Memoirs of a Morag Tong Assassin - Solstheim, Chapter Three: Sides Chosen. Options

[Black Hand]

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This post has been edited by Black Hand: Sep 21 2013, 01:17 AM

[Captain Hammer]

So if I learned anything from the responses of the last update, is that I can't write for carp!

Have you tried writing for salmon? I hear it's supposed to boost brain power, and according to a man by the name of Adams, may also be full of doubt.

That aside, proper use of 'too' and 'to' this time. Good job.

Nice way to combine Seth...er, Dralas's first real experience with a Solthseim blizzard and the introduction to Ulfgar the..., er, just Ulfgar. Particularly the fact that he keeps the Old Way and would honor the precepts of Sacred Hospitality or Guest-Right. In our world, Odin would be proud. I am sure the same applies to Shor in this far-flung corner of all that is.

I can't find fault in your knowledge of hypothermia, its onset and treatment, and I speak from everything just short of firsthand experience. I did learn from Ski Patrol rescuers that have probably seen a case every year. Not fun stuff.

There is, however, one thing I'd point out to Dralas about his hunting style. He doesn't usually hunt with others, Pene excluded. And she doesn't support him the same as you'd expect your pack mates to do. In that, he's probably less wolf or bear, and more like a typical big cat (excluding lions). Given his nocturnal preferences and Dawn-and-Dusk connections, I'd call him something closer to a Jaguar, or a Leopard.