Excerpts From The Green Book Of Poems, Don't Look I'm Working On It In Here! Options

[Wurlon]

Excerpts From The Green Book Of Poems
By Wurlon Firethorn

(I'm Using This As A Writing Station Please)
(Brb Later, Out Of Ideas For now)


The Horse And The Rider

So sat the knight, whom was dressed in gray mail,
perched on a horse so through wind he would sail!
But through battle and war, his horse would bleed,
so the rider gave armor to his steed!
But heavy and thick, the horse made a jump,
and the rider fell a thunderous thump!
But through anger and hurt, he was still sane,
and simply smacked the horse on it's mane!



This post has been edited by Wurlon: Nov 6 2005, 06:45 PM

[Soulseeker3.0]

not to bad. I don't like poems to much but yeah not to bad.

I like this part the best for some reason

From day to night the sky is all,
From Winter To Spring,
To Summer, To Fall,
Nothing but the sky shows all!

but I think the To summer part should be from but I don't know. night

[Wurlon]

not to bad. I don't like poems to much but yeah not to bad.

I like this part the best for some reason

From day to night the sky is all,
From Winter To Spring,
To Summer, To Fall,
Nothing but the sky shows all!

but I think the To summer part should be from but I don't know. night

Thanks I changed that and it does sound better.

I'm not a fan of poetry besides the kind that rhymes but I really want to contribute to the library, and I already had a few poems in my mind. I just need like three more for this excerpt and to edit it...

[stargate525]

I tried reading them to myself, but found them kinda difficult, as there is little rythm to it. Try and get the sylables more even, it'll read 200% better.

Love the content though.