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jack cloudy
post Mar 18 2013, 11:03 PM
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Yes, so I just couldn't resist and had to get this off my chest. We'll see how long it lasts. Same deal as with redemption, I'll be using this post as a character list and the first part will be in the next one. For now the list is simple.

A question. Should I add a separate entry for Spar at the very bottom that is basically the extra-spoilers edition?

Spar: A female Imperial and the main character of this story. Is guided by 'Them'.
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Silent Fist: A Companion Spar hires to escort her into Bleak Falls Barrow. He doesn't speak, wear shirts or use weapons. Click here for portrait

Faendal: A wood elf who lives in a small village known as Riverwood. He works as a hunter and lumberjack.

Lucan Valerius: The shopkeeper of Riverwood.

Jarl Balgruuf: The Jarl of Whiterun, a city located in the center of Skyrim between the fronts of the Imperial and Stormcloak factions.

Hrongar: Jarl Balgruuf's brother. Looks like he walked off the set of a Conan-film.

Irileth: A Dunmer who serves as Jarl Balgruuf's bodyguard.

Proventus Avenicci: Jarl Balgruuf's steward.


Vilkas: One of the Companions, a mercenary group in Whiterun
Vignar Grey-Mane: Formerly of the Companions, now retired.

Ulfric Stormcloak: The rebel leader in Skyrim, once on of the Emperor's generals.

Arkarik:
Someone Spar was supposed to meet in Cyrodiil.

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post Jul 15 2013, 05:56 PM
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A short one because I found a good spot to cut it off and I'm still keeping the advice of the handsome boozeloving Nordmer with a temper in mind.

And I should update the character list. Farengar, vilkas, Vignar. Anyone else I missed?


Chapter 1.8


Getting Vilkas on my team had cost me about a quarter of the budget, counting both payments. Before doing anything else, I returned to the castle and arranged to have a seemingly innocent letter sent. I then took a tour of Whiterun to scope out all the stores, their inventory and their prices. Being a trade city, Whiterun had plenty of small shops selling anything from clothing to sewing needles. But for my purposes I stuck with the big boys that catered to the adventuring business. That meant a general store, an alchemist and a smithy. They were the ones most likely to have what I needed, and most likely to accept a letter of credit. Proventius had provided me with a clinking bag of coin for the sake of the Companions, but we'd both agreed that carrying enough money for everything would be too heavy and just turn me into a magnet for muggers.


An almost complete list of things to buy rose up in my mind just through thinking the word 'adventure'. Getting the definite one was simply a matter of adjusting for the mission, the shop's actual inventory and the means at my disposal for obtaining said inventory. I purchased a length of rope, strong enough to carry two men, a pair of climber's anchors, a sealed lantern and half a gallon of oil to fuel it. I bought three vials of restoratives, freshly made and good for at least a month if unopened. I also got one tiny vial containing a muscle-killer, just in case.


The smith fitted me for a set of warm furs and thick leathers. She had me pay extra to get it done by morning, but then waived the fee when I mentioned I would pay through credit given by the steward. My list also pushed me towards buying a bow and a handful of arrows. I couldn't count the number of times I'd stopped a fight prematurely by piercing the enemy before they got in range. One look at the cost and the expected nature of my future enemies however, made me reconsider. Right now I didn't possess the drawstrength to work a warbow and undead generally didn't respond well to precision damage anyway. Besides, if all went well I could let Vilkas do the fighting for me.


With the money I had left over at the end I returned to the general store. I'd spotted a series of spellscrolls behind the counter the first time I'd entered. While they were expensive and could be used only once, scrolls were the sole means by which even a knownothing like me could use complicated magic. How he'd obtained them was a mystery, but in his own words, 'everything was for sale, even the clothes on his back'. I unrolled them all and gave them a detailed lookover. If the scroll was in any way damaged or showed signs of forgery, I placed it back on the shelf without explaining why. It wasn't worth giving this Belethor fellow pointers on how to improve his craft. I might want to buy more scrolls later. I also returned the scroll if the described effect wasn't to my liking, or if its method of invocation was either too elaborate or too simple. In the end I stuck with two scrolls, that left me with only a handful of imaginary coin. That handful I exchanged into real coin, for any future purchases I might make someday in other places.



