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Petra Arkanian |
Dec 6 2010, 10:16 PM
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Joined: 6-December 10
From: Stuck in The Planes Of Oblivion

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Ok. First, I need to know if this is where i post my fanfic. I'm gonna continue my story here anyway, but please, someone tell me if it's not. Okay. For the story. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Written By Petra
PART 1
The last thing I remember is a member of the Imperial Guard staring down at me. He was glaring (although I couldn't really be sure, as his helmet was blocking my view of everything) at me, with a sword in his hand, and a shield strapped to his arm. It was then that I passed out.
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When I came to, I was lying on a small, uncomfortable cot. In a jail cell.
Not good, I thought. Not good at all. I had never been the follow-the-law-to-the-ends-of-Tamriel type, of course, but I knew a few basic rules.
1: Do not get put in jail.
Well, okay, that's the only one I know. But still.
"Ahh, you're a pretty one, aren't you? A Nord, no? But it is all wasted. You're going to die in here! Don't you see? Die, Nord, die!"
The blue-skinned Dunmer ranted on for some time, his loud voice echoing through my prison cell, and amplifying his overly-annoy, nasaly-sounding voice.
'Just my luck,' I thought. 'Not only do I have to be next to this stupid Dunmer, but my cell has to have good accoustics, too!'
As soon as I decided that I would punch him when he next spoke, the sound of footsteps drowned out his rant, taking my opportunity of violence with it.
"Hurry up, Barus! I won't risk the Emperors' life on your slow gait!" snapped a bossy Breton female. But why was she talking about the Emperor ? That was madness! Even I was taught to show respect to him, and here she was, mentioning his name as causually as if...
Oh. The woman stepped forward, and behind her was a Redguard. And behind HIM was the Emperor. Nevermind, then.
"Oh, Captain Renevault, I highly doubt that I am in any danger with you three around," said the Emeror, sounding amused. The man in front of the Emperor chuckled. Then the Breton (Captain Renevault, I assumed) saw me.
"What's this prisoner doing in here?!" she barked, spitting the word 'prisoner' out of the back of her throat, as if it were something nasty she had found on the back of her shoe. "This cell is supposed to be off limits!"
"Usual mix-up at the Watch, probably," said the Redguard, Barus, sounding exasperated. Renevault fingered a key, and opened the door.
A man appeared behind the Emperor, and I barely had enough time to gasp before he attacked him. Surprisingly, the Emperor held his own, until the attacker, who was wearing shiny silver armour, slashed across his face.
But Captain Renevault threw herself in front of him, and the sword connected with her head. She cried out in pain, and looked at me eyes pleading, although I had no idea what for. Until I realized that she was looking at her sword. I scooped it up, and stabbed the attacker in the heart.
This post has been edited by Petra Arkanian: Dec 7 2010, 01:26 AM
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Dec 23 2010, 02:08 AM
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Joined: 6-December 10
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PART 12 A
Seth hit the ground with a dull thud.
"You're next!" whispered the man. I narrowed my eyes at the murderer of the boy who had just annonced his unwavering love for me.
"I beg to differ: you are next." Perhaps it was Seth's death, or my anger-management issues, or just pure adrenaline pulsing through my veins, but I next did someothing that I had never been able to do before: I launched myself through twenty uphill meters of air, and onto the man in red's back. And then I broke his neck. 'Ahh, victory is sweet,' was my last sane thought.
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The air seemed thick, pulsating, giving off the appearance that it was alive. It would have been disturbing, had I not been so out of it.
"Kh-eel her!" someone screeched, but they were dead before many of the others could turn around. Something happened then, something rather undescribable; I seemed to glow, and then, little bits of light shot off to the other red-clad followers, who then dropped to the ground, clutching their throats.
I rolled off the altar, dropped to the ground, and ran out, not bothering to loot the bodies of the still twitching followers.
Colours swirled around me, the ground moved, all sounds seemed deep and slow. But I kept running. Running and running, until, somehow, I found my way out. 'Why is this happening?' I wondered. It made no sense. I didn't know him, didn't even like him.
