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The Dark Ship |
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Franavu |
Nov 18 2005, 09:47 PM
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Retainer
Joined: 23-March 05
From: Pseudopolis Yard, Ankh Morpok

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This is a story I've been writing for a while now, sort of an ongoing project. I think it is ready to be posted, or at least the first part of it. The story is elder scrolls related, it'll just take a while to get there.
As English isn't my first language I hope you'll forgive me any spelling or grammatical mistakes I might have missed.
Okay, here goes the first bit, I hope you'll like it. --------------------------------------------------------------------- The dark ship
The dark ship shot through the great void of space, on its way to a planet of legends…
Meanwhile, Captain’s log, supplemental We still haven’t found the smugglers’ ship we were send here to find, we lost its warp trail two days ago, we haven’t recovered it yet, and I don’t think we will. How we lost the ship is still a mystery to my crew and me, one minute it was there, the other it was gone and nowhere to be found. I wonder what they were shipping, one more thing we have never been told, I don’t like this, I don’t like this one bit... [Pause]…What’s worse, my first officer, who is from this region of space, looks like he hasn’t slept the past few days. When I mentioned it to him, he murmured something about bad dreams. He clearly doesn’t want to talk about it and I haven’t pressed him…not yet at least. This region has some pre-industrial civilizations, none the smugglers could have wanted to go to…I hope. We really don’t need Prime Directive issues; of course it has to be taken into account, at least until we know why they went this way. [End of log entry]
The dark ship stopped, they had lost their pursuers, for now. His red eyes shone with hope.
Captain’s log, supplemental Still no smugglers, I have ordered to search all the inhabited planets for the ship…I don’t really expect anything from it, but I just had orders from command to keep looking…No reason given. This is madness, the bloody ship can be anywhere by now, I hope they have a damn good reason for all of this… [Pause] I spoke with my first officer this morning, he looked worse again…I couldn’t keep ignoring it. First he evaded my questions, but I kept pressing. So at last he told me about his dreams, about a woman speaking to him at night, about glowing red eyes in the dark and strangely enough about large sugar crystals. I have advised him to talk to the ships counsellor about this; I hope he will follow my advice. He also spoke about the stories of his people. Their legends tell about an exile from their birth planet by red eyed warriors and about lesser, greater and false gods. The stories say this exile happened because they had become so arrogant they thought they wouldn’t need the gods anymore. Sounds like a standard tale of hubris to me, earth must have dozens of them. [End of log entry]
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Franavu |
Jan 30 2007, 02:50 PM
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Joined: 23-March 05
From: Pseudopolis Yard, Ankh Morpok

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Okay, I'm back again, I finally found the spelling chek on my computer (It was hiding between mineland and Oblivion). So the next update is here. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Recording of interview of First Officer; present: Captain and First Officer. CHello Number One, please sit down. FO: Sir. [Pause] C: Are you going to tell me what the hell is going on? FO: Going on, sir? C: No! No, don't do this...Just don't, don't play stupid. I know something is going on with you, And you are going to tell me what it is. Right here, right now. FO: It is...complicated, sir. C: I'm sure it is, Number One. But you are going to tell me anyway. FO: It is...it is related to my peoples legends. Look sir, I don't want to bother you with this. I'm probably imagining things anyway... C: It's a bit late for that, isn't it? Just go on. FO: Yes sir...Well like I said, my peoples legends...I'll have to tell you a bit about them. C: I'm listening. FO: Like I told you the other day, we didn't evolve on what is now the central world of the Due Mari empire. Our legends say that we were once the greatest race on an other world, but that we were exiled from them. Some say it happened after a natural catastrophe others say it was after a great war. The truth, if the legend is true at all, is lost to history. In any case, small strife is present in all legends. Our people were the most technologically advanced race. There is also mention of magic and moving beyond that. Anyway, the legends speak of people of our race but different from us. People with grey skin and red eyes. Somewhat like the man who is now in sickbay. They weren't devils, but they were directly or indirectly responsible for our exile. They are the evil in all our stories. Those we tell our children, those that were told to us when we were young. Somewhat similar to the human bogeyman I believe. Well, That's one thing, and then there are the dreams. C: Yes...these dreams. FO: Well...I keep seeing people like him in my dreams, clad in armour, with swords and bows. They are fighting a huge war...and then there is darkness, and I wake up. It may or may not mean anything, but it is certainly unsettling. C: I see...Do you know anything about this planet below us? FO: I think this is the planet we first ended up on, after our exile. It was thought to be lost after we moved on to other planets, but maybe we were wrong. C: and these creatures we encountered? FO: They were meant to be guardians I think, I'm not sure. C: All right, thank you for finally telling me this. The next time I speak to Fyr I want you to be there, understood? FO: Aye, aye sir. C: Good, dismissed. [End of recording] ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Why do these posts look so short, it's almost a page in word. Anyway, next time an other conversation with the elusive Fyr, as soon as I get it written that is.
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Franavu The Dark Ship Nov 18 2005, 09:47 PM minque Ahhh.....a new approach...I sense here, interestin... Nov 18 2005, 10:48 PM mplantinga An interesting start. Your approach is somewhat un... Nov 19 2005, 04:25 PM Franavu Thanks for the positive feedback. I'll try to ... Nov 25 2005, 09:41 PM mplantinga Thanks for a couple more intriguing log entries. Y... Nov 26 2005, 02:38 AM Franavu My apologies for the double post. I guess I wasn... Dec 3 2005, 06:53 PM mplantinga This latest update seems to be the same as the pre... Dec 7 2005, 07:22 PM Soulseeker3.0 Hmm i just read it all and I have to say it is ver... Dec 8 2005, 04:30 AM Kiln Quite an interesting way to begin a story, the beg... Dec 8 2005, 04:38 PM Franavu He saw the ruin he had been looking for. Would he ... Dec 17 2005, 06:11 PM mplantinga
I wonder what that could be :blink: If it is w... Dec 17 2005, 08:03 PM treydog Very exciting weaving together of ST and Elder Scr... Dec 20 2005, 07:55 PM Franavu A bit of a short update this time, but with exams ... Jan 3 2006, 06:22 PM mplantinga And thus, the suspense continues. You continue to ... Jan 3 2006, 08:15 PM Franavu No updates in a while, university has been keeping... Mar 11 2006, 05:29 PM Tellie I like it...a lot, keep it up please.... :wub: :g... Mar 11 2006, 08:38 PM jack cloudy And now for the ultimate showdown, the Feddies aga... Mar 12 2006, 07:19 PM Soulseeker3.0 wow.. can't beleive I missed all this... I... Mar 13 2006, 02:44 AM Franavu Thanks for all the positive feedback. I'll con... Mar 19 2006, 03:36 PM treydog
Ah, yes, the guy in the red shirt who should hav... Mar 21 2006, 11:15 PM jack cloudy They sure are confused. I like your story, please ... Mar 19 2006, 05:58 PM Franavu
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