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post Jun 18 2005, 09:50 PM
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This is how Niran looks:
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In the RP thread I have given away some information, such as Niran not having parents. Most of the answers to puzzling statements such as these will be found in the fanfiction based on his life up until the age of twenty-four. My fanfics tend to be written in 1st person.
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Chapter 1

I took a good look at my surroundings, but there wasn't much to see. Except maybe the guard towers, which I preferred not to look at. They were positioned very carefully, in order to make it nearly impossible for an escape. I'd have to be careful this time. The other prisoners were being shoved into a line by the Imperial Guards who were in control here. It was a military prison, so the skillfully posistioned guard towers were to be expected.
A guard grabbed my shoulder and pushed me into with the rest of the captives, who were already walking into the Main building which held the prison cells. As you walked in, more guards would take groups of four prisoners and push them into a cell, which was meant to hold a maximum of two. Many complained and were silenced by threats from the guards.
I however, did not complain as I was rudely squashed in by a guard. I sat down on the mat that was lying on the floor and looked at the guard. He quickly turned away, and I spat at him.
Looking around, I took mental notes on the situation the prison cells were in, the walls were cracked and mold was growing on the old food that had never been cleaned out of the cell. Insects were crawling around the head of my mat, many dead ones were scattered across the cold stone floor.
Sitting there observing my new habitat consumed a lot of time, for I was snapped back to reality when a guard came by my cell, "Your food," he said as he pushed it through the small opening in the bottom of the cell door.
It definitely did not look very appetizing, but I would need energy, so I took what I was given. Though I would rather not have eaten half cooked meat from a Nix hound.
After the meal, I slept. And remembered . . . .
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"Mr.Cular, were you not involved in an incident that took the lives of three guards from the Imperial Legion? Come on now, speak up. Do not be afraid, we will do no harm to you."

I responded very calmly,
"I was leading a group of them."

He smiled wickedly, finally he had got what he wanted. A confession from me.
"Who were the others?"

I would not tell him, I kept my mouth shut.

His smile dissapeared.
"I will not negotiate with you Mr.Cular, fine if you do not want to give us the information willingly, then I'll let Ilym take care of you."
Ilym was a dunmer, a big dunmer. One who wielded a large battle-axe.

I became uneasy when Ilym entered the room, "You said I would not be harmed."

The interrogater, turned while walking out of the room "Oh, you will not be harmed- by me."

When he left the dunmer put the sword to my throat,
"Now lets get this over with. Tell me, who was with you."

I told him, but I swore to protect these people from him.

He said
"Who funded the rebellion, who bought you weapons?"

I could not tell him, I would not put more people in danger.

When I stayed silent he pulled a dagger from his belt using his free hand and nicked my arm with it.

