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Petra Arkanian |
Dec 6 2010, 10:16 PM
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From: Stuck in The Planes Of Oblivion

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Ok. First, I need to know if this is where i post my fanfic. I'm gonna continue my story here anyway, but please, someone tell me if it's not. Okay. For the story. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Written By Petra
PART 1
The last thing I remember is a member of the Imperial Guard staring down at me. He was glaring (although I couldn't really be sure, as his helmet was blocking my view of everything) at me, with a sword in his hand, and a shield strapped to his arm. It was then that I passed out.
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When I came to, I was lying on a small, uncomfortable cot. In a jail cell.
Not good, I thought. Not good at all. I had never been the follow-the-law-to-the-ends-of-Tamriel type, of course, but I knew a few basic rules.
1: Do not get put in jail.
Well, okay, that's the only one I know. But still.
"Ahh, you're a pretty one, aren't you? A Nord, no? But it is all wasted. You're going to die in here! Don't you see? Die, Nord, die!"
The blue-skinned Dunmer ranted on for some time, his loud voice echoing through my prison cell, and amplifying his overly-annoy, nasaly-sounding voice.
'Just my luck,' I thought. 'Not only do I have to be next to this stupid Dunmer, but my cell has to have good accoustics, too!'
As soon as I decided that I would punch him when he next spoke, the sound of footsteps drowned out his rant, taking my opportunity of violence with it.
"Hurry up, Barus! I won't risk the Emperors' life on your slow gait!" snapped a bossy Breton female. But why was she talking about the Emperor ? That was madness! Even I was taught to show respect to him, and here she was, mentioning his name as causually as if...
Oh. The woman stepped forward, and behind her was a Redguard. And behind HIM was the Emperor. Nevermind, then.
"Oh, Captain Renevault, I highly doubt that I am in any danger with you three around," said the Emeror, sounding amused. The man in front of the Emperor chuckled. Then the Breton (Captain Renevault, I assumed) saw me.
"What's this prisoner doing in here?!" she barked, spitting the word 'prisoner' out of the back of her throat, as if it were something nasty she had found on the back of her shoe. "This cell is supposed to be off limits!"
"Usual mix-up at the Watch, probably," said the Redguard, Barus, sounding exasperated. Renevault fingered a key, and opened the door.
A man appeared behind the Emperor, and I barely had enough time to gasp before he attacked him. Surprisingly, the Emperor held his own, until the attacker, who was wearing shiny silver armour, slashed across his face.
But Captain Renevault threw herself in front of him, and the sword connected with her head. She cried out in pain, and looked at me eyes pleading, although I had no idea what for. Until I realized that she was looking at her sword. I scooped it up, and stabbed the attacker in the heart.
This post has been edited by Petra Arkanian: Dec 7 2010, 01:26 AM
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Dec 8 2010, 05:15 AM
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Okay, here's my post for today. Hope there aren't TOO many nits! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ PART 4 Baurus was dead. I had seen it with my own eyes. Baurus was dead, and the goblins would pay. I was not his friend, I had known him for less than an hour, and it was obvious that he wanted nothing to do with me (this is understandable, however, so I didn't take it as an insult).But he was a good man, loyal, smart, brave, and he deserved more than a decent burial. Instead, there he was, getting pulled off into oblivion, by a goblin. Where they would eat him and suck out his brains. No one deserved this. So, not only could I not stop his being dead, I couldn't even bury him! Couldn't even avenge his death, for the moments the goblins had gotten hold of his body, they had ran off, with the rats behind them. When I'd tried to follow, they'd ran through a door, which clanged shut right in my face. Locked. I tried it again. Still locked! I cursed. This wasn't fair! I went back to the site of the attack, hoping for a lock pick. I searched all of the bodies, save the Emperors. Not a single one. I wanted to scream. Instead, I looked at the small pile of items I'd gleaned from the corpses; Several pieces of parchment, two clubs, seventy-nine arrows, an iron bow, and a worn leather suit of armor. I donned the armor, strapped the arrows to my back, put the late Captains sword back in the sheath, and stuffed the parchment into a small breast pocket. There wasn't enough light to read them now. So I continued toward what I hoped to be the exit. I met several goblins, and quite a few Assassins - that is to say, I killed them - , because I was infinitely better at archery than swordplay. Arrows sprouted from the attackers chest, neck, head, and occasionally eyes.I also found many lockpicks. Not a single lockpick to be found, when I actually needed it, but now, twenty-four of them, and I couldn't find my way back. The irony of this was just sickening. It was hours later, and I was about to just give up and die, when I saw it. A light! That had to mean the outside. I hurried forward, and it was. Finally, with my hand on the old wooden door, I shut my eyes, and stepped outside. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ It was dusk. A few stars were trying to flicker into visibility. I looked around. There was only one recognisible feature in my surroundings. White Tower. That meant I had to be near the Imperial City. I gaped. It was beautiful, imposing. The sewers - for that was what it must be - had taken me far. From Cheydinhal to the Imperial City, that had to be at least a dozen leagues. Incredible. The dusk reminded me of something, something far away... "Kill her!" says the Master.
