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minque
post May 1 2006, 12:50 PM
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Family isn't about whose blood you have. It's about who you care about

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Chapter 5, Home is where your heart is

Before I continue with the story of the upcoming events in Ald´Ruhn, I think I want to say a few words about Intervention-scrolls, and spells for that matter!

It seems so utterly easy and convenient; you speak an incantation, either written on a piece of parchment, or you know it by heart, then all of a sudden you are somewhere else, just like that...

Of course it’s not that easy, all who have used this kind of transportation know what I´m talking about. You actually decompose yourself, your physical body, into its building-stones, and then you put them all together somewhere else, all magically of course. Now that has to affect you somehow and it surely affected me, when I suddenly found myself in the courtyard of the Ald´Ruhn Temple that rainy morning.....

The actual travel, or intervention, feels like you’re totally weightless, flowing in the void, whirling like an autumn-leaf. You have no idea what’s up and down, your intestines are all spinning around, or at least it feels like they are. Darkness and pain engulf you, the very air around you is filled with the most terrible screams from poor souls that never reached their destination.... and you are certain you will never get out of it alive. But of course you do, that is if you don’t happen to meet anything hostile where you end up.

The Almsivi-Intervention brings you directly to the nearest Tribunal Temple, so as I mentioned, I ended up outside the Ald´Ruhn Temple. I was shaken and nauseous, and it took a while before I could compose myself enough to gather my scattered belongings, check that all was there and head off to a well-known place, at least for me; the Mage’s Guild!

Ironically, I always seemed to be in a mess when visiting this Guild house, so it was no wonder Edwinna Elbert laughed when she greeted me.

“Serene! How wonderful to see you again.....but you look like you need to use our washing-facilities- as usual- I’d say!”

After a hot and invigorating bath I sat down in Edwinna´s office, wrapped in a worn but warm robe, telling her of my adventures with the Ashlanders.

“You need to go and see Neminda,” Edwinna advised me when I told her about my last encounter with Azura. “You belong to House Redoran, and they will most certainly take care of you, my child.”

So later that afternoon I went to Under Skar, to the Redoran Council-hall, once again dressed up by the generous Mages of Ald´Ruhn, to meet with Neminda.

She was pleased to see me but commented on how thin and wiry I’d become since the last time we met; it was no wonder though after living almost a year among the Ashlanders. When I told her about my time in the Ahemmusa Camp she listened carefully without a word until I came to the part about the Outlander who was asking to be named the Nerevarine, then she interrupted my telling;

“Ah, I know that man, he’s adopted into House Redoran, and he has a very good reputation within the Great House. He is a Breton as far as I know, from High Rock....He doesn’t speak so much about himself…” Neminda smiled, “But forgive my interruption, Serene, continue please.”

After I finished my story and also told her about Azura´s prophecy about “claiming my family,” Neminda sat silent for a while, in deep thoughts. Finally, she spoke:

“ Serene, I think I know the meaning of the words of The Divine. Leave now, and go to the Temple and talk to Lloros Sarano. He is a wise man and I think you may find it useful to talk to him.”

The Temple of Ald´Ruhn was rather small, just a few rooms on the ground-level, and then a bigger area downstairs. A rather friendly-looking Dunmer approached me upon my entering the premises and introduced himself as Lloros Sarano. It turned out he was a temple-servant, specialised in mental illnesses and healing, which made him utterly interesting to talk to. There were not many healers around Ald´Ruhn at the moment so he was happy to meet me so he could discuss his latest experiences in the noble art of healing. Or at least that was how I explained his questions regarding my own experiences with healing and restorative magic.

I spent the night in the Mage’s Guild, and the next morning I paid another visit to Neminda.

“Serene, it so happens that Serjo Athyn Sarethi, one of our councillors, may be able to help you out....he is a friend of my father and has had a lot of sad things happening to him and his family lately.” Neminda sighed and continued: “First his son was kidnapped, then he was the victim of an assassination-attempt, then he is almost certain his wife is betraying him, and above all his son was charged with murder.”

I gasped, thinking that there was no end to this poor man’s misfortunes, but also wondering where I fit into this? I couldn´t see the connections....not at all.

“Athyn is most of all concerned about his son, Varvur. He is back home, and his name is cleared, but he is in a very bad shape, he has lost his will to keep on living, he’s just lying on his bed, staring into the air, not talking to anyone, not eating....he seems to be determined to die. Athyn is at his wit’s end, he doesn’t know what to do, now when Trey’s gone and all.” Neminda sighed once more and blew her nose.

“Trey?” I asked, “Is he that outlander I met?”

He was, and since he also was the saviour of both Athyn´s and Varvur´s lives and honour, according to Neminda, I could very well understand the loss the old councillor felt.

“Words spread fast in these surroundings,” Neminda smiled, “Serjo Sarethi knows about you, Serene, and he knows you’re back!....So go to Sarethi Manor and talk to him..”

Sarethi Manor didn’t look very fancy from outside, just another door in the wall, but inside was a completely different thing. A spacious hallway, with ornaments on the walls and a thick red carpet on the floor, sloped slowly downwards, leading to a huge room, with austere furnishings....

The man that approached me was at least double my age, tall, with black, grey-streaked hair, dark-red very sad eyes and a face that showed he had had his share of life and it had not been all pleasant. Yet it was a fascinating face, pointed cheekbones, straight nose and a strangely sensitive mouth. I couldn´t take my eyes off him.....

“Serene was it, right?” His dark voice had this magnetism that affected me more deeply than I then realized!

