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Petra Arkanian
post Dec 6 2010, 10:16 PM
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Ok. First, I need to know if this is where i post my fanfic. I'm gonna continue my story here anyway, but please, someone tell me if it's not. Okay. For the story.
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Written By Petra


PART 1


The last thing I remember is a member of the Imperial Guard staring down at me. He was glaring (although I couldn't really be sure, as his helmet was blocking my view of everything) at me, with a sword in his hand, and a shield strapped to his arm.
It was then that I passed out.

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When I came to, I was lying on a small, uncomfortable cot. In a jail cell.

Not good, I thought. Not good at all. I had never been the follow-the-law-to-the-ends-of-Tamriel type, of course, but I knew a few basic rules.

1: Do not get put in jail.

Well, okay, that's the only one I know. But still.

"Ahh, you're a pretty one, aren't you? A Nord, no? But it is all wasted. You're going to die in here! Don't you see? Die, Nord, die!"

The blue-skinned Dunmer ranted on for some time, his loud voice echoing through my prison cell, and amplifying his overly-annoy, nasaly-sounding voice.

'Just my luck,' I thought. 'Not only do I have to be next to this stupid Dunmer, but my cell has to have good accoustics, too!'

As soon as I decided that I would punch him when he next spoke, the sound of footsteps drowned out his rant, taking my opportunity of violence with it.

"Hurry up, Barus! I won't risk the Emperors' life on your slow gait!" snapped a bossy Breton female. But why was she talking about the Emperor ? That was madness! Even I was taught to show respect to him, and here she was, mentioning his name as causually as if...

Oh. The woman stepped forward, and behind her was a Redguard. And behind HIM was the Emperor. Nevermind, then.

"Oh, Captain Renevault, I highly doubt that I am in any danger with you three around," said the Emeror, sounding amused. The man in front of the Emperor chuckled.
Then the Breton (Captain Renevault, I assumed) saw me.

"What's this prisoner doing in here?!" she barked, spitting the word 'prisoner' out of the back of her throat, as if it were something nasty she had found on the back of her shoe. "This cell is supposed to be off limits!"

"Usual mix-up at the Watch, probably," said the Redguard, Barus, sounding exasperated. Renevault fingered a key, and opened the door.

A man appeared behind the Emperor, and I barely had enough time to gasp before he attacked him. Surprisingly, the Emperor held his own, until the attacker, who was wearing shiny silver armour, slashed across his face.

But Captain Renevault threw herself in front of him, and the sword connected with her head. She cried out in pain, and looked at me eyes pleading, although I had no idea what for. Until I realized that she was looking at her sword. I scooped it up, and stabbed the attacker in the heart.

This post has been edited by Petra Arkanian: Dec 7 2010, 01:26 AM


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Petra Arkanian
post Dec 14 2010, 02:10 PM
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Okay! The bio on everything that has happened so far, to explain stuff a bit further, and another biography on things possibly yet to come!

Alex Deadalu was born on... 12 years ago (sorry! mellow.gif ). Her parents were Darigus Deadalu and Jessyca Smythe. By sad mistake, Alex was born in Cheydinhal, where, after 3 years of her birth, the dark brotherhood came. Her father (who was more a scoundrel than anything else) had bet Alex on a few games of poker. Being drunk at the time, he lost, of course. The man who 'won' Alex then proceeded to bet, and lose on other card games. In the end, it happens to be a man named Lucien Lachance who walked away, undefeated, from the Inn. Not only did he now have a very large amount of gold, he also was in posession of Alex.

Alex was whisked away for training, and by the time she was 8, she'd had her first kill. Steadily rising in rank, she becomes the second-in-command, until... she fails to kill a Blade. Not Barus, but Kathren. She is discarded from the Brotherhood, by way of making her do an impossible task. The couple that she had grown up with, Julian and Mary Delphiki (no, they don't exist in the game to my knowledge), were slotted for death. At that time, she was 12. Instead of killing who she thought was her biological parents, she turned herself in for a murderer.

With her childhood already completely ruined, she is taken from the cell with the Emperor of Tamriel, who she then sees die. The one friend she might have possibly made is dragged away with goblins. Rather sad, (I say rather because she didn't really know emotions very well and had no idea how to go about being heart broken or devastated) she heads of the the Imperial City, and what does she find, but a rumor about Barus and his extremely bloodied and worn state!

