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Sep 10 2005, 01:46 AM
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Read it, comment on it, suggest for improvement on it, etc. more will follow.
Morrowfall Ch.1
I had done it. I had finally beaten it. Morrowind, the game that had occupied all my time for the past three months. Not particularly good, for my health or my college grades, but tonight was what it had all lead up to, I had beaten the game, United the houses, learned the truth about the temple, and defeated Dagoth Ur. Call me a geek, but I intended to celebrate. And celebrate I did. I depleted my horde of liquor, including the Schmirnoff I had been saving for my birthday. I was good at saving things, but not at holding my liquor. These two things collided to spell my doom that night. The last thing I remember is my roommates coming back from the restaurant, me yelling at them for breathing too loud, and them falling off the loft’s edge, bottle of half-empty Captain Morgan’s still in hand.
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stargate525 |
Oct 10 2005, 08:44 PM
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QUOTE(mplantinga @ Oct 10 2005, 12:48 PM) Hey! I thought you said he was going to get a name?!?!? Well, there goes the story. Seriously, a great update. I was glad to see that the plan worked out for them. I also enjoyed your description of the character's inner struggle with just having killed. Although, his experience with swords might indicate this wasn't the first time? secret plot twist with the sword. as for the name, I mixed 16 and 17, which is sitting on my desk, up in my head. He gets one next time, I promise.
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mplantinga |
Oct 11 2005, 12:20 AM
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QUOTE(stargate525 @ Oct 10 2005, 05:30 PM) Who told you about that? Really though, who said anything about the sword? QUOTE(stargate525 @ Oct 10 2005, 02:44 PM) secret plot twist with the sword. It looks like you did.  Perhaps you had already forgotten? I guess it's not much of a secret anymore  (except for what the twist actually is)
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stargate525 |
Oct 11 2005, 02:59 AM
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QUOTE(mplantinga @ Oct 10 2005, 07:20 PM) It looks like you did.  Perhaps you had already forgotten? I guess it's not much of a secret anymore  (except for what the twist actually is) I meant the 'sword' as 'sword being weilded by tail'. The sword itself won't have a backstory. *looks about misceviously* or WILL it? 
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stargate525 |
Oct 15 2005, 11:45 PM
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Chapter 17
During the days that followed I learned more and more about what it was exactly we had gotten ourselves into. We were living in a cave outside of Vivec, an abandoned smuggler's den by the looks of it. Plenty of room for all of us, though not the most comfortable accomodations.
To my annoyance, I was now even more respected by everyone, almost to the point of worship. I didn't want that kind of fame, all I wanted was to go home. While I was here though, I certainly didn't want to be known for a murder. I found that this would be hard to avoid, as there was a 20,000 gold peice reward for my head, and there was rumored to be a poem circling around Vivec entitled 'The Hero of Fort Ebonhart' about my 'heroic deeds'.
We stayed there a grand total of three weeks, resorting to highway robbery to feed ourselves. Suspicions in Vivec weregetting high, and demand for us to be found was mounting. Time to relocate, and, since I was now the leader by general consent, 'Sword-tail' was the one to decide on where.
I got together Gravious, Holds-The-Shield, the best argonian warrior we had with us, and Maer' Kesh, the master theif, to help make the descision. Obviously, we ruled out Suran, Vivec, Balmora, and Seyda Neen as hiding places, as well as the smaller villages on the western coast; the former were hotbeds of enemies, and the latter were too small to move through without attracting attention. The Redoran we rejected as well; even though they could shelter us, the weren't nearly strong enough to go against the nerevarine.
That left Dagon Fel and the surrounding islands in the North, or the telvanni lands in the east. After awhile we decided on Dagon Fel. Although the prospects there were bleaker, and the telvanni had no love of the Nerevarine, we somehow thought that marching a groupd of Khajiit and Argonians through the lands of experiment-happy wizards would be a bad thing.
Dagon Fel it was, though now we had to decide the route we would take. A straight line north would take us through Red Mountain. Although it was now idyllic farmland, it was heavily patroled. East, we could use he telvanni as cover, but they were almost as dangerous to us. West would be a difficult marchthrough swampland and bogs, although it would be the least likely to pose military resistance to us. The least of three evils, and the descision was on my shoulders.
Thankfully, Maer' Kesh had an alternative option, one perfectly suited for us to carry out, one that could prevent any more deaths. Now all we had to do was find one person, and we would be home free.
