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Kayla
post Apr 22 2006, 09:24 PM
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Ok. This is my first fanfic. happy.gif I'm a tad nervous about it, but I'd like to see what everyone thinks.
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I sat quietly on a bench beside the pawnshop on the docks of Anvil, staring out over the dark Abecean Sea. Through the clouds in the sky, I could see that the sun was setting. A chilly wind blew my black robes and hood as though they were weightless, but the persistent breeze was unsuccessful in penetrating the black light armor I wore underneath my robes. I listened to the fragmented conversations of the dock workers, and watched as people hastily walked by, fearing that it would soon begin to storm.

Before I knew it, the sun had set completely. The Nord who owned the shop I was sitting in front of walked outside. He locked up his shop and began to make his way down the stone street toward the resident area of Anvil. He hadn’t even noticed that I’d been sitting just feet away from him. I heard the Nord loudly greet someone before he walked completely out of earshot. Soon after, an Orc walked by. I studied the Orc carefully as he passed. He walked with a slight limp and had a large scar on his left arm, and just as I expected, he opened the door to the dockside warehouse and went inside.

It was completely dark now. Neither sun nor moon shone through the twisting clouds in the sky. The wind picked up, carrying moisture in it.

I stood and made my way to the back door of the warehouse. I picked the lock and the door swung open. Quickly I slipped into the thick darkness inside. The warehouse was fairly big but, a few candles on a large table in the middle of the room revealed the Orc’s position. He was busily unpacking things from crates and setting them on shelves. He was completely unaware of my presence, and I preferred it that way. I slipped through the shadows toward him. In the darkness I felt strong, invincible, and incapable of fear. I observed his movements, the way his body flowed with each contraction and relaxation of each muscle. I watched every joint in his body, paying close attention to his spinal cord. The Orc was old, and moved as though he’d been doing hard labor his entire life. Almost every movement looked as though it pained him.

As soon as I was sure of his reactions, I silently unsheathed my ebony blade, a gift from a dear friend, and I closed in on the Orc. He was still unaware of my being there, even though I was soon right behind him, almost breathing down his neck. In one quick motion, I lunged out of the shadows, grabbed the Orc with my right arm, wrapping it around the front of his neck and shoulders, then I brought my left hand up and stabbed him right in the jugular vein. The poor old Orc didn’t even have a chance to yell. I let go of the body letting it fall limply onto the wooden floor of the warehouse. I waited for his gurgled breathing to stop, then I snuffed the candles out and exited the warehouse the same way I’d come in.

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Kayla
post May 19 2006, 04:59 AM
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I am proud to announce that this story has made it past 50 pages in Microsoft Word! (54 right now to be exact)
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A Dunmer male and Altmer female stood in the doorway, wearing netch leather armor, and holding writs of execution.
“Uh-oh…” I thought, staring them down.

The Altmer stepped forward.
“Breton! Imperial! You have been marked for execution by the Morag Tong for the murder of Lord Vivec! We are here to make sure you die!” she yelled, her high pitched voice straining my remaining nerves.
That was definitely the wrong thing to say in the middle of a Temple devoted to the worship of the now dead Tribunal. In the room outside, I could hear gasps, and rapid footsteps. I looked at Saprius.
“We have to get out of here. Now.” I said.

The two assassins brandished silver daggers and leapt toward us. I could feel some of my old wounds tightening and straining as I easily dodged them and made for the door. Saprius, unlike me, wasn’t born under the sign of the The Theif, and therefore wasn’t blessed with extra agility. He found himself cornered by the assassins.
“Sarelle!!” he yelled, pressing his back against the wall.
The Temple priests were beginning to surround the room we were in, yelling death threats, calling the ordinators, some even starting to conjure daedra.
The assassins were closing in quickly on Saprius.
“Damn it!”

I ran back toward the assassins, unsheathing my Blade of Woe and burying it in the Altmer’s spine. She let out a cry of pain and fell to the floor. I grabbed Saprius’ arm and we ran toward the crowd of priests.
“We’re going to have to cut through them…” I realized.

