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The Story Of Hajima The Nin Ronin, this is kinda long and addictive maybe.. |
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jchamber |
Feb 12 2006, 10:30 PM
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I got inspiration from you guys, so thanks. Well here it is. Lemme know whatcha think.
(edited for fluidity, immersion, detail, and character touch up)
Chapter one- the begining Part One The Uncertainty
"Owww, my head..... dear Mephala!! What hit me?" I found myself with my face buried in a pillow on a hammock and my head was splitting in two. I can't remember what happened that was making my head hurt so bad or why I am lying down but I did know I wanted the pain to stop.
"Quiet, or the guard will hear you, he can be a mean sort." Said a gruff, deep voice. I turned my head to get a veiw of the guy and as I did so realized that I was on a boat, and that I didn't have a sea stomach as nausea overtook me and spilled my previous meal, which seemed to contain little more than a thin soup that I can't remember eating.
"Hey! Watch it!!" said the gruff voice that was now connected to a muscular dark elf with an ear ring, and scar on the right side of his face that took one eye out. He was wearing nothing but a pair of worn out, undyed, perhaps too used... pair of trousers on.
"Sorry 'bout that, I didn't see you were standing so close, good thing you were a little behind me."
"Yea good for yout health too, how are you besides being seasick?"
"My head is feels like it's going to explode, Several parts of my body feel like they have been wounded, I am still tired, and I haven't the strength to turn over to look at my body to see how bad the damage is."
"Well don't worry you'll be fine, gave that guard a mighty good fight though."
"What? Why is there a guard and just how hard did he hit me on the head, I don't even remember getting on this boat, or why I would be on one.. And why did I fight..."
"Slow down there," the man interrupted. "You are on a boat because that is where the guard put ya, the guard is here because I am a murderer and you have undoubtedly been found guilty of something...not that I am saying you did it, ... whatever it was. When the guard brought you to this boat I am guessing you knew you would get seasick or just wanted to escape and you just about did seeing as it took five guards to help the one you gave a thrashing to bring you down. I didn't see it but I heard it, and about it in good detail. I hear one had a hammer and got the back of your head when the other four were trying to get close enough to you, without getting hurt, to grapple you. I heard alot of scolding afterwards, seemed you were not supposed to be hurt getting on, that guard probably got his status revoked. As for this trip I am guessing we are about halfway there and I would suggest you go to sleep if you can't even turn over. By the way I am Jiub, we can will talk later, when you wake up, for now just rest."
And so I allowed myself to stop fighting the weary weakness that poisoned my mind and muscles and just let go...and soon I was standing in a windy foreign terrain. I had never seen anything like it before, the dirt was red and being picked up in the air, there was also another kind of dirt that seemed to be falling from the sky like a very light sprinkle in the storm of red. Before I could gather any more information about the place I heard a voice in my head of a soft but somewhat resounding tone, "They have taken you from the Imperial city's prison, first by carridge and now by boat. To the east... to Morrowind, fear not for I am watching. You have been chosen"
My shoulder was shaking, I began to wake up...to that gruff voice of Jiub's "Wake up, we're here. Why are you shaking? are you ok? Wake up. Stand up,... there you go. You were dreaming. What's your name? Forgot to ask before you passed out again.
"Owwwwww, I am still really sore, so take it easy on the sholder. Um, gimme a minute I just had a really weird dream.....Um .....BAH why can't I remember....I am sorry I can't remember my name right now, so just call me whatever you want."
"I think you seem like a Ganthar"
"That sounds bad lets go with Hanthimar instead."
"What do I care, it's your name."
"Fine then until I can remember my name we agree on Hanthimar"
"Ok, well, Hanthimar not even last night's storm could wake you, I heard them say we've reached Morrowind. I'm sure they'll let us go!" Jiub said hopefully. "Quiet, here comes the guard."
I could see him coming down the steps at the other end of the lower level of the boat, he looked very serious, but almost comical in that he only had one bracer on and one bracer off. His clothes were dark, but his boots and overvest were lighter. They might provide a little bit of protection...why am I thinking like that, I don't want to hurt the person who might let me go....now he was upon me and began to speak in a light, but very official, voice, "This is where you get off, come with me." I now noticed that the Imperial had some facial hair and was begining to bald, but that was at this point irrelivent. I was more worried about how I couldn't remember my own name. As the guard walked away I was caught up in my own thoughts, trying to remember something. The guard stopped and looked back threateningly.
"You better do what they say," said Jiub. So I got over my daze and followed the guard. When I got to the door in the floor of the top level a woman behind the stairs said, "The sooner you leave, the sooner we can move on." She was a ....well no better than a female dog let's say....That thought was interrupted by the gaurd from below that was escorting me,
"Get yourself up on deck and let's keep that as civil as possible." I paused for a moment to hate the woman, and the male guard gave me a small light push with a, "On deck now, prisoner" So I headed on up the stairs in front of me. I never could have guessed what I was to find at the top.
