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Olen
post Aug 2 2011, 10:53 PM
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Well it’s been a while, a long while, since I posted anything. I have been writing, some stuff which was non-TES, a false start which I spent too long fighting… There’s also another ~80k piece which I’ve left on a hard drive in Scotland so I’m taking a hiatus. Anyway I decided I fancied posting something.

This is unplanned and unfinished. I prefer to write all of something with a lot of planning and then post, but this time I thought I’d just let it flow and see what comes. Hopefully it won’t be too unpolished and I intend to make it more episodic so if I do lose interest for a bit it shouldn’t matter so much. The plan is to post one section while I write another, that way any criticisms can be addressed as I go.

Anyway without any more waffle a short intro.

Shades of Ending



1.1 Questioning

The prisoner met Verus’s eye across the scarred table. The watchman swallowed. “It does not look good for you,” his voice was quiet. He knew he should feel disgust, hatred even for what the man had done. But it was tempered. Perhaps it was because the man had more brain than most of the scum they dragged into the Cheydinhal prison. Or perhaps it was because he understood why, though he’d never admit it. Or it could just have been the passing resemblance to his son. Same dark hair and eyes, and not so different features.

Damn he hated this place, the sooner the investigation was over the sooner he could go and see the real thing back in the Imperial City. Not that distraction like this helped.

The prisoner looked back, “I’m fetched aren’t I?”

Verus winced at the tone and nodded. “Ferir,” he said the man’s name, gave him that much respect, “double murder of Imperial guards only leads to the gallows.”

“And it doesn’t matter that it was self defence, that they were trying to kill me? Had already killed my friends. We didn’t attack them.”

“It doesn’t matter. And even if it did you’re guilty of enough else to string you up. Possession with intent to supply – don’t tell me that much skooma was for personal use, our mage says you’re clean anyway. Bootlegging. Smuggling. As little as I like it you had it coming.”

Ferir nodded.

Verus could hardly believe it, they were always full of guar apples. Fake bravado to start with which slowly decayed into pleading. There was fear there certainly, he reeked of it, it was in the way he sat and moved. There was pain too, but mainly Verus thought it was resignation in the prisoner’s voice when he spoke. “Can you at least tell me who you killed?”

“I’m not meant to.” The gaze from the dark eyes flashed fierce like glowdust on a fire. It was the same spark which had cost the lives of two of the Imperial Legionaries who had raided the smugglers cavern, and it caught Verus off guard.

“You have a family.” It was a statement. “The people in that cave were as close to family as I’d found. You come and kill them, and within the next couple of days…” His gaze dipped to the scored boards of the table in the interrogation room. It slid uneasily round the manacles which held him. “I just want to know if any of them lived.”

“The patrol killed five. A two humans, a man and a woman, two khajit and a dunmer male.” If you had better luck you’d have been in that list. Verus didn’t add the thought, its truth was too bitter.

The eyes screwed closed. “The dunmer, what colour was his hair?”

“Red.” Verus watched Ferir deflate. His eyes shut and he thumped his wrists against the table, the chain which held them didn’t allow space for it to make more than a dull thud. He muttered something Verus didn’t catch, and decided not to press.

When Ferir finally opened his eyes again they were bloodshot. “Have you got what you want now?” There was anger in his voice, but also sadness, enough to suppress the flames, if not entirely quench them. “You know someone got away, you’ve got our contacts. I’m in pain, several of my closest friends are dead. Have you done enough?”

Verus frowned, it wasn’t something he was used to. Lines about choosing this fate when he chose crime seemed flimsy, paper props for the tragicomedy which passed as justice in this town. Ferir hadn’t lied about the pain either, the man was a mass of bruises. The legionaries had worked him over, and who could blame them? He wasn’t the only one to lose friends. Occasionally his hands would sneak towards the lower ribs on one side only to be rudely stopped by the chain.

Not that they’d waste healing on a condemned prisoner. You should have died in that cave. Verus shook his head, trying to dislodge the malaise which had built. He stood, this was too discomfiting. For a moment he struggled for words, then gave up and offered Ferir a single nod before leaving.


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Olen
post Feb 28 2012, 12:58 AM
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Sorry for the delay again... a mixture of uni and RL dramas.

McBadgere - glad you're enjoying, things should speed up a bit for a while now (in pacing of the story that is, posting is likely to remain erratic to be honest).

SubRosa - The 'new' swear words are nesecary really, when I write dialogue I try to let it flow as people talk, and people swear. There's only so many ways of conveying the same intent as @#$&! It's good to know Ferir staying with Ruben is making sense too.

