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Elidor
post Feb 4 2006, 02:17 PM
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OKay this is my first attempt at a fan fiction so be gentle mellow.gif

Prologue

I was not in a good mood. My luck really wasnt that bad, usually in a night I could at least pull off one successful excursion into a local shop for a meal. But tonight it was most unfortunate the owner of the nearest tavern had decided now was the day to install a set of bars to his window.

"Hmm must have caught on to the fact he was constantly robbed blind by yours truly through that opening every other week" I mused to myself, strolling through the damp, well-trodden cobblestone streets.

I recounted in my head the, now I thought about it, quite strange fact my favorite target,the local tavern, slowly receeding into the darkness of the failing moons, had finally had the the crumbling lower corner of its storeroom outback fixed too.

Ohwell another cold, hungry night I thought, sidling through the crack of a rundown shack I had claimed as my own. The now lit, small guttering light of the only candle in my room gently revealed an old inch thick matress on the floor beside a pile of crumbled clothing. There wasnt much room beacuase of the half caved-in wall but it was something of a sanctuary for me, safe from prying eyes and other hopeful thieves.

Lying back on my matress I slowly allowed sleep to come, uttering a small prayer to any god that helped poor thieves, blowing out the candle and closing my eyes.

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Sunlight beamed in through the opening of my little haunt and brought me slowly to my senses.
Yawning lightly and getting up, I pulled on my cleanest set of clothes (pilfered from a commoners house, stupidly unlocked and unfortunately devoid of anything more useful) and hid my knife in the sole of my shoe.

As I emerged into the street, passed by folks of the less pleasant sort, I stopped to decide on what to do. Hunger was again gnawing at me and food seemed a great idea.

So decided, I padded off after the tavern, folks at the Green Tunic were hardly as watchful as they should have been and many the unguarded purse was easily accessible; upon slipping into the dank old building I carefully looked around, drunks and haughty nobles were easy, especially the latter as they considered themselves above the menial complication of being robbed and rarely expected it for some reason.

Peering through the gloom with the ease an altmers eyes provided, I spotted the ideal prey: an unshaven, glum looking merchant sitting next to a large tankard of sujamma.

Now, his drink was something of a kicker and by the looks of him he was rather entoxicated. I made my move.
Sneaking over and sitting beside him quitely, I casually eyed his plump black moneybag with something of astonishment, this man had quite a purse half hidden at the edge of his waist. Sidling closer still the drunken git barely noticed anyhing letalone my careful advance.
Reaching down as I stared ahead, I casually removed my boot-knife and easily cut the purse open at the seams filling my own leather satchel as the unlucky fellow downed a mouthful more of sujamma.

Getting up and moving too soon was my terrible mistake, the fellow noticed this movement and turned around, squinting suspiciously
"wsho rre yooh?" he said, slurring his words horribly,
"Why I am merely a fellow come for a drink." I replied cautiosly. He looked at my satchel of money and began something which I drowned out, thinking quickly,
"Might I night drunk, black as blue and filled with guars?"

He stopped, and tried to comprehend my words as I took off barely containing my mirth to the door of the tavern warranting some suspicious stares from other patrons, eyes on my back as I raced away.

Back in the street I sped around a few buildings and along a lane. I then found the place I was looking for, a ladder leading up to the top of an old closed apocathary, in amongst the damp squalid slums of the city.

Once safely hidden behind the chimney on the roof I caught my breath and let out the contents of my now bulging purse.
"Three hundered septims!" I burst out, unable to stop myself as the fat gold coins tumbled into my lap, laying there glittering serenely.

Oh now this was more like my customary luck! I almost cried with joy, there was enough for a hot meal, new clothes, even a few books to keep me interested during every other night plus spare!

Then came the clattering of the ladder I just climbed and the angry grunting noises as someone ran to the climb the ladder I had raced up previously. I decided now was not a good time to celebrate and jumped up, leaping and racing over the rooftops.

Glancing back I saw something truly frightening. A fast Khajitti bounding after me, dagger drawn and staring hungrily at my purse which was jumping around at my thighs and jangling loudly.

