You convey emotion very well in this update. You can feel the weight put onto his shoulders. And it's heavy  I look forward to seeing how he deals with the Great Houses and the other Ashlanders. Though it is funny that they're called Ashlanders, since only half of the 4 tribes are found in the Ashlands... This post has been edited by The Metal Mallet: Sep 3 2006, 07:17 PM
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