Grits - Thanks for the comment, it's always good to know the piece is going over well. Not sure who the Malcolm Reynolds tribute is... I certainly am a massive Firefly fan though and on thinking of smugglers he would spring to mind so there's probably a bit thrown in.


3.1 Western Glow

Ferir hummed a snatch of a tune as he stretched in the late afternoon sun. His cloak was spread under him over the dry leaves at the base of a large beech tree, his newly oiled armour next to it along with their gear. Perhaps later there could be a fire, but for now it was warm enough and he didn't want the smoke. A stream babbled a short way from him. The spot was just too perfect to pass up even if there was a couple of hours of good light left.

They would be followed, he was certain of that much. You didn't leave Carbo's without protection and with that much money unnoticed, and there would be commotion over the Camonna. Jerine was going to be annoyed, that tended to end badly for someone. None of it mattered though. He'd kept to the wilds mainly using the tracks cut by animals rather than those laid by men. He was a pathfinder, and knew how to track and more importantly how to avoid being followed. Avoiding the Legion Foresters was part of smuggling, and they were far more skilled than any bandit was likely to be.

So he wasn't worried and the sun was shining and the day was clear. Words joined the hummed tune and soon he was singing softly to himself looking at nothing and thinking of less. Ruben had wandered downstream to wash. Ferir had done so by the camp but the Nord sought privacy. It seemed unlikely that Ruben had anything Ferir hadn't seen before, but he supposed it was possible and didn't care either way. He paused his singing until the first line of the next verse came to him then started again.

Ruben emerged from the trees with his blond hair plastered to his head. He wore a checked shirt Ferir assumed he'd picked up at Carbo's with the sleeves rolled up to the elbows and had a bundle of firewood under one arm.

"Don't stop on my account," he said.

Ferir shrugged. He presumed Ruben hadn't heard the words, or that the innuendo had gone clean over his head.

After a brief pause Ruben continued, "I didn't know you sang anyway."

"Doesn't everyone?"

Ferir stretched back into the soft loam as Ruben frowned slightly. "Well I don't."

"Fair enough." The sun was bloated and red above the western sky, the river a ribbon of fire amid the ancient oaks and lengthening shadows. Soon the air would cool so Ferir drank the last of the sunlight.

When Ruben spoke again he turned and saw the nord's gaze was also on the westering sun. "What else do you do? I know precious little about you."

Ferir paused with the thought it brought then voiced it. Why not? "More than I know about you."

"What?"

"You know plenty about me. You know I was cooking skooma and running it. You know I killed two Imperial Legionaries, in self defence as much as anything. I think the story more or less fills itself in. All I know is you were a guard and you killed and Imperial Agent, then others in the guard sprung you."

There was a long pause. "Things went awry. I made some bad decisions." There was a rustle of leaves as he fidgeted.

"I figured we'd get into the wilds then you'd head your own way, if you're following me I'd know more. What led to the guard's death?"

A heavy sigh. "I said," a pause, "I made some bad decisions. Dug a hole." The second pause was longer. Ferir said nothing and hoped the truth would be drawn into the vacuum. Eventually Ruben spoke again. "You know why I'm following." It wasn't a question. "I have nothing else, but where are you heading?"

Ferir took a moment before answering. The night was a pleasant one and if he evaded it would be awkward. He didn't have any reason to anyway. "Where the wind blows. I'll drift, but for now that's towards Sundew."

"Sundew?"

"The cave I lived in. I need to see."

Ruben nodded. "I had wondered. You know it's risky so I won't tell you that, but I will tell you this: it'll hurt."

"So does pulling an arrow, it doesn't make it any less necessary."

"And after that?"

Ferir smiled and let out a half laugh. "I haven't even begun to think about it."

"Oh."

Ferir stood and stretched. There was a hollow pop from between his shoulder blades and another as he pulled his neck. The sun was melting into the hills of the western skyline and the temperature was dropping. He picked up his cloak and the firewood. "Do you want to get some food from the packs? I'll lay the fire." Ruben stood. "There's a couple of bottles in there too," added Ferir.

He'd piled the logs in a circle of stones and was about to put light to them as Ruben dropped some sausage, lard and a bag of oatmeal. An onion and a flint and steel joined them.

"No need for the flint," said Ferir with a grin and raised his hand. Ruben crashed backward as he thrust it towards the wood. The little fireball happened almost by itself. He'd used it so many times there was no need to catch the magic and form it. If it had been a physical action Ferir supposed he would have called it muscle memory, and he'd read books which compared the mind to a muscle.