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of course I'm not finished. I'm trying to... Sep 10 2005, 02:07 AM Kell-Reevor Very good, I'll be looking forward to more. Sep 10 2005, 05:00 AM stargate525
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*walks awa... Sep 10 2005, 06:02 AM  stargate525
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I w... Sep 10 2005, 06:29 AM Neck' Thall :lol: I Like! Thats a Nice start...did you ha... Sep 11 2005, 06:03 PM stargate525
is it realistic? I've actually never been dru... Sep 11 2005, 07:44 PM  stargate525 more of the story, more of the story...
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oh, his fate will get far worse... Sep 11 2005, 09:12 PM  stargate525 more story!
Chapter 5
My head hurt. Either i... Sep 13 2005, 12:11 AM   stargate525 :huh:
come on, no advice, no imprsssions of the ... Sep 16 2005, 04:02 AM Kell-Reevor *flames*
Not really... its great so far. Good wo... Sep 16 2005, 11:27 AM Wolfie Hehe this is great :D Sep 16 2005, 01:17 PM stargate525
thanks, any other comments, like how you think... Sep 17 2005, 05:21 PM stargate525 Chapter 6
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Now, fully healed and ... Sep 28 2005, 02:05 AM mplantinga An interesting twist, to have Nerevar be a "t... Sep 28 2005, 08:27 PM stargate525
I shall, If i have time to copy them you might ge... Sep 28 2005, 11:02 PM mplantinga An impressive escape. I do hope they manage to fin... Sep 29 2005, 02:16 AM stargate525
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Chater 11
Even Ebonhart was dif... Sep 29 2005, 08:34 PM mplantinga You must be cruel, to leave us without knowing wha... Sep 30 2005, 05:44 AM minque Ahhhh...so many updates all very interesting, and ... Sep 30 2005, 06:51 PM stargate525
yeah, very cruel. I'm a master of cliffhanger... Sep 30 2005, 11:08 PM Wolfie Looking good so far Stargate :D Sep 30 2005, 11:12 PM D7Unknown Great story you have here, very original. I'm ... Oct 1 2005, 03:01 AM stargate525
omg Serenity was AMAZING. Everyone who has any lo... Oct 1 2005, 03:13 AM stargate525 now don't everybody jump up at once...
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thank ye. Can't give yeh all the answers at o... Oct 1 2005, 05:37 PM The Wolf Excellent job! I like it. :goodjob: Oct 1 2005, 05:45 PM minque Stargate....thy name is "teaser"..you be... Oct 1 2005, 07:32 PM stargate525
Oh thank you. I have a title now, Stargate the Te... Oct 2 2005, 12:33 AM Fuzzy Knight Funny story... Well written, keep it up ;) Oct 1 2005, 08:34 PM D7Unknown Another great update. Keep them coming. Oct 2 2005, 02:13 AM mplantinga With each new entry, this story continues to get m... Oct 2 2005, 03:02 AM stargate525
S.G.M?
Some Great Manuscript?
Super Genious Ma... Oct 2 2005, 03:09 AM stargate525 boy you guys are lucky, three updates in 12 hours.... Oct 2 2005, 05:34 AM minque
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okay. Expect an update soon. Oct 2 2005, 05:20 PM mplantinga Another excellent update. I'm excited to see w... Oct 2 2005, 08:43 PM stargate525
you should be somewhat knowing of this guy's ... Oct 3 2005, 01:01 AM  stargate525
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ah, because then you wouldn't hear the end of... Oct 6 2005, 12:07 AM stargate525 As promised;
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*furiously rewrites chap... Oct 7 2005, 02:21 AM stargate525 here ya go.
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I pulled the sword from ... Oct 9 2005, 09:05 PM mplantinga Well, I guess we can wait until the next chapter t... Oct 10 2005, 08:53 PM stargate525 *double post* Oct 10 2005, 11:29 PM stargate525
Who told you about that? :|
Really though, who ... Oct 10 2005, 11:30 PM minque The plot tightens now.....so dwelling in a cave ne... Oct 16 2005, 08:36 AM chips wow this is terrible tsk...tsk..tsk..
only joking... Oct 16 2005, 06:20 PM stargate525
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just kidding. Oct 16 2005, 06:28 PM mplantinga Another great update. Once again, you have left us... Oct 17 2005, 06:34 PM stargate525
suspence? why, whatever do you mean? :D
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