This post has been edited by jchamber: Feb 15 2006, 06:37 AM
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jchamber |
Feb 24 2006, 06:37 AM
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Chapt. One Part Six.- The Solurion's Initiation
I was somehow not really surprized that I was getting a cold reception but I barely evaded that thrust. Luckily for me the fool had his hands four feet in front of his waist and was acctually leaning forward, while running at me, with his arms all the way outstretched and sword pointing at me. This put all his weight and momentum going forward, a fact that I was fully aware of before I realized I was paying attention to it. I had moved to my left to sidestep the attack and was then grabbing his right elbow and shoulder with my hands and gave him a strong pull with my foot moving into his path, I began to pull his body into a downward circle that made him fall on his back where he looked bewildered as I held his comfiscated sword at his throat....when did I get that...it was as if my body had moved on its own and now I had the guard quivering in fear beneath his own blade, very interesting....
"Why shouldn't I kill you to protect myself? The last time a guard came across my path here I ended up in jail for a death I didn't cause, it was that man's own booze that killed him."
"You don't want to kill me, I don't matter that much...really, I am just here to see if Fargoth's ring is around his house. He is off looking for some old fool that helped him find it."
"I see well for now I think its best if you just sleep right here." I took a quick look through all the things in the building for something that would cause the man to go to sleep, finally I just decided to let him up."Well don't just lay there, get on your feet and find something like filling and that'll cause you to sleep." As he got up I tossed him into a wall so that he hit his head and was knocked out. "That is for trying to kill me just now!" I didn't care if it wasn't honorable to seek revenge like that, I was really tired of the open corruption of these guards.
I then used Fargoth's sheets to tie the guard down to the chair in the corner. I gaged him with a sock and left him in there. I might not know where I came from or how it was, but I know that this town isn't right and I can't change it through conventional means, I will just get thrown away again or worse. So now I am going to go with my gut instinct, even though it is a bit more violent than I think is appropriate.
With those thoughts I left the Fargoth house, and brought the sword with me, it was already dusk as I had been released from prison at six O' clock, according to the one that was in that obviously crooked guard sub-captain's office. I decided to walk over to the lighthouse and see what, if anything, the woman there might know about what was what in the town since I left.
I managed to get to the guardtower unnoticed. When I knocked on the door, there was a timid reply that the door was open. Having just been charged at after opening a door, I moved the door with my right foot as my body was on the left side of the door, so that I wasn't directly outside the door to begin with. When the door swung open I found the woman holding a dagger only a couple feet back from the door, so she was either really jumpy or was expecting someone. I decided it was safe from the look on her face though, once she recognized me.
"Oh my goodness you are the man that they framed for that drukard's death, what are you doing back in Seyda Neen? You must go. Now! they will probably kill you if they find out you are still around the town. Oh, NO. They might be on their way here right now. I don't want them here you must leave!"
"So you KNEW I was innocent! Why did you not help me? I just lost two weeks because you couldn't open your mouth! I am not going anywhere until I know what is going on and no one is coming because no one knows I am here."
"Don't be mad with me, innocent or guilty doesn't matter in a little place like this. It is just a matter of whether you behave for the guards of not. If I had said anything I would have been said to be an accomplice and then I would have only succeded in getting us both in prison."
"How could you live with your shame? You are a truly cowardly being to have done as you have. I have some questions, and since you saved your hide you are going to answer them. Where is Fargoth, where are the majority of the guards at this time of day and a little later on in the evening, how can I defeat the guards here that have you in this terrified state, and how long has it been like this?"
"It has been like this ever since the last tax collector was killed by the guards for giving them a hard time about taxes. It was blamed on *sob* a local man who was paid to take the blame, but I know who ..who ...who, IT WAS THE GUARDS I TELL YOU!!!!" She was crying uncontrolably at this point, and then suddenly a line was drawn in my head that made it make sense.
"You two were lovers weren't you? I am very sorry that you had to suffer like this, but I will avenge his death...this has made this much easier for me. Now I really need to know where guards are and how I can defeat them with this longblade I hold in my hands." Instead of replying she simply walked over to a small storage box and started taking out vials of liquid. and marked each one as either a healing salve which she marked with "H", or something that would make my body energized and more than fight ready, denoted by a large "SF&E" by the time she was done marking them all she could speak well enough to let me know what they meant. I was also told where to find each guard around this time of day. This took several minutes as she still had to talk kind of slow and steady. "Once again, I am sorry I have made you go through what are obviously painful memories."
"No, I am just glad that someone had the ability and the courage and cared enough to help my Processius" and with those heavy words of encouragement I set off to the first spot that I would need to wait at for a guard to come by on his route, farthest from the other buildings.
I sat down in the bushes and waited until the sound of footsteps was so loud I thought I would go deaf at the next step and as I came around the tree I slashed my sword across my front at chest level and caught the Imperial guard right in the throat, he seemed to try to pull something from his pocket before he was unconcious seconds later, and then dead swiftly thereafter. I took a gander through his pocket to see what it was, another liquid vial, a healing potion no doubt. But I didn't want to play around with something that had more effects than I could detect with my nose. So I moved the body into the shadowy underbrush behind the tree, where I had been hiding. Tomorrow this would be drawing animals and stinking to high heaven so I now had a time limit to finish up my work in Seyda Neen or leave town without finishing it at all. So far I had managed to not have to use any potions whatsoever, but I doubted very much that would remain the case through the rest of this night.
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