“Y-yes” I stuttered, “Neminda sent me, she thought maybe you could have some use for me.”

Athyn Sarethi smiled, led me to a chair and bade me sit down. The fate of young Varvur Sarethi was sad. The young man had been kidnapped by the Archmaster of House Redoran, Bolvyn Venim, accused of a crime he didn’t commit. Although it was actually more complicated- he probably HAD fought with the other young man, but had been under the influence of malign magic at the time. It was a well-understood point of Dunmeri (as well as Imperial) law that a person was not responsible for their actions if they where bespelled. He had been rescued from Venim Manor by the outlander known as Trey of High Rock; as Athyn mentioned the young Breton, his face brightened, almost glowing. I understood this man was very dear to him. Still, Varvur was accused of the murder of his best friend, Bralen Carvaren, so not only did he loose his friend, he was suspected to have taken his life! The whole thing sounded absurd to me but I kept my mouth shut.

Trey again acted and cleared Varvur from the accusations, but Varvur was mentally in a very bad shape ever after. As he spoke of his son’s worsening condition, the animation left Athyn’s face and he clasped his hands before him so tightly that I could see the knuckles whiten. He gave me a long, searching look before he spoke-

“Serene, it is my understanding that you are a healer of great skill- perhaps even greater than you know yourself. I have spoken with Lloros Sarano- I asked him to determine whether the stories of your skill are accurate…forgive me if that seems intrusive, but I had a pressing need….”

He then made his request- my task was to cure Varvur...one way or another, and the worst thing was....I had not the faintest idea how to do it!


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post May 1 2006, 02:09 PM
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Great start on the new chapter Minque! I really like the way you describe how it feels when using intervention spells. As always you make the characters feel very real as I've said many many times now, so keep it up! smile.gif

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post May 1 2006, 02:45 PM
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Wheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!
More Serene smile.gif
Great work Minque biggrin.gif


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post May 1 2006, 04:29 PM
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Very nice. Keep up the good work smile.gif Pro- Star this stuff is!


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post May 1 2006, 04:32 PM
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nice job i wish i could make a story like that good work goodjob.gif goodjob.gif


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post May 1 2006, 06:43 PM
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An amazing start to chapter 5. The depth and intricacy of your storytelling never ceases to amaze me. Please keep it up; I'll try to check in as often as I can.
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post May 1 2006, 08:17 PM
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And so it happened... good show, Serene. Now go and get that kid freed !
I'm also glad to learn that Savior is full blooded Breton... not like certain filthy, honorless Hlaaly half-breed scum devilsmile.gif


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post May 2 2006, 12:48 AM
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From the opening quote, through the description of teleport magic, and the vivid narrative of Serene's interactions with various folk in Ald'Ruhn-this installment shines. It is a fine addition to a wonderful story, and a worthy beginning to what promises to be a dazzling chapter.


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post May 2 2006, 02:47 AM
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Interesting place to find a good quote Minky. laugh.gif

Anyways sorry for not commenting on this before now but I didn't notice this until now. Great content as usual and some good description of the spells and such. Keep up the good work Minque. biggrin.gif


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post May 2 2006, 01:39 PM
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Aww...how thypical...here I spent time wondering when the next update would come....nd then all of sudden, a new chapter have been released....and me being late is FAAAAR behind in the line of replying, which means that the others have aleready told what I wanted to write...

So I hope you can accept a few Jonas goodjob.gifgoodjob.gif....and about a dozen of Tellie cake.gif cakes...smile.gif


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post May 3 2006, 04:27 PM
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Oh wow. I loved it. What a great way to start the chapter. That was definately a five star entry Minque for sure. Keep it up and give us more! biggrin.gif


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post May 3 2006, 06:50 PM
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I'll just repeat what everyone else said. An excellent start. Now please write more.


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post May 8 2006, 03:40 PM
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Heh, minque, you probably don't even recognise my screen name anymore, but you posted this story at The Pit, which I haven't been to in ages. I'm blocked out of there in college, and today I decided to try and find your story on another web page.

Google brought me here, and i've now caught up from where I was (Chapter 3)

I love the direction you are going with this, and look forward to the next update.

*Bookmarks page for future reference*


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post May 30 2006, 05:30 PM
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YAY!!! I got caught up!! Very nice Minque, and do add, I can't wait to see what she does to Varvur. To bad she had to leave her lover behind, that hurts.


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post Jun 3 2006, 05:21 PM
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OH NO!! not again, im always the last to see an update, im sorry but i am soo glad i read this, the description of the scroll was perfect. It just adds so much more to the world serene interacts in. Most people think of the scrolls as just an easy short teleportation but ill think of what it feels like when i use those scrolls in the game
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post Jun 5 2006, 10:53 AM
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Ok guys...I´m sorry this is no update.... sad.gif See my newly started addition is on the harddrive that´s in my handbag at the moment.....Yup I´ll have to turn in my comp and I won´t let them have my harddrive since I didn´t get the chance of making a backup before the sad death of my lappy!

But I´ll of course update as soon as possible!


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post Jun 5 2006, 02:53 PM
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Yes please do, we've waited far too long now. biggrin.gif


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post Jun 6 2006, 11:32 AM
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QUOTE(Kiln @ Jun 5 2006, 02:53 PM)
Yes please do, we've waited far too long now. biggrin.gif
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Good thing I joined up here smile.gif

I got to read on from where I was. I'm still loving this story.


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Nice job! I don't see how you write so much! Nice start. can't wait for an update! laugh.gif


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