No Elves in Sovngarde Book Two, NEIS continued Options

[Elisabeth Hollow]

No Elves in Sovngarde Book One is here, and is currently being spiced and touched up, bit by bit.

For those who don't want to read the first book, or need a refresher on what has previously happened, I have included a brief summary of the first book, which will be written later, when I'm not freaking out about how to write a summary.

I really am terrible with summaries. To prove my point, here's my summary of Toy Story:

"After sitting here with my fingers frozen above the keyboard, all I can say about Toy Story is that it made me terrified of having toys as a kid, and gave me nightmares. The only thing I took away from that movie is that you shouldn't judge others by appearance. Except the bad kids. They wear skulls so you can identify them easily."

-shakes head in shame-

Anyways, I've got a prologue written up. The summary should be up, hopefully, within the next few days or so. Or when my computer's plate isn't so full, lol.

Enjoy!

[treydog]

Still working toward being caught up- but then- I will be caught up- which will mean you have to write more.

Chapter 9- Wow. Just that. Wow. Which follows on, of course, from the goggle-eyed gasping that I did over the fight in the vampire lair.

"You cannot have this."

That- was... yes.

I know I am late to the party and probably circumstances will change things- but I really want to stake Onmund out on an anthill- after smearing him with honey. “Mead, is it? I will give you MEAD!”

And hooray for Lydia!

The whole chapter is simply remarkable. You have this way of writing with an immediacy and a realism (which- yes, I know it is a fantasy setting but that’s the POINT) that hold the reader enthralled. (Checks Liz photo for signs of mind-control magic… hmmmm).

Chapter 10.1- Again, Kayla’s emotional healing, as well as her determination to move forward ring true. Heart-breakingly so.

I poked my flat belly and realized I was getting soft. I felt a brief pang of sadness and a ghost of movement.

As for example- THAT.

Hmm- paralyze poison. It WOULD make staking Onmund to that anthill easier…

Chapter 10.2- The talking at cross-purposes between husband and wife was… pitch perfect. And again- the REALITY of an unequal relationship. I am willing to see his point to an extent. But ONLY to an extent. But it rather reminds me of what Mrs. Treydog said a LONG time ago. “If you see someone you think you want more- go ahead. But you had better tell me first. And you had better be SURE- because we will be DONE.” And 25 years on- here we are.


Chapter 11- As to “moar fighting- ARRRGH”… a phrase we throw around a lot here is “character-driven story.” And you have got that concept down to a science. The “action” will come in its place- and I know it will be quite as good as the character-building.

Trey sure does recognize the conflict behind that journal entry. Of course- he was a lot whinier about it…

Clever elf to dodge that “special brew.” Skyrim Safety Tip (Number 2 of a Series)- DO NOT take “special” drinks from strange beings you meet in- taverns, inns, caves, barrows, lonely cottages on deserted moors, &c (see addendum for complete list).

"I don't call it a vampire blade," Onmund sniffed. "I just call it 'The First Weapon I Have Ever Enchanted Alone.' Or Fwihea for short." He pronounced it "fweh."

Yes. Most definitely a Nord.

The scene of the--- debauch- and Kayla’s reaction to it- where simply marvelous. You had me laughing, while I was also intensely feeling her discomfort.