"But, sir..." my voice fades away into the silence. The Brotherhood is cruel. To order me to kill my parents. They have done nothing wrong. No, the fault is mine. I have failed to kill the Blade Kathren. I haven't even captured her.
"You failed me, Deadalu. The best I can say about this mission is that you were undetected." His voice is velvet, dangerous.
I stand, despite my bleeding back. "If I had killed her," I began, using my best diplomatic voice, "the others would have seen. Like wise, had I captured her."
"That is no excuse."This post has been edited by Petra Arkanian: Dec 8 2010, 05:18 AM
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Petra Arkanian Concerned, But Powerless Dec 6 2010, 10:16 PM Tulustan Yup this is where you put your fan fic!
Nice... Dec 6 2010, 10:42 PM Petra Arkanian Thanks! Yeah, I've played the intro so man... Dec 6 2010, 10:53 PM SubRosa Hi Petra!
I enjoyed your protagonist's sa... Dec 7 2010, 12:25 AM Petra Arkanian I am indeed looking for a critic. Pick apart away,... Dec 7 2010, 12:28 AM SubRosa Ah, in that case I noticed several spelling errors... Dec 7 2010, 12:45 AM Petra Arkanian Thank you subrosa. For the tamriel part, I am fami... Dec 7 2010, 01:03 AM Petra Arkanian I think I got everything. Thank you! And NOW, ... Dec 7 2010, 01:28 AM Petra Arkanian Part 2
"Is she dead?" The Emperor's... Dec 7 2010, 01:52 AM Tulustan Wow, very young. Pretty strong to be able to kill ... Dec 7 2010, 02:10 AM Petra Arkanian Ahh, you're right, Tulustan. A good idea. And ... Dec 7 2010, 02:29 AM mALX Welcome to the forums! Dec 7 2010, 02:46 AM Zalphon Albeit short chapters, they're well-done. If ... Dec 7 2010, 03:12 AM Acadian Welcome to our wonderful fan fiction forum, Petra... Dec 7 2010, 03:32 AM SubRosa Off to a roaring start! You continue to change... Dec 7 2010, 06:41 PM Petra Arkanian SubRosa: Thank you so much, I do need a critic. Th... Dec 7 2010, 08:29 PM Destri Melarg Hi Petra, welcome to the forums. I see that you h... Dec 8 2010, 02:58 AM mALX
I hope these comments don’t seem overly harsh. T... Dec 8 2010, 03:06 AM Petra Arkanian Destri Melarg: Thank you, you are right. The gobli... Dec 8 2010, 03:05 AM SubRosa Poor Baurus, not only dead but goblin food! Ew... Dec 8 2010, 08:46 PM Acadian Here we learn that as good as Alex seems to be wit... Dec 9 2010, 02:28 AM Destri Melarg Now I can see it. We know that the Dark Brotherho... Dec 10 2010, 02:27 AM Petra Arkanian Yes, that is what I was thinking.But... don't ... Dec 10 2010, 09:44 PM SubRosa You mean Baurus will return from the grave to wrea... Dec 10 2010, 10:26 PM mALX Amazing improvements in your story and writing in ... Dec 11 2010, 04:03 AM Petra Arkanian Okay, guys. part 5. Enjoy.
