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post Jul 19 2005, 06:42 PM
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I was going to update my other story, but I was like, to heck with that. I found the urge to continue the story of my RP character was much too strong to resist. So here is the first chapter.

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"No, I can't keep 'im, can't afford to pay for the amount of care he'd need." The man said, standing up and brushing a few crumbs off his shirt that had managed to survive the full utilization of his mouth. He placed his old leather hat back onto his head, forcing it to mix once again with his grimy, unkempt hair.

The lady, who was sitting almost directly across from him, was basically begging.

"Please, not another of my children!" She cried out desperately, tears running down her face. She had been hoping he might change his decision, make the first exception.

His features did not change nor soften at all, he stayed firm in his decision, and he was getting a little annoyed at her.

"I told ya, if you don't listen, you'll go as well." He said angrily, grabbing the child they were discussing and heading outside, at a fast stride.

15 Years - Chapter 1

Niran woke up, rubbing his eyes, and looking tiredly around. He rose from bed, bathed, then donned a clean pair of clothes. They weren't goning to stay clean for very long, he was going to see what he could find in the forest today.

He strode down the stairs and nearly stumbled when he came to the bottom, his mind tended to wander off from his boring life.

Sitting at the breakfast table, he noticed his sister and mother where already there. Where was his father? He normally did not leave till night, to avoid pirates and such traveling the ocean.

He decided to ask the question,

"Mother, where has father gone to this morning?" Niran used his normal, carefree tone. Making sure he didn't sound the least bit worried.

His mother turned to him,

"Well Niran, you know he's been very busy lately. Latest shipments are to Summerset Isle, far off place that is." She said knowingly, while signing some piece of paper hecouldn't manage to read.

Niran's mother spent most of her time studying and trying to learn enough to keep up with him, though it wasn't an easy task. She often spent nearly a whole week in her study, only coming down for meals, and the occasional walk.

"No school today, I suppose." She said, sipping a strong smelling drink. She put the cup down on the table and looked at him.

"No mother, today we have off." He said, his voice sounding a bit disapointed, though he did have much to do still. He shifted in his seat, and begin to eat.

After the meal had ended he excused himself from the table and told his mother that he'd be leaving later today, because staying in the house was much too boring.

"I suppose so," she said, warily granting him permission, "Be sure to stay in town, no wandering off." She knew that telling him would do no good, he was bound to run off somewhere.

His younger sister, Sidria, who had been silent all this time spoke up, giving her own theory as to where Niran was running off to.

"Going and seeing girls are we?" she said smirking, brushing her beautiful and lengthy hair back.

Niran blushed looking down before looking to his mother for help.

"Of course not, don't be silly." Was the only thing he said in response, it's what he normally said when she started picking on him.

"It's none of your business if he is," his mother added, though she couldn't supress a little smile as she headed up the stairs to the top floor. She really did wonder about that boy sometimes.

Niran rolled his eyes and headed outside, not watching what his sister chose to do next. What did this new day have in store for him . . .

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post Jul 26 2005, 06:44 PM
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15 Years - Chapter 8

Niran's breathing was soft, yet it came fast. Who could be opening the door to his bedroom at this time of night?

He held his sword in a thrust ready posistion, ready to kill any threatening being that might enter through his door.

The door handle finished turning, and the door began to open. Niran backed away sneakily lest he be hit by the opening door. That would ruin the surprise waiting for the intruder.

"Niran, are you awake?" A worried voice asked, "I can hear you moving about."

Niran froze as the person spoke, it was no intruder. That was his mother.

He quickly leaned his sword on the wall and stood straight up. His stature changing to one of a more civil person.

"Yes mother, I'm awake." He said pulling the door open the rest of the way and then lowering his arm again.

"Niran, you slept all day. I was just wondering whether you were hungry." She said, walking into his room. Her eyes shone with worry, but he couldn't see them in this darkness.

"No mother, I don't think I can eat right now." Niran looked down remorsefully, knowing the cook must've prepared something already. Even though it was very late.

"Please send the cook my apologies," Niran looked up, hoping he didn't look as tired as he was.

"I'm going for a walk, I have a lot to think about right now."

His mother ruffled his hair and smiled "All right then, just don't get yourself lost in a forest."

When outside Niran stretched his arms, and walked on the side of the road. He came to an alleyway and made his way down it, he had come here often. Mainly at night, it was quiet and no one bothered him here.

He leaned against the wall, looking out on the street.

The moonlight didn't reach where he was, however it did light up the street and he watched as a shadow fell on the ground. Moving closer and closer to the alleyway. It looked as if whoever it was, did not plan on coming into it.

