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Shades of Ending, set after the oblivion MQ |
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Olen |
Aug 2 2011, 10:53 PM
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Mouth

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Well it’s been a while, a long while, since I posted anything. I have been writing, some stuff which was non-TES, a false start which I spent too long fighting… There’s also another ~80k piece which I’ve left on a hard drive in Scotland so I’m taking a hiatus. Anyway I decided I fancied posting something. This is unplanned and unfinished. I prefer to write all of something with a lot of planning and then post, but this time I thought I’d just let it flow and see what comes. Hopefully it won’t be too unpolished and I intend to make it more episodic so if I do lose interest for a bit it shouldn’t matter so much. The plan is to post one section while I write another, that way any criticisms can be addressed as I go. Anyway without any more waffle a short intro. Shades of Ending 1.1 QuestioningThe prisoner met Verus’s eye across the scarred table. The watchman swallowed. “It does not look good for you,” his voice was quiet. He knew he should feel disgust, hatred even for what the man had done. But it was tempered. Perhaps it was because the man had more brain than most of the scum they dragged into the Cheydinhal prison. Or perhaps it was because he understood why, though he’d never admit it. Or it could just have been the passing resemblance to his son. Same dark hair and eyes, and not so different features. Damn he hated this place, the sooner the investigation was over the sooner he could go and see the real thing back in the Imperial City. Not that distraction like this helped. The prisoner looked back, “I’m fetched aren’t I?” Verus winced at the tone and nodded. “Ferir,” he said the man’s name, gave him that much respect, “double murder of Imperial guards only leads to the gallows.” “And it doesn’t matter that it was self defence, that they were trying to kill me? Had already killed my friends. We didn’t attack them.” “It doesn’t matter. And even if it did you’re guilty of enough else to string you up. Possession with intent to supply – don’t tell me that much skooma was for personal use, our mage says you’re clean anyway. Bootlegging. Smuggling. As little as I like it you had it coming.” Ferir nodded. Verus could hardly believe it, they were always full of guar apples. Fake bravado to start with which slowly decayed into pleading. There was fear there certainly, he reeked of it, it was in the way he sat and moved. There was pain too, but mainly Verus thought it was resignation in the prisoner’s voice when he spoke. “Can you at least tell me who you killed?” “I’m not meant to.” The gaze from the dark eyes flashed fierce like glowdust on a fire. It was the same spark which had cost the lives of two of the Imperial Legionaries who had raided the smugglers cavern, and it caught Verus off guard. “You have a family.” It was a statement. “The people in that cave were as close to family as I’d found. You come and kill them, and within the next couple of days…” His gaze dipped to the scored boards of the table in the interrogation room. It slid uneasily round the manacles which held him. “I just want to know if any of them lived.” “The patrol killed five. A two humans, a man and a woman, two khajit and a dunmer male.” If you had better luck you’d have been in that list. Verus didn’t add the thought, its truth was too bitter. The eyes screwed closed. “The dunmer, what colour was his hair?” “Red.” Verus watched Ferir deflate. His eyes shut and he thumped his wrists against the table, the chain which held them didn’t allow space for it to make more than a dull thud. He muttered something Verus didn’t catch, and decided not to press. When Ferir finally opened his eyes again they were bloodshot. “Have you got what you want now?” There was anger in his voice, but also sadness, enough to suppress the flames, if not entirely quench them. “You know someone got away, you’ve got our contacts. I’m in pain, several of my closest friends are dead. Have you done enough?” Verus frowned, it wasn’t something he was used to. Lines about choosing this fate when he chose crime seemed flimsy, paper props for the tragicomedy which passed as justice in this town. Ferir hadn’t lied about the pain either, the man was a mass of bruises. The legionaries had worked him over, and who could blame them? He wasn’t the only one to lose friends. Occasionally his hands would sneak towards the lower ribs on one side only to be rudely stopped by the chain. Not that they’d waste healing on a condemned prisoner. You should have died in that cave. Verus shook his head, trying to dislodge the malaise which had built. He stood, this was too discomfiting. For a moment he struggled for words, then gave up and offered Ferir a single nod before leaving.
