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post Feb 26 2006, 01:44 AM
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Well, this is the starting of my new, hopefully longer living Fan Fiction. This is a very rough draft, AKA only edited and re-edited about 7 times. I know, I'm such a prefectionis. Anyways, this is an odd little gem that I have been kicking around for a while, and the name will soon mean something. Also, please reply with any comments and critiques, nagative or positive. And now, I'm off, and the story is starting. *Dissapears in a cloud of smoke*



CHAPTER ONE: The Trigger

The one question people love to ask me the most is definitely how. How I could just stroll in and out of a murder scene without any thought at all. How I could have evaded the law for so long even though I was so social. How I could possibly fit the accusations against me, and how the crimes could even be possible. I always answer these questions the same way, the cold stare they expect to see.

Lets back up a few years though, so you can understand me the way not many people can. I am Ordras Morvayn, surprisingly good-looking blacksmith living in Cyrodiil. The whole twisted, downward spiral I have been living in as of late started like most stories haven’t. Not with me angry, or happy, or doing anything interesting at all. My ash skinned hide was fast asleep on my soft, comfy bed. I wasn’t dreaming (though I wish I was because it would make this a little more interesting), nor was I looking into a black abyss for hours like normal. It was fast asleep, as in when you fall asleep and feel like you’ve napped for ten seconds. I woke up suddenly, though not groggy, not in pain, not covered in blood, but awake at least. Looking around my large, cluttered room; I noticed how early it was, as the candle I had lit earlier was still aflame. I walked through my room door, past the door of my currently travelling co-worker and past the door where my boss slept before he could afford a real house. After walking a few steps more and jumping down the stairs, all two of them, I was in the smithing room. Here, is where our story bursts from a dull cocoon and spreads the wings of an interesting plot twist.

A tall figure, at least a head taller then me, stood in the smithing room above a body. He wore loose, black leather pants with belts wrapped around various places. A dark cloak over a barely visible shirt ensured I had no guess to his weight, though he looked like he was quite lean from the little of him I could see, and he wore a Netch leather helm painted black. He looked like he killed Hitmen in his spare time. I looked at him, a monstrous looking killer clad in black, and he looked at me, an easy target Dark Elf clad in baggy underwear. He laughed a long, hardy laugh and reached into the pack on his back. I froze. He revealed something, but not a weapon. He threw a shirt and a pair of pants at me. I looked at him hard, and then the dead body of an Altmer he stood above. No one I worked with, my strange Nordic boss thought my co-worker and I were more than enough to do all the smith work his clients required. “Now” the stranger said with a booming voice, pointing at the clothes. I put them on quickly, nearly putting my head through an armhole. I can honestly say I have never felt a material so soft. Funny the things you notice while in shock fearing you might die.

The stranger blindfolded me, but he did it with care and believe you me, that wasn’t expected. He led me a few steps and then picked me up, which was probably awkward for I was pretty tall myself, and placed me in what seemed to be a cart. I heard the braying, naying and bustling of horses and then his dark, booming voice once again. “Close your eyes and your mind, Dark Elf, and fall asleep like you had been earlier” He was definitly a Dark Elf and before I could even think of something to say, I blurted out a blind sentence. “Are you violent?” I barely knew what I meant I was so sleepy and confused, but he did. He took a deep, calming breath before speaking. “No, and you can think of me as a friend as soon as you wake” he said it calmly and in a way only a good friend would, and sounded like he was smiling. What a gentleman.

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post Apr 5 2006, 04:12 AM
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Wait, you didn't think one update was good enough? Do I ever dissapoint? Like Ali did for his fans, I will use quick stricking tactics to win the crowd by rope-a-dopeing yet another update! My adjectives hit harder than a unexpected, left handed, out of a counter haymaker!



