The Story Of Telina Delvanni Options

[Tellie]

So sorry, I was at the hospital again, I have been operated, after I was infected by cancer (but they discowered it so quickly, that I got rid of it wery quickly, the only downside is that I lost my hair, and is not allowed to do P.E in school for the next two monts, but Telina has to comfort me a little more, decided to share some more of her history to me)



When I walked into the dimly lit room, I was again, disgusted by the look’s of the decaying walls. I walked over to Arille, and asked “ eh Arille, you would’nt happen to know of a good bookseller, would you”? “Well, I have some book’s myself, this one actually came in two hours ago.”

I studied the book, the title was wery interesting, the title was “The legend of Aurora”, I read a little on the first page, and was so stunned by the text in it, that I bougth the book on the spot, without even trying to lover its hefty 269 septims value.

I walked up the crispy wooden stairs, and were met by the booming noise of Hrisskar. “Well lassie, a’ve ye found that Fargots hiding place”? “No” I answered quickly, “but he has started to meet a rather grimly looking orc” I lyed to him. After the numberous swearing of Hrisskar, I left him to himself, and walked over to a rather shaggy looking redguard bartender.

“Ah what may I do for you” she asked friendly. “Well give me a room for the nigth and some sujamma, with fried kwama eggs, by the way, you wouldnt happen to have a map lying around, that I could bu”? “So you are new here, huh, well in that case food and drink is on me, this is my map, you can keep it as I have no need for it.”.” The room will cost 13 septims.

I digged up 13 septims and started on the food. The egg’s was the funniest things I had tasted yet, after my egg’s was finished I stared to drink fom the sujamma. The purple liquid was strong tastin, and left a burning aftertaste in the mouth, but I noticed that after a few glasses the pain in my side was getting easier, I bid the bartender goodnigth and went into the room I had rented.

The bed was’nt the most comfortable, it was stuffed with hay and rough wool blankets, ignoring the itching wool, I layed down and started to read the book I had bougth. It was about a tale, of how one could use a blade called Aurora to negate the powers of everyone before you had used a machine to turn themselves into god’s, I doubted that this was the only book of irt’s series, and after reading a little further I found out that this legendary blade was to be found inside a legendary ruin called Sorordrin. I started to think of the powers this blade was supposed to have, and with the tougth of perhaps turning myself into a guard I fell asleep.


This post has been edited by Telendil Delvanni: Nov 28 2005, 09:18 PM

[mplantinga]

Thanks for another great update. I'm glad the operation went well, and that you seem to be feeling okay. A special thank you for continuing to work on this story through your illness.

[Tellie]

Comments would be nice please. And can anyone give me some good tips, so that I can further improve this story.

[minque]

I like your story a lot..but you wanted tips how to improve huh? <well one thing would be , when you write a conversation, it´s easier to follow it if you begin a new line when a new person talks!

Otherwise..it was fine!

[Tellie]

Hey guys, I'm feeling much better now, and I have no syndroms of something bad, wich means the got me fully cured. Thanks for the advice and nice comments that everyone here has given me, and I shall give out another one tonigth (hopefully).

By the way, nice new signature Minque. Thanks alot guys, you have really helped me in my writing of this story.Alrigth here it comes.

As I woke up some five hours later I felt myself quite well, considering my bad fall, it took a while before I remembered where I was. So ten minutes I was dressed and was walking out of town. The nature would propably be fine if it wasn't for my hatred of being put into a place like this. As I were walking along the coast, I came to an oval door, the inscriptions, was almost impossible to read, as it had nearly wanished beacuse wind and weather,but the name was clear enough Omaren.

I guessed this was some kind of tomb, and my wery annoying (not to mention self dangerous) curiousness, made me go into the tomb. The tomb was quite dim, and was made up of some sandlooking walls, with full of deep cracks in it. I walked further into the tomb, first left turn, rigth turn left, left again, and I lost my count , and worried wether I would ever find my way out again. Just as I was about to turn back, I found myself in a large room, with a friendly looking ghost in it.

But the ghost wasn't that friendly and before I knew about it, it hadc thrown a fireball at me. I maneged to twist myself away from the hot flame, and drew my katana. I ran against it, and made many quick slashes at it, but by sword just went through it, without inflicting damage. And then I remembered the flame spell Arille had thougth me. And I screamed out the words.