I flinched and he smiled like the former interrogater, he raised it higher up my arm and cut again, this time deeper. Several times more he did this, and finally I gave in.
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When I awoke it was daylight and the other three in my cell were eating, my food had been left on the floor in front of my mat. I paid no attention to it, it had already been infested by the insects.
We were called out to line up outside, behind the guard towers. They checked each one of us, to see we were all there. Of course we were, with the amount of fortifications this prison camp had.
Afterwards we were sent back to our cell to rot until the next meal, this lifestyle will definitely take a toll on my health.
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post Jun 22 2005, 12:30 AM
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Nice Gamer. That seems alot better reviesed. Awesome. "MORE"..lol
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gamer10   Niran   Jun 18 2005, 09:50 PM
jonajosa   Very nice. Just remember those paragraphing rules....   Jun 18 2005, 09:53 PM
gamer10   Very nice. Just remember those paragraphing rules....   Jun 18 2005, 09:55 PM
Zelda_Zealot   Paragraphing rules? Why was I now informed!? ;) ...   Jun 19 2005, 03:47 AM
Dantrag   cool. Nice to know the history of your character.....   Jun 19 2005, 04:16 AM
gamer10   cool. Nice to know the history of your character.....   Jun 19 2005, 04:32 AM
Mazuk   Nice story   Jun 19 2005, 04:42 AM
gamer10   Chapter 2 Days went by, which followed into wee...   Jun 19 2005, 08:50 PM
Dantrag   Cool. Can't wait for more. Edit - apparently, t...   Jun 19 2005, 09:00 PM
gamer10   Cool. Can't wait for more. Thanks for the gener...   Jun 19 2005, 09:01 PM
minque   Yes! this is good.....keep writing you hear? ;) ...   Jun 19 2005, 09:05 PM
Dantrag   Happy? my post is now lees generic.   Jun 19 2005, 09:06 PM
Ze Milanio   Another underdog story... I often wander what is i...   Jun 19 2005, 09:27 PM
gamer10   I come up with ideas as I go. No plotting it out. ...   Jun 19 2005, 09:33 PM
gamer10   Be careful reading this next chapter, the flashbac...   Jun 19 2005, 09:56 PM
Mazuk   Awesome writing. Keep it up and don't keep me in ...   Jun 19 2005, 10:15 PM
gamer10   Awesome writing. Keep it up and don't keep me in ...   Jun 19 2005, 10:17 PM
Mazuk   LOL yeah I like suspense to but only for a little ...   Jun 19 2005, 10:19 PM
Dantrag   Awesome writing. Keep it up and don't keep me in ...   Jun 19 2005, 10:20 PM
gamer10   Don't write yourself into a corner. If you don't...   Jun 19 2005, 10:21 PM
jonajosa   Don't write yourself into a corner. If you don't...   Jun 19 2005, 10:22 PM
gamer10   That is somthing nobody ever learns the easy way...   Jun 19 2005, 10:23 PM
Konradude   I'm sure it is briliant writing gamer! Keep it up....   Jun 19 2005, 10:24 PM
Mazuk   Yes me to thanks for the advice...is an amateur yo...   Jun 19 2005, 10:25 PM
jonajosa   "mess" if you don't understand Jonajosa language. ...   Jun 19 2005, 10:25 PM
Konradude   You can't spell lol? :O   Jun 19 2005, 10:25 PM
gamer10   "mess" if you don't understand Jonajosa language. ...   Jun 19 2005, 10:26 PM
jonajosa   Lets put it this way. My dead grandmother types fa...   Jun 19 2005, 10:29 PM
Konradude   ? Is that a joke?   Jun 19 2005, 10:29 PM
jonajosa   The smiley at the end should give it away. But i d...   Jun 19 2005, 10:31 PM
Mazuk   It happens alot to me when I am typeing faster tha...   Jun 19 2005, 10:36 PM
gamer10   It happens alot to me when I am typeing faster tha...   Jun 19 2005, 10:37 PM
Mazuk   Sure it is. Just the signal doesn't move fast eno...   Jun 19 2005, 10:39 PM
gamer10   Sure it is. Just the signal doesn't move fast eno...   Jun 19 2005, 10:40 PM
gamer10   Note- Yay! I'm on a writing spree! Chapter 4 ...   Jun 19 2005, 11:58 PM
gamer10   Chapter 5 I walked up to the tallest building I...   Jun 20 2005, 12:26 AM
MerGirl   Pretty good. :goodjob: The only piece of advice ...   Jun 20 2005, 12:58 AM
gamer10   *reads Mergirls post* Thanks for the advice. I'...   Jun 20 2005, 01:03 AM
MerGirl   ;) No offence taken. Whew! :ashamed: I...   Jun 20 2005, 01:25 AM
gamer10   I'm willing to help in any way I can. So just PM i...   Jun 20 2005, 01:27 AM
Red   Well, you've inspired me Niran. time to start Shak...   Jun 20 2005, 01:56 AM
gamer10   Like I said to Mergirl, I can help. Just PM me. Wh...   Jun 20 2005, 01:58 AM
Red   Thanks. You guys are going to like some of his dre...   Jun 20 2005, 02:04 AM
gamer10   I especially like doing panicky scenes, sometimes ...   Jun 20 2005, 02:09 AM
Red   I especially like doing panicky scenes, sometimes ...   Jun 20 2005, 02:16 AM
gamer10   I like Shakur's dreams. And the seven, they're c...   Jun 20 2005, 02:17 AM
Mazuk   Nice story. Quite the ending but You said you was...   Jun 20 2005, 02:36 AM
gamer10   I edited the post that said that, now it says some...   Jun 20 2005, 02:37 AM
Zelda_Zealot   Nice, two updates in one day. Good ones too, keep ...   Jun 20 2005, 02:42 AM
Mazuk   Ok nutty. Good job and since I didn't have to wai...   Jun 20 2005, 02:42 AM
Zelda_Zealot   Dont worry about it, I do it all the time *Just go...   Jun 20 2005, 04:07 AM
Dantrag   good job gamer10. interesting that you read far...   Jun 20 2005, 05:51 AM
Konradude   Good story again Niran! Waiting for the next one.....   Jun 20 2005, 06:59 PM
gamer10   Good story again Niran! Waiting for the next one.....   Jun 20 2005, 08:40 PM
gamer10   A revised edition is going to be on it's way in a ...   Jun 21 2005, 05:53 PM
Zelda_Zealot   Sounds good, I look forward to reading the "NEW AN...   Jun 21 2005, 05:59 PM
gamer10   Niran Revised Edition I’d like to thank all t...   Jun 21 2005, 11:08 PM
Zelda_Zealot   Much better! :goodjob:   Jun 21 2005, 11:11 PM
Dantrag   yay...are you going to continue the story or do we...   Jun 21 2005, 11:44 PM
gamer10   What do you mean, when Niran is arrested at the en...   Jun 22 2005, 12:11 AM
Dantrag   What do you mean, when Niran is arrested at the en...   Jun 22 2005, 12:41 AM
treydog   Will we ever discover how he came to "cause the de...   Jun 22 2005, 03:14 PM


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