My boots pounding against the stone floor, I threw a powerful flame spell into the crowd. The priests scattered, and shrieks of pain, and the roar of flames filled the air. Still clutching Saprius’ arm, we practically flew up the stairs, back into the main room of the Temple.

I didn’t expect the Morag Tong to locate us again so quickly. They must have had all their forces focused on us. Escaping Vvardenfell was going to be much harder than I had anticipated.

Just as we burst through the front door of the Temple, and out into the open canton, we ran right past a group of ordinators. To my dismay, I looked back to see the Dunmer assassin right on our heels.
”After them! They’re the ones that killed Lord Vivec!” he yelled.

Behind us, I could hear the sounds of clanging metal, and angry yelling. My arms and legs pumped quickly. I could barely feel the stone under my feet as I ran. As we made our way down the canton, I could hear my heartbeat in my ears.

We made it to the final level of the canton. A lot of ordinators were still behind us. Ahead of us lay the vast Ashlands.

As we ran across the ashy earth, grey ash and dust flew up in front of my face. Behind us, the ordinators had stopped pursuing us, probably figuring we would die out here anyway. The only one still on our trail was the Dunmer assassin.

Tired of running, I stopped, turning around and drawing my sword. As he neared me, he brought his dagger back in an attempt at a horizontal slash. I stepped out of the way and tripped him. Saprius immediately pulled his claymore over his shoulder from its sheath, and brought it down on the back of the Dunmer’s neck, decapitating him.

Still standing, and breathing heavily, I slumped down resting my arms on my knees. Saprius looked around. There was nothing but grey ash surrounding us.
“Do you have any idea where we are?” he asked.
I shook my head, watching the blood flow from the Dunmer’s neck, mixing with the ash. How did the Morag Tong find us? When were we going to see them again?
“I would imagine that we’re north of Molag Mar.” I guessed. “We can’t return to Molag Mar. We should try to head east to Azura’s Coast.” I said.
Turning east, Saprius and I began to walk across the grey earth.