Niran stood still in the shadows as the person passed.

Wait a minute, was that Faili? What was she doing out this late?

Niran spoke up before he could stop himself, even though he wasn't sure whether it was actually her or not.

"Faili?" he called out, hoping it was her.

The person gasped, and turned to face the alley. Niran could now see her face clearer, and saw that she was staring wide eyed down the alley at him. Recognizing his voice she took a nervous step forward.

He walkd forward, placing an arm on her shoulder. "Faili, what are you doing?"

Her eyes were still wide, not in fright anymore. Just in surprise.

"Niran - well I was just going for a walk." she pasued and swallowed, "What were you doing - down there." She asked, her eyes straying to the dark alley.

"Thinking, that's all." Niran said putting his arms around her, and running his right hand through her hair.

"You okay? I'm afraid I might've given you a bit of a shock."

She fidgeted nervously, before putting her arms around his neck.

"I'm fine." she said softly, pulling herself as close to him as she possibly could "Niran . . .are you angry with me?"

Niran raised an eyebrow.

"Of course not" he told her, trying to keep from getting too emotional. "I shouldn't have taken you into the forest, you obviously don't enjoy such trips."

Faili pulled away, "That wasn't what I was talking about, I- I slapped you. . . .I'm sorry."

Niran grabbed hold of her arms.

"Faili, don't apologize! I was acting like a jerk!"

Faili turned away, and started to cry. Leaning against the wall, she continued sobbing with her hands covering her face.

Niran reached out a his arm, and pulled one of her hands from her face.

"Don't cry." He pleaded softly "Come on Faili, don't cry. I'm sorry for yelling, okay? Please, don't cry. . . "

Suddenly Faili pushed him away. "Get away from me. . ."

However, Niran didn't budge from the spot.

She pushed him again, still crying.

"Get away from me!" Her voice was shrill and loud now, as she pushed him even farther.

"Faili," Niran said grabbing hold of her hands "Stop, you'll wake everyone."

Faili wrenched her hands from his grip.

