another character...


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Chapter 4d - For The Emperor

After buying some bread and cheese for the road from Talasma, Teresa set off on her journey to Weynon. The priory was not difficult to find, even for someone traveling across the countryside rather than by the road. The chapel tower loomed high enough above the trees that Teresa could see it from quite a distance. Drawing nearer, she found that a chest-high stone wall surrounded the grounds, which was divided up by low walls into cultivated fields, grazing for cows, sheep, and goats, a stable, and a smithy.

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It was a miniature city all in itself, Teresa thought. People dressed in ordinary work clothes moved to and fro tending the soil or the livestock, and she received more than a few stares when she pulled herself over the wall and leaped onto the grounds themselves. No one tried to stop her however, and Teresa made her way to the chapel itself.

There she found an actual monk, a young Imperial who introduced himself as Brother Piner. While he wore the simple brown cassock of a cleric, Teresa noted the hilt of a sword rising from the folds of his robe. When she asked for Jauffre, his eyes narrowed.

"What brings you to Weynon?" he asked, extending his hand in greeting. It seemed odd to Teresa. Since when did anyone ever want to shake her hand? Yet by reflex she put her hand within the Imperial's. His grasp was firmer than she would have imagined for a monk, and she felt his thumb press into the gap between the knuckles of her first and second fingers. For some reason that struck her as being odd as well, although she was not sure why.

"What is your business with Jauffre?" the monk continued, releasing her hand.

"I was sent by Baurus," she answered, wondering if she had failed some kind of test.

The monk questioned Teresa further, but she refused to reveal more than that. The Emperor had trusted her to deliver the amulet, she thought, and after what had happened under the prison she was not about to take any chances with it.

Finally the monk walked with her to their chapter house next door. It was a large building of stone, and even included a little arched canopy for carriages to stop underneath. To keep them out of the rain, Teresa imagined. The windows were narrow slits, too slender for a person to fit through. But her archer's eye noted they were wide enough to easily fire a bow through. While at first glance it seemed like a quaint country priory, she realized that it could easily double as a fortress.

Beyond the heavy oak front door she found a simple but comfortable abode. Yet for all of its size, it seemed strangely empty to the wood elf. Given all of its space and the number of laborers working in the fields, she would have imagined there would be dozens of monks in the monastery proper. Yet as Piner took Teresa to Jauffre's office on the second floor, she did not see another soul within the building. Had they all gone somewhere? Teresa wondered as the monk told her to wait in an anteroom, while he went through another door to announce her.

So Teresa waited, but the monk did not return, nor did anyone else issue from the office. Time seemed to drag on forever. What was taking so long? the wood elf thought. She only needed a few moments to give Jauffre the damned amulet, then she could get out of there and get back home.

Perhaps she should have told Piner that she had the amulet after all? she mused, that might have gotten some action. Memory of the red-robed assassins dispelled that thought however. Better to be safe, she reasoned, than sorry.

So with nothing else to do, she paced back and forth, growing more frustrated with every moment. Was Jauffre really in there? she wondered, or was Piner just stalling her? Why would he do that? Could he be one of the assassins? Could Jauffre be dead even now, and the other Blades whom she expected to be here?

No, she thought, not with all of the people going about their business outside. If there had been a bloodbath like under the prison, they would have all fled. Besides, there were no signs of fighting either inside the building or without. No broken furniture, or bloodstains, or smell of dead bodies, or clouds of flies that flocked to such things.

Finally Teresa could take no more, and shoved the door to the office open and burst inside. Within she found Brother Piner standing in front of a desk. Behind it sat a middle-aged Breton with a shaven head, also wearing an ordinary monk's robe. Teresa knew instantly that he was no priest. He sat with his back too straight, his eyes were too hard, and his every motion was that of a soldier. Teresa had seen it all her life. You could always spot a legionary, no matter how hard he tried to hide what he was. Their soldier's demeanor was burned into them like a brand into a horse.

