Aftermath, When one crises ends, another shall rise Options

[King Of Beasts]

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This post has been edited by King Of Beasts: Jun 30 2018, 08:25 AM

[Acadian]

Betrayed by Rex and rescued from a desperate fight by a pair of mysterious Bretonic vampires. How ironic to be both betrayed by and rescued by vampires! I loved the welcome touch of humor as the voracious rabbit charged out of the forest!

Let me offer some thoughts that I hope you will find constructive and helpful –

Your paragraphs are rather large. In the forum’s format, this can present a bit of a ‘wall of text’. Most of us here try to break our prose into smaller paragraphs so they are easier to read.

Also, I highly recommend you google ‘Dialogue Punctuation’ and study up on a few of the sites that cover this rather arcane aspect of fiction writing. For now, suffice it to say that a golden rule in fiction is that every time you change speakers, start a new paragraph. Happily, this can also result in much shorter paragraphs.

Regarding lengthening your episodes, actually this current one is probably about perfect, as it is just under 1500 words. I shoot for 800 – 1800 words; much longer and you begin to lose some of your impact. The reason your episodes appear kind of short is simply that, as I mentioned, your paragraphs are too long.