Trouble never comes alone Options

[jack cloudy]

Yes, so I just couldn't resist and had to get this off my chest. We'll see how long it lasts. Same deal as with redemption, I'll be using this post as a character list and the first part will be in the next one. For now the list is simple.

A question. Should I add a separate entry for Spar at the very bottom that is basically the extra-spoilers edition?

Spar: A female Imperial and the main character of this story. Is guided by 'Them'.
(Portrait)

Silent Fist: A Companion Spar hires to escort her into Bleak Falls Barrow. He doesn't speak, wear shirts or use weapons. Click here for portrait

Faendal: A wood elf who lives in a small village known as Riverwood. He works as a hunter and lumberjack.

Lucan Valerius: The shopkeeper of Riverwood.

Jarl Balgruuf: The Jarl of Whiterun, a city located in the center of Skyrim between the fronts of the Imperial and Stormcloak factions.

Hrongar: Jarl Balgruuf's brother. Looks like he walked off the set of a Conan-film.

Irileth: A Dunmer who serves as Jarl Balgruuf's bodyguard.

Proventus Avenicci: Jarl Balgruuf's steward.


Vilkas: One of the Companions, a mercenary group in Whiterun
Vignar Grey-Mane: Formerly of the Companions, now retired.

Ulfric Stormcloak: The rebel leader in Skyrim, once on of the Emperor's generals.

Arkarik: Someone Spar was supposed to meet in Cyrodiil.

This post has been edited by jack cloudy: Aug 1 2013, 06:34 PM

[McBadgere]

Fair dues Jack...Excellent stuff!!...

Personally, I really like Farengar...Though that may be because of what I'm planning for him meself... ...But hey-ho, I really like what you've done with him...The way he completely ignores the assistant when given the spell problem (love the reference to the old spells, I have that problem with the lack of Oblivion-era spells.)..The way you've portrayed Farengar reminds me of how they did Leonardo da-Vinci in Assassin's Creed...

I'm liking Spar more and more too...The "I should have been a Nord" comment got my eyebrow raised too...Looking forward to the end reveal of Them...

This story is epic, and I'm absolutely loving it...

I quite enjoyed it being 3000-ish words...Yes, I read it in two goes, but going back over it, I've no idea where you could have separated it and kept the flow...It works better as one post...*Shrug*...But then again, I was as guilty for long posts, so hey, what do I know?... ...

Loving it Jacky-Boy...

Amazing writing...

Nice one!!...

*Applauds heartily*...