"Incendio". The fireball hit the ghost, who started to dissapate in front of my eyes. I walked up to the little platform in front of me, and I saw a urn, whith a little ligth emnating it, so I turned the urn upside down, and out of it came a little ring, which I quickly put on my finger. I could feel the enchantments, boosting my magic skills by far, and the name on it, showed that this was actually the famous mentors ring itself. Feeling proud of my new discovery, I ran out of the tomb, ( I found the way out after some panicking twenty minutes).

As I walked up on the road, and started to walk back towards Seyda Neen, and as I was halfway there I heard a loud scream, and someone falling towards me, frome the sky, ( Is it a plane, a bird, a dog, no it is a Bosmer, hahaha). He hit the ground, with a sickening crunshing sound, and was dead. I walked over to the dead bosmer, and stripped him, of his cloak, the book, some interesting scrolls (actually dangerous, that I was going to sell at my first oppertunity) and a fine sword with a little spark spell.

On my way to the silt strider, I saw a door, half hidden in the mountain, with the name Addamasartus on it, with the tougth of exploring the cave I walked in. I had walked only one step before a ragefull shriek met me.

"You in'wha". So I hope you will like it, in the next post I will write about ( you really didn't think I was going to tell you where you). so for now, Goodnigth and god bless us

This post has been edited by Telendil Delvanni: Dec 2 2005, 10:35 PM

[Jonajosa]

Liked it.

One tip though. Read your story out loud to yourself before posting it out on the web. It helps.

[mplantinga]

Quick thinking with the fireball. Another great installment; please keep them coming.

[Tellie]

Hi again, my health is increasing more and more, so I'm getting better every day, which gives me increasing pleasure and happyness, to write this story. And also that people are actually watching it and replying on it. I am sorry to say though that this computer I'm writing on this time dont have Word, so there will propably some spelling/grammar mistakes, but please bear with me guy's and gal's.

Thanks for all replyes and have a good

The woman, was running towards me, with a spiky looking dagger in her hand. I had just managed to draw IceSting, when she was on me. She took a fast slash against my chest, but my chitin armour stopped it (barely). I struck back with a powerfull downward chop, and when she had raised her dagger, my axe hit it, with the same force as the hammer on the anvil. Her hand was pushed downwards, but to her luck, it went straight into my left tigh.

I screamed, and fell to the floor, dropping my axe, cursing my lack of greaves and holding my leg. She laghted at me, but that was all I needed, her to lower her guard. I quickly chanted the words "momento friskus", and my thigh was healing. I picked up IceSting, and started to rain down blow after blow on her. In the end, IceSting hit her in the shoulder and clipped her arm straight of, the enchantments on the axe was apparent, her shoulder was turning to ice, and soon her head was ice to, I pushed her backwards, and she fell down and hit the ground.

-"Crash". Her head broke into tiny pieces of ice and gore. I quickly took up the dagger, ready to throw it at the first person available. I walked deeper into this dark cave, it was full of stalagmites from the roof, and the walls was wery rough, and hard. As I opened a door, I had but taken two steps, when I heard the wery well known sound of something flying towards you. With a loud -"Chunk" the throwing dart had hit my armour and glanced of it.

I started to run towards the thrower, who was actually another female Dark Elf, and threw the chitin dagger towards her. But chitin daggers were apparently not made for throwing and it flew wide past her. I was nearly halfway up to her, when a fireball flew past me and missed me by inches, and that could only mean one thing, there was two of them and one of them was apparently a wery pissed off mage.

So there I was, trapped between a fireball throwing mage, and a girl, with a wery dangerous aim. I continued to run up against the throwing star girl though. As I was running up the stairs, one of the steps, was broken, and that step was ofcourse the one I had just placed my foot on. I broke trough it, and fell down into the water below me.

When I had reached land, I noticed a little rot, on the one of the pillars, supporting the main walkway. Picking up IceSting in a two-handed-grip, I started to chop away on the pillar. The effect was quick, the woodwork turned into ice, which was easily smashed to small pieces. After doing that on three pillars, the whole walkway fell down, and the two bandits, was impaled on the large and small lumber pieces, that fell on them.

It took a whole lot of time to reckognise what I had actually done.

"Great Telina, really great"."How am I going to get up back there now"? I asked calmly to myself.

The answer was on the now wery dead mage, as he carried 4 levitating potions. I drank deeply from one of them, and floated up to the doorway again, left the cave, and walked over to the siltstrider. There I was met, by a large man, who asked me where I wanted to go.

"Balmora please", and after giving him some of my precious septims, I walked into the strange animal, and fell asleep.

