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> Memoirs of a Morag Tong Assassin - Solstheim, Chapter Two: North as the Racer Flies
treydog
post Jan 21 2012, 06:01 PM
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I figured that the Company was the kind of people who appreciated initiative, so I took it upon myself to find a fatcat Imperial. How hard could it be?


Made me snicker there.

The “domestic bliss” interlude, with Seth cooking was a wonderful touch. Although he claims it was because he doubted the quality- and the company… I wonder if he was also motivated by a need to feel CONNECTED to something simple and comforting. Like preparing one’s own food.

Simply loved the whole scene with Ponius- and will content myself with that, rather than quoting it all.

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Now it was time to return to Pene and leave everything behind.


I wonder how easy that will turn out to be?

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But I had heard Mother crying a couple times, which was not normal, and Father was drinking more than one snifter of Cyrodillic Brandy in the evening after dinner.


And THAT is “showing- not telling.”

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The dark figure that slid in and out of my life like a piece of parchment under the door and always seeming to arrive just in time to catch me before I did something that would cause problems of some sort, or just after.


Simply LOVE the imagery there.

And of course- 3 guesses as to the true identity of “The Princess of Trouble”.

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I would like to think that I was as invisible as Uncle Seth but that was not possible; he could disappear faster
than a dust mote. I did fairly well though; I could sneak up on anyone except Mother and Uncle Seth, but Mother cheated and Uncle Seth, well he was Uncle Seth.


How wonderful is the sense of Athynae that that passage gives us.

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You do not need to know and do not go snooping to find the answers.” And so I didn’t- well, usually- well, sometimes- um, nevermind.


As does THAT one!

Simply marvelous- all of it.









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post Jan 21 2012, 07:39 PM
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Thank you first to Black Hand for allowing me the opportunity to share in this, Seth's wonderful tale. His was one of the first I read when Trey prodded me into the forum and I like the story even more now than I did then.

@Trey- I'll talk to you later sir!!!

@McB- I am so glad you have joined this community, your story is wonderful and your comments are classic. Thank you for reading Athynae's antics...wherever they lead.

@mALX- Your support from the beginning has been undaunted and so, so appreciated

@Olen- Don't quite know what to say to you without sounding totally cheesey so I will simply say THANK YOU SO MUCH for reading and sharing your thoughts, they are ALWAYS appreciated.

And one last thing, each of you made a comment about "knowing" it was Athynae, THAT was the coolest!!! If I have captured her so completely that even in alternate universes she is the same, that is a WOW for sure. THANKS TO ALL OF YOU!!! I am elated to be a part of this wonderful community.


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post Jan 21 2012, 08:41 PM
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post Jan 21 2012, 08:56 PM
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Seth's vagueness as to why he chose not to say his "good-byes" is interesting- I suspect he is not certain himself.

And the tie-in to the interlude is perfect... as one mystery- the indentity of the hooded "woman" is revealed.

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I stopped for a moment, rubbing the bridge of my nose. "You're just not used to...different personalities...he is joking Pene. Intentionally stating nonsense for laughter, with the intention of causing ease with people." I explained.

Pene looked at me oddly for a moment. "I see. So you mortals intentionally spout nonsense at one another to build social bridges?" She asked.

"It's not quite as insane when you actually develop a sense of humor." I said slightly frustrated.

"It's a 'sense' for nonsense?" Pene said mystified, following me as I boarded the ship.


Had to quote the whole thing- because it is just so perfect and had me laughing and happy to have set my tea aside.

And then- throughout the piece, there is the atmosphere. The fog that covers the area around Khuul- reflecting the existential fog in which Seth finds himself. And, even as he hopes to use the cover of that fog to his advantage, it also obscures his own vision. Or maybe- sometimes- a fog is just weather. kvleft.gif


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post Jan 21 2012, 09:41 PM
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It is odd being in the position I am now in, there are logical human reactions to the writing, which are always leaning toward the "wonderful" but there is also and emotional response to the writing now, more than before. The idea that this is Athynae's reality, and Seth's, it is just a sad proposition any way you look at it.

Deep sigh, one tear and another wonderful write Blackie.


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post Jan 21 2012, 09:55 PM
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QUOTE(Black Hand @ Jan 21 2012, 02:41 PM) *


@mALX The Stain is in the Apartment in Vivec, not in Bal Isra. wink.gif
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Sorry about that, I haven't played Morrowind yet embarrased.gif


** Will have to come back and read when I get some free time this weekend.

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post Jan 21 2012, 10:56 PM
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Fair dues...Nice little chapter here...

The Khajiit made me laugh for some reason...

Maybe because I just watched a documentary about Monty Python..."We've got lumps of it...Round the back..."... biggrin.gif ...

Dunno... biggrin.gif ...

Excellent as ever...

Nice one!!...

*Applauds*... biggrin.gif ...
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post Jan 22 2012, 04:30 PM
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You really captured S'virr from the game in this piece. I liked your inclusion of his classic line.

Pene continues to be an interesting counter character and provides entertainment.