Ruben picked himself up, "Warn me before you do things like that."

Ferir shook his head, "I assure you it's safe. I assume you're planning on cooking, I have no idea what I'd do with that."

"Skirlie and sausage. An excellent combination. The wine should cut through the grease well."


Ruben was right, Ferir decided, as he washed the last of the lard from his mouth with the wine. It was cheap stuff but that worked, the harsh tannin seemed to lift the layer of grease left by the fried oatmeal and it had enough body to overcome the taste of onion and pepper. It wasn't what he'd usually eat, but the energy was exactly what he needed. He lay back with a satisfied groan.

Ruben's bottle glugged as he tipped it back. He prodded the fire and sent a shower of sparks skyward to join the first stars which were appearing in the night sky.

"You seem to like plans," Ferir broke the silence, "What are yours?"

Another glug from the bottle. Ferir heard a rustle which might have been a fidget and might have been a shrug, his eyes were on the low fire. After another moment Ruben spoke, "I don't know. Maybe see if I can start in another town with a new name after this has blown over a bit. Kvatch perhaps, there's work there and it's on the move, not dead like Skingrad and Chorrol. Or I suppose I could get a job on some caravan in some backwater and skip Cyrodiil, though I'm not sure I'd want to live in the other provinces."

"Morrowind might be okay."

"Are you joking? It's the worst of the lot, full of dark elves and madness."

Ferir shrugged, "Each to their own." He threw another stick onto the fire.

"Anyway there's the Camonna."

"They're nasty fetchers," said Ferir, "but not so much worse than others. Why them."

"History." Ferir stayed silent and the poison started to ooze from the wound. "You know the Orum Gang?"

Ferir nodded. Inefficient, brutal, bunglers, but the best the Camonna had in Cheydinhal.

"When I was young, probably before you were born, I moved with a rough crowd. Got out of it in time mind but kept some contacts after I started training as a guardsman. My wife settled me a bit I suppose, about all the wench ever did except moan."

Ferir left the pause which opened.

"She never liked the gambling, well not when I lost. It was fine if I won of course. Then there was the patrol..." He grimaced. "I'd hardly got my uniform and I was selected for a job into the wilds. They all died. And..." his tongue snaked over dry lips. He sighed, "I saw things." He opened his mouth to say more and paused, "No." He shook his head.

Ferir took a slow draught from his much diminished bottle. Ruben's matched his in length but was far from slow. There were only dregs left once he was done.

"Open another," said Ferir. "They were the necromancers you mentioned?"

"Yeah," said Ruben as he rummaged in the packs. "Only I returned, things weren't the same. The wench never understood why I drank. You know the drill. I made some bad decisions. She left."

"Dreck." Ferir finished his bottle, Ruben was well into the second.

"I gambled more, and more often, and hit the bars harder. A guards salary ain't much and I never did get promoted. Same old story I suppose. Owe the wrong people the wrong drakes. I couldn't pay so I hit up some contacts."

"How long ago?"

"Four years. It was small stuff at first, just info. Then just a small thing, a record erased or some evidence lost. Nothing major."

"To start with." Ferir didn't much care if he insulted Ruben, the man needed it. The story seemed to repeat like a mill horse in its worn circle.

"Yeah. It got bigger, there were more of us in it, more leaks and harder to cover all our tracks. We sprung a few people. Someone noticed and the Imperials were called in."

"How did you end up killing one?"

"He got too close. Enough evidence to send us all down so I paid him a visit."

Ferir was stunned for a moment. He knew Ruben wasn't that bright, the last few minutes had confirmed that, but to think that murdering someone investigating you in cold blood could ever go well. He shook his head, the man really was a wolf. There was something hard in there, a rock of psychotic self interest hidden like a cat's claw. There were nutters in the skooma trade, but Ruben held is own among them.

Ferir held out his hand for the bottle and took a drink until he thought he was steady again. "Damn," was all he could manage.

"I know it sounds silly now, but I felt trapped." Ruben took the bottle back, "Anyway it's hardly different than you."

"He was doing his job and you killed him to try to cover it up."

"And the two legionaries you killed?"

"Yours didn't burst into your home in the early morning and set about butchering your friends with similar intentions for you."

"Near enough. If we escaped the gallows how well do you think prison goes for a guard?"

"No, it's diff-" Ferir didn't get further. His eyes were on the northern skyline.

Ruben said it first. "What in oblivion is that?"

