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Franavu
post Nov 18 2005, 09:47 PM
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This is a story I've been writing for a while now, sort of an ongoing project. I think it is ready to be posted, or at least the first part of it.
The story is elder scrolls related, it'll just take a while to get there.

As English isn't my first language I hope you'll forgive me any spelling or grammatical mistakes I might have missed.

Okay, here goes the first bit, I hope you'll like it.
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The dark ship

The dark ship shot through the great void of space, on its way to a planet of legends…

Meanwhile,
Captain’s log, supplemental
We still haven’t found the smugglers’ ship we were send here to find, we lost its warp trail two days ago, we haven’t recovered it yet, and I don’t think we will. How we lost the ship is still a mystery to my crew and me, one minute it was there, the other it was gone and nowhere to be found.
I wonder what they were shipping, one more thing we have never been told, I don’t like this, I don’t like this one bit... [Pause]…What’s worse, my first officer, who is from this region of space, looks like he hasn’t slept the past few days. When I mentioned it to him, he murmured something about bad dreams. He clearly doesn’t want to talk about it and I haven’t pressed him…not yet at least.
This region has some pre-industrial civilizations, none the smugglers could have wanted to go to…I hope. We really don’t need Prime Directive issues; of course it has to be taken into account, at least until we know why they went this way.
[End of log entry]


The dark ship stopped, they had lost their pursuers, for now. His red eyes shone with hope.

Captain’s log, supplemental
Still no smugglers, I have ordered to search all the inhabited planets for the ship…I don’t really expect anything from it, but I just had orders from command to keep looking…No reason given. This is madness, the bloody ship can be anywhere by now, I hope they have a damn good reason for all of this… [Pause]
I spoke with my first officer this morning, he looked worse again…I couldn’t keep ignoring it. First he evaded my questions, but I kept pressing. So at last he told me about his dreams, about a woman speaking to him at night, about glowing red eyes in the dark and strangely enough about large sugar crystals. I have advised him to talk to the ships counsellor about this; I hope he will follow my advice.
He also spoke about the stories of his people. Their legends tell about an exile from their birth planet by red eyed warriors and about lesser, greater and false gods. The stories say this exile happened because they had become so arrogant they thought they wouldn’t need the gods anymore. Sounds like a standard tale of hubris to me, earth must have dozens of them.
[End of log entry]






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post Mar 19 2006, 05:58 PM
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They sure are confused. I like your story, please continue.


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Franavu   The Dark Ship   Nov 18 2005, 09:47 PM
minque   Ahhh.....a new approach...I sense here, interestin...   Nov 18 2005, 10:48 PM
mplantinga   An interesting start. Your approach is somewhat un...   Nov 19 2005, 04:25 PM
Franavu   Thanks for the positive feedback. I'll try to ...   Nov 25 2005, 09:41 PM
mplantinga   Thanks for a couple more intriguing log entries. Y...   Nov 26 2005, 02:38 AM
Franavu   My apologies for the double post. I guess I wasn...   Dec 3 2005, 06:53 PM
mplantinga   This latest update seems to be the same as the pre...   Dec 7 2005, 07:22 PM
Soulseeker3.0   Hmm i just read it all and I have to say it is ver...   Dec 8 2005, 04:30 AM
Kiln   Quite an interesting way to begin a story, the beg...   Dec 8 2005, 04:38 PM
Franavu   He saw the ruin he had been looking for. Would he ...   Dec 17 2005, 06:11 PM
mplantinga   I wonder what that could be :blink: If it is w...   Dec 17 2005, 08:03 PM
treydog   Very exciting weaving together of ST and Elder Scr...   Dec 20 2005, 07:55 PM
Franavu   A bit of a short update this time, but with exams ...   Jan 3 2006, 06:22 PM
mplantinga   And thus, the suspense continues. You continue to ...   Jan 3 2006, 08:15 PM
Franavu   No updates in a while, university has been keeping...   Mar 11 2006, 05:29 PM
Tellie   I like it...a lot, keep it up please.... :wub: :g...   Mar 11 2006, 08:38 PM
jack cloudy   And now for the ultimate showdown, the Feddies aga...   Mar 12 2006, 07:19 PM
Soulseeker3.0   wow.. can't beleive I missed all this... I...   Mar 13 2006, 02:44 AM
Franavu   Thanks for all the positive feedback. I'll con...   Mar 19 2006, 03:36 PM
treydog   Ah, yes, the guy in the red shirt who should hav...   Mar 21 2006, 11:15 PM
Franavu   There you are killing of redshirts and you don...   Mar 26 2006, 05:32 PM
Franavu   ***Announcement*** This story is not dead! ...   Sep 20 2006, 01:33 PM
jack cloudy   Hmm, I always use behind instead of the words that...   Sep 20 2006, 07:18 PM
Franavu   That might work, or I can have him swallowing his ...   Sep 21 2006, 10:46 AM
Franavu   As promised, an update. It's a bit short this ...   Nov 13 2006, 11:32 PM
Franavu   Okay, I'm back again, I finally found the spel...   Jan 30 2007, 02:50 PM
jack cloudy   Well, it does pique my interest. From what I'v...   Jan 30 2007, 03:59 PM
The Metal Mallet   Having a wide-screened computer monitor makes it a...   Jan 30 2007, 07:26 PM


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