 Flying High Above My Window, A new song need critizism |
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| Doomed4Eternity |
 Nov 19 2005, 11:47 AM
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"Flying High Above My Window"
By Joshua Finch "Doomed-4-Eternity" Creatures Fly high above my window, Cliff racers fly higher than the mountains, Soaring high above the clouds, Pwang, Pwang, I struck them down, Pwang, Pwang, I will celebrate, I shall hire a clown, Pwang, Pwang, They are now extinct, Pwang, Pwang, That clowns feet really stink! Now i can fly high above my window, I can now fly higher than the Mountains, And now, i can soar higher than the clouds, Pwang, Pwang, Saw a flying Dwemer ship, Pwang, Pwang, I licked my lip, Pwang, Pwang, There may be good loot, Pwang, Pwang, However there could be more soot, Pwang, Pwang, I went abroad, Pwang, Pwang, I found a room, on my own accord, Pwang, Pwang, I went across the plank, Pwang, Pwang, My life suddenly shrank, Pwang, Pwang, I jumped off! Pwang, Pwang, I saw Freddie Flintoff! Pwang, Pwang, I used my my Alteration, Pwang, Pwang, I found my spells of Levitation! My life went by, A tear fell off my eye, I also went with it, Before i fell into my PE kit! I thought our library needed some more songs so heres my first of a few! (If yoiur wondering who Josh is thats me!) NEED SOME EDITING AND CRITIZISM THX This post has been edited by Doomed4Eternity: Nov 19 2005, 11:49 AM |
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| vaanic~one |
Nov 19 2005, 07:14 PM
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 Finder  Joined: 18-May 05 From: England, home to the centre of time |
Er, okay, the references to PE kit and Freddie Flintoff do not fit in the TES universe.
--------------------  Oliver_lowe@hotmail.com TESSource Staff |
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| Doomed4Eternity |
Nov 21 2005, 04:24 PM
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QUOTE(vaanic~one @ Nov 19 2005, 06:14 PM) Er, okay, the references to PE kit and Freddie Flintoff do not fit in the TES universe.  yer sry that was my bad humour in that! any different ideas n that then? |
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| Stargazey |
Nov 21 2005, 11:07 PM
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Is there any chance that you could start ONE topic for all of your writings, and let people view them there?
A topic for every story is getting a bit spammy. Star |
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| Doomed4Eternity |
Nov 22 2005, 01:53 PM
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Evoker Joined: 12-November 05 From: in the jaws of oblivion |
QUOTE(Stargazey @ Nov 21 2005, 10:07 PM) Is there any chance that you could start ONE topic for all of your writings, and let people view them there? A topic for every story is getting a bit spammy. Star ok sry |
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| Doomed4Eternity |
Nov 26 2005, 06:44 PM
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Evoker Joined: 12-November 05 From: in the jaws of oblivion |
so any ideas or is this ready to go?
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| minque |
Nov 26 2005, 07:00 PM
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 Wise Woman  Joined: 11-February 05 From: Where I can watch you!! |
QUOTE(Doomed4Eternity @ Nov 26 2005, 06:44 PM) so any ideas or is this ready to go? To go where exactly????  -------------------- Chomh fada agus a bhionn daoine ah creiduint in aif�iseach, leanfaidh said na n-aingniomhi a choireamh (Voltaire)
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| Doomed4Eternity |
Nov 26 2005, 07:02 PM
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Evoker Joined: 12-November 05 From: in the jaws of oblivion |
QUOTE(minque @ Nov 26 2005, 06:00 PM) To go where exactly???? o like ready for your team editing, |
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| minque |
Nov 26 2005, 07:06 PM
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Wise Woman Joined: 11-February 05 From: Where I can watch you!! |
I suggest you ask Mr Gazey for his opinion! He´s in the staff!
-------------------- Chomh fada agus a bhionn daoine ah creiduint in aif�iseach, leanfaidh said na n-aingniomhi a choireamh (Voltaire)
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| Doomed4Eternity |
Jan 5 2006, 03:53 PM
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Evoker Joined: 12-November 05 From: in the jaws of oblivion |
QUOTE(minque @ Nov 26 2005, 06:06 PM) I suggest you ask Mr Gazey for his opinion! He´s in the staff! ok! |
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| Dantrag |
Jan 6 2006, 09:41 PM
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 Councilor  Joined: 13-February 05 From: The cellar of the fortress of the fuzz |
Except for the things that Vaanic one said, it's great!
-------------------- "Its when murder is justice that martyrs are made"
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| Doomed4Eternity |
Jan 7 2006, 01:04 PM
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Evoker Joined: 12-November 05 From: in the jaws of oblivion |
QUOTE(Dantrag @ Jan 6 2006, 08:41 PM) Except for the things that Vaanic one said, it's great! thx!!! ill work on it! |
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