Standing to one side of the room was a tall Redguard. Her straight, milk-white hair was tied in a ponytail, and her face was worn with care. She wore a full suit of leather armor, much like Teresa's own. An arming sword hung from one her hips, and a quiver of arrows from the other. She had that same stiffness in her frame and aura of danger hanging about her as did the seated monk.

Another soldier, Teresa thought, although at least she was not pretending to be a monk.

"What in Nirn do you think you are doing!" the shaven-headed man growled, rising from his seat. That also made the sword tucked under his robe plain to see. "We have important matters to discuss. Now wait outside and you will be dealt with appropriately."

Teresa felt herself wilt under his harsh words and even hasher stare. She wanted to squeak like a mouse and scurry off to hide. Exactly what she had done all her life when the Imperial Legion turned their wrath upon her. But she did not do so this time, much to her own surprise. Instead she shut the door behind her with only a slight tremble in her hand. When she turned back she saw the Redguard had a hand on her sword, as if it were just casually resting there.

"I am here for the Emperor." Teresa found herself spitting out with an extreme effort of will. "He sent me here."

"What?" the Breton said in surprise, his tone more gentle now. "Just who are you? What are you doing here?"

Teresa took a moment to calm herself. For days she had imagined this moment, rehearsed it all in her mind. But now that she was here she did not know what to say. It was nothing like she had imagined. She felt like she was fighting the goblins all over again. Her heart was racing, her throat was dry, and her skin cold as ice. She had to control herself, she thought. She had faced an assassin; she had faced goblins, she could face this soldier pretending to be a monk.

Rather than talk, she reached into one of her new belt pouches and drew forth the Amulet of Kings. The Redguard's hand fell away from her sword and her grey-green eyes widened, as did those of the two men.

"By Talos!" the Breton gasped.

"Jauffre," Teresa said. The surprise evident on all three of their faces made her feel more in control of the situation. She looked to the older monk. "Are you Jauffre?"

"Yes," the Breton said. His voice had lost all of its former anger, and now seemed filled with joy as he rounded his desk and stepped closer. He reached an eager hand out to her. "I cannot believe it. You have the amulet!"

For a moment Teresa recoiled out of reflex. Then she steadied herself, and set the Amulet of Kings in Jauffre's fingers.

"My name is Teresa, and the Emperor wanted me to give this to you," she said, now feeling calm, as if simply referring to the old man had brought her strength. She remembered his piercing blue eyes, and again felt their warmth fill her. "He said that he has another son. One the assassins did not know about. He said you know where he is. Find him, and give him the amulet."

For a moment Jauffre stared at the giant red gemstone in his hand with wonder. Then his features settled back into a mask of determination. He looked to the Redguard first and laid his free hand on the woman's shoulder.

"Go Julian," he said, voice now filled with enthusiasm. "Ride hard to Kvatch!"

"I will bring Martin back, sir." The Redguard saluted Jauffre, closed fist thumping against her leather-clad breast. Teresa almost felt like she would blush when she turned to her and did the same. Then she left the room, her pronounced limp barely slowing her determined stride.

"I do not know how you managed to get this," Jauffre said in amazement, looking from the Amulet of Kings to Teresa. "But you did the right thing coming here. You may have just saved the Empire, all of Tamriel, from destruction. When the Emperor and the Princes died, I sent all the Blades I had here at Weynon for his last son. We are waiting for them to return with him. He was illegitimate, so his birth was kept a secret to avoid a scandal, and to protect him from the Empress. Now he is our last hope."

"But where are my manners?" Jauffre continued, now the kind host as he lead her to a comfortable chair next to his desk. "Come and sit. You must be tired from your journey. Are you hungry? I will send for some food."

Teresa allowed herself be led to the chair and sat down. Her heart slowed with relief. It was finally over! she thought. The moment she had put the amulet in Jauffre's hand, it felt as if a heavy weight had been lifted from her.

She recounted her story at the Breton's prodding, and he plied her with sweet cakes and wine. She discovered that Jauffre had known the man who had died in the alley, saying that he was an agent of the Blades who was watching Daedric cults. When she told him that she had been arrested for his murder, the monk swore that he would have the charges against her dropped.

