Battle of Red Mountain Options

[davion]

Hey check this out jona and you others out there and tell me what you think of the start of this and if we should persue it, we were lookin for a base to it so i figured i would throw an idea out there tell me what cha think.

Chapter 1

As we aproached the base of Red Mountain, i could feel the tension and fear of my men under my comand givin to me by Lord Nerevar. I am not afraid to admit it, i was afraid to, mostly for the life of my men and their children and wifes they would leave behind. But even with all the tension of the battle that was to come, i saw Lord Nerevar, Vivec, Soltha Sil, Alemexia and Dagoth Ur sitting there on their horses that they had imported from Cyrodill years back, calm as the night sky. Lord Nerevar on the other hand, despite the cool, calm look that was washed over his face, i could tell he was deeply troubbled.

Lord Nerevar and the Dwemer king were great friends, brothers you might say, and it broke Lord Nerevars heart to hear that his dearest friend would betray him like that, and that he had no other choice but to kill him. I noticed Lord Nerevar wisper something into Dagoth Urs' ear and then Dagoth Ur turned around and came over to me and said,

"My good friend Darius, by Lord Nerevars wishes, i command you that when the fighting starts, you and 1,000 other of your men go the back route to the core of Red Mountain and clear a path to the Heart of Lorkhan." Dagoth Ur told me, cheerfully, like he was Oblivious to the onslaught the Dwemer and Nordic Allience would bring us. I mean, how could a group of just 1,000 men make their way through 25,000 Nords and Dwemers. I had the upmost confidence in my men yes, but not even Azura could deal with those odds.

[minque]

Well it´s a pretty good start but you´d have to check the spelling, that would improve it, se minor corrections below! So keep it up and tell us more....mkay?

[quote]Chapter 1

As we approached the base of Red Mountain, i could feel the tension and fear of my men under my command givin to me by Lord Nerevar. I am not afraid to admit it, i was afraid too, mostly for the life of my men and their children and wives they would leave behind. But even with all the tension of the battle that was to come, i saw Lord Nerevar, Vivec, Soltha Sil, Almalexia and Dagoth Ur sitting there on their horses that they had imported from Cyrodiil years back, calm as the night sky. Lord Nerevar on the other hand, despite the cool, calm look th at was washed over his face, i could tell he was deeply troubled.

Lord Nerevar and the Dwemer king were great friends, brothers you might say, and it broke Lord Nerevars heart to hear that his dearest friend would betray him like that, and that he had no other choice but to kill him. I noticed Lord Nerevar wisper something into Dagoth Urs' ear and then Dagoth Ur turned around and came over to me and said,

"My good friend Darius, by Lord Nerevars wishes, i command you that when the fighting starts, you and 1,000 other of your men go the back route to the core of Red Mountain and clear a path to the Heart of Lorkhan." Dagoth Ur told me, cheerfully, like he was Oblivious to the onslaught the Dwemer and Nordic Alliance would bring us. I mean, how could a group of just 1,000 men make their way through 25,000 Nords and Dwemers. I had the upmost confidence in my men yes, but not even Azura could deal with those odds.[/quote]