"Just-go away."
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gamer10   Niran - The Years Before   Jul 19 2005, 06:42 PM
Kiln   Neat...so this is to be the story of your RP guy t...   Jul 19 2005, 06:46 PM
MerGirl   Well, it's a good start. :) The only thing ...   Jul 19 2005, 07:27 PM
Fuzzy Knight   Agree with MerGirl, its not to much talking... be...   Jul 19 2005, 07:33 PM
Konradude   It is very good, but it is lacking in detail. Mayb...   Jul 19 2005, 07:31 PM
gamer10   That prologue was written yesterday, I guess the q...   Jul 20 2005, 12:07 AM
minque   Ahh nice to hear more about Niran....he seems very...   Jul 20 2005, 08:49 AM
Kell-Reevor   Good story. I'm not too concerned with the la...   Jul 20 2005, 05:04 PM
gamer10   The man stood on the side of the road, that turned...   Jul 22 2005, 04:40 AM
Kiln   Nice picture on the first post, it looks so peacef...   Jul 22 2005, 09:12 AM
gamer10   "He had been spotted by an Imperial Legion Of...   Jul 22 2005, 03:43 PM
gamer10   15 Years - Chapter 4 Niran kneeled down and took ...   Jul 24 2005, 09:09 PM
minque   Very nice Gamer!!! and a great picture...   Jul 24 2005, 10:14 PM
gamer10   Thanks, I was nearly half way through chapter 5, t...   Jul 24 2005, 10:30 PM
MerGirl   Very good! :goodjob: Hope to see more of this...   Jul 24 2005, 10:47 PM
Kiln   Very good...I gotta read the next part, I'm dr...   Jul 25 2005, 12:03 AM
gamer10   15 Years - Chapter 5 Niran opened his eyes, and s...   Jul 25 2005, 12:30 AM
Kiln   :lol: Haha! Man, Niran is no good with women ...   Jul 25 2005, 12:38 AM
gamer10   Really, damn they're supposed to be martians...   Jul 25 2005, 12:44 AM
Kiln   I'm sure you got what I meant...well maybe no...   Jul 25 2005, 12:51 AM
gamer10   Actually, that immaturity in the RP is only tempor...   Jul 25 2005, 12:59 AM
Mazuk   Wow awesome job gamer. Seems I have been out to l...   Jul 25 2005, 01:37 AM
gamer10   15 Years - Chapter 6 Niran tore throught the fore...   Jul 25 2005, 05:12 AM
Kiln   Good update, I like how you progress so quickly fr...   Jul 25 2005, 05:34 AM
gamer10   Here's a good picture of Faili. http://i17.pho...   Jul 25 2005, 05:36 AM
Kiln   Thats a nice pic gamer. :) I just read more of th...   Jul 25 2005, 05:39 AM
gamer10   15 Years - Chapter 7 Niran stood outside, looking...   Jul 25 2005, 08:41 PM
Dantrag   Cool. Niran is going to be killed. by a theif. i...   Jul 25 2005, 09:22 PM
gamer10   Or so we think *eyes dart around* Obviously not, ...   Jul 25 2005, 09:23 PM
MerGirl   Very good that you updated it! :goodjob: A ...   Jul 25 2005, 09:25 PM
Dantrag   A fellow fan of the almighty band named The Mars V...   Jul 25 2005, 09:25 PM
gamer10   Yes master Yoda. :P :D   Jul 25 2005, 09:33 PM
Kiln   Nice, a little vague on details but still good. :)   Jul 25 2005, 09:34 PM
Dantrag   To add to mergirl's post... there are a lot o...   Jul 25 2005, 09:36 PM
gamer10   Guess what, I think my next chapter will have 400 ...   Jul 25 2005, 09:44 PM
Kiln   If you really want to annoy people then you shoul...   Jul 26 2005, 12:28 AM
Dantrag   This is an...erm....interesting relationship. So...   Jul 26 2005, 06:50 PM
gamer10   BD Niran will be Niran. :lol:   Jul 26 2005, 06:51 PM
Kiln   I think she's got multiple personalities.hehe ...   Jul 26 2005, 06:56 PM
gamer10   15 Years - Chapter 9 Niran sulked forwards, walki...   Jul 27 2005, 05:56 PM
Dantrag   What a clumsy dude. :lol: still good, keep it ...   Jul 27 2005, 06:16 PM
Channler   Nce gamer, keep it up.. lol cause its helluva bett...   Jul 27 2005, 07:45 PM
MerGirl   Very quick update, and good job! :goodjob: I...   Jul 27 2005, 08:05 PM
Kiln   I just caught the update, nice job...violent storm...   Jul 27 2005, 08:20 PM
gamer10   Look out! A TORNADO IS RIGHT BEHIND YOU...   Jul 27 2005, 08:22 PM
gamer10   15 Years - Chapter 10 Niran kicked the door in fr...   Aug 1 2005, 04:05 PM
Kiln   Niran is sarcastic even when he thinks he could di...   Aug 1 2005, 04:27 PM
Dantrag   Cool update, though it should have been longer. :...   Aug 1 2005, 04:51 PM
Mazuk   Nice Update Gamer. Keep up the good work.   Aug 1 2005, 09:07 PM
Dantrag   :lol: When I said "it should have been longe...   Aug 2 2005, 04:11 AM
gamer10   :P Well, another update probably won't co...   Aug 2 2005, 04:06 PM
Kiln   Oh you updated...Niran changed...and then went bac...   Aug 3 2005, 05:49 AM
Fuzzy Knight   Oooh.. this is good with another update, very well...   Aug 3 2005, 09:51 AM
treydog   Some good writing here- wonder if we might find ou...   Aug 4 2005, 04:09 PM
minque   Hey....nice update, itīs always nice to learn more...   Aug 7 2005, 08:40 AM
gamer10   This update came after a longer break than usual. ...   Aug 21 2005, 01:53 AM
Kiln   That chapter was really good, lots of emotion...I ...   Aug 21 2005, 02:28 AM
Red   Nice Gamer. Awesome emotion.   Aug 21 2005, 03:02 AM
treydog   Niran certainly seems to have a great deal of ange...   Aug 22 2005, 03:10 PM
gamer10   16 Years - Chapter 2 Niran couldn't move, a r...   Aug 27 2005, 10:22 PM
Kiln   Very nice gamer, unfortunately the way you write i...   Aug 27 2005, 11:55 PM
treydog   Nice update- gives some insight into Niran's t...   Aug 29 2005, 02:05 PM
gamer10   16 Years - Chapter 3 Niran looked up from his boo...   Sep 10 2005, 01:52 AM
Dantrag   Gah! the mushiness! Still good though. g...   Sep 10 2005, 01:57 AM
Kiln   I loved this part, lots of emotion, and his surrou...   Sep 26 2005, 12:14 AM
gamer10   Well, after more than a month of break in my writi...   Oct 24 2005, 10:26 PM
Mazuk   Nice update gamer. Keep up the great work.   Oct 25 2005, 01:03 AM
minque   Ahh gamer! Nice update, glad you continue this...   Oct 25 2005, 05:44 PM
gamer10   16 Years, Chapter 5 A moment later and it surely...   Dec 27 2005, 02:32 AM


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