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The Story Of Telina Delvanni |
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Tellie |
Nov 10 2005, 02:49 PM
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Mouth

Joined: 10-November 05
From: Tel Delvanni

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The story of Telina Delvanni
Prolouge..
Like it or not, I chose to start this story, and were really inspired by the storys of OverrideB1, Alexander, Treydog and Minque.
I do not know how good this story is, and cant write all times,so if you start to like it, please be patient.I would be wery happy if people were to give me some comments, even constructive criticism.
I started my life in the dark brotherhood. As a child, mere 8 months my parents were killed by an unknown assasin.When the guards checed the house, they found me, and sold me to the dark brotherhood, as cheap labour.
But the brotherhood had other needs for me, and I started the training to become an assasin.My skills grew, and being a dark elf, my natural resistance to fire helped me many a time. At my age fo fifteen I started to study the arts of magic,but only usefull skills ofcourse. My skills with the short blade, wakizashis especially grew to be wery dangerous, and when I were twenty years old, I were the most dangerous assasin in Cyrodiil.
So many would think that I would soon rise to he top ranks, one of the masers of the guild, didn't like me, so he gave me a writ on a member of the royal family,but he tipped the guards of.So when I was about to enter the big mansion, the guards came.
"Stop you" he said. But one of the guards, had already struck down on me. I easly dodged the blow, and in return the guard felt how it is to get a dagger in his lung. In the cofusion I jumpede up on a wall, and took my poisonous darts out of my pack.
"Where is she"one yelled "there up on the""SPLAT" he had got the dart in his ugly face, and he fell dead to the floor, just as the others ran up on the wall. I unscheated my twin wakizhashis and ran upon them.In a whirlwhind of fast blows on guard dropped to the grund with a severed artery, meanwhile i stabbed my wakizhashis into the back of one, crushed his spinal column, while the other got it in his neck.
Thinking this was a good place not to be, I jumped down into the courtyard,only to get a hammerblow in my head,so I was knocked out cold.
Waking up three days lateder with an unspeakable headache, I were taken to the local magistrate.Beacuse one of the guards had stuck agains me first, my counter attacks counted as self defense, but I had though trespassed royal territory, and were given three years in prison, and when I had finished my time I would be taken to court again.
I remeber little of my days in prison, altough my skills dropped rapidly, I were still wery good with shortblades. One day I where put on a blindfold, and taken into a carridge,where I where for three days,until I were taken onto a ship, wich would take me to a place, far beyond my imaginations
This post has been edited by Telendil Delvanni: Nov 11 2005, 12:17 PM
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Tellie |
Nov 11 2005, 11:14 PM
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Mouth

Joined: 10-November 05
From: Tel Delvanni

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Chapter one:A new life
I walked into the office, and took a look around. The room was dimly lit, with the walls, slowly starting to lose its bright colour. As I walked into the room, I noticed all the silverware and books standing on the shelf, in the right side of the room. Especially I noticed the big limeware platter, wich would probably be worth over fivehundred septims.
At last I went over to the old and grey looking man, who had big pits on his ugly face, and the look he gave me clearly shoved a strong disgust for me, and all I stood for. "Ah there you are, we've been expecting you, now you'l have to be recorded before you're officially released, there are a few ways we can do this and the choise is yours".
Here he gave me the options of either answering his questions, filling the forms out myself or picking from the class list he had in front of him. "My name is Telina Delvanni,a mage and born under the sign of the lady", I chose to lie to him, as I did not want this kind of people to know that I was an assasin.
"Well then you answered my next question to, but before I stamp these papers, make sure this information is correct". Giving the piece of paper a small look, I nodded to show it was correct. "Good, now go to the captain in order to get your release fee".
I then started to walk around the room, making sure I had an "accidential"stumble, that knocked a candle or three over papers on Ergallas desk. With the guard and Ergalla buisy with putting the fire out, I realesed them from the heavy burden that Limeware platter would have of them, I then walked slowly out of the room and closed the door after me.
I was standing in a big hallway, and when I walked into the main room I found A "few" items of interest, wich included a worn out dagger and a flask of sujamma, a lot of silverware and other stuff. Thinkin they could by no means make sure that all off theese items would get the proper care I disposed them of the items, and walked out into the courtyard....
