A short piece, by myself. Options

[vaanic~one]

Here is a book I would like to submit to the mod. I know it is very short, but it hasa lot to say, please tell me whether it is good enough. (I will put it in quote form to make it easier to distinguish)

I am writing a bigger work called "Nerevarine and the Heart", but i am not sure when it will be finished.

NOTE: March 2006, The Following is the FINAL VERSION:

[This is a piece of work concerning Someone’s feelings about Thought, The Author is a Dunmer named “Vaan”]

When you have a great opinion, and it is against the opinion of that of everyone else, or it is shunned by all, then do not share your opinion. Keep it to yourself. Why? Because if you do, you will be the king of your opinion, No-one can invade your mind, and change what you think, no-one can shun you either. You will be able to fly your flag in triumph as you watch others walk by, oblivious of your higher knowledge. You will be able to sit there and smile at yourself, for you know what they don’t, and that is your personal conquest over them.

And another thing to note: If you are fighting, be it physically, verbally, or in your own head, make sure you carry on fighting. Do not forget that while there is a drop of that deep red life-fluid inside your body, and while there is a fragment of life still inside you, you are still useful to yourself. Do not give up until life gives itself up in you.

Do not be a slave to the Machine. Look at the Machine, Study the Machine, but do not be its slave. [Machine = Society, its pressures and demands, work like a machine] If you see the Machine, and use it to your advantage but do not follow it, then Nirn will be your throne.

Being popular is not everything. Even if you are loved by many, it does not mean you are loved by all. Sooner or later someone will decide that they do not like you, and in your ignorance you will end up dead. Such are the desires of certain peoples on this planet. Instead it is best perhaps to stay in the background, powerful perhaps, all-ruling maybe, but definitely in the background.

It may be thought that people who are concerned with aesthetics too much are perhaps shallow. But remember this: If something is not aesthetic, then it probably cannot benefit you. If something is aesthetic, then you will be benefited more by your own favour of it. So try at least to make everything around you as aesthetic as possible, then you will be all for the better.

Do not let someone else think that they can rule your very self. They can rule your body, but not your mind, your mind is always free to do what it likes, so do not encage it because someone else wants it to be. If you want it to be encaged, then it is your decision alone that decides this, not someone else’s.

If you these words do heed, then you shall be all the better for it.

is it good enough to be in Tes'fruum?

This post has been edited by vaanic~one: Mar 13 2006, 05:04 PM

[jonajosa]

The title of the book is alittle controversial right now. Id say yes it could go in the library but you'll have to wait for Corryn or Trokia to tell you if it could go in.

Ill contact them about this.

[Hukai The Wandering]

NICE!

[vaanic~one]

[quote=Hukai The Wandering]NICE! [/quote]

and why, pray, is it so?

[Ducis]

I really like it, it's hard to say why. It's just good, it has truth in it, but in my opinion just partly.
It's.. wel.. philosophic :goodjob:

[Hukai The Wandering]

Yeah, just the way it's worded is very cool! It also has a deepth to it, you know, like a professor's of or a broad travler's thinking. Ah, you know what I mean!

[vaanic~one]

here is an addon to it:

[quote]Do not be a slave to the Machine. Look at the Machine, Study the Machine, but do not be its slave. [Machine = Society, its pressures and demands, work like a machine] If you see the Machine, but do not follow it, then the Earth will be your throne.[/quote]

It isnt as good as the first two paragraphs, but hey, its something. I may not add the explanation in square brackets in the final piece for obvious reasons.

[Ducis]

I really like it
You're good :goodjob:

[Hukai The Wandering]

[vaanic~one]

[quote=Hukai The Wandering][/quote]

meaning?

[jonajosa]

ITs best to just ignore Hukai when he does stuff like that.

[Konji]

Very philosophical, so do you just submit you're story as a new topic then....and hello everyone.

[jonajosa]

Its best to just send it to me. Im the fiction(if that story of yours is non fiction it goes to Stargazey.) lead editor here.

Theres no rule at the moment about posting stories here. But im hoping hat will change.

[Konji]

thank ye.

[vaanic~one]

Isnt Corryn back yet? I thought he was......

[Ducis]

[quote=vaanic~one]Isnt Corryn back yet? I thought he was......[/quote]
I haven't seen both, corry and troika for a pretty long time. And that while they're our leaders.

[jonajosa]

All praise Corryn and Trokia!

[vaanic~one]

yes, all praise to the invisible ones..........

[jonajosa]

Corryns back. I have no clue where trokia is. I think he passed out after getting drunk and forgot how to get home.

[vaanic~one]

OK, I have now sent the elongated improved version to stargazey, since he is the Non-fiction guy.

edit: here is the new version, much improved and elongated:



[quote]
[This is a piece of work concerning Someone’s feelings about Thought, The Author is a Dunmer named “Lord Vaan”

When you have a great opinion, and it is against the opinion of that of everyone else, or it is shunned by all, then do not share your opinion. Keep it to yourself. Why? Because if you do, you will be the king of your opinion, No-one can invade your mind, and change what you think, no-one can shun you either. You will be able to fly your flag in triumph as you watch others walk by, oblivious of your higher knowledge. You will be able to sit there and smile at yourself, for you know what they don’t, and that is your personal conquest over them.

And another thing to note: If you are fighting, be it physically, verbally, or in your own head, make sure you carry on fighting. Do not forget that while there is a drop of that deep red life-fluid inside your body, and while there is a fragment of life still inside you, you are still useful to yourself. Do not give up until life gives itself up in you.

Do not be a slave to the Machine. Look at the Machine, Study the Machine, but do not be its slave. [Machine = Society, its pressures and demands, work like a machine] If you see the Machine, and use it to your advantage but do not follow it, then Nirn will be your throne.

Being popular is not everything. Even if you are loved by many, it does not mean you are loved by all. Sooner or later someone will decide that they do not like you, and in your ignorance you will end up dead. Such are the desires of certain peoples on this planet. Instead it is best perhaps to stay in the background, powerful perhaps, all-ruling maybe, but definitely in the background.

It may be thought that people who are concerned with aesthetics too much are perhaps shallow. But remember this: If something is not aesthetic, then it probably cannot benefit you. If something is aesthetic, then you will be benefited more by your own favour of it. So try at least to make everything around you as aesthetic as possible, then you will be all for the better.

Do not let someone else think that they can rule your very self. They can rule your body, but not your mind, your mind is always free to do what it likes, so do not encage it because someone else wants it to be. If you want it to be encaged, then it is your decision alone that decides this, not someone else’s.

If you these words do heed, then you shall be all the better for it.
[/quote]