After all that, there wasn't much for me to do but go over the information the court wizard had dug up. I did so nestled away behind one of the many stairs of the castle. Farengar had come through for me. He'd done well, too well. There was of course a small stack of folktale lore, the half-truths and blatant lies that were found in every region of the world. Then there was the more concrete information from research, geographical in nature and mostly extrapolations based on the outside and comparison with other tombs. But that wasn't what had roused my suspicions.


It was a map of the inside. A room by room listing of traps, coffins, number of draugr. Vilkas had mentioned the word in his mad tirade. Nordic undead then. It was too complete and detailed compared to the rest of the info. If it was made-up it was extremely thorough. If it was the real deal, then I was obviously not the first woman Balgruuf or one of his forebears had sent into the Barrow. I couldn't ask about it anyhow. Not with the Thalmor sniffing around. But for my own sake I should assume it was both real and incomplete. Nothing was as bad as becoming careless because one assumed a map marked all threats.
"There's no mention of cubic stones. Because it wasn't found, or because it wasn't sought then? And what is with this room of 'unique descriptions' right at the end?"



I would see in two days.

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jack cloudy   Trouble never comes alone   Mar 18 2013, 11:03 PM
Elisabeth Hollow   Marking this for later!   Mar 18 2013, 11:07 PM
jack cloudy   First part is right here. I'll try to get an u...   Mar 18 2013, 11:12 PM
Darkness Eternal   New story? I'm glad to see a fresh one! Of...   Mar 19 2013, 02:14 AM
Elisabeth Hollow   I liked the area triggering a flashback and a pani...   Mar 19 2013, 03:40 AM
McBadgere   I liked this... :D ...Not unsurprisingly... I...   Mar 19 2013, 01:56 PM
Acadian   Congrats and best wishes on your new story! ...   Mar 21 2013, 05:43 PM
mALX   Just saw this, didn't even know you'd star...   Mar 21 2013, 06:23 PM
jack cloudy   Thanks everyone! Darkness, I personally like ...   Mar 24 2013, 09:56 PM
mALX   First, I am so sorry it took so long to get here t...   Mar 28 2013, 12:35 PM
Elisabeth Hollow   Did I not respond?! Sorry!! I was gonn...   Mar 28 2013, 03:07 PM
mALX   Caught up! Well, she is def not Camilla! ...   Mar 28 2013, 04:11 PM
McBadgere   Just so cool!!... Confused by the abrupt ...   Mar 31 2013, 09:41 AM
jack cloudy   The problem with choosing an action-scene for your...   Apr 19 2013, 01:40 PM
McBadgere   Personally speaking, if I had more time, I would...   Apr 27 2013, 04:51 PM
ThatSkyrimGuy   Just started reading this, as I am new to the site...   May 4 2013, 01:27 AM
ThatSkyrimGuy   Just finished the second installment ( 1.2 ? ). I ...   May 4 2013, 05:43 PM
ThatSkyrimGuy   And now I have read the rest. All in all, I do lik...   May 5 2013, 03:15 PM
mALX   ROFL! You know, being female I didn...   May 6 2013, 03:14 AM
jack cloudy   Dangit guys, stop bringing logic in here! Let ...   May 12 2013, 09:21 PM
ThatSkyrimGuy   Nice write! I like the way you have infused Ul...   May 12 2013, 10:21 PM
mALX   This was the outstanding paragraph (to me) in th...   May 13 2013, 07:23 PM
McBadgere   Brilliant stuff Jack!!... Epic and cool.....   May 22 2013, 04:04 AM
jack cloudy   Glad everyone liked Hrongar. And he does look like...   May 29 2013, 08:19 PM
