Old Habits Die Hard Part Three, The old dog practices new habits Options

[haute ecole rider]

Here is the first of a third thread for Old Habits Die Hard. I appreciate all of you staying with Julian and I this far, and hope you stick with us to the end!

For those who want to go back to the beginning, here you go:
Old Habits Die Hard Chapters 1 - 7
Old Habits Die Hard Chapters 8 - 13

[treydog]

Oh my. The “dream sequence” (or was it something more?) was powerful and moving and uplifting and sad. And then the final paragraph!

Anyone who wants to know how to “show and not tell,” look at the way each character in this episode is drawn- Jauffre, Martin with his books, Baurus behind Martin’s shoulder, Orania…. In a very few words of vivid description, we understand the personalities and the dynamics of this group.

And here, Jauffre fully redeems himself in my eyes (and foreshadows another moment which occurs at the end…):

I felt Jauffre’s hand land heavily on my right shoulder, as he leaned down to my right ear. “Emperor Uriel laid a heavy burden on you, Julian,” he whispered. My gaze slid past his hand to where Martin sat at his study table, head propped up on his fist, eyes on one of a growing pile of books. “You need to be strong to bear it.” Jauffre finished, withdrawing his hand and stepping back.

I would point out all the other parts that sing to me, but I would have to quote everything.

One preference issue:

Finally, she took the final product and poured it into a clean mug.

Two “finals” in close proximity. How about- “Finally, she took the resulting product and…”