The dark, cold air slapped at my sweat-covered face, but I ran. Ran fast and hard, until I was sure that I could run no more.
"Alex." It sounded like Seth, but he was gone. Dead and gone.
"Alex!" I ignored the sound, knowing there would be nothing.
"Alex, listen to me." The voice was getting on my nerves, so I turned, and there he was. I skidded to a halt. "You're alive?" It was the same question I had asked not hours before, but now it was full of awe.
"I have no idea." This confused me. How could he have no idea about that sort of thing?
"Alex, pay attention."
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Part 12 B, From Seth's point of view.
Alex was staring at me, eyes blank and dead. It frightened me, to see her looking that way. She blinked, and her stance wavered. Then somehow, the toughest person I had ever know fainted. I caught her, marveling at my solid-seeming arms. Her black eyes opened, and she looked at me in wonder.
"Seth." And she passed out again. 'Where are we?' I wondered. It was cold enough to be near Bruma, but I had a feeling we weren't there. Oh, now I remembered. We were just north of Cheydinhal. I began trotting south, hoping I would get there before something attacted me.
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Petra Arkanian Concerned, But Powerless Dec 6 2010, 10:16 PM Tulustan Yup this is where you put your fan fic!
Nice... Dec 6 2010, 10:42 PM Petra Arkanian Thanks! Yeah, I've played the intro so man... Dec 6 2010, 10:53 PM SubRosa Hi Petra!
I enjoyed your protagonist's sa... Dec 7 2010, 12:25 AM Petra Arkanian I am indeed looking for a critic. Pick apart away,... Dec 7 2010, 12:28 AM SubRosa Ah, in that case I noticed several spelling errors... Dec 7 2010, 12:45 AM Petra Arkanian Thank you subrosa. For the tamriel part, I am fami... Dec 7 2010, 01:03 AM Petra Arkanian I think I got everything. Thank you! And NOW, ... Dec 7 2010, 01:28 AM Petra Arkanian Part 2
"Is she dead?" The Emperor's... Dec 7 2010, 01:52 AM Tulustan Wow, very young. Pretty strong to be able to kill ... Dec 7 2010, 02:10 AM Petra Arkanian Ahh, you're right, Tulustan. A good idea. And ... Dec 7 2010, 02:29 AM mALX Welcome to the forums! Dec 7 2010, 02:46 AM Zalphon Albeit short chapters, they're well-done. If ... Dec 7 2010, 03:12 AM Acadian Welcome to our wonderful fan fiction forum, Petra... Dec 7 2010, 03:32 AM SubRosa Off to a roaring start! You continue to change... Dec 7 2010, 06:41 PM Petra Arkanian SubRosa: Thank you so much, I do need a critic. Th... Dec 7 2010, 08:29 PM Destri Melarg Hi Petra, welcome to the forums. I see that you h... Dec 8 2010, 02:58 AM mALX
I hope these comments don’t seem overly harsh. T... Dec 8 2010, 03:06 AM Petra Arkanian Destri Melarg: Thank you, you are right. The gobli... Dec 8 2010, 03:05 AM Petra Arkanian Okay, here's my post for today. Hope there are... Dec 8 2010, 05:15 AM SubRosa Poor Baurus, not only dead but goblin food! Ew... Dec 8 2010, 08:46 PM Acadian Here we learn that as good as Alex seems to be wit... Dec 9 2010, 02:28 AM Destri Melarg Now I can see it. We know that the Dark Brotherho... Dec 10 2010, 02:27 AM Petra Arkanian Yes, that is what I was thinking.But... don't ... Dec 10 2010, 09:44 PM SubRosa You mean Baurus will return from the grave to wrea... Dec 10 2010, 10:26 PM mALX Amazing improvements in your story and writing in ... Dec 11 2010, 04:03 AM Petra Arkanian Okay, guys. part 5. Enjoy.