Apparently someone had heard my foolish exclamation.

~~~

Thats it for now, please comment as id love to know what you think of the start of my story.

cheers, elidor.

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post Feb 8 2006, 06:42 PM
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ahh, good ellie, you are continuing fine.

So please dont stop now, may I have some more please.....


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Elidor   Elessar's Story   Feb 4 2006, 02:17 PM
Tellie   Oh, this is definatly off for a good start, I have...   Feb 4 2006, 02:51 PM
Elidor   There, I fixed it properly. Thanks for the comment...   Feb 4 2006, 02:58 PM
Elidor   lol sorry about that ^_^   Feb 4 2006, 03:04 PM
Wolfie   You may want to consider putting that part at the ...   Feb 4 2006, 02:59 PM
Elidor   'Not good, really not good!' I screame...   Feb 6 2006, 05:38 AM
Tellie   Ohhh, good Elidor, you're improving, poor Elle...   Feb 6 2006, 09:12 PM
mplantinga   An interesting new story. It sounds like our prota...   Feb 7 2006, 07:29 PM
Elidor   This one will be relatively short as its the end o...   Feb 8 2006, 12:24 PM
Elidor   Hehe "ellie" i have a nickname :P and mo...   Feb 9 2006, 06:51 AM
Tellie   yea yea, I think ellie was a cool name ( more fema...   Feb 10 2006, 02:26 PM
Elidor   Starting on my first chapter.. [b]Chapter 1 The ...   Feb 14 2006, 10:59 AM
Taillus   Woah how did I miss this one. I am sorry for not r...   Feb 16 2006, 01:30 AM
jack cloudy   Elidor is doing just fine. I am surprise that that...   Feb 16 2006, 07:23 AM
jchamber   fear not for I am watching -jail chamber (me)...an...   Feb 16 2006, 04:05 PM
minque   What Mr jchamber said!..About liking that is.....   Feb 16 2006, 08:35 PM
Elidor   A warm, soft breeze brought me back to consciousne...   Feb 17 2006, 01:35 PM
Tellie   haha, that is bound to be the best Fargoth expos...   Feb 17 2006, 03:28 PM
Kiln   Haha, I just caught up on this one, each bit is wr...   Feb 17 2006, 06:18 PM
minque   Have to agree with Mr Oven here above.....he and T...   Feb 17 2006, 09:22 PM
jack cloudy   No, you killed him! *sob* Now there's no c...   Feb 17 2006, 10:05 PM
Elidor   I think its mainly because hes the first woodelf y...   Feb 17 2006, 11:13 PM
Elidor   This gigantic bug was absolutely the craziest thin...   Feb 19 2006, 02:45 AM
jack cloudy   A nice and realistic burglar scene. (Hey, I don...   Feb 19 2006, 06:17 PM
Elidor   :whistle: maybe...   Feb 20 2006, 08:52 AM
Kiln   Nice update Elidor, I really liked this update bec...   Feb 20 2006, 06:59 PM
mplantinga   I don't often play thieves, so it is amusing t...   Mar 1 2006, 12:31 AM
Elidor   Im really sorry i havent updated, but ive been con...   Mar 1 2006, 08:57 AM
Tellie   Good one ellie, I really like it when Elessar get ...   Mar 3 2006, 07:25 PM
Taillus   Loving it! And I hope Elessar keeps the other ...   Mar 3 2006, 07:52 PM
Elidor   Here we go folks another update. :) Heart pound...   Mar 4 2006, 02:55 AM
jack cloudy   Women, be carefull around them, Elessar! You s...   Mar 4 2006, 06:15 PM
treydog   Excellent descriptions, along with an even pace as...   Mar 8 2006, 08:18 PM
Tellie   Yeah go ellie go go go. You continue to amaze us w...   Mar 8 2006, 10:22 PM
Taillus   very well written once again. I like how you descr...   Mar 8 2006, 11:11 PM
mplantinga   It was good to see Elessar triumph over the assass...   Mar 9 2006, 02:48 AM
Elidor   lol its quite elating to recieve feedback from you...   Mar 9 2006, 08:53 AM
Elidor   This update contains some spoilers on the mod ...   Mar 9 2006, 12:19 PM
Tellie   Hey thanks ellie,glad you updated again, I shall d...   Mar 9 2006, 02:50 PM
mplantinga   I like where this is going. You've done your b...   Mar 9 2006, 08:04 PM
jack cloudy   I warned you before. Stay on your guard and keep y...   Mar 9 2006, 09:59 PM
Tellie   So can we expect another update soon...I want more...   Mar 23 2006, 08:22 PM
Kiln   An interesting twist is revealed in the last updat...   Mar 26 2006, 07:12 PM
minque   What Mr Oven said.......*waiting eagerly* :vikin...   Mar 29 2006, 08:34 PM


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