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Kayla   The Story of the Listener   Apr 22 2006, 09:24 PM
Kayla   I walked through Anvil, enjoying the young night a...   Apr 22 2006, 09:38 PM
Konradude   Wow, first to comment on this great [I]great[/I} s...   Apr 22 2006, 10:11 PM
minque   Yes...a truly good story is developing here.....gr...   Apr 22 2006, 10:14 PM
Kayla   Thankee thankee! ^_^ More paragraphing.   Apr 23 2006, 05:55 AM
Kayla   Another update! ^_^ ---- I woke up and look...   Apr 23 2006, 06:08 AM
Kayla   I decided that I would get an early start to conve...   Apr 23 2006, 06:21 AM
Kayla   I decided to invest some of the money I’d gotten f...   Apr 23 2006, 06:28 AM
Konradude   Very good again! That million miles thing seem...   Apr 23 2006, 11:31 AM
minque   It´s good! And I on my behalf like the short s...   Apr 23 2006, 02:34 PM
Kayla   Thanks for the comments so far, guys! :) ---...   Apr 23 2006, 04:31 PM
Kayla   I walked quickly back to the living quarters and p...   Apr 23 2006, 04:42 PM
Kayla   A Dark Elf male, dressed in a long red robe stood ...   Apr 23 2006, 07:22 PM
Kayla   I edited some of my earlier posts, paragraphing mo...   Apr 23 2006, 08:00 PM
Kayla   When I awoke, I felt very warm. Lucien was standin...   Apr 23 2006, 08:10 PM
Kayla   When there was nothing left of Eno Hlaalu, I led m...   Apr 23 2006, 08:21 PM
Konradude   What the hell do you mean the end????????:( I lov...   Apr 23 2006, 08:54 PM
minque   Tssss Konrad! watch your language! :P Bu...   Apr 23 2006, 08:56 PM
jack cloudy   That was fantastic. I loved your personalities. Gr...   Apr 23 2006, 09:01 PM
Kayla   :D Thanks, guys! I shall think of something...   Apr 23 2006, 10:05 PM
Konradude   Phew! :goodjob: :goodjob: :goodjob: :cake:   Apr 23 2006, 10:12 PM
Kiln   Yes, please continue. You had nothing to be worri...   Apr 25 2006, 01:12 AM
Kayla   Ok. ^_^ I've been working on this update all ...   Apr 25 2006, 02:18 AM
Taillus   Great work Kayla. Im really liking this story and ...   Apr 25 2006, 03:19 PM
jack cloudy   So that's what happened. Nice update.   Apr 25 2006, 04:01 PM
Kayla   Ok! I have another update for you guys! --...   Apr 25 2006, 11:40 PM
Mazelure   wow kayla!!!! your first story is...   Apr 25 2006, 11:56 PM
Kayla   Why thank you! ^_^ You really should write mor...   Apr 25 2006, 11:58 PM
Kayla   Small update today, as I am rather busy. Enjoy...   Apr 26 2006, 11:11 PM
minque   Great story Kayla.....very interesting. Keep up th...   Apr 27 2006, 10:27 PM
Kayla   “How do you like your gift?” Lucien asked me. “It...   Apr 28 2006, 12:03 AM
Kayla   The snow was thinner within the village. I imagine...   Apr 28 2006, 02:31 AM
HyPN0   Hmmm,the last paragraph is a bit confusing.You say...   Apr 28 2006, 04:16 PM
Kayla   Yeah. He was Fanar. Hmm... I'll look at it and...   Apr 28 2006, 10:21 PM
HyPN0   np ;) Well,the fact that your char is in the Ma...   Apr 28 2006, 10:38 PM
Kayla   Thanks. ^_^ I edited the story, including the figh...   Apr 28 2006, 11:00 PM
HyPN0   Yeah,that's a lot more exiting if you ask me....   Apr 28 2006, 11:21 PM
jack cloudy   Brilliant. And this line. ,,Have a nice day....   Apr 29 2006, 10:39 AM
Kayla   I limped through the darkness of the tunnels under...   Apr 30 2006, 03:24 AM
HyPN0   Bigest contract in the whole history? I bet this o...   Apr 30 2006, 04:16 AM
Kayla   The Night Mother’s words filled me with more excit...   Apr 30 2006, 06:27 AM
Taillus   Oh...my...great...god! Raise your hand if you ...   Apr 30 2006, 04:08 PM
HyPN0   :blink: *HyPN0 is still stunned* Vivec? Whoho,now ...   Apr 30 2006, 07:12 PM
jack cloudy   What, they're going after Vivec?! This was...   Apr 30 2006, 09:01 PM
minque   AAAAHHHHRRRGGGHHH ......going after Vivec..omg.......   Apr 30 2006, 09:26 PM
Kayla   Ok, folks! Glad to see I surprised you all. :...   May 1 2006, 01:51 AM
jack cloudy   I'm happy that htey use a plan, even though th...   May 1 2006, 10:57 AM
DarkHunter   Wonder how this is going to turn out... I have sev...   May 1 2006, 11:42 AM
Kayla   I am rather busy today, but I have managed to type...   May 2 2006, 03:52 AM
Taillus   I am getting really anxious. I want to see how the...   May 3 2006, 04:35 PM
