The Story Of Hajima The Nin Ronin, this is kinda long and addictive maybe.. Options

[jchamber]

I got inspiration from you guys, so thanks. Well here it is. Lemme know whatcha think.

(edited for fluidity, immersion, detail, and character touch up)

Chapter one- the begining
Part One
The Uncertainty

"Owww, my head..... dear Mephala!! What hit me?" I found myself with my face buried in a pillow on a hammock and my head was splitting in two. I can't remember what happened that was making my head hurt so bad or why I am lying down but I did know I wanted the pain to stop.

"Quiet, or the guard will hear you, he can be a mean sort." Said a gruff, deep voice. I turned my head to get a veiw of the guy and as I did so realized that I was on a boat, and that I didn't have a sea stomach as nausea overtook me and spilled my previous meal, which seemed to contain little more than a thin soup that I can't remember eating.

"Hey! Watch it!!" said the gruff voice that was now connected to a muscular dark elf with an ear ring, and scar on the right side of his face that took one eye out. He was wearing nothing but a pair of worn out, undyed, perhaps too used... pair of trousers on.

"Sorry 'bout that, I didn't see you were standing so close, good thing you were a little behind me."

"Yea good for yout health too, how are you besides being seasick?"

"My head is feels like it's going to explode, Several parts of my body feel like they have been wounded, I am still tired, and I haven't the strength to turn over to look at my body to see how bad the damage is."

"Well don't worry you'll be fine, gave that guard a mighty good fight though."

"What? Why is there a guard and just how hard did he hit me on the head, I don't even remember getting on this boat, or why I would be on one.. And why did I fight..."

"Slow down there," the man interrupted. "You are on a boat because that is where the guard put ya, the guard is here because I am a murderer and you have undoubtedly been found guilty of something...not that I am saying you did it, ... whatever it was. When the guard brought you to this boat I am guessing you knew you would get seasick or just wanted to escape and you just about did seeing as it took five guards to help the one you gave a thrashing to bring you down. I didn't see it but I heard it, and about it in good detail. I hear one had a hammer and got the back of your head when the other four were trying to get close enough to you, without getting hurt, to grapple you. I heard alot of scolding afterwards, seemed you were not supposed to be hurt getting on, that guard probably got his status revoked. As for this trip I am guessing we are about halfway there and I would suggest you go to sleep if you can't even turn over. By the way I am Jiub, we can will talk later, when you wake up, for now just rest."

And so I allowed myself to stop fighting the weary weakness that poisoned my mind and muscles and just let go...and soon I was standing in a windy foreign terrain. I had never seen anything like it before, the dirt was red and being picked up in the air, there was also another kind of dirt that seemed to be falling from the sky like a very light sprinkle in the storm of red. Before I could gather any more information about the place I heard a voice in my head of a soft but somewhat resounding tone, "They have taken you from the Imperial city's prison, first by carridge and now by boat. To the east... to Morrowind, fear not for I am watching. You have been chosen"

My shoulder was shaking, I began to wake up...to that gruff voice of Jiub's "Wake up, we're here. Why are you shaking? are you ok? Wake up. Stand up,... there you go. You were dreaming. What's your name? Forgot to ask before you passed out again.

"Owwwwww, I am still really sore, so take it easy on the sholder. Um, gimme a minute I just had a really weird dream.....Um .....BAH why can't I remember....I am sorry I can't remember my name right now, so just call me whatever you want."

"I think you seem like a Ganthar"

"That sounds bad lets go with Hanthimar instead."

"What do I care, it's your name."

"Fine then until I can remember my name we agree on Hanthimar"

"Ok, well, Hanthimar not even last night's storm could wake you, I heard them say we've reached Morrowind. I'm sure they'll let us go!" Jiub said hopefully. "Quiet, here comes the guard."