So, what we have know, instead of the beautiful baby girl we started out with, we now have a tough, hardened twelve year old who's cunning and deadly enough to kill anyone. Not really strong, emotionally or physically, (She always defeated her various enemies with clever manuvers) she is thrust into a friendship with a certain trouble-attracting 16 year old Legion Guard named Seth Dormor...



okay, theres the first bio. And now, if you really want to read the double spoiler, which is focused on the future, please do, but don't tell anyone! biggrin.gif

I may vary occaisionaly from the spoiler, so this is probably just an outline.

... and now I am very angry, because the spoiler isn't working at all! hmmm. well, crap. okee. maybe... I'm gonna try and put this on another comment...



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Petra Arkanian   Concerned, But Powerless   Dec 6 2010, 10:16 PM
Tulustan   Yup this is where you put your fan fic! Nice...   Dec 6 2010, 10:42 PM
Petra Arkanian   Thanks! Yeah, I've played the intro so man...   Dec 6 2010, 10:53 PM
SubRosa   Hi Petra! I enjoyed your protagonist's sa...   Dec 7 2010, 12:25 AM
Petra Arkanian   I am indeed looking for a critic. Pick apart away,...   Dec 7 2010, 12:28 AM
SubRosa   Ah, in that case I noticed several spelling errors...   Dec 7 2010, 12:45 AM
Petra Arkanian   Thank you subrosa. For the tamriel part, I am fami...   Dec 7 2010, 01:03 AM
Petra Arkanian   I think I got everything. Thank you! And NOW, ...   Dec 7 2010, 01:28 AM
Petra Arkanian   Part 2 "Is she dead?" The Emperor's...   Dec 7 2010, 01:52 AM
Tulustan   Wow, very young. Pretty strong to be able to kill ...   Dec 7 2010, 02:10 AM
Petra Arkanian   Ahh, you're right, Tulustan. A good idea. And ...   Dec 7 2010, 02:29 AM
mALX   Welcome to the forums!   Dec 7 2010, 02:46 AM
Zalphon   Albeit short chapters, they're well-done. If ...   Dec 7 2010, 03:12 AM
Acadian   Welcome to our wonderful fan fiction forum, Petra...   Dec 7 2010, 03:32 AM
SubRosa   Off to a roaring start! You continue to change...   Dec 7 2010, 06:41 PM
Petra Arkanian   SubRosa: Thank you so much, I do need a critic. Th...   Dec 7 2010, 08:29 PM
Destri Melarg   Hi Petra, welcome to the forums. I see that you h...   Dec 8 2010, 02:58 AM
mALX   I hope these comments don’t seem overly harsh. T...   Dec 8 2010, 03:06 AM
Petra Arkanian   Destri Melarg: Thank you, you are right. The gobli...   Dec 8 2010, 03:05 AM
Petra Arkanian   Okay, here's my post for today. Hope there are...   Dec 8 2010, 05:15 AM
SubRosa   Poor Baurus, not only dead but goblin food! Ew...   Dec 8 2010, 08:46 PM
Acadian   Here we learn that as good as Alex seems to be wit...   Dec 9 2010, 02:28 AM
Destri Melarg   Now I can see it. We know that the Dark Brotherho...   Dec 10 2010, 02:27 AM
Petra Arkanian   Yes, that is what I was thinking.But... don't ...   Dec 10 2010, 09:44 PM
SubRosa   You mean Baurus will return from the grave to wrea...   Dec 10 2010, 10:26 PM
mALX   Amazing improvements in your story and writing in ...   Dec 11 2010, 04:03 AM
Petra Arkanian   Okay, guys. part 5. Enjoy. PART 5 I shivered vio...   Dec 12 2010, 08:16 PM
SubRosa   My that drunk's accent was so think an elephan...   Dec 12 2010, 08:59 PM
Acadian   So, our rather mature wine-sipping twelve year lea...   Dec 13 2010, 02:47 AM
