No Elves in Sovngarde, I've decided to to turn my "A day in Skyrim" adventure i Options

[Elisabeth Hollow]

Hey y'all! The "Today in Skyrim" thing made mee remember how MUCH I love writing, and how much better it is to not just write shutff and hide it. So the first post is going to be the old "chapters" combined along with the new one I just wrote. Feedback welcome, but remember, no one has seen anything I've written in over 8 years, lol

[Acadian]

I really enjoyed this update!

The encounter with Arcadia (nope, she's not my sister, lol) effectively reminded us of Kayla’s alchemical skill while displaying her lingering bittersweet sense of loss. Nevertheless, it was good to see her out and even making plans.

I enjoyed Kayla’s running commentary as she sifted through the letters. I’m also glad she took the time to linger a moment and tell us a little about this:
‘I met Erik the Slayer when he was still Erik Hoe-Pusher.’

The alchemy session felt very immersive. I could smell the odors and almost hear the liquids bubbling along. Paralyze. Wow, can’t wait to see what her plans for that are!

Nits -
‘I braided in my hair in a simple braid,’
Two concerns here. Objectively, the first ‘in’ seems like a redundant oversight? Subjectively, I recommend avoiding repetition of the same word (braid in this case) in close proximity. The more distinctive the word, the more this applies.

‘I sniffed the root, the earthy smell not quite gone from it. a few grains of dirt fell from the folded cloth she handed over to me.’
You want to capitalize the ‘a’ that begins the second sentence here of course.

‘...and callouses when he pressed his hands on the bar.‘
Callus and callous can be confused easily enough. Here, you want calluses.

‘...and took the ingredients I had bought from Arcadia the the room beneath the stairs.’
Rather than ‘the the’ here, I’m sure you meant ‘to the’.