jack cloudy   Ah good, planning is essential. It's a nice up...   May 3 2006, 06:51 PM
minque   Yup.....I agree.....it´s getting very interested ...   May 3 2006, 08:01 PM
Kayla   I usually try to update daily, but, yesterday I ha...   May 3 2006, 10:06 PM
DarkHunter   Oooooo.. they made a little mistake, i'm not g...   May 4 2006, 12:48 AM
Kayla   Alright, finally here's another update for you...   May 4 2006, 01:01 AM
DarkHunter   ... wow ... thats kind of Ironic isn't it, you...   May 4 2006, 01:09 AM
Kayla   It was sorta meant to be that way... Oh the irony....   May 4 2006, 01:13 AM
HyPN0   Good Luck Sarelle! Beware of the armored Ordi...   May 4 2006, 03:39 PM
Kayla   I'm working on a rather large update at the mo...   May 4 2006, 11:58 PM
Kayla   Ok! Finally! An update! Sorry for the ...   May 8 2006, 01:25 AM
Kayla   As I walked noiselessly toward the front of the ca...   May 8 2006, 03:28 AM
DarkHunter   Excellent! lol the Archcanon, he was soo much ...   May 8 2006, 11:01 AM
jack cloudy   Wow, that went easier than I thought. Maybe I shou...   May 8 2006, 08:19 PM
Kayla   Finally! It's what you've all been wai...   May 9 2006, 04:15 AM
jack cloudy   Great fight. Now I hope that the guy realises that...   May 9 2006, 06:34 AM
DarkHunter   Well, you killed Vivic, but how are you going to g...   May 9 2006, 11:01 AM
Joryn   I have been reading little snippets of this here a...   May 9 2006, 11:39 AM
Kiln   Great work here Kayla, you spare little detail in ...   May 9 2006, 06:59 PM
Taillus   Wow.... all I can say is wow... that was simply un...   May 10 2006, 04:58 PM
minque   Agree with Taillus and Mr Oven.....brilliant work....   May 10 2006, 06:51 PM
Kayla   Thanks for the encouragement! ^_^ You guys are...   May 10 2006, 10:27 PM
DarkHunter   lol, wait until this all blows over... Yeah, right...   May 11 2006, 11:01 AM
TheStranger   I just started reading this now, and I really gott...   May 11 2006, 09:19 PM
HyPN0   Hmm, seems that Sarelle is a lot stronger than eve...   May 12 2006, 02:35 PM
Kayla   Busy busy week, folks! ^_^ Sorry for the lack ...   May 12 2006, 11:39 PM
TheStranger   Aw, damn. I saw your name as the last to have rep...   May 12 2006, 11:47 PM
Kayla   Worry not. For I have not forsaken you! --...   May 15 2006, 10:50 PM
TheStranger   Nice to see an update, wouldn't have minded it...   May 16 2006, 11:01 AM
DarkHunter   Trying to get away from the Morag Tong without bei...   May 16 2006, 11:02 AM
TheStranger   As if you don't know! :P   May 16 2006, 11:40 AM
DarkHunter   I suppose I do... but not really. Arygon might hav...   May 16 2006, 12:01 PM
Kayla   Alright another update! They'll get longer...   May 17 2006, 02:17 AM
DarkHunter   hmmm... I suppose thats one way to kill someone :m...   May 17 2006, 11:00 AM
TheStranger   Heh heh, what a way to go. I like it. Looking forw...   May 18 2006, 01:15 PM
Kayla   Unsurprisingly, the rest of the night was peaceful...   May 18 2006, 09:07 PM
TheStranger   Nice :) Sounds like they are in for a long trip h...   May 19 2006, 09:02 AM
DarkHunter   A VERY long trip home :P Yeah, those priests are a...   May 19 2006, 10:49 AM
Joryn   Ahh, Azura's coast and onwards, thats Telvanni...   May 19 2006, 02:55 PM
Mazelure   Sweet... decapitation... anyways I would really wa...   May 19 2006, 05:26 PM
Kayla   The wind began to pick up, making the grainy ash t...   May 21 2006, 05:38 AM
Joryn   Assassins in the middle of an ash storm? I can har...   May 21 2006, 04:26 PM
DarkHunter   Robes... What if it's Telvani magi planning on...   May 21 2006, 10:03 PM
Mazelure   I wonder... how in the bloody hell did those damn ...   May 22 2006, 01:36 AM
Kayla   Very short update, but I plan to make another, lon...   May 23 2006, 12:37 AM
Mazelure   Hells yeah... I love loyalty... the only thing I h...   May 23 2006, 02:41 AM
Kayla   I half fell, half tumbled down the rocks on the wa...   May 23 2006, 03:51 AM
TheStranger   Woah, great update :)   May 23 2006, 09:35 AM
DarkHunter   Yay! I mean... poor Saprius... Good work! ...   May 23 2006, 11:55 AM
Joryn   Hey, great updates. Its a shame about Saprius, but...   May 23 2006, 12:07 PM
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