PART 5
I shivered vio... Dec 12 2010, 08:16 PM SubRosa My that drunk's accent was so think an elephan... Dec 12 2010, 08:59 PM Acadian So, our rather mature wine-sipping twelve year lea... Dec 13 2010, 02:47 AM Destri Melarg Whew, it seems that Baurus survived. That was a p... Dec 13 2010, 08:58 PM Petra Arkanian SubRosa: Oops, you're right! Sometime spel... Dec 13 2010, 09:39 PM Petra Arkanian Okee, ladies and gents! Part 6, coming your wa... Dec 13 2010, 10:21 PM Acadian Three comments here:
1. What a wonderful method ... Dec 14 2010, 03:28 AM mALX
Three comments here:
1. What a wonderful method... Dec 14 2010, 04:55 AM Petra Arkanian Acadian: 1; Thx! :D 2; Thanks! my sister w... Dec 14 2010, 01:24 PM Petra Arkanian Okay! The bio on everything that has happened ... Dec 14 2010, 02:10 PM mALX
. Her father (who was more a scoundrel than anyth... Dec 14 2010, 03:59 PM Petra Arkanian okay. Nevermind. :D sorry. Dec 14 2010, 02:20 PM Petra Arkanian Wow, Thanks, mALX! I just kinda went along wit... Dec 14 2010, 08:14 PM mALX
Wow, Thanks, mALX! I just kinda went along wi... Dec 14 2010, 08:24 PM Petra Arkanian Wow. So, thanks for your support!
PART ... wh... Dec 14 2010, 08:48 PM mALX The repartee between Seth and Alix is really well ... Dec 14 2010, 09:45 PM Acadian Yes, some brisk and snappy dialogue between Seth a... Dec 15 2010, 01:34 AM Petra Arkanian Yes, have been reading other fanfics (yours is be... Dec 15 2010, 06:10 AM mALX
Yes, have been reading other fanfics (yours is b... Dec 15 2010, 06:17 AM Destri Melarg I completely agree with everything that mALX and A... Dec 15 2010, 09:43 AM Petra Arkanian Destri Melarg: I believe the reason that Alex sacr... Dec 15 2010, 07:34 PM Petra Arkanian PART 8
I was looking around the Merchants Inn, wo... Dec 15 2010, 08:15 PM mALX Yeah !!! You got your avatar fixed ... Dec 15 2010, 08:55 PM Petra Arkanian mALX: Yes, this is the avatar you sent me! Thx... Dec 15 2010, 10:12 PM mALX
mALX: Yes, this is the avatar you sent me! Th... Dec 15 2010, 10:15 PM Petra Arkanian Okay, guys. Part 8
PART 8
It was nighttime. I h... Dec 17 2010, 04:49 AM mALX
...er...huh? Is he...er...uh...mating with she... Dec 17 2010, 04:05 PM Petra Arkanian No, mALX :closedeyes:, he's trying to get insi... Dec 18 2010, 02:00 AM mALX
No, mALX :closedeyes:, he's trying to get ins... Dec 18 2010, 02:05 AM Petra Arkanian You guys crack me up.
PART 9
I yawned. The sun s... Dec 18 2010, 05:26 AM mALX GAAAAH !!! A cliffhanger !!... Dec 18 2010, 07:38 AM Petra Arkanian PART 10
It was dark. That was the first thing tha... Dec 20 2010, 08:48 PM mALX WOOOOOT !!!! Huge background you... Dec 20 2010, 10:57 PM Petra Arkanian where are all my nit-finders?
PART 11
"Seth... Dec 22 2010, 06:59 AM mALX
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~... Dec 23 2010, 12:56 AM Shadowgale Hey, this is a really good read! And it's ... Dec 22 2010, 07:14 AM Petra Arkanian Welcome, Shadowgale! A nit-finder is someone l... Dec 22 2010, 07:49 PM Petra Arkanian PART 12 A
Seth hit the ground with a dull thud.
... Dec 23 2010, 02:08 AM mALX GAAAAH!!!! Is he like the other ... Dec 23 2010, 02:48 AM Petra Arkanian Ok, so I'm really bored right now, so I'm ... Dec 23 2010, 05:08 AM Petra Arkanian Ok, guys. After the next post, I'm moving on t... Dec 23 2010, 05:09 AM Petra Arkanian It is technically tomorrow yesterday, so, here... Dec 23 2010, 01:43 PM mALX
"I don't know." And then she gaspe... Dec 30 2010, 08:40 PM
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