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"I see. So you mortals intentionally spout nonsense at one another to build social bridges?"

I liked this line, its funny but foarly insightful too.


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post Jan 23 2012, 06:16 PM
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Seth trying to explain humor to Pene was my favorite part of this chapter! That great detail added a nice touch of immersion into Pene's character for me, like her actions as a raven did. You have a marked ability to slide the tiniest actions and reactions into scenes that totally make them come to life - I'm envious !!! Awesome write !!


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post Jan 24 2012, 04:03 AM
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post Jan 24 2012, 04:46 AM
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Ooooh, pretty pictures...*Slack jawed*...

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Nice one!!!... biggrin.gif ...

Like journey pices do I...Yes!...

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As a ship skiffs across changeless tides that ever change


OOF!!!...Oh, that's just deep right there that is... biggrin.gif ...

And...

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Than again, my life had certainly seemed to end up in the bucket outside


Typo aside, that's both funny and poingnant right there...*Bows down*...

Beautiful and masterful writing...

Nice one!!... biggrin.gif ...

*Applauds heartily*...
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post Jan 24 2012, 04:52 AM
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I liked the look into Seth's thought process as he slips from the past into the future.

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So perhaps it was my voyage in life that had taken the turn for the worse and not necessarily me.

This line I liked particularly well, but that we could all see life that way.

So, what's next for Seth, this is going to be very interesting....



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post Jan 25 2012, 02:13 AM
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Athynae
post Jan 25 2012, 03:18 AM
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"I thought you didn't want to be found?" She asked.

"I don't. That doesn't mean I won't need to be found." I offered.


Right, good, at least if someone DID need to find you, AND they were smart enough, it might be possible.

I truly loved your reasoning for choosing the name, classic.

And now the fun begins, wonder what kind of trouble he's going to get into now.

Careful of the beasties Seth, they sneak up on you.


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post Jan 25 2012, 05:08 AM
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"Oh...I'm sorry, I'm a little out of sorts at the moment..."


Yes, I know what you mean... blink.gif ...

Cool... biggrin.gif ...

Another excellent installment...With many brilliant things...

*Applauds*...

Nice one!!... biggrin.gif ...
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post Jan 26 2012, 03:27 AM
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The last time I had my life forcibly changed, I had arrived by boat as well. Why not again? At least this time I was heading in a direction that I had chosen.


Love the parallel to the Morrowind opening- and the difference too.

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Pene looked at him for a moment, than at me. "Interesting. He wanted something from you." She commented.

"I think it's simply something he wants, and the dashed hope that I wasn't the person who had it."


And that is ONE reason Seth has survived so long.

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"Well, he was rather...unpleasant." Pene remarked.


Yes- well. Obviously I have my own reasons for my feelings about Carnius. But- he seems to me a man in desperate need of being punched in the face- repeatedly.

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Venim does however. It was the name of an old enemy, it's a name I would never use. So if someone is looking hard enough, they'll know it's me."

"O--kay." Pene said, truly confused. "I thought you didn't want to be found?" She asked.

"I don't. That doesn't mean I won't need to be found." I offered.


And another vote for simply loving all that is behind that bit of convoluted thought- and that it actually boggles Pene…




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post Jan 26 2012, 10:49 AM
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Ooh, pictures! smile.gif

I enjoyed Seth’s thoughts on the ship. Pene continues to be an excellent companion. Seth’s explanations to her often answer questions in my mind.

Since most of Morrowind is still a fog to me (I keep getting lost/stuck/sidetracked/killed), it’s fun to watch Seth discover a place that is new to him.



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post Jan 28 2012, 02:44 AM
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post Jan 28 2012, 04:13 AM
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Sounds like Seth is already feeling positive about the transition.
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"I am...I have no idea where we're going; other than that I should be able to get you wherever 'there' is safely." I said.
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I cackled at this one, that's our Seth.
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Not too mention things that would likely want to eat us are in there, and likely territorial. Also do what I say, when I say it. If I say stop, you stop and don't make a noise.

YES there are! Big, ugly, furry, sharp teeth beaties, believe me Thyna knows all about them. ohmy.gif
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"They aren't a threat. You only defend yourself with these creatures, even then, you only have too kill one, and the rest disperse and typically will shy from Men and Mer afterwards. It's all about maintaining a balance, they keep the prey population in check, we keep to our farms and domesticated animals....usually."

I know with Seth he might have said this, and anywhere else it's true, but he's smart enough that he won't put all his stock in the "idea". Stay safe, the beasties here ain't normal.

I am glad he likes Falco. And I glad he seems to have a positive first impression of his new surroundings.

Good addition to the edition...MORE PLEASE.


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post Jan 28 2012, 05:29 AM
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Solshteim=werewolves.

I will be following this story with great interest. I do not hold much knowledge of Morag Tong compared to the Dark Brotherhood, but I will be following this story with great interest.


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I long for scenes where man hath never trod
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There to abide with my Creator, God,
And sleep as I in childhood sweetly slept,
Untroubling and untroubled where I lie
The grass belowā€”above the vaulted sky.ā€¯
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