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Look behind you and see an ever decreasing number of ghosts. Currently about 15.
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Olen |
Feb 11 2012, 07:39 PM
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Mouth

Joined: 1-November 07
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McBadgere - Glad you're enjoying it. Here's another part.
SubRosa - Thanks for picking up on the nit, I do try! I just can't see the difference between them until someone points it out. The 'tail oil' line just came to me as I was writing. As for what Ruben did, well...
mALX - It's good to know that this piece is growing on you. Glad you liked the lines.
Grits - Shopping trips are great, I find writing normal stuff just as fun as the magic/ action etc.
The last part saw Ferir doing some hangover shopping before Ruben appeared looking flustered.
2.4 Fortune
"What?" Ferir looked at Ruben with mixed confusion and irritation.
"Dreck went down badly last night." Ruben glanced behind him, there was nothing but other shoppers perusing the stalls, "people are trying to kill me."
Azura's balls, what is his problem, thought Ferir. "It happens sometimes. Kill them back, better." The distraught look didn't shift. He waited a moment before continuing with a sigh. "Details?"
"I had a few drinks, chatted with a few people. Kept it safe and close like, everyone here seems to. Anyway I got a buy in on a poker table-"
Ferir groaned, that was rarely a good start. "Who with, where?"
"A dingy hole over the other side. Called itself the Caravan Club-"
"Dreck," Ferir cut him off, "Frek." He spat. "Any mention of the Orum gang? Walker camp perhaps?"
Ruben's face told him all he needed to know.
He shook his head. "You only hooked up with the frekking Camonna you plank. What happened?"
Ruben swallowed and glanced around again. He looked more rattled than before. "There were a few. They were playing Low Bravil, that should have warned me. It was a big table to start with but I'm good, and I know the tricks. A couple of the dark elf scum were daubing, once you see the system it works for you too, or you can wipe them..." He coughed. "The dealer started double duking. Anyway once you're know they're cheating you can piggy back. I won five hundred drakes."
The terms meant little to Ferir but he understood numbers. "So you cheated."
"No," Ruben held up his hands. "I wouldn't do that. Not here anyway. They cheated, I just made sure it worked to my advantage."
"So you wandered away from a game the Camonna had rigged with half a grand? And that didn't seem like a bad idea?"
"They tried to kill me! I managed to escape into a crowd and hide in a logpile for the night." His voice was almost whining.
Ferir paused. It was bad, but he'd dealt with bad before. He could send Ruben on his way and be rid of the man, but he already knew he wouldn't. Friends were few and far between, Carbo's Camp probably wasn't safe for him and certainly wasn't for Ruben. Ruben would follow him too and bad company was better than none, especially company who could handle himself.
There was always Relthas. He could go crawling back - the five hundred would almost cover the debt. Never. That was one vow he had no intention of breaking. The five hundred might be enough to convince a suitably large, and insane, group to sort out the Camonna problem. It was attractive but other than the issue with dealing with marauders there was politics to be thought of. Hitting the Camonna, even in Carbo's, would upset the balance and if it led back to him his life expectancy would suffer.
He sighed. "We run," he said. Ruben nodded and Ferir continued, "it would be too hard to sort out here, and frankly keeping the money sounds better."
"Good," Ruben nodded, his gaze hadn't stopped roving. He was breathing hard too. "I have my pack... Do you need to collect yours?" He added it as an afterthought.
"No," Ferir snorted, "I wouldn’t let anything out of my sight in this place, I've grabbed most of the supplies we need too." He turned to Holga, "Looks like I need to bounce," he gave a half grin, "I'll stop by next time I'm in the area."
"And cause chaos again no doubt. If I'm not here I'll leave word with someone."
"You're thinking of leaving?"
She made a face. "What is there here really? I was going to talk about it but-"
A shout cut her off. Ruben almost spun he turned so fast, Ferir was only an instant behind. "Oi, there he is."