I could see him coming down the steps at the other end of the lower level of the boat, he looked very serious, but almost comical in that he only had one bracer on and one bracer off. His clothes were dark, but his boots and overvest were lighter. They might provide a little bit of protection...why am I thinking like that, I don't want to hurt the person who might let me go....now he was upon me and began to speak in a light, but very official, voice, "This is where you get off, come with me." I now noticed that the Imperial had some facial hair and was begining to bald, but that was at this point irrelivent. I was more worried about how I couldn't remember my own name. As the guard walked away I was caught up in my own thoughts, trying to remember something. The guard stopped and looked back threateningly.

"You better do what they say," said Jiub. So I got over my daze and followed the guard. When I got to the door in the floor of the top level a woman behind the stairs said, "The sooner you leave, the sooner we can move on." She was a ....well no better than a female dog let's say....That thought was interrupted by the gaurd from below that was escorting me,

"Get yourself up on deck and let's keep that as civil as possible." I paused for a moment to hate the woman, and the male guard gave me a small light push with a, "On deck now, prisoner" So I headed on up the stairs in front of me. I never could have guessed what I was to find at the top.

This post has been edited by jchamber: Feb 15 2006, 06:37 AM

[jchamber]

Why didn't anyone mention that I have been spelling Caius's name wrong??? I pronounce it Cassius, so I forgot that wasn't who it's spelled....oh, well now I am going to change it from now on but I really don't intend to go back through a couple dozen pages and edit it out each time...I am going to work it into the storyline so that it seems at though the character was messing it up, but it still be kinda bad......you will just have to forgive me.

ok first thing (after that other thing) I want to do is let you know I modified the last post to make our mysterious man self-named 'Barry' a little more conceited, angry, and overall annoyingly arrogent...I didn't realize who the guy was myself until today, and then I realized who he was, .....like I said I don't where I am going with alot of what I write, but I do have a base background idea-set that I am following when the story makes it's own way there, without any rushing from me

Second thing I wanted to do was post something I meant to post up about a week ago, and am very sorry for having this out of sequence.

*(supposed to be posted a long while ago)
Later on, maybe in a week or two after some posts come up critiqueing and complementing my writing I will post a summary of the main events of chapter 1 so that people who are reading it for the first time when I have like a hundred+ pages can catch up really fast, then go back for all the yummy details.

Summaries are also useful to me as the writer so I can keep the storyline straight in my mind, seperate from all the other ideas I get for this little project, which in a lot of ways has a life of it's own because when I sit down to write the plotline changes before I finish writing a "Part" when compared to my original plan of what I was going to do with the characters. Like this one time, (at band camp,lol) I was going to have Hajima kill the guard that jailed him and decided that it was uncharacteristic of him to be that violent when it was more beneficial in some ways to go with the flow that was set before him. I had also intended for Hajima to take about a single page to go from the strider of Balmora to finding Caius, instead it has taken about three posts or so.

Tell me if you guys LIKE the idea of a posted Summary of each chapter to reference back to for filling in fuzzy details..

Chapter One-The begining

Summary

Day one-
Arrived, seasick and without any memory of my past. I had to go through a very long trial and error period of trying to see what I was good at through the morning. I was entitled a 'wonderer' at my request, seemed to make since b/c I could only wonder about my past. Next I got orders via note from the Emperor to see Mr. Cosades and got my release fee. Once I got out I met someone who lost their ring....often. The problems with local law enforcement were becoming obvious to me. I ran into a drunkard as I went into the inn and was charged an unjust tax that I almost refused to pay and had a small meal before hitting the sack.

Day two-
I awoke naked, and without any possesions, they had been taken during the night. When I looked for them I was knocked out and put in jail for killing the drunkard that had left the bar before I went into the inn. Of course he had probably drank himself to death. Later in the day I met my cell mates and the main guard of the prison.

Two weeks later-
I went back to town killed half the guards to avenge the tax collector that they killed and blamed another man, like how they blamed me for that drunk. I had to leave before I got rid of all the guards but I got the head guy and several underlings, including the taxing jerk, before I had to leave town with some wounds and a noriceable amount of drain on my energy. I then arrived in Balmora and mention a name that comes from no where, instead of Mr. Cosades as my target in town.