This post has been edited by Telendil Delvanni: Feb 3 2006, 04:46 PM
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Tellie The Story Of Telina Delvanni Nov 10 2005, 02:49 PM mplantinga A good start. I'm curious how the law decided ... Nov 10 2005, 06:46 PM Jonajosa
You have some good influences.
Try this.
I ... Nov 11 2005, 07:42 AM Tellie First Mplantinga I have decided to make the story ... Nov 11 2005, 08:49 AM Tellie When I was on that hatefull ship, I fell asleep al... Nov 11 2005, 10:28 AM Tellie Comments would be nice, both me and Telina would b... Nov 11 2005, 10:53 PM minque Ye both would huh? :D
Okies....First itīs a goo... Nov 11 2005, 11:02 PM Jonajosa Much better. Nice detail on your suroundings in th... Nov 12 2005, 10:39 PM Tellie Thank you. I will propably dont be able to write b... Nov 12 2005, 11:30 PM Tellie So, do you like it. I shall write more tomorrow ni... Nov 14 2005, 09:44 PM Tellie So sorry I havent been ableto write in the last da... Nov 15 2005, 09:35 PM mplantinga This is definitely a good story which gets better ... Nov 15 2005, 10:08 PM Jonajosa Nice fight with Fargoth. Thought it was rather enj... Nov 16 2005, 02:13 AM Tellie "Hello lassie, please, don't be afraid I ... Nov 16 2005, 12:45 PM Jonajosa So... many... commas. Try and cut down on those. I... Nov 22 2005, 12:36 AM mplantinga I'm glad to see that the fall from the lightho... Nov 16 2005, 06:04 PM minque Nice story! Glad you keep it up, always nice w... Nov 18 2005, 11:22 PM Tellie Alrigth, I've been away for a while (I was at ... Nov 21 2005, 11:47 AM mplantinga Sorry to hear that you were at the hospital. No ap... Nov 21 2005, 06:56 PM Tellie So sorry, I was at the hospital again, I have been... Nov 28 2005, 09:17 PM mplantinga Thanks for another great update. I'm glad the ... Nov 28 2005, 09:46 PM Tellie Comments would be nice please. And can anyone give... Nov 29 2005, 09:46 AM minque I like your story a lot..but you wanted tips how t... Nov 29 2005, 10:16 PM Tellie Hey guys, I'm feeling much better now, and I h... Dec 2 2005, 12:44 PM Jonajosa Liked it.
One tip though. Read your story out lou... Dec 3 2005, 01:43 AM mplantinga Quick thinking with the fireball. Another great in... Dec 3 2005, 01:48 AM Tellie :D Hi again, my health is increasing more and more... Dec 7 2005, 03:12 PM mplantinga Wow; that was certainly an unexpected and unique w... Dec 7 2005, 07:16 PM Tellie Hello, another on is coming up. I have now complet... Dec 14 2005, 04:51 PM mplantinga I certainly wasn't expecting the kind of behav... Dec 14 2005, 09:30 PM minque Oh dear....now I must be honest....I did not like ... Dec 14 2005, 09:39 PM Tellie First, I would like to explain Telina's histor... Dec 16 2005, 11:31 AM mplantinga A rather rapid turn-around for Telina, to go from ... Dec 16 2005, 05:58 PM minque Oh dear me! Now I feel guilty..I was too harsh... Dec 16 2005, 09:50 PM Tellie :D Thanks Minque and mplantinga, I have no bad fee... Dec 17 2005, 12:21 AM Jonajosa