Three imperials pushed their way through the crowds towards them. Ruben already had his sword out, Ferir reached for his axe but kept the head down for the moment. Instead he freed his right hand for casting and let a smile flicker around the edge of his lips.
The three stopped just out of lunging range. Each had the brown hair and sharp features of a Colovian and wore mismatched armour. The man in the centre had the best of it, a face like a rotten apple rose from a battered steel cuirass. It was more scarred than even his equipment. But it was the woman on the right who spoke first. Her hair was long, but in need of care and her nose had a kink where it had been broken.
When she spoke her voice had the gritty sound left by smoking heavily for a long time, or taking the cheap stuff too often. Ferir shuddered. "We hear there's a hit out on you," she said to Ruben in the cocky tone of someone who was used to bullying others.
"Yes," the man in the centre took over, "but we also hear you have coin. We might be willing to let you live." He tipped his head.
"I might be willing to let you live," said Ferir. Holga had dropped back into the onlookers - nothing attracted a crowd like a promise of death - and was working her way behind them. Ferir allowed the smile to linger, "but I'm not sure about my friend."
Ruben made a big show of lifting the coin bag and looking at it. Then he tossed it halfway between him and the leader and met the leader's eye, "I'm willing to die picking that up," he said with with a calm certainty. "Are you?"
For a moment the leader looked uncertain under the fury of the nord's gaze then the woman shouted, "Frekking get them!"
Ruben sprung into action. The leader scarcely blocked a thunderous swing which sent his sword arm back as it passed then whipped round at his leg.
Ferir looked away and back to the woman who was surging forward at Ruben. He called on the thread of magic inside and let it form in a torrent to his fingers. It glowed and he threw the flame. It was weak though and did little more than scorch her dry dandruffy hair. It was enough distraction though as he swung in with his axe. There was a male scream, not Ruben. It was all his attention bothered with as the axe was deflected by a sword and scratched other the edge of the woman's armour getting a snarl from her. As the weight carried him on she flicked her sword into his arm.
He felt the flesh open and dampness pour out. He jumped back but her blade was up to defend and she didn't press. He shifted the axe to his left hand and she stalked forward. He needed a moment to stop the blood. Pain blossomed in the arm, he couldn't feel where exactly, as he threw it forward. She flinched back expecting a fireball. He took the moment to cast a frenzied healing spell, the biting cold of it burned in the wound for a flash then the pain was less. He swapped the axe back as she pressed again. He blocked the first then as she returned with the back swing he leapt forward with a speed she couldn’t match in her armour and was behind her. He left hand raked at her face finding eyes and he dug his fingers in and pulled back. Her head tipped as the swing carried her round and off balance. A firm stamp through her knee felled her. Ferir didn't waste an instant in delivering a solid axe blow to her gut. The narrow blade struck plumb and went though the armour effortlessly. He twisted it and pulled it out in a torrent of red.
He turned to see the leader in a pool of blood with his face caved in and Ruben pressing the final mercenary hard. He stepped back then a large figure in a checked shirt stepped from the crowd with a bottle. Holga. She broke it over his head and swore viscously as she drove the broken end into his side. He fell dropping his sword as he did.
Ruben stepped up to finish the job.
"Don't," said Holga, "Jerine doesn't like fights in the streets. Says it lacks decorum, whatever that is. She'll want words with this." She prodded the writhing man. "You boys had best run before more come," she gave half a smile then turned to the stall keeper behind her. "And so had you worm. Sheen jars aren't meant to break when you hit people with them. That was full."
Ruben scooped up the coin bag and Ferir grabbed his arm and headed for the edge of the camp.
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Look behind you and see an ever decreasing number of ghosts. Currently about 15.