"Now," he said after she had finished, "how can I reward you for what you have done? I cannot give you a title, only the Emperor can do that. My order is not wealthy, but I am sure we can spare some gold though."

"No," Teresa said, shaking her head. "I cannot take anything."

"You have done a service to the Empire which cannot be dismissed," Jauffre said staunchly. "I must do something for you in return."

"You do not understand," Teresa said, tears welling up in her eyes. "He died right in front of me, and I couldn't stop it. He believed in me, and I just watched him die..."

"Do not carry that guilt with you," Jauffre said quietly, rising to lay a hand on her shoulder. Not the soft hand of a monk, but the hard grasp of a soldier. "Could have, would have, should have... Play that game with yourself and it will drive you mad. Believe me, I know better than most."

Teresa gently took his hand and moved it off her shoulder. While part of her desperately wanted to be comforted, she could not let a soldier see her this way. Her entire lifetime had taught her to never show them weakness, else they would exploit it. She did not think Jauffre would do that, but old habits died hard.

She rose, knowing that she had to get out of there. Jauffre did not try to stop her as she walked to the door.

"The new Emperor will know what you have done, and I will never forget," she heard Jauffre say as she opened the door. "If you ever need anything, come and find me, or him. Anything..."

Teresa nodded. Part of her was screaming to take the money and live rich and fat for the rest of her life. But another part of her saw the Emperor's face in her mind and remembered his words. He had given her something no amount of gold could compare to. What she did, she did for him, and nothing else.