He ran at me with his katana behind his head, which I fully expected. He swung at me and I stepped to his side, kicking him in the ribs as he passed by. He gave out a large “ouff!” sound as he fell to the ground rolling. He got up quickly expecting me to attack, but I was smart enough to stay put. He circled me, pretending to be threatening, and I just watched him. He slowly walked towards me and thrust his sword, and I once again sidestepped to safety. I swung my sword, and hit him hard on the right Pauldron. The Pauldron snapped as my sword struck it, and he was left staggering. I kicked his right leg, at the outter side of his knee. He twisted and fell to one knee, but was not off guard. To prove this, he stood and span, swinging his sword. I blocked vertically, thus saving my neck, but my sword fell to the ground. I took a few steps backwards as he picked up my sword, laughing. “And you thought you could win with your cheating tactics. Kicking in the ribs, you swine” he spoke slowly, gasping, apparently his last swing helped keep him breathless. I put my hand up, still shaking from the last swing. I spoke a fast few magickal words; even though I doubted my ability to cast the spell.

Death is a very funny thing. Everyone thinks that it’s so terribly awful, but in certain circumstances they support it. Kill a person, and it’s a long time in a small cell. But kill a murderer, and there is no remorse. Either someone sees you and announces you a hero, or no one sees and no one cares. You barely even realize that you have done it. Actually, it takes a few days before you even think of it again, even though your life will never be the same. What I think I’m trying to say is though, your very first kill is the start of the end.

A fireball emerged from the air near my palm, and it soared to my enemy. I had gone far from him before I cast the spell, so it took a second for him to realise what was happening. It’s flames roared and grew as they took up oxygen, and the fire spread from his head to his toes. “BAM” was the sound it made, and he was pushed with such force that his helm came off and flipped three times where his body stood before falling to the ground. He made no sound, no yell, no cry, no scream, but the tree he hit did. It cracked, loudly when he hit it, and after he had fallen to the ground, a large crater was left where he had hit. “So that’s why I couldn’t cast the spell” I though, though I should have been thinking, “What have I done?”. I had never cast it before because casting it wasn’t needed or safe. My body knew that it was needed only in a situation like this.

The remaining soldiers ran, and ran fast. I coughed from the smoke, turned, and walked towards my horse. I climbed on to my horse and waved the brown rope three times, and it moved forward. It walked me past the statue at the cross roads, when yet again I was sidetracked. “Sir?” a strong, Nordic voice came out of nowhere, and almost startled me off of my beast. “You killed that insane Captain and have reclaimed the glory to the Nords. Praised be you!” he bowed, which looked awkward considering his steel armour, and I smiled. Hmm, it seems these Nords value that rock, and apparently I have rescued it, so maybe this ordeal will bring rewards. “Yes, but I do not do it for the praise, but for this statue to live in glory” he looked shocked when he stood up, as if I had insulted his gods. “No, no, no, no, you do not understand the task you have just completed. Those men have controlled this road for ten years, and their fathers and mothers held it for thirty years, and who knows how long their ancestors held it. They force us to pay gold to see this monument to our ancestors, and worst of all they force you to give them at least two items of value to use the cross roads. The city I belong to, Wayrain, has tried to attack them and take back what is ours, but every time the mad Imperials of Skull Drop track us and attack us. Oh, that reminds me. Where are you headed stranger?” I thought about saying Skull Rock, but I reminded myself if he’s from Wayrain and would likely try to avoid Skull Drop, there must be another way to my destination. “Wayrain, of course” he smiled before whistling, and a horse emerged from behind some rocks.