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Olen Shades of Ending Aug 2 2011, 10:53 PM haute ecole rider Yay, you're writing and posting again! :D ... Aug 2 2011, 11:40 PM SubRosa It is good to see you back and writing again Olen... Aug 3 2011, 12:23 AM Acadian Welcome back to writing! And a fine start you... Aug 3 2011, 12:36 AM Destri Melarg Ah, Olen is posting again. This is a sure indicat... Aug 3 2011, 04:57 AM Olen Seeing as the last part was rather short, and got ... Aug 4 2011, 09:25 PM haute ecole rider Okay, let me get a couple of nits out of the way f... Aug 4 2011, 10:51 PM Black Hand I like it! I like it! The intro shows us a... Aug 4 2011, 10:58 PM SubRosa So it looks like Ferir was cooking up meth in the ... Aug 4 2011, 11:03 PM Acadian This followed smoothly on the heels of the previou... Aug 5 2011, 02:32 AM Grits I liked seeing Ferir from Verus’s POV first. We ge... Aug 5 2011, 12:49 PM King Coin Ferir was "fetched" as soon a the guards... Aug 5 2011, 03:40 PM treydog This is grim and dark and entirely engrossing. It... Aug 7 2011, 03:20 PM Olen HER - Nits fixed, as ever my utter reliance on spe... Aug 8 2011, 10:50 PM haute ecole rider First the nit: It looks like the 'u' swi... Aug 8 2011, 11:22 PM SubRosa An Occurrence At Owl Creek Bridge is a classic pie... Aug 8 2011, 11:58 PM Destri Melarg Well, I think there are probably more industrious ... Aug 9 2011, 10:07 AM Acadian So, Ferir has an uneasy and unlikely alliance... Aug 10 2011, 12:45 AM Grits Ferir made a good case for Ruben not choking him t... Aug 12 2011, 12:14 AM Olen HER - nit fixed, silly letters and their orders...... Aug 13 2011, 10:57 AM Grits Old town doesn’t sound like a polished brass and w... Aug 15 2011, 08:03 PM Destri Melarg I loved the description of Ferir's ordeal at t... Aug 15 2011, 09:26 PM SubRosa he’s always wanting to blame rouge mages since Far... Aug 16 2011, 02:34 AM King Coin 1.3 - It’s nice to have friends in high places, or... Aug 17 2011, 09:27 PM mALX I just now saw this, Olen! Haven't been g... Aug 21 2011, 12:42 PM Olen All - Sorry for the delay, RL has become hectic an... Aug 25 2011, 11:14 PM haute ecole rider Tell me about RL! Two major projects last week... Aug 26 2011, 12:16 AM Destri Melarg After that first paragraph remind me to steer clea... Aug 26 2011, 08:41 AM SubRosa You certainly have painted us a vile picture of Ch... Aug 26 2011, 08:49 PM Grits I took the two moth-eaten travelers to be Ferir an... Aug 31 2011, 05:31 PM Olen Haute - I think you might remain undecided about t... Aug 31 2011, 10:46 PM haute ecole rider I'll leave the occasional nit for someone else... Sep 1 2011, 12:01 AM SubRosa I've always seen Cyrodiil as quite a dark plac... Sep 1 2011, 11:16 PM Grits I loved seeing Ferir from Ruben’s POV, just his re... Sep 2 2011, 03:24 PM Zalphon "He only warned them off after he had to use ... Sep 2 2011, 04:39 PM Destri Melarg
Ruben woke with a sore back. He opened his eyes ... Sep 3 2011, 01:38 AM Olen RL has been rather hectic of late but I have anoth... Nov 17 2011, 11:30 PM SubRosa bloody dark elves are all the same.
I loved this. ... Nov 17 2011, 11:55 PM McBadgere
Oh hell yeah...I'm a sucker for a good quot... Nov 18 2011, 05:35 AM Grits I don’t have a lore answer for life spans, but I d... Nov 20 2011, 12:58 AM SubRosa I forgot you asked. Lifespans depend on the game. ... Nov 20 2011, 01:17 AM haute ecole rider What a delight to meet Ruben and Ferir again. I re... Nov 21 2011, 04:41 AM Olen SubRosa - Magic is likely to play a big part in th... Nov 27 2011, 06:46 PM SubRosa First off, the title has me thinking of this song.... Nov 27 2011, 07:24 PM Grits I love every word of this update, even the parts a... Dec 6 2011, 03:56 AM mALX GAAAAH, you have changed your writing style! ... Dec 6 2011, 06:58 AM Olen Sorry all, another delay after an unusually crazy ... Dec 11 2011, 12:36 PM McBadgere Helloo!!...*Waves*...
