Trouble never comes alone Options

[jack cloudy]

Yes, so I just couldn't resist and had to get this off my chest. We'll see how long it lasts. Same deal as with redemption, I'll be using this post as a character list and the first part will be in the next one. For now the list is simple.

A question. Should I add a separate entry for Spar at the very bottom that is basically the extra-spoilers edition?

Spar: A female Imperial and the main character of this story. Is guided by 'Them'.
(Portrait)

Silent Fist: A Companion Spar hires to escort her into Bleak Falls Barrow. He doesn't speak, wear shirts or use weapons. Click here for portrait

Faendal: A wood elf who lives in a small village known as Riverwood. He works as a hunter and lumberjack.

Lucan Valerius: The shopkeeper of Riverwood.

Jarl Balgruuf: The Jarl of Whiterun, a city located in the center of Skyrim between the fronts of the Imperial and Stormcloak factions.

Hrongar: Jarl Balgruuf's brother. Looks like he walked off the set of a Conan-film.

Irileth: A Dunmer who serves as Jarl Balgruuf's bodyguard.

Proventus Avenicci: Jarl Balgruuf's steward.


Vilkas: One of the Companions, a mercenary group in Whiterun
Vignar Grey-Mane: Formerly of the Companions, now retired.

Ulfric Stormcloak: The rebel leader in Skyrim, once on of the Emperor's generals.

Arkarik: Someone Spar was supposed to meet in Cyrodiil.

This post has been edited by jack cloudy: Aug 1 2013, 06:34 PM

[McBadgere]

The first draft for this update held a lot more dialogue...

But I changed that because it felt like it didn't go anywhere or do anything important for the story.

Personally speaking, if I had more time, I would gladly go through your other writings as I enjoy it very much...So I feel somewhat sad that you chose to remove what sounds like some beautiful "colour" painting...What you described sounds like it could have been cool...

Maybe it didn't do much for the story per se, but so what?...I'm not in any rush... ...The odd scene here and there isn't going to slow it up too much at all...

Anyways, to what we did get... ...

I thought it was brilliant that she couldn't get understood by the locals!!...I laughed when I read that...Nice one!.. ...

That she managed to work with Alvor for so long is cool though...But then had to resort to stealing in order to get what she needed...Shame, but necessary if Spar (cool name!) was to get her job done...

Nicely done with the Whiterun description...Brilliant stuff...

Oh, the Dragonsreach rant...I think you're thinking too much into it...Besides, I always assumed it was plate pressure forcing it upwards at a rate of hundreds of gallons...

Maybe that's how the Companions got that long boat so far away from any other decent sized river... ...

Anyways, loved it all...Brilliant stuff...

Stop taking stuff away!!...Some of us might appreciate it... ...

Nice one!!...

*Applauds heartily*...