[mplantinga]

Wow; that was certainly an unexpected and unique way of dealing with the bandit cave. I'm glad to hear that you are continuing to get better, and that you are sharing your unique creativity with us. I look forward to seeing how Telina fares once she arrives in Balmora.

[Tellie]

Hello, another on is coming up. I have now completed the first chapter and have started to write on the second one, but dont worry. I havn't posted more than about one half to three quarters of the firs one, and I shall try to make weekly updates. Yesterday, I was at the hospital for a check again, and walked out with the happy reults, of my cancer being completly gone, and I now only have to come in for a check each half year, the next four years. So since it Is closing to christmas, I decided to give you a long one. Enjoy, and have a merry

I heard a voice talking to me again. "wake up, we have arrived at Balmora, now I wust get back to Seyda-Neen".


I walked out of the stinking creature and was met by an awesome sight. The town was filled with large and small buildings, which were made of a strange mix of rock and sand.

As I was walking down the magnificent street, I saw signs over the buildings, and went towards the sign that had just caught my atension. On a sign, I saw two wands crossed over each other, with the name Mages Guild over it.

I quickly walked into the building, and was met by a female dark elf.
"Hello, what may I do for you outlander"? She asked quickly.

"Err, is it possible to join the Mages Guild, please". "Oh and bu the way, why do you call me outlander"? I asked with a strict tone.

"Ah well first, yes, I shall make you a member of the Mages Guild"." Second, I Call thee outlander, beacuse, you are not a native Dunmer as we Dark Elves call ourselves, now do you whish to hear the mages oath"?.

"No, I do not wish to hear the mages oath".

"Well, in that case, I name you associate, of the Mages Guild, now we give you cheaper travel and you are allowed to use any item in the equipment chests in all of the guild hall's, in Vvardenfell".

With that, I took my leave, contempted to find this Caius Cosades.
I walked out of the Guild hall, and started to walk down to the other side of the river, as the South Wall Cornerclub, would obviously be at the south side of the town.

I was disgusted by the look of this part of town, the garbage was just thrown outside of the door, and homeless people, suffering from some kind of addiction, were in all of the small backstreet's.

Finally I reached the club, and went inside. Inside it was a tence expectation in the air, as everybody were ready to kill anyone who tryed on something. In my way down the stairs, the Kahjiiti woman I had just passed actually talked to me.

"Hello, strange, can kahjiiti come with a suggestion", and without waiting for an answer, she continued. "Will stranger join the Thieves Guild"?" Kahjiitis name is Habashi Sugar Lip's by the way".

"NO I WILL NOT JOIN YOUR BLOODY GUILD, YOU WRETCHED BEING" I yelled at her, the thought of a stupid Kahjiit calling me stranger, asking me a question, without even waiting for an answer, and then come with the actual question, mede me wery angry.

When I came down I asked the man behind the counter. "Sorry, for my earlier yelling, but do you know where I can find Caius Cosades"?

"Well, no I dont, but Bacola upstairs will propably know".

I left the man, and walked back up th stairs, and when I was at the top of the stairs, Sugar Lips Habashi, came running towards me, yelling.
"Yes, yes, yes, I found it, I got a diamon". Just when she was about to pass me, I stepped my leg in front of her, and she ran straight into it and fell.

She flew to the bottom of the stairs, and hit the counter with the sound of both wood and bone splintering. Satisfied with my actions ( I hated all other races, sake for the Altmers, and maby a few Bosmers ) I walked up the stairs, and met up with Bacola.

"Hello, I trust you are Bacola"." You see, I must find the man named Caius Cosades, and I was told you know where to find him".

"Yes, firs you must go up to the last street, on this side of the river Odai, and walk to the other end, there in a small house is Caius, oh by the way you are never welcome in my club again, so get out of here quickly".

I walked yout of the club, and finally found the house. I knocked hard three times and went in.

Merry Chrismas folk's.

[mplantinga]

I certainly wasn't expecting the kind of behavior we have just seen from Telina. Very cold, uncaring, and racist. Certainly a different kind of character than the stories here usually feature. I'm curious to see how you're planning to develop this in the story.

Interesting, quality writing, as usual. I will look forward to seeing how her meeting with Caius will turn out.

[minque]

Oh dear....now I must be honest....I did not like the way Telina was treating Sugar-.Lips!

No need to let her fall down the stairs....