Destri Melarg   Whew, it seems that Baurus survived. That was a p...   Dec 13 2010, 08:58 PM
Petra Arkanian   SubRosa: Oops, you're right! Sometime spel...   Dec 13 2010, 09:39 PM
Petra Arkanian   Okee, ladies and gents! Part 6, coming your wa...   Dec 13 2010, 10:21 PM
Acadian   Three comments here: 1. What a wonderful method ...   Dec 14 2010, 03:28 AM
mALX   Three comments here: 1. What a wonderful method...   Dec 14 2010, 04:55 AM
Petra Arkanian   Acadian: 1; Thx! :D 2; Thanks! my sister w...   Dec 14 2010, 01:24 PM
mALX   . Her father (who was more a scoundrel than anyth...   Dec 14 2010, 03:59 PM
Petra Arkanian   okay. Nevermind. :D sorry.   Dec 14 2010, 02:20 PM
Petra Arkanian   Wow, Thanks, mALX! I just kinda went along wit...   Dec 14 2010, 08:14 PM
mALX   Wow, Thanks, mALX! I just kinda went along wi...   Dec 14 2010, 08:24 PM
Petra Arkanian   Wow. So, thanks for your support! PART ... wh...   Dec 14 2010, 08:48 PM
mALX   The repartee between Seth and Alix is really well ...   Dec 14 2010, 09:45 PM
Acadian   Yes, some brisk and snappy dialogue between Seth a...   Dec 15 2010, 01:34 AM
Petra Arkanian   Yes, have been reading other fanfics (yours is be...   Dec 15 2010, 06:10 AM
mALX   Yes, have been reading other fanfics (yours is b...   Dec 15 2010, 06:17 AM
Destri Melarg   I completely agree with everything that mALX and A...   Dec 15 2010, 09:43 AM
Petra Arkanian   Destri Melarg: I believe the reason that Alex sacr...   Dec 15 2010, 07:34 PM
Petra Arkanian   PART 8 I was looking around the Merchants Inn, wo...   Dec 15 2010, 08:15 PM
mALX   Yeah !!! You got your avatar fixed ...   Dec 15 2010, 08:55 PM
Petra Arkanian   mALX: Yes, this is the avatar you sent me! Thx...   Dec 15 2010, 10:12 PM
mALX   mALX: Yes, this is the avatar you sent me! Th...   Dec 15 2010, 10:15 PM
Petra Arkanian   Okay, guys. Part 8 PART 8 It was nighttime. I h...   Dec 17 2010, 04:49 AM
mALX   ...er...huh? Is he...er...uh...mating with she...   Dec 17 2010, 04:05 PM
Petra Arkanian   No, mALX :closedeyes:, he's trying to get insi...   Dec 18 2010, 02:00 AM
mALX   No, mALX :closedeyes:, he's trying to get ins...   Dec 18 2010, 02:05 AM
Petra Arkanian   You guys crack me up. PART 9 I yawned. The sun s...   Dec 18 2010, 05:26 AM
mALX   GAAAAH !!! A cliffhanger !!...   Dec 18 2010, 07:38 AM
Petra Arkanian   PART 10 It was dark. That was the first thing tha...   Dec 20 2010, 08:48 PM
mALX   WOOOOOT !!!! Huge background you...   Dec 20 2010, 10:57 PM
Petra Arkanian   where are all my nit-finders? PART 11 "Seth...   Dec 22 2010, 06:59 AM
mALX   ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~...   Dec 23 2010, 12:56 AM
Shadowgale   Hey, this is a really good read! And it's ...   Dec 22 2010, 07:14 AM
Petra Arkanian   Welcome, Shadowgale! A nit-finder is someone l...   Dec 22 2010, 07:49 PM
Petra Arkanian   PART 12 A Seth hit the ground with a dull thud. ...   Dec 23 2010, 02:08 AM
mALX   GAAAAH!!!! Is he like the other ...   Dec 23 2010, 02:48 AM
Petra Arkanian   Ok, so I'm really bored right now, so I'm ...   Dec 23 2010, 05:08 AM
Petra Arkanian   Ok, guys. After the next post, I'm moving on t...   Dec 23 2010, 05:09 AM
Petra Arkanian   It is technically tomorrow yesterday, so, here...   Dec 23 2010, 01:43 PM
mALX   "I don't know." And then she gaspe...   Dec 30 2010, 08:40 PM


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