While I do see how you would misunderstand Minq... Dec 17 2005, 09:22 AM Tellie -"Oh no", I yelled. I ran out the door, ... Dec 20 2005, 07:42 PM Tellie But but but. Where is everybody? I know this is pr... Dec 22 2005, 05:10 PM minque Hey, Ok, itīs a good update...I like it...really, ... Dec 22 2005, 06:42 PM Tellie HELLO. finally it comes, the next update on Telina... Dec 23 2005, 04:22 PM Elidor Well done, this story is great! This is starti... Dec 24 2005, 02:04 PM Tellie Oh hi. Nice that you like my story Elidor. PS: wel... Dec 25 2005, 07:09 PM minque Right there Telina! Now youīve had it..hehe Jo... Dec 29 2005, 10:57 PM MerGirl I have only read the prologue, and I think you are... Dec 30 2005, 09:14 PM Tellie Is English your native language (please don't ... Dec 31 2005, 01:29 PM Tellie -"Telina, you have been progressing well... Dec 31 2005, 03:48 PM Elidor Aha another update, and a good one it is! :go... Jan 1 2006, 03:02 AM mplantinga Excellent updates. It was an interesting twist to ... Jan 2 2006, 07:47 PM Tellie for the first time, I travelled, by magic. I felt ... Jan 6 2006, 10:45 AM minque "Ahhh Telina my child! So Azura speaks to... Jan 6 2006, 03:28 PM mplantinga It's good to see the legion and the locals sho... Jan 6 2006, 06:47 PM Tellie Hi, I was wondering, if there are anyone good at d... Jan 12 2006, 11:20 AM mplantinga I was very amused by the approach taken by the Tel... Jan 12 2006, 05:52 PM Tellie As I stood on the deck, I watched the water below ... Jan 16 2006, 07:00 PM mplantinga An unusual way to find Skullcrusher. I'm curio... Jan 16 2006, 07:17 PM minque Ah Telina! you courageous woman! you have ... Jan 16 2006, 10:46 PM Tellie Sure Minkey, you and all others can have some more... Jan 26 2006, 10:27 AM mplantinga Glad to see you back and feeling better. I've ... Jan 26 2006, 06:41 PM Tellie As promised, by the way have anyone checked out Ge... Jan 28 2006, 01:12 AM minque Eeeewwww......that was a good read! Telina is ... Jan 28 2006, 02:24 PM Tellie It's coming more tonight, I guess in about 5ho... Jan 28 2006, 04:27 PM mplantinga A unique and amusing solution to the "Therana... Jan 30 2006, 09:22 PM Tellie Oki, I know, that I wasn't able to post, like ... Jan 31 2006, 02:10 PM Tellie As promised.
Zurin, was sitting on the chair by t... Jan 31 2006, 10:01 PM mplantinga Very interesting. An unusual idea to give a young ... Jan 31 2006, 10:15 PM Tellie I have now edited the rest of the post, that was s... Feb 1 2006, 03:00 PM mplantinga I had assumed that Zurin was probably going to die... Feb 2 2006, 06:11 PM Tellie This one I dedicate for Planty, may he heal well. ... Feb 3 2006, 09:02 PM Elidor Ah how i loved doing the Telvanni quests. Some ver... Feb 4 2006, 03:01 PM Tellie After i arrived in vos, i had to ask one of the lo... Feb 5 2006, 06:30 PM minque Oh dear me! First you are very industrious, yo... Feb 5 2006, 07:50 PM Elidor Nice, an update so soon again, I like this differe... Feb 6 2006, 05:47 AM mplantinga I was really great to learn a little about Telina... Feb 6 2006, 06:54 PM Tellie hey, planty, I'd not expect to see you back so... Feb 6 2006, 08:57 PM mplantinga You may call us fans; well, I guess I can't sp... Feb 6 2006, 10:30 PM Tellie Hi, more will come later this night, all I wanted ... Feb 7 2006, 02:33 PM mplantinga Screenies! Please give us screenies! Actio... Feb 7 2006, 07:22 PM Tellie I walked closer, standing up agains the wall, maki... Feb 7 2006, 09:12 PM mplantinga I wondered why that first part was in a different ... Feb 7 2006, 10:11 PM minque You are gifted Tellie! great update as usual... Feb 7 2006, 10:51 PM Tellie I found the bookstore, and entered. In there I saw... Feb 8 2006, 07:03 PM Tellie Edit: sorry, i thought i had pushed the edit butto... Feb 10 2006, 02:04 PM minque Oh Tellie!! You are amazing! (En kempe... Feb 11 2006, 03:28 PM mplantinga That was truly an amazing installment. I laughed s... Feb 11 2006, 08:50 PM
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