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SubRosa   Teresa of the Faint Smile   Mar 19 2010, 10:56 PM
Verlox   Oooo, Verlox likes. This is most well written and ...   Mar 19 2010, 11:10 PM
Winter Wolf   A prologue, a prologue, yipppeee!!!...   Mar 20 2010, 01:03 AM
treydog   As you know, I have always loved your story and yo...   Mar 20 2010, 02:28 AM
Destri Melarg   What a setup! Through vividly descriptive lan...   Mar 20 2010, 09:32 AM
haute ecole rider   I like, I like! The chapter is tight, short, ...   Mar 20 2010, 10:22 PM
SubRosa   Verlox: Thank you V. I am glad the chapter worked....   Mar 21 2010, 07:20 PM
treydog   You continue to keep me anxious for what happens n...   Mar 21 2010, 08:05 PM
canis216   This is quite nice. If I could be like Trey and r...   Mar 21 2010, 09:13 PM
haute ecole rider   Again, well-written and descriptive! I did no...   Mar 21 2010, 10:02 PM
Olen   I like how this is written, possibly the descripti...   Mar 21 2010, 10:39 PM
Destri Melarg   Since it seems that all of the slight nits in this...   Mar 22 2010, 12:50 AM
minque   Ohhhh, now this is just great, so well described, ...   Mar 22 2010, 01:11 AM
Jacki Dice   I know I'm a little late, but I love the new b...   Mar 22 2010, 05:37 AM
Winter Wolf   The rework of this chapter is perfect now. It ties...   Mar 22 2010, 05:46 AM
Remko   With everyone here and re-writing/heavily editing ...   Mar 23 2010, 12:37 PM
SubRosa   treydog: I hope it will be interesting for those p...   Mar 23 2010, 04:53 PM
D.Foxy   Aaaaaan the vulpine voom voom has arrived!...   Mar 23 2010, 05:13 PM
Winter Wolf   Most of Teresa's wonder and vulnerability real...   Mar 24 2010, 06:54 AM
Destri Melarg   I Do hope, however, that you will keep the sense ...   Mar 24 2010, 08:15 AM
SubRosa   D.Foxy: Thank you DF. I think what you are seeing...   Mar 25 2010, 06:18 PM
Olen   Nice piece. I like how you're developing the ...   Mar 25 2010, 10:30 PM
Destri Melarg   This entire chapter was extremely well written, bu...   Mar 26 2010, 01:12 AM
treydog   You have absolutely excelled with the re-writes. ...   Mar 26 2010, 04:56 PM
SubRosa   Olen: Thank you Olen. You are correct about the Em...   Mar 27 2010, 06:08 PM
D.Foxy   Your combat this time around is much better - it s...   Mar 27 2010, 06:13 PM
haute ecole rider   It's been a while since I read the original ch...   Mar 27 2010, 06:30 PM
Fiach   Excellent work! Just read through it and I re...   Mar 28 2010, 12:36 PM
Winter Wolf   The gutter rat of the Waterfront is proving that t...   Mar 29 2010, 06:48 AM
Destri Melarg   I go to you and Acadian for inspiration in how to ...   Mar 29 2010, 09:57 AM
SubRosa   D.Foxy & haute ecole rider: Thank you both. I...   Mar 29 2010, 04:25 PM
Winter Wolf   That chapter was awesome. The pick of the bunch no...   Mar 29 2010, 05:10 PM
D.Foxy   Ahhhh....feels like the first time I read your wri...   Mar 29 2010, 04:35 PM
haute ecole rider   Oh, yes, that bath at the end of the sewers. That ...   Mar 29 2010, 05:14 PM
Olen   The flow of this pieve is very good. It all reads...   Mar 29 2010, 06:07 PM
Destri Melarg   We finally get a faint smile from Teresa! Thi...   Mar 31 2010, 01:21 AM
SubRosa   Who said you can't go home again? That would ...   Mar 31 2010, 05:48 PM
haute ecole rider   This was really good. I noticed the dream is new...   Mar 31 2010, 10:00 PM
Broken-Scale   Ah, reading this brings me back to the first time ...   Apr 1 2010, 05:51 PM
SubRosa   haute ecole rider: You are right on all counts. Ne...   Apr 2 2010, 04:58 PM
Destri Melarg   To quote mALX: “Grrr! Cliffhanger! ...   Apr 2 2010, 09:35 PM
canis216   Mmm... deer. Very tasty. Not as good as elk though...   Apr 3 2010, 01:54 AM
SubRosa   Destri Melarg: Thank you D. Yes, the dreams will b...   Apr 4 2010, 06:29 PM
minque   Ohhhh i...am also liking Teresa more and more, ...   Apr 4 2010, 07:40 PM
Olen   Yes I must agree that you've handled the devel...   Apr 4 2010, 08:33 PM
Zalphon   I like the description. Very nice work.   Apr 5 2010, 12:03 AM
Winter Wolf   The thought of the guards caring about Teresa is h...   Apr 5 2010, 06:33 AM
Destri Melarg   I think that might be the first time in your writi...   Apr 6 2010, 08:44 AM
Destri Melarg   Wow! So much to praise about this chapter...   Apr 8 2010, 08:59 AM