PART 5
I shivered vio... Dec 12 2010, 08:16 PM SubRosa My that drunk's accent was so think an elephan... Dec 12 2010, 08:59 PM Acadian So, our rather mature wine-sipping twelve year lea... Dec 13 2010, 02:47 AM Destri Melarg Whew, it seems that Baurus survived. That was a p... Dec 13 2010, 08:58 PM Petra Arkanian SubRosa: Oops, you're right! Sometime spel... Dec 13 2010, 09:39 PM Petra Arkanian Okee, ladies and gents! Part 6, coming your wa... Dec 13 2010, 10:21 PM Acadian Three comments here:
1. What a wonderful method ... Dec 14 2010, 03:28 AM mALX
Three comments here:
1. What a wonderful method... Dec 14 2010, 04:55 AM Petra Arkanian Acadian: 1; Thx! :D 2; Thanks! my sister w... Dec 14 2010, 01:24 PM Petra Arkanian Okay! The bio on everything that has happened ... Dec 14 2010, 02:10 PM mALX
. Her father (who was more a scoundrel than anyth... Dec 14 2010, 03:59 PM Petra Arkanian okay. Nevermind. :D sorry. Dec 14 2010, 02:20 PM Petra Arkanian Wow, Thanks, mALX! I just kinda went along wit... Dec 14 2010, 08:14 PM mALX
Wow, Thanks, mALX! I just kinda went along wi... Dec 14 2010, 08:24 PM Petra Arkanian Wow. So, thanks for your support!
PART ... wh... Dec 14 2010, 08:48 PM mALX The repartee between Seth and Alix is really well ... Dec 14 2010, 09:45 PM Acadian Yes, some brisk and snappy dialogue between Seth a... Dec 15 2010, 01:34 AM Petra Arkanian Yes, have been reading other fanfics (yours is be... Dec 15 2010, 06:10 AM mALX
Yes, have been reading other fanfics (yours is b... Dec 15 2010, 06:17 AM Destri Melarg I completely agree with everything that mALX and A... Dec 15 2010, 09:43 AM Petra Arkanian Destri Melarg: I believe the reason that Alex sacr... Dec 15 2010, 07:34 PM Petra Arkanian PART 8
I was looking around the Merchants Inn, wo... Dec 15 2010, 08:15 PM mALX Yeah !!! You got your avatar fixed ... Dec 15 2010, 08:55 PM Petra Arkanian mALX: Yes, this is the avatar you sent me! Thx... Dec 15 2010, 10:12 PM mALX
mALX: Yes, this is the avatar you sent me! Th... Dec 15 2010, 10:15 PM Petra Arkanian Okay, guys. Part 8
PART 8
It was nighttime. I h... Dec 17 2010, 04:49 AM mALX
...er...huh? Is he...er...uh...mating with she... Dec 17 2010, 04:05 PM Petra Arkanian No, mALX :closedeyes:, he's trying to get insi... Dec 18 2010, 02:00 AM mALX
No, mALX :closedeyes:, he's trying to get ins... Dec 18 2010, 02:05 AM Petra Arkanian You guys crack me up.
PART 9
I yawned. The sun s... Dec 18 2010, 05:26 AM mALX GAAAAH !!! A cliffhanger !!... Dec 18 2010, 07:38 AM Petra Arkanian PART 10
It was dark. That was the first thing tha... Dec 20 2010, 08:48 PM mALX WOOOOOT !!!! Huge background you... Dec 20 2010, 10:57 PM Petra Arkanian where are all my nit-finders?
PART 11
"Seth... Dec 22 2010, 06:59 AM mALX
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~... Dec 23 2010, 12:56 AM Shadowgale Hey, this is a really good read! And it's ... Dec 22 2010, 07:14 AM Petra Arkanian Welcome, Shadowgale! A nit-finder is someone l... Dec 22 2010, 07:49 PM mALX GAAAAH!!!! Is he like the other ... Dec 23 2010, 02:48 AM Petra Arkanian Ok, so I'm really bored right now, so I'm ... Dec 23 2010, 05:08 AM Petra Arkanian Ok, guys. After the next post, I'm moving on t... Dec 23 2010, 05:09 AM Petra Arkanian It is technically tomorrow yesterday, so, here... Dec 23 2010, 01:43 PM mALX
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