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Red   The Balance: The Neutral Spider   Feb 26 2006, 01:44 AM
Sirin   Red, let me be the first to say that you are a ver...   Feb 27 2006, 12:37 AM
1234king   this chapter blew me away plz carry on :P   Feb 27 2006, 01:27 AM
jchamber   ahhhhh where did you learn that? maybe we were ...   Feb 27 2006, 01:50 AM
Red   Thanks for the positive reviews everyone, and the ...   Feb 27 2006, 04:24 AM
Sirin   Sure thing, Red. Can't wait to read more! ...   Feb 27 2006, 02:17 PM
Red   And on the seventh day, God created updates. The u...   Feb 28 2006, 12:36 AM
mplantinga   I find the idea of an organization dedicated to ba...   Mar 2 2006, 08:18 PM
Kiln   Hey Red, nice to see you doing a fan fiction again...   Mar 3 2006, 12:28 AM
Red   Never! I will reach my three update minimum ...   Mar 3 2006, 04:26 AM
Kiln   Lol, I cannot allow you to stop writing this Red.....   Mar 3 2006, 02:53 PM
Taillus   Very interesting concept. I like how this is going...   Mar 3 2006, 06:38 PM
Red   Thanks for the high praise everyone. :) Also, d...   Mar 3 2006, 09:23 PM
jack cloudy   An interesting organization. And an interesting wa...   Mar 3 2006, 07:48 PM
Red   Ok everybody, I havn't updated in a week or so...   Mar 6 2006, 09:35 PM
Taillus   I am so glad you have a future planned for this wo...   Mar 7 2006, 02:22 PM
jack cloudy   Ah, an update. It was a good one. The high elf had...   Mar 7 2006, 08:36 PM
treydog   Just a quick nod to let you know that I think this...   Mar 7 2006, 09:41 PM
Sirin   The High Elf's philosophy was a typical one, i...   Mar 13 2006, 02:47 AM
Red   Okay, updating time. I have written about five upd...   Mar 16 2006, 03:54 AM
jack cloudy   A nice update. Please write more.   Mar 16 2006, 07:17 PM
Kiln   Very nice update Red, I really liked the note he r...   Mar 17 2006, 08:15 PM
minque   Yes pleas sir....update again when you find the op...   Mar 17 2006, 09:06 PM
Red   *climbing to the pinnicle of the mountain abov...   Mar 17 2006, 11:11 PM
Kiln   Great update Red, wonderfully written and had a bi...   Mar 18 2006, 12:23 AM
jack cloudy   Hmm, that dream is worrying. And what is wrong wit...   Mar 18 2006, 08:49 PM
Red   Sorry about the really, really, really, rediculous...   Apr 5 2006, 04:01 AM
Red   I held the rope thing in both hands, and waved it ...   Apr 5 2006, 04:03 AM
treydog   Excellent updates and a well-drawn fight scene. A...   Apr 5 2006, 02:30 PM
Fuzzy Knight   Damnit Red, this story rocks :lol: I really love t...   Apr 5 2006, 08:24 PM
Red   *Appears in a cload of chocolate milk mix* Sorry ...   Apr 12 2006, 02:15 AM
Red   Because I see no reason to put a huge post here, I...   Apr 12 2006, 02:20 AM
Fuzzy Knight   Two very nice updates Red, the story becomes more ...   Apr 12 2006, 01:00 PM
Red   As a moderator, it is my duty to crush those hop...   Apr 12 2006, 01:09 PM
Tellie   Noo...Red is following in Wolfies footsteps...h...   Apr 12 2006, 01:18 PM
Red   Just for that, the update is coming earlier...   Apr 12 2006, 04:55 PM
Kiln   Hmmmmm...why does that sound familiar? Ah its pr...   Apr 12 2006, 11:06 PM
jack cloudy   Ah yes, I've only joined Waiting4Oblivion in i...   Apr 13 2006, 05:15 PM
Red   El Chupaupdate! Flee the village! After t...   Apr 15 2006, 11:52 PM
Red   If you're a fan of W4O Fan Fiction, you owe it...   Apr 16 2006, 01:09 AM
Tellie   O_o....this is getting exiting...hehe, Telina is i...   Apr 16 2006, 01:16 AM
jack cloudy   Ah, another crossover. Nice. But, these guys reall...   Apr 16 2006, 11:39 AM
Red   Ok, new update and I made a quick fix to the old o...   Apr 16 2006, 03:54 PM
minque   Oooooo......impressive, fellow mod! Really goo...   Apr 17 2006, 02:51 PM
Red   Aww, thanks Minkie! Whoo whoo! Here comes...   Apr 17 2006, 06:17 PM
Fuzzy Knight   Very good very good Red! Good updates indeed, ...   Apr 17 2006, 08:28 PM
Red   Because of the fact you said one of my favourite w...   Apr 17 2006, 08:50 PM
Fuzzy Knight   Nice detailed fight there Red, very well written i...   Apr 17 2006, 09:01 PM
Tellie   I really have to admit with my fellow Norwegian...   Apr 17 2006, 09:58 PM
Kiln   Wow Red, I'm having one hell of a time trying ...   Apr 17 2006, 11:27 PM
jack cloudy   That was a very good fight. Good work.   Apr 18 2006, 04:32 PM
treydog   Great updates- this continues to be a readable and...   Apr 19 2006, 05:21 PM
Red   Hehe, every time I see that puppy dog in one of my...   Apr 19 2006, 08:18 PM


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