But it´s a well written description of an evil woman....which now I unfortunately lost almost all sympathy for

[Tellie]

First, I would like to explain Telina's history a little bit. She was brought up by assasin's, no family, the other races were treating her like scum. In prison, she lost all respect for the human race, beacuse she was beaten up wery much. The Kahjiit's and Argonias, are comletly different races, and she is kinda afraid of what's new, and what's different, but as she gets used to Morrowind, and isn't brainwashed by the dark brotherhood all the time she will get nicer.

Thank's though for being honest, and I promise I shall not do anything that evil against someone again. I hope you will forgive me especislly Minque, I did not meen to dissapoint anyone. .


Inside, I was met by the stench of something, I wasn't comletly sure of. In the corner by a bed, there stood a man, in travel stained pants, and bare chested.

-"Hello, are you Caius Cosades"? I asked rather stiffly.

-"Ah yes, I am Caius, and you must propably be Telina Delvanni".

-"How do you kno" I started, but he interrupted me.

-"How I know who you are, is unimportant, what is important though is that I am given that package and letter you were given".

Completly taken away by this man's knowledge, I handed over the package and letter, and let him read it without uttering a single word.

-"Hmm, it look's like the Emperor wants me to introduct you into the Blades, now before I give you any missions, you should get out and join a couple of factions, and get some experience, and now I can answer any questions you may have".

-"What is the Blades"? I asked.

-"The Blades are the Emperors spy network, we are his eyes and eares, now you shall be given the rank of novice in the Blades, and theese 200 septims, now I reckomend you get a room as it is getting late". He handed me over twenty 10 septims, and showed me out of the door.

My head was in rebellion, with my heart, I had been sent into prison, then taken to Morrowind, so that I could become a spy for the Emperor. -"NO Telina, you are going to take it nice and easy, pretend like you never met this guy, and never go back to that house again", I told myself.

As I found myself walking up the stairs, to the more civiliced part of Balmora, I saw an inn, with the name -Eight-Plates. I quickly went in, and sat myself by the bar. Right next to me, there sat a small Kahjiiti, who fore some reasons, were crying.

-"Now what's wrong with you, little child", I asked, not even knowing what had made me do that.

-"Kahjiitis mum, Shugar-Lips-Habashi, lyes at hospital wounded, but Kahjiiti dont have enough money, to pay for treatmen, and if mum dye, Kahjiiti dont have house or work", she said, and now the tairs, were falling out of her eyes.

Now I was feeling really bad, I hadnt meant to severely injure the poor being, just cause a little pain. -"Dont worry, I shall pay for the treatment, how much do it cost"?

-"Treatment of mum, cost four diamonds, and Kahjiiti dont even have money enough for a half diamond", she said still sobbing.

-"Well, do you know of any where they sell diamonds"?

-"Diamonds for sale at Nalcyria-The-White-Heaven, the shop is north-east of here, in night she sleeps at bed upstairs, but must be carefull though, guards go outside often".

By those words, I told her to stay there untill I came back, and then I walked outside, and headed up to the alchimist shop. Some five hours later, the lights had been off, for two hours, so I sneakt up to the door, and took out my lockpick.

The lock, would been opened in just a few seconds, if I had been as good as I was back in Cyrodiil, but now I wasn't neither of the parts, and the lockpick snapped in two just as the lock was opened.

I quickly walked inn without making as little sound as possible. After a few minutes, I found it. A box with no less than twenty diamonds in it. Thinking a while, I decided that I should not take more than the four diamonds needed, so I only took four.

What was going on to me, I wondered, the prison, had propably made me soft, and I actually liked it, it gave me an actual chance to be a woman. I had just taken my hand on the door, when a voice cut through the air.

-"What are you doing in my shop, with my diamonds".

That was all for today, and again sorry, I did not mean to be a racist or to dissapoint my reader's, so I hope you will forgive me.

[mplantinga]

A rather rapid turn-around for Telina, to go from sending sugar-lips down the stairs to offering to pay for her treatment. This character becomes more interesting with each new installment. And now she's been caught stealing; I can't wait to see how that works out.

I can't speak for Minque, but my comments weren't meant to criticize you. I was not offended by what you wrote, I was just a little shocked that Telina behaved in that manner. It's your story; if you want your character to start out cruel and slowly learn kindness, then you should do that. The history you gave at the beginning of this latest post could have been worked into the story so that when she was at the South Wall, we would have understood why she was so cruel. Keep up the great work. Our criticisms are of Telina, not you; if you need her to be a bit cruel for a while, then you should do that. It's your story after all. I'm sure I can speak for Minque by saying that we'll read it regardless, especially if you're planning to have Telina learn kindness as the story progresses.

(Sorry for the insanely long comment. I hope I've managed to clarify my earlier comments.)