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Olen   Shades of Ending   Aug 2 2011, 10:53 PM
haute ecole rider   Yay, you're writing and posting again! :D ...   Aug 2 2011, 11:40 PM
SubRosa   It is good to see you back and writing again Olen...   Aug 3 2011, 12:23 AM
Acadian   Welcome back to writing! And a fine start you...   Aug 3 2011, 12:36 AM
Destri Melarg   Ah, Olen is posting again. This is a sure indicat...   Aug 3 2011, 04:57 AM
Olen   Seeing as the last part was rather short, and got ...   Aug 4 2011, 09:25 PM
haute ecole rider   Okay, let me get a couple of nits out of the way f...   Aug 4 2011, 10:51 PM
Black Hand   I like it! I like it! The intro shows us a...   Aug 4 2011, 10:58 PM
SubRosa   So it looks like Ferir was cooking up meth in the ...   Aug 4 2011, 11:03 PM
Acadian   This followed smoothly on the heels of the previou...   Aug 5 2011, 02:32 AM
Grits   I liked seeing Ferir from Verus’s POV first. We ge...   Aug 5 2011, 12:49 PM
King Coin   Ferir was "fetched" as soon a the guards...   Aug 5 2011, 03:40 PM
treydog   This is grim and dark and entirely engrossing. It...   Aug 7 2011, 03:20 PM
Olen   HER - Nits fixed, as ever my utter reliance on spe...   Aug 8 2011, 10:50 PM
haute ecole rider   First the nit: It looks like the 'u' swi...   Aug 8 2011, 11:22 PM
SubRosa   An Occurrence At Owl Creek Bridge is a classic pie...   Aug 8 2011, 11:58 PM
Destri Melarg   Well, I think there are probably more industrious ...   Aug 9 2011, 10:07 AM
Acadian   So, Ferir has an uneasy and unlikely alliance...   Aug 10 2011, 12:45 AM
Grits   Ferir made a good case for Ruben not choking him t...   Aug 12 2011, 12:14 AM
Olen   HER - nit fixed, silly letters and their orders......   Aug 13 2011, 10:57 AM
Grits   Old town doesn’t sound like a polished brass and w...   Aug 15 2011, 08:03 PM
Destri Melarg   I loved the description of Ferir's ordeal at t...   Aug 15 2011, 09:26 PM
SubRosa   he’s always wanting to blame rouge mages since Far...   Aug 16 2011, 02:34 AM
King Coin   1.3 - It’s nice to have friends in high places, or...   Aug 17 2011, 09:27 PM
mALX   I just now saw this, Olen! Haven't been g...   Aug 21 2011, 12:42 PM
Olen   All - Sorry for the delay, RL has become hectic an...   Aug 25 2011, 11:14 PM
haute ecole rider   Tell me about RL! Two major projects last week...   Aug 26 2011, 12:16 AM
Destri Melarg   After that first paragraph remind me to steer clea...   Aug 26 2011, 08:41 AM
SubRosa   You certainly have painted us a vile picture of Ch...   Aug 26 2011, 08:49 PM
Grits   I took the two moth-eaten travelers to be Ferir an...   Aug 31 2011, 05:31 PM
Olen   Haute - I think you might remain undecided about t...   Aug 31 2011, 10:46 PM
haute ecole rider   I'll leave the occasional nit for someone else...   Sep 1 2011, 12:01 AM
SubRosa   I've always seen Cyrodiil as quite a dark plac...   Sep 1 2011, 11:16 PM
Grits   I loved seeing Ferir from Ruben’s POV, just his re...   Sep 2 2011, 03:24 PM
Zalphon   "He only warned them off after he had to use ...   Sep 2 2011, 04:39 PM
Destri Melarg   Ruben woke with a sore back. He opened his eyes ...   Sep 3 2011, 01:38 AM
Olen   RL has been rather hectic of late but I have anoth...   Nov 17 2011, 11:30 PM
SubRosa   bloody dark elves are all the same. I loved this. ...   Nov 17 2011, 11:55 PM
McBadgere   Oh hell yeah...I'm a sucker for a good quot...   Nov 18 2011, 05:35 AM
Grits   I don’t have a lore answer for life spans, but I d...   Nov 20 2011, 12:58 AM
SubRosa   I forgot you asked. Lifespans depend on the game. ...   Nov 20 2011, 01:17 AM
haute ecole rider   What a delight to meet Ruben and Ferir again. I re...   Nov 21 2011, 04:41 AM