I like your story..... Dec 11 2011, 05:17 PM SubRosa Carbo’s camp sat like a rotting fruit in the bowl ... Dec 11 2011, 07:01 PM haute ecole rider And so we enter the squalor that is Carbo's Ca... Dec 11 2011, 07:16 PM Olen McBadgere - Thanks for reading, glad you're en... Dec 20 2011, 09:49 PM mALX The dialogue rules this chapter, Great Write ... Dec 21 2011, 03:29 AM McBadgere Fair enough!... :D ...
Most excellent chapter... Dec 21 2011, 05:35 AM Fawkes Oh, I really enjoy this! Really great write... Dec 21 2011, 07:13 AM SubRosa “That crazy bark biter?”
Teresa is one of his old ... Dec 21 2011, 05:56 PM Grits I love your decision to show the meeting with Relt... Dec 28 2011, 01:56 AM Olen Sorry for being slow. RL is devouring me just now... Jan 29 2012, 10:37 PM McBadgere YAY!!... :D ...
A pleasure...*Bows*...
L... Jan 30 2012, 06:12 AM SubRosa Ferir is perusing the priceless treasures junkpile... Jan 30 2012, 07:22 PM mALX *
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Love that line ... Jan 30 2012, 08:11 PM Grits No ballerina for Holga? So close! :D
It was g... Feb 3 2012, 12:27 AM McBadgere Likee!!!... :D ...
An excellent chapt... Feb 11 2012, 08:37 PM SubRosa "It happens sometimes. Kill them back, better... Feb 12 2012, 06:46 PM Grits
:lol: Do not come crying to Ferir about a minor ... Feb 13 2012, 02:38 AM Olen Sorry for the delay again... a mixture of uni and ... Feb 28 2012, 12:58 AM McBadgere Ooooh, that's nice that is!!...
Love ... Feb 28 2012, 04:29 AM SubRosa I made some bad decisions.
I am thinking that is a... Feb 28 2012, 07:47 PM Grits It was just a line that made me think of Mal. Here... Mar 6 2012, 02:36 AM Athynae The story, the characters, the color of the writin... Mar 12 2012, 01:23 AM Olen And another delay... This will progress albeit slo... Mar 27 2012, 09:35 PM McBadgere That was just brilliant!!!...Incredibl... Mar 28 2012, 01:08 PM SubRosa The Necromancer's Moon! I loved your descr... Mar 28 2012, 11:19 PM Grits "Really," Ferir flowed up onto his haunc... Mar 30 2012, 05:18 AM Olen McBadgere - Thanks for the comment, it's good ... Apr 11 2012, 06:45 PM McBadgere Brilliant!! As ever!... ;) :D ...
Th... Apr 12 2012, 03:35 AM Athynae Yep, yep, yep, joy it is as always. Somewhere whil... Apr 12 2012, 12:00 PM SubRosa No worries about the nits. That is why every profe... Apr 12 2012, 08:26 PM ghastley
[b]outwith the constraints of morality and the la... Apr 12 2012, 10:07 PM Grits I liked that first shaky moment while they all con... Apr 16 2012, 04:11 AM haute ecole rider Thank you for your glacial pace!! It allow... May 9 2012, 09:16 PM Lady Saga Hey Olen, I'm Renee. This thread bounced up so... May 10 2012, 10:17 PM Olen Sorry for the massive delay in posting. As it tur... May 25 2012, 10:39 PM SubRosa The pre-dawn light washed the forest in blood.
It ... May 26 2012, 01:18 AM haute ecole rider So Ruben isn't so certain about Adriel, is he ... May 26 2012, 01:45 AM Grits Adriel (or as Ruben thinks of her, “the witch” :D)... May 27 2012, 02:26 PM McBadgere
Well I do...Mysterious, powerful, hot...Cryptic ... May 29 2012, 04:44 AM
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