[minque]

Oh dear me! Now I feel guilty..I was too harsh I guess! I do appreciate your writing! It´s just that I dislike unnecessary cruelty! And I love Khajiities....

But it was a good thing you explained about Telina´s background, that makes us understand why she acts like she does sometimes.

Now by all means continue your story.....and I hope you have no bad feelings towards me for my criticism...it was not meant like that!

[Tellie]

Thanks Minque and mplantinga, I have no bad feelings, for anyone of you, but you did manage to get me feel rather guilty, and I suppose Telina was rather dodgy if not cruel.

Thanks for still wanting to follow this story, and I shall hopefully post another one tomorrow.

And again, thanks.

[Jonajosa]

Thanks Minque and mplantinga, I have no bad feelings, for anyone of you, but you did manage to get me feel rather guilty, and I suppose Telina was rather dodgy if not cruel.

Thanks for still wanting to follow this story, and I shall hopefully post another one tomorrow.

And again, thanks.

While I do see how you would misunderstand Minques comment I would like you to always remember this: Don't let others dislike of your ideas change your way of thinking. Don't be afraid to post your thoughts about someone or something in your story, and never ever feel guilty for the way you write your story.

Just a few things I thought might help you in the future. I had to learn them the hard way.

Got caught up and I must say there is an improvement from your earlier posts. Keep it up.

[Tellie]

-"Oh no", I yelled. I ran out the door, and sprinted towards the Eight-Plates, as fast as I could. Meanwhile I heard the guards yelling me to stop.

I finally reached the Eight-Plates, and ran inside and saw the Kahjiiti girl. I quickly threw the bag with diamonds to her, after half-a-minute, she was gone, and I felt an armoured gauntlet on my shoulder.

-"Lets move outlander, you are going to the jail in the fort".

Then I was knocked out, ( I still dont know why the guards normally do that to poor Telina) given a bag over my head and then taken to the fort. After seven hours I woke up, just to find myself behind the good oldfashioned hatefull steel bars.

-"Hello, guard, anyone come here now". I yelled.

-"What do you want, Dark Elf" a wery big imperial asked me.

-"I want to get out of here" I said with a wery angry tone,( and there was aleredy shooting small sparks from my hands beacuse of my magic skills, was getting forced out by my anger).

-"Oh yes, you shall gat out from here in two weeks".

My anger was getting wery strong. I had just done a little thing. ( Wait a minute, I had resisted arrest, trespassed again, stolen a couple of diamond's and called the guards some terrible things after I woke up. Now I could understand why I had been given two weeks.)

Suddenly iy just snapped, I shouted out the words, -"Fiera Cronos". Fierce lightning bolts was pouring out of my fingers, and the guard screamed as the fierce electric powers was flowing trough him, and the metal armour was just increasing it.

I did not stop, before the armour lay broken and the awful stench of burnt flesh reached my nose. Lucklily the guards in the higher floors had not heard the screams of their friend, and I quickly disposed his body by throwing a fireball at him.

And now was the big old problem, how to breach out of an armoured cell, I lost all hope of getting out after an hour, and fell asleep, hoping that they was not going to send someone down to check at me.

A small -"Click" from the lock made me wake up, there stood the small Kahjiiti girl, with all my items and a potion off what looked like invisibility.

-"Come, take potion, drink and run out of here".

I did not even have the time to thank her before she was gone. Normally i hated beings like her, but the Kahjiits was actually getting almost acceptable to me. I heard the sound of a door opening, so I emptied the bottle, and ran as fast as I could back to balmora.

When I was back at the upper parts of town, I saw the sign on a building.

The Morag Tong.




Hope you enjoy, and I sincerely hope that you know why I wrote Morag tong at the end of this post. Merry Christmas.

This post has been edited by Telendil Delvanni: Dec 20 2005, 07:43 PM

[Tellie]

But but but. Where is everybody? I know this is propably no meaning in this post, but I just want you'all to know that in the christmas holiday I propably wont be able to post anything, but to make it up to you I shall try to post a long one tomorrow, so it would be nice if ye commented on the last one before I post another one, in case of double posting.

[minque]

Hey, Ok, it´s a good update...I like it...really, Telina had a nice experience with a Khajiiti huh! Well that´s GOOD! yay...see..kitties are nice, I told ya! Keep it up I tell you!

Heh...I could almost say the same, about comments..I updated my story not so long ago..but.....not too many comments, so But but,,....I guess that´s life, ppl are too busy to read just now