Hmm I think I know which side Seth- Dralas will take then.
A good three parts, his taking a new name as a good touch and makes sense. Such a thing might have been a dramatic moment, it shows how out of sorts he is that he hadn't preplanned. Though his choice makes perfect sense.
Carnius is another I liked, you seem to be portraying him more as incompetent, or at least lazy. I'll be interested to see if he sharpens up a bit when he realises how good Seth is at various things.
His fitting into the new landscape should be fun.
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Look behind you and see an ever decreasing number of ghosts. Currently about 15.
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