No Elves in Sovngarde, I've decided to to turn my "A day in Skyrim" adventure i Options

[Elisabeth Hollow]

Hey y'all! The "Today in Skyrim" thing made mee remember how MUCH I love writing, and how much better it is to not just write shutff and hide it. So the first post is going to be the old "chapters" combined along with the new one I just wrote. Feedback welcome, but remember, no one has seen anything I've written in over 8 years, lol

[Elisabeth Hollow]

Crap, I thought I was so careful this time XD I really have no idea why I mix tenses. I usually catch myself, and have been editing as I go along, then reading the chapter over, pasting it in the reply box on here to see if I misspelled anything, and thought I caught it all.

Oh dear, the morning doesn’t bring reassuring news. Taking Onmund along with her isn’t working out exactly the way Kayla hoped. That quest she had in mind probably needs to move to the back burner till she sorts Onmund out.

Kayla was hoping that Onmund was just needing time away from the house, and figured Morthal was as safe as it could get, being it wasn't a "tourist attraction" and the population was sparse. She kind of cheated him in a way, and the situation is forcing her to change her perspective on how she treats him.

I see you have two line spaces between all your paragraphs instead of one empty line. Since you did so consistently in this episode, it is not a problem but I wonder if it was intentional? For what it’s worth, I would recommend just a single blank line between your paragraphs.

When I paste the story here with single spacing, it bunches together and I have to re-space it. Double spacing saves me time, and it doesn't look bad to me. I'll see on the next chapter what I can do to make it just a single space with no hassle :]

Again, I appreciate everyone's reviews!!

This post has been edited by Elisabeth Hollow: Dec 24 2012, 08:21 PM