Story of a Battlemage Options

[Doommeister]

Hi Everyone

I would just like to say thanks to everyone who has inspired me to write a story, namely Acadian, Malx, H.E.R, Minque, Black Hand, and many others.

I know it's only a short start, but please bear with me.

I welcome any and all criticism, as I am only a new writer. Hope you enjoy

Arrival

I finally arrived at the Imperial City from Vvardenfall. The night before we docked I had a strange dream.

As I dreamed, I saw an old man in purple and blue robes, with three swordsmen fleeing through what looked like underground passages. they were ambushed by mortals in Daedric armour, and the old man was struck down.

His assassin grabbed an amulet from the old Imperial's neck, but was killed by the Redguard swordsman, who was screaming in anger. A rat came out of nowhere, grabbed the amulet, dodged the Redguard's grab and scurried off.

Strangely enough though, the old Imperial seemed to know I was watching, as he looked at me and desperately gasped out, "Find the Amulet of Kings and go to Jauffre in Chorrol."


Shaking, I was woken up by the ship's captain. Picking up my sword, armour, and several books I was led over to the Imperial Immigration office.

The stout Imperial who was sitting behind the large desk asked me a few questions, such as:

"What is your name, sera?"
I told him "Kael'thas Serethi"
"When were you born?"
I replied "30th Sun's Dawn 3E412"
"Your occupation?"
I said "Battlemage"
"And what is your purpose in coming to Cyrodiil?"

Getting frustrated with the ongoing questions, I spat out "I would like to explore this part of Tamriel. Is my interview over yet?"
The immigration officer sighed and told me to go.

As I walked out of the office, an Ayleid ruin seemed to jump into my sight.

This post has been edited by Doommeister: Jul 5 2011, 03:17 PM

[Doommeister]

@everyone: I used an alternate start mod. so didn't actually go through the tutorial. having said that, im going to have to go through it to flesh out the story.

H.E.R: Thanks for the advice. as i said above, I used an alternative start mod, so I'm going to have to disable it and start again to remember how it goes. As for the misspellings, it will be rare you will find any, as I have always been an excellent speller. It's the grammar and run-on sentences that will trip me up.

I will redo the beginning, and post it up when I can. Oh, while my character tells me he will do the MQ, he feels a need to join a certain guild first, he doesn't know why though

[mALX]

@everyone: I used an alternate start mod. so didn't actually go through the tutorial. having said that, im going to have to go through it to flesh out the story.

H.E.R: Thanks for the advice. as i said above, I used an alternative start mod, so I'm going to have to disable it and start again to remember how it goes. As for the misspellings, it will be rare you will find any, as I have always been an excellent speller. It's the grammar and run-on sentences that will trip me up.

I will redo the beginning, and post it up when I can. Oh, while my character tells me he will do the MQ, he feels a need to join a certain guild first, he doesn't know why though

You shouldn't change your story unless that is something you wish to do. (I hope you didn't miss-interpret HER's comment to mean "do the tutorial" - I'm sure that isn't what she meant). The twist you put on that beginning was your own imagination at work - and AWESOME !!!! I use mods too, and a lot of my story reflects it. SubRosa's story is the same way, as is Acadian's.

The tutorial dungeon has been done and redone - but in all these times no one made it a dream with a rat stealing the amulet. Your beginning is unique, highly intriguing, interesting! Please don't alter what you want to do.

As HER pointed out, I am no skilled writer - just someone who enjoys the game and writing about my character - believe me, I do not take offence from that at all, it is true.

In my story, in SubRosa's and Acadian's story - there are times when our stories brush with the game quests. The rest of the story is all our own imaginations - places we wanted to go in Tamriel, things we wanted to do there that had nothing to do with following the questlines.

I just want to see you write the story that makes you happy to write, because if you change what you have in mind (for others) your inspiration will dry up. Follow your own heart and mind for what you want your character to experience - because that is a ride none of us have been on yet !!! And it sounds great so far !!

(Of course, I am not talking about not fixing spelling errors or grammar gaffs, lol. - I def fix those if they are pointed out to me - just make your content whatever way you are inspired to do it)

This post has been edited by mALX: Jul 5 2011, 12:27 AM

[Acadian]

Nice! I am really looking forward to what happens to your battlemage. Sniff, sniff. Do I smell that Ayleid ruin beckoning?

This post has been edited by Acadian: Jul 6 2011, 12:23 AM