The first paragraph was so gritty you could smell it - Love how you can bring the reader right into the scene like that!
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Before I could make two scenarios in my head, Movarth's head snapped up.
"Ahhh... I smell the familiar scent of prey."
This sent a chill down my spine!
GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
What an amazing, POWERFUL write !!!!!!!!!!!!!! I was riveted to the page from the second Movarth's head snapped up .... HOLY CRAP !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
AWESOME, AWESOME WRITE !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!