ThatSkyrimGuy   I will be back to read this a little later when I ...   May 29 2013, 11:37 PM
ThatSkyrimGuy   I will be back to read this a little later when I...   Jul 27 2013, 02:54 PM
mALX   Loved this description! I'm halfway th...   Jun 2 2013, 06:16 AM
McBadgere   Fair dues Jack...Excellent stuff!!... Per...   Jun 7 2013, 03:54 AM
jack cloudy   Yes, last update was a tad too long. I admit I...   Jun 23 2013, 09:32 PM
jack cloudy   I swear we will be back on the road soon. But firs...   Jun 30 2013, 07:12 PM
jack cloudy   And finally, after I don't know how much procr...   Jul 22 2013, 03:08 PM
McBadgere   Right Jacky-boy...Firstly, a massive apology...A t...   Jul 24 2013, 04:05 AM
jack cloudy   No problem guys. Take your time. :) Regarding t...   Aug 1 2013, 06:06 PM
jack cloudy   Hush, I have infiltrated the network of the neighb...   Aug 16 2013, 08:51 PM
haute ecole rider   Well, I finally caught up. I started reading this ...   Aug 17 2013, 05:25 PM
Darkness Eternal   I'm here to catch up on the story. There is no...   Aug 17 2013, 06:28 PM
McBadgere   I agree with DE on the point that you should have ...   Aug 19 2013, 01:20 PM
jack cloudy   Thanks for the kind words, everyone. Spar is goi...   Sep 7 2013, 05:02 PM
haute ecole rider   Wow! So that's how the thu'um works? Y...   Sep 7 2013, 06:43 PM
McBadgere   Brilliant!!... :D ... Thoroughly enjoyed ...   Sep 10 2013, 03:29 AM
jack cloudy   The Thu'um is hard to describe. At times it fe...   Sep 13 2013, 10:28 PM
haute ecole rider   To be honest, if I had to choose between sacrifici...   Sep 14 2013, 06:09 PM
McBadgere   Excellent stuff Jack!!... Still loving th...   Sep 15 2013, 10:26 AM
jack cloudy   I consider this a failing on my part. I wanted to ...   Sep 29 2013, 10:02 PM
haute ecole rider   I am surprised that no one has commented on this s...   Oct 6 2013, 10:15 PM
McBadgere   I am surprised that no one has commented on this ...   Oct 7 2013, 04:48 AM
jack cloudy   Almost there. Almost but not quite. So in this upd...   Oct 23 2013, 09:18 PM
haute ecole rider   And the tension mounts! I'm glad too that ...   Oct 24 2013, 05:47 PM
jack cloudy   And here's the climax. After this just some ty...   Nov 3 2013, 05:27 PM
McBadgere   Awesome!!...Just awesome stuff!!.....   Dec 15 2013, 07:00 PM
jack cloudy   Right now I'm busy getting caught up with all ...   Dec 30 2013, 10:50 PM
jack cloudy   And here is the final part of this chapter. ~~~~~...   Jan 8 2014, 11:04 PM
haute ecole rider   First the nits: Just one, really, repeated a few ...   Jan 9 2014, 12:03 AM
jack cloudy   Oops, fixed it. And it's time for part two. ...   Jan 22 2014, 09:12 PM
Darkness Eternal   So after Spar spoke to that snobby fellow back in ...   Jan 22 2014, 09:56 PM
haute ecole rider   I enjoyed the brief summary of the next few weeks....   Jan 23 2014, 10:14 PM
Darkness Eternal   Need. More. Updating. Get to it :)   Jan 31 2014, 09:06 PM
jack cloudy   The teeth-part was for a reason beyond just aping ...   Mar 3 2014, 10:02 PM
haute ecole rider   The vampires' dialogue had me rolling! I k...   Mar 6 2014, 05:33 PM
Darkness Eternal   Someone must have smacked those vampires across th...   Mar 8 2014, 04:15 PM
jack cloudy   We'll hear more regarding the vampires later. ...   Mar 27 2014, 11:49 AM
haute ecole rider   Well, this interlude may have nothing to do with S...   Mar 27 2014, 06:23 PM
ghastley   I'd like to challenge your assertion that Drag...   Mar 27 2014, 07:04 PM


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