Olen   SubRosa - Magic is likely to play a big part in th...   Nov 27 2011, 06:46 PM
SubRosa   First off, the title has me thinking of this song....   Nov 27 2011, 07:24 PM
Grits   I love every word of this update, even the parts a...   Dec 6 2011, 03:56 AM
mALX   GAAAAH, you have changed your writing style! ...   Dec 6 2011, 06:58 AM
Olen   Sorry all, another delay after an unusually crazy ...   Dec 11 2011, 12:36 PM
McBadgere   Helloo!!...*Waves*... I like your story.....   Dec 11 2011, 05:17 PM
SubRosa   Carbo’s camp sat like a rotting fruit in the bowl ...   Dec 11 2011, 07:01 PM
haute ecole rider   And so we enter the squalor that is Carbo's Ca...   Dec 11 2011, 07:16 PM
Olen   McBadgere - Thanks for reading, glad you're en...   Dec 20 2011, 09:49 PM
mALX   The dialogue rules this chapter, Great Write ...   Dec 21 2011, 03:29 AM
McBadgere   Fair enough!... :D ... Most excellent chapter...   Dec 21 2011, 05:35 AM
Fawkes   Oh, I really enjoy this! Really great write...   Dec 21 2011, 07:13 AM
SubRosa   “That crazy bark biter?” Teresa is one of his old ...   Dec 21 2011, 05:56 PM
Grits   I love your decision to show the meeting with Relt...   Dec 28 2011, 01:56 AM
Olen   Sorry for being slow. RL is devouring me just now...   Jan 29 2012, 10:37 PM
McBadgere   YAY!!... :D ... A pleasure...*Bows*... L...   Jan 30 2012, 06:12 AM
SubRosa   Ferir is perusing the priceless treasures junkpile...   Jan 30 2012, 07:22 PM
mALX   * ROFL !!! Love that line ...   Jan 30 2012, 08:11 PM
Grits   No ballerina for Holga? So close! :D It was g...   Feb 3 2012, 12:27 AM
Olen   McBadgere - Glad you're enjoying it. Here...   Feb 11 2012, 07:39 PM
McBadgere   Likee!!!... :D ... An excellent chapt...   Feb 11 2012, 08:37 PM
SubRosa   "It happens sometimes. Kill them back, better...   Feb 12 2012, 06:46 PM
Grits   :lol: Do not come crying to Ferir about a minor ...   Feb 13 2012, 02:38 AM
McBadgere   Ooooh, that's nice that is!!... Love ...   Feb 28 2012, 04:29 AM
SubRosa   I made some bad decisions. I am thinking that is a...   Feb 28 2012, 07:47 PM
Grits   It was just a line that made me think of Mal. Here...   Mar 6 2012, 02:36 AM
Athynae   The story, the characters, the color of the writin...   Mar 12 2012, 01:23 AM
Olen   And another delay... This will progress albeit slo...   Mar 27 2012, 09:35 PM
McBadgere   That was just brilliant!!!...Incredibl...   Mar 28 2012, 01:08 PM
SubRosa   The Necromancer's Moon! I loved your descr...   Mar 28 2012, 11:19 PM
Grits   "Really," Ferir flowed up onto his haunc...   Mar 30 2012, 05:18 AM
Olen   McBadgere - Thanks for the comment, it's good ...   Apr 11 2012, 06:45 PM
McBadgere   Brilliant!! As ever!... ;) :D ... Th...   Apr 12 2012, 03:35 AM
Athynae   Yep, yep, yep, joy it is as always. Somewhere whil...   Apr 12 2012, 12:00 PM
SubRosa   No worries about the nits. That is why every profe...   Apr 12 2012, 08:26 PM
ghastley   [b]outwith the constraints of morality and the la...   Apr 12 2012, 10:07 PM
Grits   I liked that first shaky moment while they all con...   Apr 16 2012, 04:11 AM
haute ecole rider   Thank you for your glacial pace!! It allow...   May 9 2012, 09:16 PM
Lady Saga   Hey Olen, I'm Renee. This thread bounced up so...   May 10 2012, 10:17 PM
Olen   Sorry for the massive delay in posting. As it tur...   May 25 2012, 10:39 PM
SubRosa   The pre-dawn light washed the forest in blood. It ...   May 26 2012, 01:18 AM
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Grits   Adriel (or as Ruben thinks of her, “the witch” :D)...   May 27 2012, 02:26 PM
McBadgere   Well I do...Mysterious, powerful, hot...Cryptic ...   May 29 2012, 04:44 AM


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