D.Foxy   Yay for Teresa Yay for Jools None can beat her Tha...   Apr 7 2010, 01:01 AM
haute ecole rider   :salute:   Apr 7 2010, 01:43 AM
SubRosa   D.Foxy: Well, if you meant fight a fish, that is c...   Apr 8 2010, 04:55 PM
D.Foxy   D.Foxy: Well, if you meant fight a fish, that is c...   Apr 9 2010, 12:22 PM
Destri Melarg   Teresa dressed in a cloak of feathers, standing on...   Apr 10 2010, 12:35 AM
SubRosa   D.Foxy: Look and see, as Teresa joins the cast of ...   Apr 10 2010, 07:05 PM
Acadian   I have been reading since you started, and your ne...   Apr 11 2010, 04:10 PM
minque   Ohhhh wonderful! Yes tonight is my reading-nig...   Apr 11 2010, 11:00 PM
Remko   You broughgt in Hautee's Julian? Nice! Now...   Apr 12 2010, 11:46 AM
SubRosa   Acadian: Hey you old warhorse. Good to see you aga...   Apr 13 2010, 12:39 AM
Destri Melarg   Chapter 5b: Teresa’s resourceful method of fishing...   Apr 13 2010, 09:38 AM
D.Foxy   quiet bedroom district HUH? Wha.. D'you me...   Apr 13 2010, 03:18 AM
Olen   Good as ever, you really have her character nailed...   Apr 13 2010, 02:33 PM
SubRosa   D.Foxy: It is a variation of "bedroom communi...   Apr 15 2010, 09:06 PM
haute ecole rider   I enjoyed the homecoming, because it highlights th...   Apr 15 2010, 09:19 PM
Remko   I really liked this last part where she realises s...   Apr 16 2010, 11:51 AM
Destri Melarg   An intriguing mystery in the first two paragraphs...   Apr 17 2010, 10:07 AM
minque   Thank all mighty divines it's saturday and I h...   Apr 17 2010, 01:07 PM
SubRosa   haute ecole rider: Thank you h.e.r., those were th...   Apr 17 2010, 11:05 PM
Olen   You showed her return well, initially warm but rap...   Apr 18 2010, 05:01 PM
minque   Mmm what a chapter! So wonderfully described, ...   Apr 18 2010, 11:12 PM
Destri Melarg   I guess Thomas Wolfe was right when he wrote You C...   Apr 19 2010, 01:22 AM
Remko   I truly adore the emotion in the last chapter. Fro...   Apr 19 2010, 04:34 PM
SubRosa   Olen: Thank you Olen. Teresa is not quite totally ...   Apr 19 2010, 05:51 PM
minque   Nice! Love your descriptions of the landscape ...   Apr 19 2010, 08:24 PM
Olen   Great description of city isle, you amke the place...   Apr 20 2010, 02:40 PM
haute ecole rider   This is new material, all right, and it shows. Wel...   Apr 20 2010, 02:54 PM
treydog   I have at last caught up again- and it has been a ...   Apr 21 2010, 09:27 PM
Acadian   Also caught up now. Very, very nicely done! ...   Apr 22 2010, 03:43 AM
SubRosa   minque: Thank you minque. :) If your son has Obliv...   Apr 22 2010, 04:29 PM
Acadian   This is wonderful. The mysterious raven dreams/fl...   Apr 22 2010, 04:47 PM
minque   ohhh, very suggestive! I so like the dreams, m...   Apr 23 2010, 12:15 AM
haute ecole rider   This is very well done. And you've given me an...   Apr 23 2010, 03:44 AM
Olen   I like the ruin, you give them a much more intense...   Apr 23 2010, 12:44 PM
Winter Wolf   Just when I thought that the Sage could not take h...   Apr 24 2010, 01:39 AM
SubRosa   Acadian: Thank you A. Now we venture deeper into t...   Apr 25 2010, 09:35 PM
Olen   Excellent update, you caught the tension very well...   Apr 25 2010, 11:17 PM
minque   Down down in the damp mouldy crypts! I can see...   Apr 25 2010, 11:37 PM
Winter Wolf   This was a very hard chapter to write because of a...   Apr 25 2010, 11:46 PM
haute ecole rider   Well done. I liked your descriptions of the corpse...   Apr 26 2010, 02:10 AM
Acadian   Oh, very well done! All of what minque said i...   Apr 27 2010, 04:27 PM
SubRosa   Olen: Thank you O. I was making a concerted effort...   Apr 28 2010, 05:26 PM
haute ecole rider   Darnnit! This was very well written, fast pac...   Apr 28 2010, 06:43 PM
Olen   I agree, the length made that build into something...   Apr 28 2010, 07:18 PM
SubRosa   Thank you haute and Olen. I will have proper repli...   Apr 30 2010, 10:30 PM
SubRosa   haute ecole rider: Thank you h.e.r. In my outline ...   May 1 2010, 04:35 PM
haute ecole rider   An outstanding conclusion to a tense episode in wh...   May 1 2010, 07:42 PM
Olen   A good bit of looting in conclusion to a dungeon r...   May 1 2010, 10:06 PM
Remko   Damn... I soooo badly wanted Jalbert's bloody ...   May 4 2010, 12:40 PM
SubRosa   haute ecole rider: Thank you h.e.r. :) Vilverin ...   May 4 2010, 04:28 PM
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